Res - Chapter 1 😊 Unres:
Hey Sakura,
I have been grinning at the screen of my laptop from the moment Ragini said 'Prove it!'. Aww.. hell, this gonna be one fabulous SS.!
Thank you for the amazing justification for Swara's actions towards Sanskaar. Any sane person who believes another to be a murderer - of one's own person, would definitely have hateful thoughts against the 'assumed murderer'. It is a natural reaction and you have explained that through Swara's thought proccess so well. (Although running away screaming murderer murderer is sooo not Swara Bose/Maheshwari's nature, and nor is hiding behind someone). I really love the little quips that you have put in. Swara's thought process is so adorably comic, like a child devising plans to steal a chocolate. Its is cute and utterly hilarious.😆 You are doing a fabulous job in the first person writing thingy.
So Sanskaar and Ragini's plan is in motion, though Ragini hasn't been able to get herself included into this 'ingenious plan' of Swara's. Mr. Rockstar makes an appearance - are you planning to turn him into one of your absolutely amazing villains? or is he going to be a passing reference?
Well, isn't Ragini just the perfect in-between? She made Swara wear Sanskaar's gift. Sanskaar's choice is just fabulous. So I am a little confused - is Ragini really pregnant or is she faking it? Don't care about the show, in your story what's the scenario?
Btw,I really like this constant feeling of righteousness with respect to Sanskaar that you are showing in Swara's feelings, it brings out - the mind may forget but the heart never does.
'I have a problem with the house architecture. There is no way you could go downstairs without flaunting yourself before the entire clan assembled at the foot of the stairs' - These two lines had me in splits🤣 All I can say is - so freaking true! hahaha...😆
Swara trying her best to be inconspicuous regarding her grand plan, but Sanskaar is a master here. No way is he going to fall for whatever she has planned. At least I am hoping. (Fingers crossed).
What an eye lock! Sakura, a huge hug from me for this amazing eye lock. And then the amazing slip, fall and catch... my heart is thudding, dancing with all the joy in the world. It was perfection But ofcourse both are hurt in the process. *sigh* And that perfect bridal style lift and 'I didn't ask you'. I am in SwaSan land at the moment. 😆
Sakura, any inhibitions you have regarding your ability to write first person can be put to rest. I assure you. Also, thank you for the end author note cause that was the first thought in my head as soon as I completed reading, what was the plan? 😛
All in all, a romantic, sweet, playful chapter. loved it to the core. Brilliant writing!
Love,
V❤️
Edited by BookWormV - 9 years ago
Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi 2
