Memory Chronicles (SwaSan FF) - Page 19

Originally posted by: blindassassin

Nothing will be held against you dear.You are one of the genuinely loved author of the forum. I give my full vote of confidence on your creativity.

Love,veena.

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Ok I am back to rant

And I love to read what you call as "ranting"😊🤗🤗

Nynu ..You are one of writers in form who always leaves in awe with your works.they are simple effective and absolutely brilliant in every way👏⭐️.I so wish I could write like you..

I love the way you write, so it is mutual - I keep it simple because I am not patient enough to write a multifaceted story and it is your affection that you find in brilliant.😳😳😳

Now coming to this update

Let me start with the detailing you gave for each of the places set ...It was absolutely outstanding ..I could visualize those roses ..ceilings,interiors ..Looks simple but the efforts you put in comes out strikingly ... I loved it

The houses were nice, right, each has a history of its own and all houses are reflective of the owners and the inhabitants. I did do a lot of research ( the show off results are on page 1😳😳) but reading that the images come out, is gratifying.☺️

Characters -

Multiple multi layered.. complicated and connected ... wow ..that leaves reader wanting for more.You stayed mostly true to the characters but loved how you added your own twist to them.very compelling and totally different take ..refreshing to read.👏⭐️

All are connected by visible bonds and invisible ties. I have stayed true to most of the relationships but then highlighted the characteristics which would define them, their choices and their actions.

Sanskaar ..Oh You know How much I love him☺️ 😳..aura of Sun and fire and Swara being Swaha..Wife of Agni .I love the threads being woven here . Sanskaar as determined and stuck to principles and ethics ...I love him ⭐️ and I got it totally wrong didn't I 😆.. Kavita is the princess and Swaha is the one who stole information ( From Adarsh)😲 I presume.

For all we call ourselves to be SwaSanians, I think we do favour Sanskaar a trifle more than 😆😆 - he is personification of the Sun and Fire (my element for Sanskaar😆) so Swara is Swaha here - though she being named that is because without Swaha, Agni cannot reduce any offerings to ashes and they would not reach the Gods to whom they are intended (heavy, right?) - I have used the phrase - ruthless righteousness for describing Sanskaar - who says that, more in the later chapters.

Well, getting it wrong, please get it right was nearly impossible, with me not giving names and actually twisting some patterns. The princess is Uttara (none got it despite me mentioning Mihir Bhavan😭) and the one who steals information is Swara and yes it is from Adarsh.

Laksh not being able to draw a line..😆 I totally connect with him ..I cant as well and last but least the lines on Fate and plans...👏⭐️

Drawing lines - I can, it is just that they are not straight🤣 fate and plans - my favourite conflict (almost all my tales would have this conflict😊)

Bang on Start and superb second chapter ,.Just cant wait to read further..I am waiting for you unfold more of your best laid plans for FM

I have plans alright, but let us see how they play out😆

Love

Lucky

Originally posted by: bhymi

Hi Nyna🤗
It so beautiful. I'm loving ur creativity. u r an amazing writer.if the sr cvs had used half of ur creativity, believe me sr would have been the no 1 show.

That is a heartwarming compliment. The serial was quite devoid of any creativity, which is a pity because I am sure there are very good scriptwriters out there, the first few months were good.

The way u describe the families is enchanting.so sanskar is an architect.I loved it. I always wished to see sanskar in a different profession and u fulfilled my wish . I am tired of seeing him as a typical business tycoon.

Four families, all inter connected😊 Sanskaar as an architect😳 - I too am tired of him being that cold calculating business tycoon, and architecture fascinates me so it was a obvious solution, for me😆😆 Sanskaar as an architect singing - "ek ghar banaunga, tere ghar ke samne..." not possible in this story but still...

Sankar and kavita get engaged.i think it is due to their family connection not bcoz of love.I hope kavita is a good soul here.

They did get engaged because their families wanted it, but then both are very good friends and as of now Sanskaar loves her, more as a friend than lover but yes he does love her. She is a very nice person here, she was the one who rescues Ragini from her misery.

So the princess is not ragini😆😆 My guess went wrong here but no problem it is always refreshing to see something new.The man who hates his daughter bcoz he had no son is shekhar. I'm not surprised at all.He is impatient and never uses his brain. Swaha.i belive the name change is intentional .' Swaha ' a unique name for a unique person. and i loved it. It so powerful.

No the princess is not Ragini - almost everyone got it wrong, it is Uttara. The man who hates his daughter is Shekar, that was a nice twist, right? Swaha is indeed a very powerful name, I have given a note in the footnotes section as to what exactly Swaha and Swadha denote. How Swaha becomes Swara, in following chapters.

The story is really intriguing and i'm loving it. I think there are so many secrets still to reveal
eagerly waiting for the next update.

And I will relegate the secret revelation to the background for a few chapters - SwaSan has to happen, right😳

P.S. Thanks for the pm dear

Originally posted by: iamreader

Nyna dearest,

Oh, feeling happy as this time I'm correct mostly. I don't mind to be wrong sometimes, what's the fun in reading if the tale is predictable? About Kavita, my feelings depends on how her character will shape up. It's just I'm possessive about Swasan. Can't help it! 😊
And please don't make me feel mortified comparing this one with ZvT! 😕 ZvT is a very simple narration, the writer is struggling with both the emotional and action aspects... 😳 Right now she is having hard time in the emotional aspect. Pray for her ok? 😉

Hugs,
Dyuti

Originally posted by: StarySKY

Res darling ..

I am yet to read the prologue and the 2 chapters ..

Will be back soon ..

Un-Res

Dear Nynu .. 🤗

I must thank you .. reading this story did alot to me .. it removed all the negative energy I got from my day .. I totally understand why Garfield said " I Hate Mondays " .. So let's not talk about my Monday ..🤢🤢

Good to know that reading my intriguing prologue, confusing Chapter 1, and chapter 2 removed all the negative energy. I understand Garfield very well and completely support him - Mondays are hateful😡

The Prologue ..

" Answers Not Available " .. but I have alot of questions ..

It give us a look on Swara and Sanskar ..

Swara

" The Light and fireworks had only served to enhance the darkness that inhabited her mind .. "

She lost her memories and don't know who is she ..

Her Capabilities are quite scary ..

Sanskar met her 8 months ago .. and there was a tragedy in his family ..

What the connection between Swara and Sanskar ?! The type of realtions they share ?

Swara is a very well trained martial arts exponent. She is suffering from amnesia and they do not know each other. The connection and relation - I think Chapter 2 made it a little clear?

Chapter 1

Suspense ..

I couldn't understand much .. I felt like I was running a marathon , my mind was panting and searching for information ..I imagined everyone as shadows as I am not sure who they are .. 😆 There were a mention for 4 girls born in years between 1990-1995 .. But then they were 3 girls .. at age 10

The one whom her mother left her at the temple and Dida took care of , then that man and the woman took care of .. he send her to be trained, I have a feeling he send her there to be used for his revenge later on .. I think she is Swara .. ( it give me the feeling of " Bourne series " .. well the person who had be trained then lost his memories )

The other 2 girls not sure who they are .. but we can see how different their life is .. the first her father didn't want a girl .. and the second was the princess of her family ..

Sanskar ..

An architect .. his sister and his brother and there is his friend ..

There is alot of person and I am not sure who they are or the connection between them ..

I like that comparison to running a marathon😆😆😆 guess most gave up attempting to guess by the time I reached eight years down the line😉

The four girls - one whose birthday it was when the story starts and three girls born after that - so only the life of the girls born after the story starts, had their tale mentioned. The first girl, she does appear in the life of one girl's tenth birthday😊 and as Sanskaar's friend

Chapter 2

Introduction for the Maheshwari's , Gadodia's , Roy's and Shah's

All are connected with each other .. and all are affected by Kavita Roy disappearance ..

I think Sharmishta, Shekhar and Kavari the 4th of their group was Janaki and some how are involved in her death ..I think Swaha is Swara ( beautiful name by the way )

But who is Swaha's Father ?!

All are connected and all are bound. Janaki the fourth member - will keep silent for the time being as also to who Swaha's (that is the name of one of the wives of Agni😊) father is.

Waiting for story to un fold ..

Love

Khushi

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Nyna sweetheart...

I guess here also iforgot to reserve...what should i say..me bhullakad...

anyways...

so Coming to update..it was mind blowing..mind blasting...absolutely in love with it...you know if some one ask me to describe a mansion or something..only few wordswould come out of my brain...big..beautiful..exclusive etc..never i can describe anything this skillfully...the way u describe all houses..maheswari..gadodia n roy houses..it was unbelievable..i was awestruck...bravo...was at loss of words...

I was "telling" Lucky, the houses would represent the individuals - both the owners and the inhabitants and I did do a bit of research for the same (I am a little lazy when in come to describing homes etc.😆😆) So when you say you loved the descriptions, I am quite thrilled - hard work pays off😳😳😳

So what i got till now reading both chappy n prologue...harshvardhan shah sister got raped n delivered a baby girl swaha/swara..who uptil age 3stayed with dida..then her uncle/papa harsh took her with him..trained her...self defence ..martial arts etc..in short prepared her for revenge..jahanvi her papa's friend/lover.also supporting them...later...swaha was one spiking adharsh drink..first step to destroy those people..

Other hand..after swaha birth..in between gap of 1 n half year...ragini n somewhere kavita born..one was ignored n rejected by father n other pampered to core...i got all family names n characters well ...nicely penned...backstory of some revealled much about their living...so this long term revenge plan got wavered after kavita unexpected kidnap..which swaha knows her uncle is not involved ,but knew something about her whereabouts...hmmm interesting...

I will confirm your guesses - you are right about Swaha / Swara though I will keep quite about her parentage (that is the stubborn sulking me in action😉) and yes the person who had his drink spiked was Adarsh.

You got Ragini correctly, though Kavita was not born after Swaha - she is one whose birthday was being celebrated. The princess is Uttara - the one who is pampered. Kavita is very much loved by everyone and Ragini is considered a curse by her father.

Kavita / Swaha - I did give you a hint in Chapter 1 right, but it will stay hidden for quite a few chapters.

I have many theories.about this story...kavi found out something in MM..ngot kidnapped by shekhar...plan of dp n shekhar..

What i also assumed that swara will save innocent kavi (as shown in earlier chapter) n will get hurt in process...n lost memory..but one doubt..im not sure, if someone lose memory ..her skills n learning also affected...coz swara was doing that meditation form in first chapter..which made me doubt...swara/swaha could be bluffing ML in order to enter sanky life or maheswari...for revenge..my brain developing theories alot.maybe imwrong..but..now very curious for next..update soon...

No such deep conspiracies surrounding Kavita's disappearance, there are reasons but not so deep as you have outlined. Memory loss is primarily loss of autobiographical knowledge not that acquired by repeated learning, further her skills are mostly muscle determined so muscle memory would remain intact. But the doubts you have - would be the ones few of the other characters have - it should make their interactions ...fun??

Love u..

Talia

Originally posted by: iam_aheli_98

Nynu dearest, 😊
See the bhullakkar me forgot that which page I had resed for ch-1. 😆
So I'm going to comment for both ch-1 and 2 together. 😳
Firstly both the chappies were mind blowing! 👏 👏 Ch-1 was li'l confusing as no names of the characters were there, but after reading ch-2 everything got cleared for me. 😳 What I understood is that Harshvardhan's sister Janki got sexually assaulted by someone (maybe the Maheshwaris) and lost her life in the process. Her daughter Swaha/Swara firstly stayed with her Dida, then was brought up by her uncle/papa Harsh and taught her self defense, which was supported by Harsh's friend/lover Jhanvi. In between all these Ragini was born to Shekhar-Shomi in Gadodia house where Shakhar hated Ragini for being a girl. Kavita was born to Debobrata-Kaveri in Roy house and Uttara was born to Ram-Sujata in Maheshwari house and both Kavi and Uttu pampered a lot by their respected families, completely opposite of Rags! And I think it was Swaha/Swara who changed her appearance and spiked someone (her enemy's) drink. Also I think that Swaha/Swara knows something about Kavita's disappearance but also knows that her uncle/papa is not involved in it. So now the question arises that who kidnapped Kavi?? But one thing, then how did Swara lost her memory and staying at MM?? Or is it her plan of fake ML so that she can enter MM to complete her revenge?? Its so interesting dear! Plzz update soon. 😳 Thanks for the pms. 😃
With love,
Aheli.

Originally posted by: showrav24

Hello nyna dear
its beautiful & interesting I love u introduction of our hero.
so drinks spike person is adarsh then who is the lady who spike his drinks
four friends group is four person is janki & harsh here for revenge. is swaha is swara right is ur spelling mistake or u used it intentionally for future suspense why I feel that swaha is janki child may be she loved shaker & sheker dump her & that time she was pregnant & those things happen what u write in chapter 1.
swara is the little girl who when year 3 adopted harsh from her dida & went Nigeria right.
Sanskar & kavita got engaged & after that she disappeared is some body kidnap her so between finding kavita swasan will meet m I right or they will meet by when swara going to implement her plan.
& oneed thing till now u update is past incidents right becuz prologue date till now not come year same but month r different that's means between these months I mean 11 months now January & prologue u mention November all swasan happen
waiting for next update dear
Bye
Take care

Originally posted by: Lifez_Beautiful

Dear Nyna,

I love the way u weave the prose almost merging into a poem...

The plot seems like an extremely intricate web with the gossamer threads stretching far and beyond what is revealed to us... Love an interesting mystery and coming from a talented writer like u, I'm sure I won't be disappointed.

Waiting eagerly to see where all these threads merge...

Luv Niki

PS: I love the blessing u pass onto each reader who stops by... A blessed thought indeed... ❤️