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Posted: 8 years ago
#71
Hi viji dear
beautidal os like it & what we want in show kash aisa ho but don't trust cvs they r very good in destroying but u write very well.may be sanskar forgive her in the show but now I m totally off on swara she need this time try hard to love her again for me.till now just don't understand why she mad on sanskar like Chori uparse sena jori. she throw him deep dark this time. I don't know why every time sanskar need to bear all suffering & who do crime every time become everybody's favourite without any tin bit punishments I just hate this cvs. enough my ranting I m just mad u know cuz they mess up my swasan.
I loved to read further how u show them on patch up their relation.
if u can update soon. I become greedy every time ask u update more & more that also quickly.
Bye dear
Take care.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Showrav 🤗🤗

Will reply to your comment in detail, tomorrow or day after. Glad to know you loved this OS, buddy. 😳🤗 About a sequel, I'll definitely think about it. But would be after I post the epilogue in Destined by Choice, and probably after I update Chapter 2 in Games People Play also.

Have a small idea or two about a possible sequel I'm running through my head, let me see how I'm able to flesh it out further. 😊

Love,

Viji


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Posted: 8 years ago
#73

Originally posted by: Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Showrav🤗🤗

Will reply to your comment in detail, tomorrow or day after. Glad to know you loved this OS, buddy. 😳🤗About a sequel, I'll definitely think about it. But would be after I post the epilogue in Destined by Choice, and probably after I update Chapter 2 in Games People Play also.

Have a small idea or two about a possible sequel I'm running through my head, let me see how I'm able to flesh it out further.😊

Love,

Viji




Take time dear will wait eagerly all updates 😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
#74

Originally posted by: showrav24


Take time dear will wait eagerly all updates 😃


😳🤗 Really touched with your warm words about my writing, and that you are looking forward to my updates so much. 🤗

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago
#75

Originally posted by: NitaReid

Res

Unres


Hi Viji dearest 🤗


Hey Nita my dear 🤗🤗



Res first and see how late i am for the unres😭😭😭... So sorry viji dear...

Nita...No Sorry allowed, remember? 😊 😕 I am also quite late on Un resing on your threads...please bear with me; I shall clear within this week. It matters to me that you read and loved my work yaar, take your time to Un res, as and when time permits.


And words fail me to express how much i loved this OS.. Well my words always fail me when i stumble upon such amazing OS.. So prepare for the blabber that i usually give in the name of comments..

You never blabber, my dear. 🤗 😊 And if this is blabber, bring it on, I say, I am loving it. 🤗


Sanskar pain..She broke him Viji and She might win him over but not me 😡.. I am so furious with her right now.. She destroyed him .. But your depiction of his pain was brilliant and his dialogue with sarcasm was awesome.. And so he brought her back because he cant let her go but refuse to give her his heart one more time..It would be so awesome to see how she wins him back but i lost hope that i will get it in the show..Do you wanna write an SS 😳..Or make this one into an SS😉

Yeah, poor Sanskaar feels really heartbroken, bitter and anguished. He is completely broken from inside, the way she walked out on him, to support her sister and to take a stand on behalf of their families. As Swara realizes later in this OS, there are several wrong ways to do a right thing----and she certainly went about the whole issue in a very wrong way. She ought to have stood by Sanskaar, calmed him down when he was feeling so upset and furious, and later on, helped him find Lucky. Walking out on him was not at all a right thing to do. Her love for him is genuine, I have never doubted that. But the blunt truth is, she has not prioritized him the same way he prioritized her. And finally, that became too much for Sanskaar to bear.

I am so thrilled you loved Sanskaar's
agony filled dialogues, replete with sarcasm and sizzling wit, dear. 😳🤗 They were a little difficult to write, emotionally; so I feel really humbled and touched, that you felt it depicted his emotions very well. 😳

I am planning a sequel to this. Will be another OS; I don't think I will be making it a full fledged SS. 😊


And he cant even hurt her even now..Thats my Sanskar 😭😭.. I am too heartbroken for him.. And reading your OS made me feel his pain and also VK is nailing it in the show ..But i dont trust the CVs to give me a logical resolution..They will add Uttara marriage drama and ruin it
But i loved your OS and determined Swara.. My only wish is she realizes she hurt him in the show as well

Yes, Sanskaar feels bitter and vengeful; but he can never, ever hurt Swara. He still loves her, that heart of his beats only for her; though he might well wish that he did not love her anymore. He has reached a stage where he hates to love her; but love her he does, all the same. Will every breath he takes, every pore and fiber and cell in his body. That is the kind of intense, potent emotion this man feels. If only Swara had realized earlier... 😭

With lots of Love

Nita

Love you loads too, my Dear 🤗🤗




My Dearest Nita, 🤗🤗

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Lots of Love,

-----Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: kriti_sologar

hey hun...

maybe u can continue with just one more part on how Swara wins Sanskar back...I would totally love to a see a happy ending because most stories in d Forum is nowadays is filled with Sanky leaving Swara...pliiiz happy wala ending dedoh na...

Love
Kriti



Hey Kriti 🤗🤗


So touched by your request to add one more part to this. Well, I am thinking about a sequel, of just one part. I won't be making it a detailed SS. Will pm you once I post. 😊

Love,

----Viji


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Posted: 8 years ago
#77

Originally posted by: Sakura24


Hi dearest,🤗
A late unres, as it has been the case recently. I should confess properly that I have completely given up on the show. It is because I can't bring myself to let the present of the storyline destroy the beautiful memories I have of the past glorious moments...that otp only lives in fictional world nowadays. It is in fics like these they come to grip the full essence of what they are...their gloriously intense emotional bindings restored in roaring fires, pains and trials that only serves to mold them better added to the mixture.

Saku dearest 🤗🤗


So very happy that you loved this OS so much. I am touched that you felt this had done justice to the intense emotional underpinnings, the dard ka rishta aspect as it were, of the SwaSan bond. Its so true, and immensely ironic as well, that their bond was honed in the fires of a shared pain and loss; grew out of that like the strongest steel and the purest, finest gold. And now, that same pain and loss is being inflicted by them upon themselves. 😭 Sanskaar was completely shattered when Swara walked out on him, it literally ate away at him from inside. It hurts, hurts so badly---and that pain and heartbreak is what I wanted to portray. Glad that it appealed to you so much.


I always admire the way you deal with Swasan, there is love in its sublime beauty and deep running roots of intensity but nothing too fanciful or utterly fluff that would make the whole thing sugar floss. They are as human as you and me in your writing, people with blood tears and flaws to their being. What I adore most is that in spite of all that they have courage to always hold on to each other in the most impossible of situations.

😳 ☺️ Really touched by those words, dear. Yes, to me, SwaSan certainly are real people, with all the attendant tears, hurts, scars and flaws. Their love is certainly intense and compelling, running very deep indeed. But circumstances, and to a certain degree, a gap in communication, has led to this impasse. Sanskaar facilitated and indulged Swara's missions always----with the result that when he did put his foot down, she, perhaps, did not take him as seriously as she should have. Might it have been better had they talked about this much earlier, had Sanskaar made his objections and unease clear much before the red lines were crossed? That is the question, and like so many subjective ones, it has no clear answer. That is the beauty of the essential human flaws inherent here----the love is there; but to a certain degree, perhaps, Swara believed in Sanskaar rather than having absolute faith in him. Whereas he had faith in her, as well as trusting her and believing in her. The distinction might be very subtle and nuanced, but it is there, nevertheless.

Here the story hints at a probable role reversal. What I mean to say is Sanskar has always been the earth of their equation, providing the stable anchor point as well as the path finder in all scenarios to Swara's water like nature. Now is the time when the compressed emotional turmoils of earth is finally gonna erupt in the form of the most impactful of volcanos. The scorching lava of intense agony running everywhere setting all ablaze. Wouldn't it be the cool water now coming to play in and all different persona to extinguish the flames before they causes some unstoppable harm to themselves and the others? I liked how you played with the possibility not really stamping upon a fate for them to follow but choosing to muse in Swara's voice of cause, that it had been her who pulled him in to the light once...can't she do it again?
Wonderfully, wonderfully done!

😳 Am just so touched and thrilled, with your analytical and insightful take here. Yes, that is precisely as I wanted to portray Sunny here---the Earth shaking with a tectonic fury. Like an earthquake, an avalanche, or a volcanic eruption of molten hot magma! Scorching and destructive, certainly. His bitterness and fury, his anguish at being forsaken---it has all pushed him right back into an even deeper darkness; than from the shadowy cavern of vengeance which Swara retrieved him from, initially. She certainly does need to do a lot to succor him, pull him back to light and hope and love again. Can she do it? I would say---definitely, yes. Without the shadow of doubt. Because their love is true and deep; though it is overlaid by all the anger and rage and sense of betrayal now; which has led Sanskaar to say that he 'hates' her. But he doesn't, not by a long shot. He may certainly hate to love her, but love her he does; with every last fiber and pore and cell in his body.

Just, I know there's no way something so masterful would occur to our CVs. If so, world would have been a beautiful place to live and watch serials 😛

😳 ☺️ Just so you know, I am typing this from between the Stratosphere and the Ionosphere now. 😉 You've made me feel on top of the world, literally. 😊

Love you loads,
Saku




My Dearest Saku,🤗🤗

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Love you Loads,

----Viji


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Posted: 8 years ago
#78

Originally posted by: showrav24

Hi viji dear
beautidal os like it & what we want in show kash aisa ho but don't trust cvs they r very good in destroying but u write very well.may be sanskar forgive her in the show but now I m totally off on swara she need this time try hard to love her again for me.till now just don't understand why she mad on sanskar like Chori uparse sena jori. she throw him deep dark this time. I don't know why every time sanskar need to bear all suffering & who do crime every time become everybody's favourite without any tin bit punishments I just hate this cvs. enough my ranting I m just mad u know cuz they mess up my swasan.
I loved to read further how u show them on patch up their relation.
if u can update soon. I become greedy every time ask u update more & more that also quickly.
Bye dear
Take care.


Hi Showrav 🤗🤗


I agree with you, Swara needs to show some more obvious concern for Sanskaar. The serial seems to show her caught in a mood of resentment and anger against him, and having an ego clash most of the time.

It may be true that both of them made mistakes, but the fact is that Swara's decision of walking out on him; was the worst mistake of all. She should have stayed by his side, helping him to sort out the issues which had cropped up, helped him to find where Lucky had gone.

She needed to demonstrate her absolute faith in him, and show how much she prioritized him. As of now, the serial has unfortunately not shown this awareness from her side, hopefully they will do so once Lucky is found.

I am writing an OS now somewhat on this theme, Swara feeling tremendous remorse and trying to reconcile with Sanskaar, trying to woo him back again. 😳😉

Lots of Love

Viji

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Posted: 8 years ago
#79
Hi Friends 🤗🤗🤗



Will be posting a sort-of-sequel to this OS, later today. Its titled 'The Color Green'. 😛 😉 Its not precisely a sequel, but it is in the same continuum.


Will be back on that thread, later in the afternoon.


Lots of Love,

----Viji
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Posted: 8 years ago
#80
Excellent work..
I love this OS a lot..
U had potrayed Sanskaar's feelings perfectly..
The pain is easily visible...

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