Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
My Dearest Nalini 🤗🤗🤗
I know no sorrys between pals---but I really feel bad about the time I've taken to revert. Its just that time is really at a premium now, and I don't want to leave a proforma/cursory comment on chapters which have been so wonderfully conceptualized and executed.
I wanted to mention that specifically---its so lovely to see both logical plot flow/ character thought processes being handled ; together with a very real, achingly palpable emotional content. Its really enjoyable to peer into our beloved leads (and the supporting characters), thoughts and emotions, feelings and analyses. Bridging the head and the heart, in a sense. 😊
In chappie 4, I so loved the way Sanskaar reacted to Swara's almost impromptu assent to giving them a chance, of giving him the benefit of doubt that perhaps, after all, her fragmented memory of him was a misconception. That meant the whole world to him---and that almost overpowering emotion, felt so keenly by a very strong man; was wonderfully described.
The way he said, that she was the ray of hope that brightened the darkness of his life; how the past few days without her had a literal dark hellhole for him, and how this one bright, incandescent moment of hope was filling him with joy, as well as fear----for if he lost her again, he would just not be able to survive. That was so movingly put, Nalini. I could almost see Sanskaar's face in that dialogue, the sheer, overpowering sincerity and truth in those words reflecting in his mesmerizing eyes. The way he said he loved her immensely, beyond life too---that was awesome. He does feel with such intensity and depth!
The next part was a lovely portrayal of the brotherly bond between SanLak. Despite all the strains and stresses that had vitiated their relationship for a while, its lovely to see how these two have restored their affection, their camaraderie, to what it must have been during their childhood and teen years. Lakshya's unstinting support, his resolve to be with his Bhai at this difficult time, was lovely to read about.
Part 3 really fascinated me with ideas, speculations and guesses about what exactly Sahil Sengupta was planning. A bold foray into the entertainment space, competing in a way with luxury hotel chains, but extending beyond that into holistic music and entertainment arena, on all fronts. Seems very tantalizing----and even before I read Chapter 5, I wondered how Sahil had managed to come up with this plan--seemed rather too imaginative and creative for him. 😛 😉 And who this investor was, who was supposedly willing and eager to sign on the dotted line for this ambitious project. I had a fair idea/suspicion it might be Sunny boy after all----and you clarified that in Chappie 5. 😉 And this Mr Bose who was counseling Sahil against exceedingly bold forays---wonder if he is linked somehow to Dida, Shomi and Swara? I guess 'Bose' is Dida's family name, not Shomi's first husband's. Might this mysterious Mr Bose be a Maternal relative of Swara's I wonder? 😊
I just loved the way you described Swara's thoughts in Part 4. The way she felt an undeniable sense of peace coursing through her, at Sanskaar's words before his abrupt departure---that was a deft touch. She still doesn't wholly trust him, or rather, doesn't know what to believe. But there is certainly a warmth, a pleasant thrill that is coursing through her now.
The way she felt when she saw those papers all shredded, and when she was perusing and touching those beautifully embossed and decorated CDs of the proposal----I loved those bits. It really was profound, her touching those firm, unwavering lines of Sanskaar's writing, and then coming across her own loving, tender note.
Coming to Chapter 5---Loved those RagLak bits there. 😊 Lakshya wanting to hear Ragini's voice, missing her terribly, and then feeling miffed that Ragini was concernedly fussing over the fact that they'd covered the 11 hours to Patna in 6 hours flat. 😉 And it was hilarious that before that, she had said he should mind his words when in company---she felt abashed, thinking that he had spoken those rather explicit romantic sentiments, when Sanskaar was seated right next to him. 😆 😆 Loved the way she then said they could start that conversation all over again. A metaphor for the loving, tender RagLak bond now, perhaps? How they have started again from scratch, come to adore each other with steady, unwavering warmth---despite the horrendous beginning they had to their marriage---filled with deceit, anguish, strife and jealousy. Its what we make of the cards we are dealt which makes us what we are, after all. And in that sense, both Ragini and Lakshya have come out of that dark period of their lives, as much better people. Or maybe, having rediscovered the essential goodness within them, which had gotten obscured for some time.
Loved the whole buildup you gave to the Gadodias' plan to visit Maheshwari house, and how Swara listened to Shekar's logic, and assented to go along. I really love the approach Swara has adopted in your tale. She is still caught in the grips of her partial amnesia, and with her customary strong will (and dare I say a tad bit of stubbornness 😛😉), she isn't able to straight off accept what her family is telling her, just shove that fragmented memory, the only memory she has of Sanskaar, to one side. But at least, she is willing to listen to them, give a patient hearing to the proofs on hand, and admit the possibility that she could have made a mistake. What a sensible way to handle a case of amnesia...now if only our CVs had got this deft touch right, with the layers of nuance, instead of "khooni!! khooni!!" 😆
Once again, Sanskaar's reaction when he heard that audio clip sent by Ragini---with Swara actually speaking his name, instead of merely referring to him with impersonal/ fearful pronouns-----that was so lovely. Though she had still said she couldn't accept him yet, she didn't yet know what she wanted----there was a very real sense of hope in the air. Loved it.
And Sanskaar immediately knew he had to restrain his Mom from the tearful theatrics and histrionics she would be prone to. 😆 😉 He is such an excellent judge of character after all. And I just loved the fact that Sujju is so well disposed towards Swara, that she acknowledges the deep love which exists between her son and daughter in law, and will flower once again, just as soon as Swara regains her memory/ is convinced about the love that they shared.
The whole stretch where Sujju welcomed Swara, embraced her warmly, fussed over her---I was torn between feeling all warm and emotional, and smiling at your subtle portrayal of Sujju's inherent flair for a bit of melodrama. 😊
And that last bit---with Swara recovering a teeny weeny bit of that achingly lovely, supremely romantic moment with Sanskaar while they were out in that garden together--was just amazing. The way you described her sense of emptiness, desolation and frustrated anger, at the emotions washing through her and yet being not able to further explore and retain those brief flashes of memory---so very well done! 👏 👏
So SanLak are planning a trap for the obsessive, conniving, creepy Sahil Sengupta. 😃 And the approach is top notch---keep the enemy close, where he can be observed. And while Sahil might feel he is all cunning and wily, he is up against the brilliant, machiavellian Sanskaar. The best part about Sanskaar is----he knows better than to underestimate his foe. But I think Sahil is underestimating Sanskaar----and I SO look forward to seeing him getting his comeuppance!! 😉
Waiting eagerly for Chap 6, dear!
Loads of Love,
----Viji
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