Memory Chronicles (SwaSan FF) - Page 17

Originally posted by: iamreader

Sorry Nyna dear!

Got very much late to unres! After office straight went to hang out with my ex- medical school friends... Now only I got time to analyze my another friend's great chapter. I would have done it yesterday, but got a bad headache. I thought your FF deserve an review from coherent mind.

I think I somehow misread your chapter 1 first time, that's why did a stupid comment to mention Lucky as rebel... Mentioning everyone in third person did the trick on my mind I guess... actually I thought Sanky was the one who had some revenge agenda too. On 2nd read I got, Lucky can't be a responsible rebel, he has rather a weaker character...

Swaha is Swara right?"Swaha" meaning something like the ultimate ending, is very appropriate too. I think she will change her name to take revenge. I absolutely loathe Shekhar here.He with his friends ruined and betrayed Janki. If I guess her having baby out of wedlock, she was either cheated or tainted..then been thrown away like tissue paper.

The Maheswari seniors are crooked and indirectly caused bloodbath through Shekhar. Also the DILs are treated like trash.So Karma will bite them eventally.
Sanska will have bear the brunt too, due to his lineage. Black Bob ( Swaha/ Swara I guess) had fooled Adarsh, that's why he is considered incapable to be the heir?

Sanskar's integrity is praiseworthy, pure soul just like his name. Also the determination to his own career and archi farm add to his uniqueness . The name "Realty check" is kind of symbolic with the storyline, 'cause everyone will get reality check once the revenge game starts. It's pity a pure honest person will be drawn in the mud slinging soon.

Swaha's conscience will make her to save Kavita, I think. But I don't entertain the idea, as I'm irritated cos she's engaged to Sanskar. .

Longest review I've ever written! There! Hope you'll not punish me.. 😊

Sincerely,
Dyuti

My humble verdict! 😳

Originally posted by: __nidhi__

Unreserved.

I am planning to update in the next two days some editing is left and i can complain about how lazy I am to open the laptop😆 but assuring the chapter of both the FFs will be updated in the next two days.

Originally posted by: blindassassin

Nyna

Happy that I din vote for the universal verdict of Ragini being the princess.Lovely unfolding of the events of chapter 1. But a doubt..Do Sanskar genuinely miss Kavitha or is it just a humanitarian gesture for a friend or aquaintance? I hope it is the latter...I hated the portrayal of the character in the serial and still can't let it go.

And a name change...Some intention behind swara being swaha? Everything about this is intriguing and gripping. And Annapurna is another character I love to hate. A mother who can't think beyond her sons. And surprisingly her husband never feel it that way for sanskar.

I am sure this will get more interesting a s secrets unfold. Waiting for regular updates.

Love you and your stories

Veena.

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Veena,

Yes you were the only one, I think, who did not conclude that Ragii was the princess, I am tired of seeing her that way, so twisted it here.

Regarding Sanskaar, he and Kavita are very good friends and engaged to be married, so there would be a lot of affection and a little bit of love too. I agree that the serial portrayal of that character turns off most us, but I was too lazy to invent a new name so used it. 😆 But she is a very lovely person in this tale and I hope using her is not going to be held against me😳

Swaha and Swara - similar in sound and surprising in meaning too (one has its etymological roots in the words denoting "well said" (also taken to be derived from su + vani) and the meaning a musical note). As to how the journey is from one name to another, next chapter would give a hint😉

Annapurna is blinded as a mother and Durga Prasad - is a practical man who loves his empire a little more than his family so is inclined to think for the best of his kingdom rather than the desires of his family. He does not care much for what they want, even though Sanskaar is unwilling he is determined to foist the Company on him.

I will try to be regular, I promise.

Love you too,

Nyna

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Res😛🤗 nynu

Hi Nyna🤗
It so beautiful. I'm loving ur creativity. u r an amazing writer.if the sr cvs had used half of ur creativity, believe me sr would have been the no 1 show.

The way u describe the families is enchanting.so sanskar is an architect.I loved it. I always wished to see sanskar in a different profession and u fulfilled my wish . I am tired of seeing him as a typical business tycoon.

Sankar and kavita get engaged.i think it is due to their family connection not bcoz of love.I hope kavita is a good soul here.

So the princess is not ragini😆😆 My guess went wrong here but no problem it is always refreshing to see something new.

The man who hates his daughter bcoz he had no son is shekhar. I'm not surprised at all.He is impatient and never uses his brain.

Swaha.i belive the name change is intentional .' Swaha ' a unique name for a unique person.
and i loved it. It so powerful.

The story is really intriguing and i'm loving it. I think there are so many secrets still to reveal
eagerly waiting for the next update.

P.S. Thanks for the pm dear

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Dear Veena, Sneha and Dyuti,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I will get back to your comments soon, I have read them and feel quite happy despite the confusion the chapters seem to be causing my readers.😆I had a long day in office and the work pressure might not ease off anytime soon.😭</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And Dyuti - you seem to have analysed quite correctly in some cases and a little off in a few instances - I will detail the same in the revert, but on the whole - you are mostly correct.👏👏</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And Kavita - poor thing - she is a nice girl here - the one blessed with every conceivable joy. But then when the end game is SwaSan, you really should not worry😊</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">I love emotional conflicts more, so the going forward it would be more of SwaSan with the revenge / investigation in the background - more like a reverse of your ZvT (I cannot write so much on action and revenge drama - emotions are easier😆😆)</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">love,</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Nyna</font>

Nyna dearest,

Oh, feeling happy as this time I'm correct mostly. I don't mind to be wrong sometimes, what's the fun in reading if the tale is predictable? About Kavita, my feelings depends on how her character will shape up. It's just I'm possessive about Swasan. Can't help it! 😊
And please don't make me feel mortified comparing this one with ZvT! 😕 ZvT is a very simple narration, the writer is struggling with both the emotional and action aspects... 😳 Right now she is having hard time in the emotional aspect. Pray for her ok? 😉

Hugs,
Dyuti

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Viji, Good Morning,🤗🤗

Actually not reading in a sleepy mode is good idea - I am not sure of the nuances but it appears to be a little confusing, even though the structure is quite a linear narrative. Chapter 1 only has dates and places, Chapter 2 does a complete character introduction, so you would have to link both 😉

Take your time, I will wait.

Have a great monday and a great week too.

love,

Nyna

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Yes, read it when you think you can take the confusion regarding people with no names. And you mentioned four stories - will we have them all?

love,

Nyna