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Posted: 9 years ago
#41
Good job
Nice update Nivijo, was waiting for your story since a long time. It was really an awesome update.

Take ur time dear, we r not in a hurry 😊
Loved your dress selection for both d girls.

Will be patiently waiting for ur nxt update & thanks for the pm...

With regards,
Pari
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Posted: 9 years ago
#42
Is ss ke sare readers ke liye ek good news hai ki is story ka 9th chapter coming Friday tak update ho jayega. Ur comments have really overwhelmed me so I thought of not making u all impatient. Leaking Friday tak to aap sab ko patiently rehna padega.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#43
Raglak are stooping so low..
But our swasan are together...
Loved them
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter 9
Morning
Swasan room
Swara and Sanskar were sleeping in their usual position. Swara was partially lying on sanskar. They were not at all sleeping soundly. Alarm was ringing continuously. Both of them get up at the same time and see their positions but both of them were not embarrassed. Their faces showed determination. Both of them got up from the bed and swara switched off the alarm.
Sanskar- so ready ho swara
Swara- haan sanskar main bilkul ready hoon
Sanskar- chalo phir plan ko implement karne ke liye
Swara- hmm
They got ready and went down. Swara took the Aarti plate and started singing
All the people came down for Aarti because it was just 6:30 pm.

O palanhare, nirgun aur nyare -2, tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee
Hamaree uljhan suljhao bhagwan, tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee
Tumhe hamaka ho sambhale, tumhe hamare rakhwale
Tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee - (3)
Chanda me tumhe toh bhare ho chandni, suraj me ujala tumhe se
Yeh gagan hai magan, tumhe toh diye ho isse tare
Bhagwan yeh jivan tumhe naa sanwaroge, toh kya koee sanware
O palanhare nirgun aur nyare, (tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee -2)

Sanskar started to sing
Jo suno toh kahe prabhuji hamaree hai binati, dukhi jan ko dhiraj do
Hare nahee woh kabhee dukh se
Tum nirbal ko raksha do, reh paye nirbal sukh se
Bhakti ko shakti do - (2)
Jag ke jo swami ho, itani toh araj suno
Hai path me andhiyare, dedo vardan me ujiyare
Everyone except swara were shocked seeing him singing because they never heard him singing any day.
(O palanhare, nirgun aur nyare, tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee
Hamaree uljhan suljhao bhagwan, tumare bin hamara kaunon nahee) - (3)
Swara and sanskar completed the Aarti and they turned to everyone. Swara was giving Aarti to everyone. First she goes to dadi and gives her Aarti and takes her blessings
Dadi- sada khus reh, suhagan reh aur har kaam mein tujhe safalta mile.
Swara looks at dadi and then goes to everyone to give Aarti.
Everyone leave except swara, sanskar and dadi.
Dadi- so plan ready hain na Lekin swara tum ye kyun karna chahti ho mera matlab hai
Swara says- dadi hum chahte hain ki laksh aur ragini aapke upar bharosa kare aur ye tab hi possible hoga jab aap ye karengi. Pls dadi mana mat ki jiye.
Dadi- theek hai kar lungi
Swasan hug dadi and say- thank u so much dadi.

Guys this is part 1 of chapter 9
Part 2 will be coming after 5 pm today itself. Guys pls give u views about the story because I seriously feel something is lacking in my story. If anyone can find out pls pm me. Thank u.


Edited by Nivijo - 8 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#45
Res sissy... Will unres today..
Unres

NIVIJO.. big hug ... I loved the update.. awesome.. part eight and nine was fabulous.. but what naa I can't understand hindi that much... Soo I understand half of them... Good job keep it up.. darling..


With love...

Kam...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#46
swaron will expose raglak soon..
So dadi is in the plan.
Wow
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Posted: 9 years ago
#47
Very nice update...

& yes something is lacking in your story, that is NOTHING dear... keep it up

Waiting for the nxt part...& Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#48

So sorry guys I hope I'm not late.
Chapter 9(part 2)
Everyone settle on the breakfast table. Pari, swara and ragini were serving everyone. Swara looks at dadi signaling her to continue with the plan. Dadi starts asking question to swara an ragini.
Dadi- swara ragini tum dono se na ek Baat puchni hai mahre ko
Swaragini- puchiye na dadi
Dadi- wo ke haina tum dono ke naam ke peeche abhi to maheshwari laga hai Lekin usse pehele ke tha
Ragini- dadi mera naam ragini gadodia tha
Swara- dadi main aapke question ka answer zarur dungi Lekin pls meri ek doubt clear ki jiye. Dadi surname to family name hota haina
Dadi- haan
Swara- aur family wo hota hai jaha hum ek dusre ko support kare jaha sab log ek dusre se pyar kare jinse hum apna sukh dukh share kar sakte hain na
Dadi- haan chori isi ko to kehte hain parivar
Swara- mera naam swara Bose tha dadi
Dadi who was drinking water spit it from her mouth
Dadi - ke kaha tune
Swara- swara bose
Dadi- matlab tu ek bangalan hai. Hey mahra ram ji ye ke ho gaya. Sanskar chore tu kisi ache marwadi ladki se shaadi kar sakta ta na je bangalan se shaadi karne ki ke jarurat thi.
Sujata jaldi ja aur mahre upar Ganga jal chidak.
Swara even though knew it was just a plan but couldn't control her emotions and she ran upstairs. Ragini and laksh on seeing this were very happy because they thought that at least someone is against swara. They thought to ask dadi to help them to throw swara and sanskar out of the house.
No one could say anything because dadi was very khadoos and did not like anyone objecting her. Everyone quietly returned to their rooms. Sanskar ran to their room to console swara.
Swasan room
Swara was crying uncontrollably. It hurt her very much even though it was just a plan. Sanskar sees her crying like this and goes to her. He takes her in a hug and she too reciprocates it. Even after sometime swara doesn't stop crying so sanskar thought to do something which will make swara forget the incident for some time.
Sanskar- swara tum na bas do minute ruko main na dusri shirt pehenke aata hoon phir tum ro Lena dekhona tumhare wajah se meri shirt gili ho gayi.
Swara looks at him for few seconds and then starts beating him. Swara- tumhe majak sooj raha hai sanskar. Yaha main kitna ro rahi hoon aur tumhe apni shirt ki padi hai. Ruko abhi batati hoon.
They both run. Swara was chasing him and he was running from her to prevent her kehar.
Swara- sanskar ruko
Sanskar- nahi baba main nahi rukne waala. Main rukoonga na to tum mujhe maar hi dalogi.
Sujata comes inside the room to console swara but sees the scene and bursts into laughter. Swara and sanskar who were running heard her laughter turned around.
Sanskar- mom aap yaha
Sujata- main to aayi thi swara ko dekhne ke liye Lekin ye kya hai. Sanskar tumne kya kiya meri bahu ke sath.
Sanskar- mom aapko to main hamesha hi galat rahunga. Meri sach mein koi galti nahi hai
Swara- nahi mom. Sanskar mujhe chidha raha tha. Main yaha ro rahi thi aur sanskar ko apni shirt ki padi thi
Sujata- sanskar meri bahu ko kyun sata rahe ho.
Sujata hugs swara. Swara shows her tongue to sanskar. Sanskar just smiles seeing the two important people in his life smiling.
Dadi enters into their room.
Dadi- mujhe maaf kardo swara. Shayad mujhe utna nahi bolna chahiye tha.
Sujata was standing confused.
Swara- koi Baat nahi dadi. Lekin aapki baaton ne laksh aur ragini par asar kiya hai. Ab dekhiye ga wo dono aapke paas kaise aayenge madad maangne ke liye.
Sujata- ek second ruko. Kya keh rahe ho. Mujhe kuch samajh mein nahi aa raha hai.
Swara- mom actually
Swara explains everything to Sujata.
Sujata- tum log itna sab kuch plan kar rahe the aur mujhe bataya tak nahi
Sanskar- sorry mom with a very cute pout.
Sujata sees his pout and forgives them.
Dadi- phir agli kadam kya hai
Sanskar- kuch nahi dadi bas aap aaj raat tak ka intezar ki jiye. Wo dono aapke paas aayenge.
Dadi- theek hai phir main chalti hoon isse pehele ki koi mujhe dekh le.
Dadi goes out of their room. Now only they three are left.
Sujata- tum dono sure ho ki ye plan kaam karega.
Sanskar- haan mom hum hundred percent sure hain.
Sujata- Jo bhi ho tum dono apna khyal rakhna theek hai
Swasan- ji mom
Sujata leaves the room.
Precap - as swasan, dadi and Sujata expected.

Edited by Nivijo - 8 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#49
Wow yaadein taza ho gayi...
Miss this swasan so much, kash show main v aisa kuch mil jaye...
Really a cute update...do continue writing it.

Thanks for the pm 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#50
Loved swasan moments continue soon

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