Memory Chronicles (SwaSan FF) - Page 18

Nyna sweetheart...
anyways...

Nynu dearest, 😊
See the bhullakkar me forgot that which page I had resed for ch-1. 😆
So I'm going to comment for both ch-1 and 2 together. 😳
Firstly both the chappies were mind blowing! 👏 👏 Ch-1 was li'l confusing as no names of the characters were there, but after reading ch-2 everything got cleared for me. 😳 What I understood is that Harshvardhan's sister Janki got sexually assaulted by someone (maybe the Maheshwaris) and lost her life in the process. Her daughter Swaha/Swara firstly stayed with her Dida, then was brought up by her uncle/papa Harsh and taught her self defense, which was supported by Harsh's friend/lover Jhanvi. In between all these Ragini was born to Shekhar-Shomi in Gadodia house where Shakhar hated Ragini for being a girl. Kavita was born to Debobrata-Kaveri in Roy house and Uttara was born to Ram-Sujata in Maheshwari house and both Kavi and Uttu pampered a lot by their respected families, completely opposite of Rags! And I think it was Swaha/Swara who changed her appearance and spiked someone (her enemy's) drink. Also I think that Swaha/Swara knows something about Kavita's disappearance but also knows that her uncle/papa is not involved in it. So now the question arises that who kidnapped Kavi?? But one thing, then how did Swara lost her memory and staying at MM?? Or is it her plan of fake ML so that she can enter MM to complete her revenge?? Its so interesting dear! Plzz update soon. 😳 Thanks for the pms. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

Hello nyna dear
its beautiful & interesting I love u introduction of our hero.
so drinks spike person is adarsh then who is the lady who spike his drinks
four friends group is four person is janki & harsh here for revenge. is swaha is swara right is ur spelling mistake or u used it intentionally for future suspense why I feel that swaha is janki child may be she loved shaker & sheker dump her & that time she was pregnant & those things happen what u write in chapter 1.
swara is the little girl who when year 3 adopted harsh from her dida & went Nigeria right.
Sanskar & kavita got engaged & after that she disappeared is some body kidnap her so between finding kavita swasan will meet m I right or they will meet by when swara going to implement her plan.
& oneed thing till now u update is past incidents right becuz prologue date till now not come year same but month r different that's means between these months I mean 11 months now January & prologue u mention November all swasan happen
waiting for next update dear
Bye
Take care

Originally posted by: kritz4ever

Loving it

Originally posted by: iamreader

Sorry Nyna dear!

Got very much late to unres! After office straight went to hang out with my ex- medical school friends... Now only I got time to analyze my another friend's great chapter. I would have done it yesterday, but got a bad headache. I thought your FF deserve an review from coherent mind.

Yes you would need a clear mind, to read the chapter, the head ache could have worsened.😉

I think I somehow misread your chapter 1 first time, that's why did a stupid comment to mention Lucky as rebel... Mentioning everyone in third person did the trick on my mind I guess... actually I thought Sanky was the one who had some revenge agenda too. On 2nd read I got, Lucky can't be a responsible rebel, he has rather a weaker character...

That is fine, I did not give the names only to keep you guessing, though I was a little surprised but then if you considered Sanskaar to be the one trained for revenge, it was natural to assume that Laksh is the rebel. He is not a weak character, just someone who treats life a little casually.

Swaha is Swara right?"Swaha" meaning something like the ultimate ending, is very appropriate too. I think she will change her name to take revenge. I absolutely loathe Shekhar here.He with his friends ruined and betrayed Janki. If I guess her having baby out of wedlock, she was either cheated or tainted..then been thrown away like tissue paper.

Swaha would become Swara - how, in next two chapters. I am glad you find the name appropriate with the meaning you have considered, I named her that primarily because that is the name of one of the wives of Agni (a little detail in given in the Footnotes post). Shekar is despicable, Janaki was betrayed, though how and by whom, will be addressed quite a little late.

The Maheswari seniors are crooked and indirectly caused bloodbath through Shekhar. Also the DILs are treated like trash.So Karma will bite them eventally.
Sanska will have bear the brunt too, due to his lineage. Black Bob ( Swaha/ Swara I guess) had fooled Adarsh, that's why he is considered incapable to be the heir?

Maheshwari seniors are crooked, and it is not exactly a blood bath, only a couple of lives. The daughters in law - are and would be treated quite well as long as they follow what the mother in law (AP here) says.😆

All will pay the price -for all are prisoners of their birth. And yes, Swaha / Swara is the one who stole data from Adarsh.

Sanskar's integrity is praiseworthy, pure soul just like his name. Also the determination to his own career and archi farm add to his uniqueness . The name "Realty check" is kind of symbolic with the storyline, 'cause everyone will get reality check once the revenge game starts. It's pity a pure honest person will be drawn in the mud slinging soon.

Sanskaar's integrity will be tested, and the name Realty Check - I had actually considered that as a pun - for he deals in realty and his firm is an architectural firm. As to when and how the revenge game will start - there is a twist there too😉😉
Swaha's conscience will make her to save Kavita, I think. But I don't entertain the idea, as I'm irritated cos she's engaged to Sanskar. .

Swara conscience - that is her choice and that will have to deal with the chances that destiny deals. And do not worry about Kavita, she is a very nice girl here.
Longest review I've ever written! There! Hope you'll not punish me.. 😊

Punish you, no way - I loved it - gives me a new perspective on the story.😳

Sincerely,
Dyuti

Originally posted by: __nidhi__

Res.

I'll take aome time to unres it!

But will surely do:)

Sorry.

Unres.

Should I say was confused when I read the first chapter?😕😆

But they way you wrote all the instances is amazing.

I am in love the way you wrote out your stories.

Chapter 1 was an experiment - I did realise it would be confusing but then the sadistic me wanted to see how it would be received - it was intentional as most of the names / characters would be identifiable in the next few chapters, except a few (my attempt at creating suspense😆😆)

Second chapter cleared my confusion thoda thoda😆 (I am a confused soul so it doesn't matter😕😳). swara here is strong which I always wanted to see or show but that didn't happen. The dynamics between SwaSan is something I very much liked. an amazing concept, an amazing writer I am pretty sure the story will reach some heights.

Regarding the confusion - intentional so do not be so hard on yourself😊Swara (or Swaha as she is in this chapter) is a very strong woman - in mind and body. SwaSan interaction - glad you liked it, it would commence mostly from Chapter 5😳 And you find the concept amazing, it is a compliment, I just hope I am able to live up to the expectations.😳😳

I'll say sorry in advance because I will not be able to comment on every other chapter to my work and studies. but I'll make sure I will take out some time and comment and my like button isn't working😭

Do not worry about commenting - work and studies are priority. Take your time.

Update soon.

Thanks for the pm.

Love,

Nidhi.

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

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"Realty check" quite an intriguing name... As the characters in the tale gonna get their reality check!

Bloodbath I meant as a rhetorical one... About DILs treated like trash because of acting all submissive.. I totally agree here... Without any weapon or shield you're bound to get hurt... I maintain that stance in my personal life too!

Originally posted by: showrav24

Hello nyna dear sorry for my late reply
like prologue, like swara know fighting skill
swara not remember anything or everything is mysterious for her but sanskar touches r familiar interesting.waiting for story unfolds.

Swara is a fighter here and since she is suffering from memory loss, everything for her is a mystery. Sanskaar's touch is not familiar, but she does not mind it.

just now read ch 1 & it's totally confusing & mysterious ,see u update ch 2 hope u clear some mystery in this. I know I feel bore when I m unable to connect or solve the dots that's happen in chapter 1 I know this is the start of the story if u reavele secrets then how story will progress. eagerly waiting for swasan story start. the girl that women left out that payer house & the girl call a women dida & who learned self defence is swara. I mention few birth dates in ch 1 which & where I blender the equation between those girls.

Chapter 1 was meant to confuse a little, so do not worry, now that you must have read chapter 2 it must be clear, most of them at least.😊 Any you guessed Swara correctly.😊 I agree it is difficult to read and follow if the dots cannot be connected, SwaSan completely from chapter 5 onwards😊

Will reply soon my take on ch 2 dear.

Will wait for that.
Take care
Bye.