Beautiful Scars SwaSan SS chapter 6 updated page 1 (16/10/05)

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Krishnabhisarik

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Posted: 9 years ago

#161

Wonderful chapter Saku🤗 You made me fall in love with blue n brown😉 All shades, no bars😆 All those memorable moments sort of relived, stirring Swara's heart, successfully appeasing her but failing to resurface completely... Kitne door kitne paas😳 Sanskar's soul wording its ache, plea and love... Such beautifully painful words... No wonder Swara was moved.. Truly said, not there yet, but not far off too.. I loved her transition from hatred and distrust to unsurity and care... Oooh.. I loved the tale of the progress😃😃 Can't wait for the next chapter😛

Much love,

Akshata😊

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krishuuuuuuuuuu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#162

Sakura baby...

chapter 2 was awesome...i was shocked to know she spiked his prasad..u brought that serial element..terrific..well nothing special swara would found after doing this...just how much deeply n madly he loves her..n that enough ..to let her guards down..a little...

Loving this journey tooo...

Update soon

Love

Talia

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CarpediemRose

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Posted: 9 years ago

#163

Sakura sweety girl🤗

Awesome chapter👏👏

loved it ⭐️⭐️

pls continue soon😳😳

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SmartSal

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Posted: 9 years ago

#164

Wow! Chapter two is really good, girl. Where do you learn to write such amazing tales? The way you began with the shades of colours making Sunny's eyes- the way she is simply trying to figure out his undertones, instead of wincing and moaning about her toes- the laughable 'I am right'- their amusement at each other's confidence- Swara getting a totally unexpected result- and the italicized end- all were lovely!👏

But what I really loved was how you gave us exactly what you promised- eating the cake and having it too! She hasn't remembered anything, true, but I can feel a picture-perfect ending in the air.

The way you showed a repeat of some magical moments-🤗.

The 'again' and 'phir se'-👍🏼

Honestly, in the show, Sanskaar would have most probably not remembered the drugged-kheer incident, so I really liked it that he immediately caught on here.

'That was very Swara Bose of you.'- In the show, they had completely forgotten the good old Swara Bose (I'm amazed that they managed recreating her to some extent in this track); so I am really pleased with Sanskaar for this bit.

Any other bits were quite good as well.

Care, thanks, appreciation, fandom, friendship, etc.,

SmartSal.

P.S. Do update Vajra as well, when you get the time.

Edited by SmartSal - 9 years ago

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#165

Res for Chapter 3 😊

Un-Res

Saku darling...you know my love for the monsoon rains and for SwaSan...😳 two of my fervent favorites...it fired me up to write "Sweet Scent of Petrichor", and I was so thrilled to see it being explored in a different way here. Filled me with a tranquil yet delighted sense of anticipation (I guess you understand what I mean...its what I always feel when monsoon rolls around. Excited and yet peaceful. 😳)

So many deft touches here which I loved, the nuggets and nuances as ever, so very attractive in your writing.

That moment between Ragini and Lakshya---a couple who has, in their way, come together to form a strong bond, despite all the anguish they put each other through. That sms from Ragini to her husband, saying those precious 3 words 😳 , and their lovely conversation after that, was superbly done. Some scars are beautiful----lovely tie in to the title there!! 👏

Ragini and Swara's sister bonding was lovely too, those moments spent on that momentous riverbank...bringing back such painful memories for Ragini---the time when she had turned into an unreasoning, grasping, jealous monster, no less. Swara, in the tranquil grip of her amnesia, doesn't recall a thing---which raises a very interesting conundrum---are there some memories, perhaps, which are best forgotten? Rather a philosophical line of enquiry there...

Ragini genuinely feels deep remorse, and wants to redeem herself completely. I found it so very touching, how she asked Swara whether she would forgive her, even if she had done something terrible? Swara, being herself, says "Yes", without the shadow of even a momentary hesitation. But Ragini demurs a bit, scarred, perhaps, by how deep she had sunk in her own negativity and hate. That was a nice portrayal there---the scars that an intelligent person bears from the villainy they inflict on others. In such cases, perhaps, its only the victims that suffer the scars, it is the perpetrators too...Not to the same extent or intensity, though---but its fruit for thought, the strength of a genuine remorse, the desire to redeem oneself even at the cost of definite privations...

Feel very happy to see this side of Ragini. 😊

And that hospital moment between SwaSan---so wonderful. So meaningful. So evocative. 👏 👏

I loved Swara's realization in a sense, of those 4 things---that she had been feeling lonely and bereft, a sensation which vanished when Sanskaar came there. That she was, unknown to her conscious self, been waiting for him to arrive. That she did not feel scared of him at all anymore, she just knew that now he as here, he would make everything all right. And last, the fact that she just needed to be in his arms, to seek solace and comfort, and find her home there.

Sigh...😳 Home is where the heart is---Such a superb concept. I have always felt that Swara and Sanskaar belong to each other, are each others homes and safe refuges. They are inseparable soul mates, after all. Lovely touch here, Saku dear. This is a particularly beloved idea---I had explored it in a way, in "Sepia Toned Memories", I guess...and it such a joy to see your take in this beautifully constructed chapter.

So Ragini is pretending to be pregnant here too, na? 😊 Sanskaar is aware of it, too---I wonder if he would try to talk RagLak out of the plan? Seems a rather inane one, something which Sanskaar would definitely not approve of. I can visualize him sitting Shekar and Shomi down for a sensible chat, asking him why on earth they can't assume responsibility for the baby. Narrow minded societal mores can go take a hike!

Looking forward to Chapter 4, my dear. 🤗 🤗

Lots of Love,

---Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#166

Yes, chapter three is now updated :)

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#167

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res for Chapter 3 😊

You got here before I made the official announcement, ah..my duchess of dawn is finally back!😃🤗

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#168

I'm so sorry for not catching up with the lovely comments on this thread, will do so as soon as I can, meanwhile you guys have no idea how many times a day I read and cherish them all.

Thank you so much!

And yes, those 65 people who liked the prologue, 62 who liked the chapter one and 50 who liked the chapter two🤗X1000 for you!

Love,

Sakura