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Posted: 9 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: Krishnabhisarik

Hey Shruti!! Hopefully your pain has subsided by now.. If not then m sure it will pretty soon..🤗 Back to 26, oh god!! I'm actually pained at the turn of events.. Why is it so difficult!!😭😭 It started out with such CUTE exchanges between SwaSan.. Her being proud of him, him smiling only after getting her approving reaction, the bestowal of honour on him n his men and of Swara too... But then those terrible females and their gossip🤢 And then the Samvant😡😡 Its actually worse coz he may be a good guy, but expecting a 20 something to marry his 40yr old self means that even he agrees that Swara doesn't deserve a better match!! Where's the respect then?? Idiot kahinka!!😡😡 I know this was how things were back then, but it still drives me hopping mad!! And m so glad Swara outright refused to such nonsense... Please please please don't make Swara agree to any kind of sacrifice.. Or if u do then pls get the torture over with quickly *puppy dog eyed* please!! Coz u write sooo well that m bound to cry if i read it.. A small glimmer of hope with Sanskar preparing for 'battle'.. Hanging on to it..😃. Oh and that small bit of Pawan runnin away from Uttara.. Classic😆😆

All in all.. Hats off to you!! The way u write evokes this strong a reaction from me *hides face*.. Amazing amazingly written.. You could seriously publish this (and become very rich😉)..
Lots of love,
Akshata😊
P.S. Gosh!! M sooo sorry.. This has been more of a rant than a comment.. Please be assured that i don't mean any offence..😳😳


Dear Akshata 🤗

The pain is apparently here for a while according to the docs but my way is to pretend its not there so it hurts less 😆

Aha 26- yes indeed, I thought a "googly" had to be thrown 😈. See easy to me implies it won't be the most valued and treasured prize ever and for them- getting each other's love has to be hence this new hurdle.

The cute exchanges to show that they feel so very much, nothing touches that 😳. The rewards as they were so deserved and the gossip and women- - part of life unfortunately. I deliberately didn't make them serial like with obvious taunts and rudeness but even subtle is realised by the recipient and hurts- I know this from very personal experience.

The Saamvant - everyone is determined to hate him but let's see how he turns out. He may be all everyone fears as after all this is DK and it's likely. As for his perspective- I will deal with it in the upcoming sequences 😊. I love the reactions to be honest 😆. I know its mean but it is part of the story and so see what happens and then tell me what you think! Haha, I loved the idea of brave Pawan running away - as if you can run from those siblings 😆

Awww Akshata! Thanks so much hon! You made my day with your words- honestly am grinning ear to ear! I don't know about making money but the fact that you think I can publish is such soothing music to me!!

Oh God dearie- no no!! It's not a rant at all! I love the reactions and please don't think I was offended at anything you said! You gave an impassioned reaction which I love! I only get a bit irate when people totally miss the point of something that I try so hard to convey but even then I check to see if I got it wrong 😆. Thank you for your lovely words and for being so connected to DK!

Loads of love,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago
#62

Originally posted by: asexualflower

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Ahh Shrutu, I think I've become obsessed with your FF. After I'd finished reading chapter 5, I'd long on to IF a few times a day, to check if there were any updates from you. 😆

Anyways I shall read the chapter and get back to you soon!

Sapu dearest 🤗

Awww- I love such obsession 😳!! Please stay obsessed till I finish the story!!! Mmmwah.

Unreserved:

Oh, my heart 💔

I know- I am cruel

Okay well, first of all I loved that little moment SwaSan after he successfully made the shot.

I love archery and couldn't resist showing Sanskaar off again 😳 and then thought it should be a moment between them where she celebrates his prowess and he then enjoys his own achievement only then

And this Ranjit 😡 I mean I'm sure he doesn't have bad intentions, he does need a mother for his son. But c'mon Urvashi Massi would be a much better option for him then Swara! 😆

😆 I agree that Ranjit is more suited to someone else but kya karein, I need him 😆

I was totally expecting a suitor to come by for Swara. I was thinking maybe some Prince of Bengal (you know how back in the day, alliances between sons and daughters symbolized peace between the two states) or something. Samvaant Ranjit makes more sense since he is a widower.

Ah freaky! The original plan was for a Bengali vassal to come by. But then I changed it to Ranjt Singh- simpler in a way for various reasons and less to write on a topic I know will be making you all upset 😆

Basically Swara and Sanskaar's entire situation is so complicated, there are so many MUs and that's the only problem really. I mean they both love each other, but too many misunderstandings, and moreover, their society's standards are just making the MUs worse.

Yes indeed, things are very convoluted and getting messier by the day. They haven't managed to cut through their own confusion which is the main problem and then as you say exacerbated by the rest of the factors . But the path of true love is never smooth right?

The little bit at the end makes me feel like Sanskaar is going to do something, and soon! Can't wait till they are finally together for good!

Sanskaar is in action mode yes, so wait and watch or read really 😉

Well I guess that's it for me, even though that wasn't really much. The problem is I have lots to say but I just can't put it into words (which is why I usually wait till the end of FF's and SS's to comment). But I am going to try my best to leave a reply for every chapter of DK because it really deserves that, and there isn't really much left anyways.

Ahhh don't worry about the length, am very grateful to read and your comments are much valued! Thank you so much for this and hopefully 27 will make you think it worth to comment on 😃


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Posted: 9 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11


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I'm sure I'll be obsessed until it's done! 😆 And probably a fair bit of time after I'm done also. LOL
Honestly, DK is such a good FF, I could probably read it over many times and not get bored. 😛

By the way, are you feeling better now?
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Posted: 9 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: Sakkiyah

My friend,

My network was interrupted. I didn't complete my view.
The update was awesome. Really heart touching one.
I felt bad for both swara and sanskar.

Hey Sakkiyah 🤗

No worries, I should have known you were interrupted as you usually give such a nice full set of comments 😃 Thank you so much for the below and the lovely summary, showing as ever that you picked up all the various nuances I was trying to bring out. Really pleased you loved this chapter despite its angst, I felt it was needed to move the story to where I need it next at so really appreciate the way you have grasped all that.

The beginning was beautiful. The auditorium sequence was well written. Sanskar a good warrior. The flames shot up sequence was well written. The audience were excited to see that sequence. The return entry of sanskar as a prince is a happy news for the people in his country.
Swara was sitting behind her mother's.
She wanted to watch his performance. Her heart was still beating for him.
She can't control her excitement,
In this performance also sanskar was searching his lady love, he only wanted to see her smile. He was searching it and at last his eyes got its destination.
He was really happy after seeing her. Swara was also happy. They shared a passionate eye lock. They were lost in each other. Janaki, sharmista, Annapurna, and sujatha were witnessed this. Swara's thoughts were broken.

These two just gravitate towards each other- they seek one another out and cannot stay away and only really feel happy or complete when with the other 😊

Durgaprasad praised sanskar for his brilliance, and he gave him all the powers back. He praised Pawan and swara. Swara was happy after hearing this.
But her happiness was short lived.
The family were discussing about swara's wedding.
But they were confused about this.
The real truth was, when swara was praised some one was faking their happiness.

Dearest Ragini would of course revert to her jealousy 🤢

Janaki was saying about swara's wedding and she was not interested in that topic.
In the palace sanskar was waiting to watch swara once.
He witnessed the conversation between janaki and ranjit.
Sanskar was searching swara in the dinner. But from janaki he hears that swara was sick.
So he immediately reached swara's chamber to meet her.
He was worried for her. Swara was surprised to see him.
He asked about her health. At that time janaki came to there
And she saw him
She didn't questioned her. But she informed her about wedding. It was fixed with ranjit.
Swara was shattered after hearing this. Her world was lost.
She was not ready for this marriage. She was in love with sanskar. She confessed her love in front of janaki ma.
And at last sanskar also confessed his love for swara to
Annapurna. After hearing Swara's wedding was fixed with ranjit sanskar was shattered..
He wanted to stop that wedding. But he was helpless.
The update was filled with tears.
The condition of swasan is really painful. They love each other. But the circumstances are not favourable.

The whole situation spiralled out of control due to Swara's family fearing more and more for her reputation and grassing what they see as a "solution"

I think the character of janaki is grey shaded. It is my guess.
In the beginning of the story janaki always supported swara. But while reading this update, I think the love was fake.
Because she slapped ragini after the accusations of sanskar and saved her. Today she arranged a alliance for swara. He is a family friend of janaki.
When swara will marry ranjit, then the life of ragini will be safe. In annapurna's decision also, it was mentioned about the relationship between the sisters.

Hmmm, this is DK so of course anything is possible but Janaki has always been shown as a queen in the same sense as Annapurna- taking decisions where necessary. If you think from a different viewpoint, the mothers especially could fear for Swara. They have their own strange family situation they have lived with and seen the pain it brings. As for Janaki, if you think back, in the past she also took a stern decision with Ragini and made her accept that Lakshya would't be hers as that was a political need. Let's see what happens.

But how shekhar support this? I have no idea about this.
I think for reputation he is doing this.

Well quite- he is a father in an orthodox time where things are very weighted against girls and he is trying to "fix" things. Of course having the opposite effect but he cannot know that.

But the condition of swara is really bad. She can't confess her love.
And the marriage alliance will be a new torture for her.
He is too old. And she can't love him. She gave her heart to sanskar. It is true that she can't marry him, and she can't forget him.
Swara is a good soul.. She only knew to love.
But she was betrayed by her own sister.
She was a victim of her sisters plan.
But she was named characterless. She is totally shattered. She is a volcano now.
She has no voice.
And sanskar's condition is also same. After years he got his family. He proved his innocence. And he loves some one unconditionally. But he is helpless.
The dilemma is painful.
And sujatha is also against the marriage. So many new hurdles are on the way.
And sanskar is going to a dangerous mission.
And swara is worried for him.
What will happen next?
Eagerly waiting for your next update
Thanks for the pm

The situation for both of SwaSan is sad and full of hurdles . As you sum up, a lot of factors in play here and a fine mess has resulted so let us see what happens next. 😃


Dear Sakkiyah

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Love,
Shruti x

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Posted: 9 years ago
#65

Originally posted by: jess_27

gosh.. things changed so much in this one chapter...

Hey Jessica 🤗

Yes indeed, you know by now that I like to shake things up and give one extreme to another in the space of each chapter 😊

i liked the part that swara was acknowledged for her bravery, and the way she saved sanskaar... and the proud look in sanskaar's face.. the way their eyes met.. and the unintentional smile that leaked from swara's lips... this smile has been showing appearances only when sanskaar is around.. i dont understand why ppl around her dont wanna see it...

Those little moments define them no? They are not "big" things but in a relation that is special I think those little things equally meaningful. As for people around, oh I think they very much see but don't WANT to see as they fear what acknowledging that could mean. Some don't want to see for their selfish reasons and some because of protective instincts towards SwaSan


the worry in sanskaar's behavior and entire body language on knowing that swara is ill, just shows how much he loves her.. and then that meeting with her... where he barges in from the window... ill swara must have felt some relief on seeing him, being touched by him, whether she wants to admit or not.. but his presence always had and has a deep affect on her senses...

Sanskaar's world now revolves around her and they are so drawn to each other. And yes, definitely- she felt glad and relieved instinctively for seeing him, such is the power of their effect on one another 😳


and then the next part.. i am so so so glad that swara finally admitted her love for sanskaar... and im hoping janki would stand by her side in future and not force her for this deal of her marriage...

Up till now Janaki probably suspected but didn't overtly know of Swara's depth of feelings but then again events have overtaken them and Janaki is a very politically astute woman.

though, i act believe that swara's father wants her married to a man twice her age, just to avoid any further shame... but, then again, i dont know how much i should be trusting this man!

In that day and age I didn't think it that unrealistic that a political alliance at a time when you thought your daughter was "shamed" would be grasped with both hands. Things like age and suitability in that sense are concepts we now adhere to, then it wasn't really important in fixing alliances I think. As for Shekhar- again, in DK except for SwaSan who know what anyone is capable of 😊


but i certainly have my hopes on sanskaar.. i know for sue that he will not let something like this happen to his love.. and now since both swara and sanskaar have accepted their love for each other, in front of their respective mothers, im really eager to read what happens next...

I love the confidence in our dark knight 😉 Let's see whether he does something or someone helps or whether fate sorts things out for them OR whether I make it more complicated and convoluted for now 😈


overall, lovely update... waiting for the next part...

Thanks so much Jessica! I am so happy you liked it despite the angst- lots of love for this! 🤗
love
Jessica


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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: asexualflower


I'm sure I'll be obsessed until it's done! 😆 And probably a fair bit of time after I'm done also. LOL
Honestly, DK is such a good FF, I could probably read it over many times and not get bored. 😛

By the way, are you feeling better now?


Music to my ears 😃. Thanks for asking- am definitely better but still very tired and also mega busy at work plus the damaged muscles I have been told will take a while so the pain is bad and won't go anytime soon so I am resigned to it. I have a decent pain threshold though so it's all fine! 😃 Mmmwah x
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sorry im late..unres @page 4...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#69
Shru dear..🤗

Just now read your last two chapters 25 and 26..😊 and so I decided to post a combined comments in this thread for both..😳

Chapter 25 started off with Swara walking along the palace grounds and then she found herself near the fountain where the old mad version of Sanskaar had wet her with water jets many days earlier..You have tried to compare Swara's old cheerful lifestyle and present silent and matured version with the fountain, which now lay stationary and lifeless..Wow..I really loved it😃

When the Gadodia ladies had asked her about her erstwhile journey with Sanskaar, she spoke highly about him and her mothers got the clue, that she might have developed feelings for him..After all they are mothers..😊

Ok so SanLak have decided up on a cease fire for the time being..😆 So there is no luck to witness San--gini and Swaragini war any time now..hmmph, will have to wait for it I guess..😛

I really loved Uttara Swara bonding..😊😊 and then the way they went to meet Varun and Veer at the stables..aaahh Pawannn he too came there..😉 Really loved the way he talked with Swara about Sanskaar, indirectly through Veer's name..😆 Pawan is so fun..I really love him,.😳 You already know it na..😆😳
Swara gave it back to him, through Uttara..👏 that was really funny..ha ha

Swara was too hurt after hearing Sujata's dialogues..😭

Poor Sanskaar he misses his princess so much..And when he found her all drenched and beautiful in that abandoned building, he was so relieved and happy..😳
The kiss was magical..☺️ I really enjoyed the Swasan scene here..😳It was so beautifully written..
But again she rejected his proposal for marriage..😭This girl na..😲

Chapter 26 was so shocking..OMG, Ranjit and Swara...no wayyy..Please put a stop to that alliance Sanskaar..Save your princess, will you..😭

Janki maa understood Swasan relation, but still she has no choice, and she even asked Swara to consider that relation..OMG..😭 Even if Swara is really against it..

Really loved the way Sanskaar talked to AP about his love for Swara..But AP is also helpless like any other woman of their era..

Now only Sanskaar can do something...😲



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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11


Nyna my dear 🤗

Why?!?! 😲😲 Why so much mind tantrum? 😆 This is DK- when did ANYTHING come easy except the overwhelming feelings of SwaSan for each other?! Let it play out- there is a strange sort of beauty in their pain and they need to fight for love and not have anyone else do it for them IMO:). See how it plays out and in the meantime, go ahead- have a tantrum! My health is the way it is but it can take tantrums if it makes you feel better 😆. On a serious note, lots planned so sit back and enjoy it- it won't be all bad 😉

Mmmwah xoxo


Dear Shru,

This is Nyna's heart and mind writing to let you know that we have finally made up:



And have completely unres'ed on page 3.

It is not a very structured one as the heart is still slightly miffed. But we have decided not to throw tantrums or sneak away and will do say you said - sit back and enjoy the tale as it unfolds. It will be a happy Swasanilicious ending so as Shakespeare said - ''All's well that ends well'. But please do not mind if we get a little too involved in the tale and become emotional on you.

love and happy thoughts,
Nyna's heart and mind

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