Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Nalini my dear 🤗 🤗🤗
I read the prologue and all parts before, and now had the pleasure of reading them all together once more. Kudos for a very well knit story, blending a rational approach the characters adopt, with the very poignant emotional content.
I liked so many things about this tale---Swara's angst and confusion, her frustration that no one seems to believe her clear memory of Sanskaar leveling a shot at her; and her own undeniable pull towards him!
Sanskaar---My God. The extent of his pain, his yearning, his longing to have his soul returned to him. This must be sheer torture for him---to have his heart's desire, his deepest wish answered---his beloved wife came back safe, as he knew she would. But then, she comes back not remembering him at all, save for that one misunderstood fragment of a memory.
I really liked your portrayal of Lakshya and Ragini's thoughts, their feelings for their siblings and how they are doing their best to help. And your portrayal of Annapurna and Shomi's feelings were lovely too.
3 things which stood out for me, among a bevy of beautiful moments. The SwaSan conversation in the end--the way you sketched the hope and the anguish within Sanskaar, the doubts as well as the determination within Swara.
The SanLak conversation in the beginning was nice too. The deep concern Lakshya had for Sanskaar, getting furious and agitated at Sahil on his behalf. So there appears to be some proof against him which has come to SanLakRag's hands, via Kunal. Some photos...wonder what they are? I loved the calm, though poignant way Sanskaar told Lakshya that "Swara Bose" would not easily believe things without initially doubting them, checking out the facts for herself! 😊
The SanLak conversation towards the end was awesome too. Sanskaar was devastated then, porting over his memories with Swara, feeling so anguished at the fact that she suspected him, that he perhaps had to go along with this 'divorce' gambit to push things towards a resolution. The brotherly bonding and support was very good there.
Eagerly looking forward to the next part, dear. Will try to be more prompt with comments, but please bear with me for some delays, as I will be caught up in a string of commitments for much of the next 2 weeks.
Loads of Love,
---Viji
Dear vijji, 🤗
I have been travelling this morning and so couldn't reply earlier.
Could I just say you just made my day. And I'm so humbled by your reflections on the plot.
When I started penning this down I had just one thought - to delve deeper into the emotions swara and sanskar share. That has always been the crux of all my writings. But once I started I just wanted to write how the whole world revolves around them. Swasan, so far in many ways, have been bringing up a change that's pivotal in everyone's life. They are what the rest of either families look up to. They both, in every level, ever have just tried to bring happiness two their broken families and thus are the cornerstone for the families together.
And so came forth the reflections...this is a story where I want to try and depict how the family members relate to these two. How life gives a chance for all of them to pay back to them with love and care, while I aim to redeem some broken bonds. I don't know how far I will be able to succeed. But I will try with the kind of encouragements you all give to me.
So, that's where it starts. How sanskar leans on to lakshya . How Ragini and sanskar stand against their inner demons. How raglak grow to love eachother more easily ..And so on..
I have always disliked lakshya for his shallowness. But then in this track I have come to appreciate the change. He is suddenly so mature that I sometimes wonder if he is the same guy anymore. I would love to see more of it. A lot had happened between the brothers. It's high time they get a good share of each other I their lives. So I drew inspiration from there and I'm glad you liked those little conversations.
Sanskar still is being rational, yes. I wonder some part of him woke up in my tale. Realised that swara will only listen with her rational mid first in situations like these. I'm glad he did.
Coming to Swasan.. Well I guess you saw what I feel for sanskar already. I just can't get over those emotions everytime I set to right down his part of the story.. It's silly, I know, yet that doesn't stop one tearing up for such characters. Swara is ofcourse in her own hell where she can't decide between her heart and mind. How devastating would that be to anyone. To want to love some one yet getting stalled by ones own mind. She is torn in two. So is he. Both battling with their wills to the ends of their sanity.
The next one will start where the last part ended , with swara realising the actual depth of his anguish yet feeling torn between both ends of her. The poor girl! my heart goes for her. I hope it comes out well too. (With out ending up in confusion like her)
Shomi, Annapurna, Durga Prasad and partly shekar have a crucial role yet to play. I wish to do justice there.
Vijji , there is once again no need to explain yourself. I know you are all there conveying silent encouragements.
Have a great day.
And thankyou once again for the lovely comment
Love
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Ye Hai Mohabbatein
Mangal Lakshmi
