Swasan -FF - Fanaa ~ Destroyed In love ~ Epilogue- Pg 85 ( 5th august)

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lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

#151

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

^^ Bold above: I've been humming all those songs one after another this morning, after reading your earlier reply. 😆 Really yaar---kya din the. So magical. 😳

hum pyaaar karnewaale duniya se naa darnewaale: 😆 I had actually made a fun post about SwaSan singing that song to each other in jail, when Swara was imprisoned for Urvashi Maasi's murder. 😆

@ bold ..perfect😆😆

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Debolina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#152

M not a regular follower of the show.Watched the initial episodes.Left watching the show since Ragini turned negative,so I hadn't watched the intimacy that grew between SwaSan afterwards.But I always liked Swara's character..n I find Sanskar soo cute.😳 Now, this story penned by u,made me fall in love with them as a couple.I liked it the way u kept intact the very essence of Swara's character.

Will like to read more.😊 Much love.

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lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

#153

Originally posted by: debomaaneet
M not a regular follower of the show.Watched the initial episodes.Left watching the show since Ragini turned negative,so I hadn't watched the intimacy that grew between SwaSan afterwards.But I always liked Swara's character..n I find Sanskar soo cute.😳 Now, this story penned by u,made me fall in love with them as a couple.I liked it the way u kept intact the very essence of Swara's character.
Will like to read more.😊 Much love.

Hey

Thanks a lot for dropping by😊 .. May I know your name pls and thanks for comment in CG too .. will try to kae some stuff on prabhas and anushka next time

oh ..You missed a lot dear ..I know it went off track but journey of swasan was worth all torture . May be you can catch up with their scenes ..sanskaar just cute?..he can be anything we want😳

I score brownie here for making you love them more😉.. Will update next part

Thanks once again

Lucky

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Debolina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#154

Originally posted by: lucky.m

Hey

Thanks a lot for dropping by😊 .. May I know your name pls and thanks for comment in CG too .. will try to kae some stuff on prabhas and anushka next time

oh ..You missed a lot dear ..I know it went off track but journey of swasan was worth all torture . May be you can catch up with their scenes ..sanskaar just cute?..he can be anything we want😳

I score brownie here for making you love them more😉.. Will update next part

Thanks once again
The pleasure is all mine buddy.🤗Btw,I am Debolina. 😊 Yesh yesh u earned those brownie points.⭐️⭐️⭐️ U said u will make some stuffs on Anushka-Prabhas?Yayyy.Thankiiieeeuuu sooo much!!!🤗🤗🤗

Lucky

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lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

#155

Hey Folks

Chapter 4 updated😛

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#156

res 4

Part Unres

I am first🥳

One read done - a quick one - loved it (as usual) will unres for a detailed comment soon

love,

Nyna

Unres:

Dear Lucky,

What a beautiful update that was, as soon as I read I could recall this song:

Aankhon, aankhon mein hum tum, hogaye diwane,

Baathon, baathon mein, dekho ban gaye afsane.

So they decide to be friends, both actually a tad worried about the others reactions and yet enjoying each other's company. He is bewildered and smitten by her changes in expressions, smiles one minute and apologies the next.😉 while she is completely bedazzled by his smiles. (where do we get a Sanskaar like this? ). But what struck me the most, was that even there, his mind quickly calculated how much expense the orphanage would be needing and admired her generosity, even though he realised that she truly did not have much to spare.

I loved the conversation they share over coffee and coffee cake (I am absolutely partial - coffee and conversations - any time of the day), and both actually admiring the same trait of being able to share with the less privileged and then his observation that she is quite bossy 😆

That point of Sanskaar insisting he drop Swara home because it is late- I am quite an independent girl - but I do love guys who do that - not because they think less of us but because they care and that tells a lot about them as a person, does it not?

Next is the sibling's encounter - I love the sibling bond here, I have a younger brother, so the bond is a little different from the one here, but the teasing and the comfort, the willingness to be open and share your secrets, that would all be there. Gift opening - that is more fun than the gift at times - I insist my brother always wrap the gifts he gets for me (never mind that half the time I have to tell him what I want😡, he just is unable to think up on his own). Guess all men are like that, which is why Uttara guessed that he had help - of the feminine variety😆

The text messages - Sanskaar truly has Swara pegged down and decides to prolong her agony (kiska aashirwad 🤣🤣🤣 - I so loved it) and his matter of fact reply (he has a sense of humour too - I WANT HIM, RIGHT AWAY!)

And what was that ending - sounds a little worrisome. Please, update soon.

love,

Nyna

Edited by Nynaeve - 9 years ago

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lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

#157

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
res 4
Part Unres

I am first🥳
One read done - a quick one - loved it (as usual) will unres for a detailed comment soon

love,
Nyna

Nynu🤗

yay ..always first..will wait😉😛

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#158

Lucky dearest 🤗

I am late but you know why and as your story too covers those golden friendship rules I won't apologise 😉

This was the perfect thing for me to help handle post DK blues 🤗. I went back and read the previous super cute chapter too. I am so getting such nice "feels" with story and I simply love your writing style Lucky- it's so natural, the flow is great and your dialogues feel really spontaneous; nothing is overdone or forced about this. Like me, you clearly do fairly long updates but I still want more at the end and hope you know that this I mean as a genuinely heartfelt compliment.

I loved how you have shown the natural attraction first between both Sanskaar and Swara but it is so sweetly tempered with respect and then the start of a wonderful friendship. I love the angle of the orphanage and the children. I had written an OS ages ago- totally different context but had dealt with a scenario where it was Sanskaar's tribute to a deceased Kavita (we knew nothing about her then) to go to an orphanage (Sishur Sevay was one I researched and chose as it really inspired me) and then Swara had helped him 😃. Here I love how that humane and compassionate side of them is explored and gives them an immediate connect. Sanskaar is already falling hard and fast- the signs are so obvious and Mr Suave cannot help but be pulled in by the sweet and naive but yet intelligent and gutsy beauty he has met. Same for Swara- she has no armour for her sophisticated charm and lovely manners. On an aside, men who are gentlemen and have manners are my weak spot. My own hubby, even if I say so myself and won't admit to him, has beautiful manners. The holding of doors, worrying about the lateness of the hour, and the various other touches are making me melt towards this Mr Maheshwari too 😳. I also love how you have made Sanskaar want to be self made despite his elite background.

The other thing that made me grin ear to ear was the cute bonding. I love Uttara 😆😆 and her teasing was priceless! Oh and in modern romances I find it can be easy to lose the romance with texts and all if you are not careful but you have wonderfully managed this and I found their exchange perfect and so cute without being childish.

So then I assume more of this till things "heat" up, love blossoms in earnest and then "wham"- a problem or complication(s)? OR will those hit before, interrupting the currently smooth ride? 😕. But for now, not going to overthink that. Am so enjoying this nice and sweet but still exciting enough development of growing feelings.

Lovely work Lucky! Loads of love always,

Shru xoxo

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#159

Res 😊

Lucky dear, am at my cousin's wedding; functions through today and tomorrow ( you know how South Indian weddings are). 😊

Will un res as soon as back. 🤗

Love ya loads

Viji

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#160

Lucky 🤗

Will be back for my detailed revert later. But in the meantime, I just wanted to give you a big round of 👏 for how real and so very relatable your dialogues are. Just superb. I was grinning so contentedly to myself, envisioning your Sanskaar and Swara chatting with each other, that lovely banter and later, that sms exchange, was just so superbly done.

Again, the Sanskaar--Uttara bond was so genuinely portrayed. A completely real feeling of a bro--sis bond. Who adore each other to bits, and enjoy taking each others case, too. 😆 Reminded me of my bond with my elder bro, whom I love to bits. And for whom I am still "kondhe" 😉 (Tamil for gudiya).

Excellent work as usual Lucky. This is one of my favorite works on the forum.

Lots of Love

Viji