DARK KNIGHT-A SwaSan FF-T4-DELETED-AN PG1- Creations-Pgs 98/9 - Page 25

Originally posted by: Meself

Bass! Bohot ho gaya...Yo Mahadev shakti de! I want to put up my comments here!


P.S. Damn you Shrutz for I am now obsessed with this Sanskaar!!

Originally posted by: Meself

^^Sweets you can't chase me off good stories; not even if you wanted to!! It is just that one thing or the other keeps popping up! Oh and you're not in India the heat and water shortage along with massive power cuts make me go kaput! But tera rasta main chodun na!! .

Originally posted by: DivineDarkness

Bitch! ! Well I dnt expect anything less..

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Res darling

Originally posted by: MusicAddict

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Hey hun!! Look, this is by far your best chapter till date! I know you know about the dilemmatic convos that I have with your chapters but this time I'm hereby declare this as my most favourite chapter of Dark Knight till now! And the difference is just by 0.000001%. But better is better right?! So coming to it-

Sakshi 🤗

Mmmwah for this lovely long and satisfying comment and for finding this the best chapter! Needless to say, a very special one for me in DK's journey! And yes even a point % difference is a difference 😆

Part 1:

Finally Swara and Ragini face off! I wanted to read one and this one was hell amazing I tell ya! Ragini won't change. She is such an irritating and disgusting woman! Actually does she have a heart of a woman man? The heart of a sister? Such a vile lady who stings so painfully and full of poison in her! Oh, I hate her. She can only think about others as she herself is. Selfish and greedy. Does she even know what Swara? Venomous! Swara's answer was amazing! Must have boiled her black blood. I guess I'm saying too much, but look the way she enjoyed the sadistic pleasure in hurting her sister, I couldn't help lashing at her verbally.

I had so much "bhadaas" against Ragini behena that I felt Swara had to voice something of it and so that gave me great satisfaction to write. When you think she may changed and there's hope for her, she says and does something that makes you realise the rotten core there!

The way she scraped that bracelet over hand as harsh as it could be, was really painful to read. That was a really beautiful scene you had written and that too with the best of words that made it all the more realistic. And here I would say this allusion' to your chapter 21 was really a beautiful memory which brought an ached smile on my face. Swara and her fears seemed totally valid to me. Those uncertainties especially at that era when the bride never had a say in her marriage, well these all are justified. This pain and yearning reminds me of the Manchala sequence during Cavity and Sanskaar's engagement. It was so beautiful and just loved reading it.

The giving pain to distract yourself is almost an automatic reaction sometimes I find, we get careless and yank a hairbrush too hard through our hair or accidentally touch something hot when we are hurting or preoccupied- here it was the bangle being rammed on and yes the reminder to 21 seemed to naturally flow there:). Yes I think even today a lot of women don't have huge choice so in those days it must have been intolerable

Part 2:

Well, I guess this one is the longest right? Never mind, I can read your stories all day and never get bored or distracted! Sanskaar's stare was so cold and steel. The way he looked straight in her eyes as if hearing all what she was thinking, I was like, Prince Grumpy, what are you upto? *smiles bright with thrills of excitement* But then I were right! I knew he is gonna do that and I just loved this bold, fearless Prince who is asking for what is rightfully his! So loved it man! It was a treat, literally treat to read this!

This part was seriously long yes and mind you this whole chapter is the longest in DK. Haha, you knew something good would come from Sanskaar's steely stare? 😆 I love this Sanskaar too- he will get what he wants as he knows the rightness of it in his heart!

Swara felt that she would swoon! I honestly was giggling, I don't know why! Maybe I was too happy that I started giggling. But I felt just amazing reading this. Although Sujata was stopping Sanskaar, yet I felt that she wasn't wrong, she has a say in it! Afterall she is his mother. I don't know other's take on it but I actually don't hate your Sujata at all and not even in a single place! Well, I don't know why this is but maybe I'm a bit crack! (There is no maybe in it actually) As I always said, Janaki is one of my favourite characters. She has that powerful aura around her that I believe each woman should carry as women are no less than men, and here she very well proved it. I knew it! Sharmishtha suddenly coming and asking something like this to Sanskaar, I just knew it. Actually I keep thinking about your FF lotsa times so I just thought about something like this and got it too!

Haha, Swara swooning was a state I could relate to if Prince Sanskaar asked for my hand 😆. I am not sure anyone hate Sujata here, but I could be wrong. I think she was disliked a lot before this chapter and am sure some stern readers still won't forgive her but I am not sure she is hated. Janaki- yes!! She emanates power and dignity- like Annapurna 😊. Awww- it makes me so glad to think you think DK worthy to think so much over 😳

This was really unexpected! Ranjit agreeing with Sanskaar and readily giving Swara to him! Well, thank heavens he did that but honestly I hadn't expected this. When Sanskaar said, why don't we ask the princess what she wants, I was like Dang it Sanskaar! You shouldn't have done that. Al the next paras I was like Swara say yes, Swara say yes!! The dread was too much honestly! But the gal chose heart over mind at the end moment and chose Sanskaar! Thank Heavens again. That huge sigh of relief, you don't know!

I know everyone expected the Ranjt angle to be dragged much more and not end "easily" but I always intended this for him and not a long drawn out track with angst on this point. Haha, I so wanted some to freak thinking Swara would say no from obligation to her father and family and her MU with Sanskaar. But I wanted the choice to be hers and for it to be the right choice! Glad it made you so happy! 😃

I was in total awe of the Prince when he said he'll kidnap her again! Like, that's the way Prince, I'm proud of you. Well, that was something unexpected on Laksh's part. I mean I never thought he would say something like this, but as he did, well the guy has increased a tweeny bit of respect in me for him. Ranjit is not a fool must say. He took a wise decision, or Sanskaar would have not let him. And when the Princess couldn't realize that he loves her, this man did! Maybe experiences! Janaki is the best, I knew she would love to have Swara married to Sanskaar after all she knows that her darling daughter is totally heads over heels for this so awesome guy!

The kidnap threat is my fave part of almost all Sanskaar has said 😊 And yes, I felt maybe Lakshya could make some amends too 😃. Ranjit- oh he isn't foolish at all, you may see more 😉 He did love his wife a lot so the experience comment is very true! Yes, Janaki knows Swara is head over heels, as does Shomi too 😃 Mind you by now a LOT of people can see this 😆

Part 3:

Shruti, the entire description of The Jal Bhavan was really amazing. Like really amazing, okay wait I'll change the word. Um..it was quite awesome and um..you can breath-taking, yeah! With the lotuses and glasses and all, it has to be a beautiful sight for a nature lover like me! There used to be blue lotuses in my school as well and whenever I used to go somewhere, I would go from there touching them when nobody looks. Our Mali Bhaiya became friends wimme this way. Lol...I know I'm mad! Sorry, will come back to the topic.

I loved the idea of a beautiful but tranquil spot for what I wanted to happen there. And I love lotuses too!! Am fascinated by them- and blue lotuses- wow! Sounds amazing. Reminds me of my Krishna at once 😃 No you are not mad, just cute and you love nature which is lovely 😃

Sanskaar, you really don't know how much she wants to throw herself in your arms, but she is restraining herself with as much efforts as you used to have! I'll not say have after the recent experiences *winks*. That verbal spat was really amazing to read. Honestly! Just loved reading it. And especially the horror that Swara feels when he said that he would kidnap her again was hilarious! I so love these two man!! These two define perfection in all senses. So it was Swara first hu? Well I thought it will be Sanskaar. As I already mentioned, I keep daydreaming about your FF to often in the day, so was thinking how you would write the confession and I thought maybe it's like a frustrated Sanskaar would hold her by her shoulders, and confess his love for her but this is way better! I guess that would have been quite clichd na?

I love the references to what control Sanskaar used to have and no longer does- so so true! 😆 Glad you liked the mini-spat- felt that they needed to get that out of the way as of course these two won't just confess without some token fight 😉. And yes, it was Swara who caved in first! I thought about our Prince but he has done SO much, it was time for Madam to make some concessions too I thought and wanted him to have this 😆. Yes the other thing would have been cliched I guess and I seriously didn't think to it. I think my brain is wired very differently especially when it comes to DK 😃

That slight slip was sooo pleasing to my eyes and brain, I can't tell ya un! Finally all matters sorted, mutual feelings confessed and cherished. How I loved it when Swara kept shouting how much she loved him and the many many reasons and he ignoring what she said just hugged her as if hugging his whole world and life. And then cupped her face and told her the truth. Dude, here I agree with Sanskaar! Couldn't she tell? Which man would kiss her and love her so passionately if he didn't love her? Swara is too innocent and Buddhu! Even the Samkalgoonj incident! God I just love that chapter too! #Memories

Yes that slip was so, errr, relieving? And yes all matters between them sorted and they can now have their moments of bliss before the next battle beckons! Haha,they were both so DUMB before but again when it love you cannot have that perspective- it's always easier for others whose emotions are not engaged to see and say. And Swara toh is especially innocent and budhu too 😆 Samkalgoonj was a real turning point for them of course 😃

Shit Shru Shit!! Are you a confession expert or what?? Honestly hun, the way you wrote Sanskaar's expression as to how he considers her as his life, his oxygen, his everything, I went mad! Totally overwhelmed! Look I might destroy the ending of your FF, but if this Prince Grumpy continuous to become Prince Charming, I surely become Cinderella and rob him at any cost! Even Swara's paragraph as to how this meant everything to her and how happy she is! Man, you oughta be the best out here. I never rant on any FF as much as I do on yours!! You rock buddy<3 The whole scenario enacted again was very beautiful and passionate! Well honestly, reading it had my GM on an overdrive, but I just loved this part. It showed how their true love for each other and this angst and separation had them needing each other like anything. Needing no craving actually, yearning as you said. The truest form of love, has no regulations and rules, it is pure in every sense and Sanskaar's self control shows it! Amazing...no wait...um...exquisitely written with the most beautiful of words and imagination to show their love and yearning! I already told you what I felt about it and there is nothing wrong in it yet reading it again obliged me to write this all. But yeah, it was quite orgasmic and exhilarating *winks and blushes*

I SO love the comments in this para! Am over the moon- literally with them!!!Thank you!! And aha, no no I am no a confession expert in any way. If you ask my poor hubby he would so make you laugh- if you call Swara budhu, I dread to think what you would call me! 😆 You want to become Cinderella and take Prince Sanskaar? 😆 Awww- I am so happy you "rant" here to much- the ranting is music to me! You already reassured me as to the feeling the love making inspired and reading how much you loved it and got the underlying sheer love there was such reward for me 😳. I am so overwhelmed with the kind words, I can't say much more but am totally and utterly grateful!!

Such an honourable and adorable Prince damn!! He Bhagwan, aisa piece hai kya is duniya main? Even If he'll be a Chinese, I'll rob him! Mr.Perfect Maheshwari! Pawan and Uttara haan? Well, these are gonna be big teases! Loved Chapter 28 too. See ya there

There is a Prince for everyone- they have to find him and not have preconceived notions about him, that's all 😉. Pawan and Uttara are teases but sometimes you get back what you give out too! 😉 Will look forward to the comments on 28 and now perhaps on 29 too!!

Love ya

Sakshi

Originally posted by: krishuuu

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Shruuu cupcake...😊

Hello dearest 🤗

Sorry im late..cant help it..😉.i log on every min on forum ...read soo many post n reply to them quickly.. but for u n few other talented n wonderful people i cant give short reply...u are sooo special to me..that i can not described in words...😳love u..muahhh

I am totally ok with what you call late as your comments and love are always so appreciated, whenever they come- so a huge thanks! And the fact that you spend so much time and energy on my work is truly humbling for me 😳

coming to Chapter 28 it was mindnumbingly shocking.update... 😭soo worried...after27 i was wondering what will happen next???battle was immediate answer...but that witch will return...it was not close to my swasan oriented mind.😭..now im in panic mood. My heart cannot tolerate another misunderstanding...or🤢 anything.already with great difficulty icomposed myself to bear with their temporary seperation n now this happen...damn nervous now...😕🤢

Yes 28 was one of those chapters and unfortunately some of the others coming too- some torture awaits but I can promise you some surprises hopefully in how things will unfold so sit tight and see how you feel!

Starting with PaRa n swasan scene...loved their teasing to each other...they bond sooo well...missed lucky..he supported sansku after his confession..want reconcilation of both brothers now shruuu...i know it will take time...but want them back with little bromance...😆

PaRa had such a ball with that little session. As for Lakshya- not the time for that yet and especially that level- it would be a bit forced but a good start has been made no so let's see how any bromance develops 😃

Soo now everthing is fine..they enjoyed their little feast..celebrationof their love...droolworthy quick glances to each other...mad couple...love eachother immensely...surprise was sujata..she accepted swara whole heartedly..loved this funny sujata ..she will be little vamp saas to her bahu...😆 hillarious...

Sujata said what she thinks- that is her in a nutshell 😆 As for SwaSan- of course they are more than obsessed with each other 😳

Enjoyed reading whole scenes u described n etched beautifully...swasan busy days..not getting time to see each other often.. secretly n schemingly make plan to meet each other or just greet...😉😆

Maheswari n gadodia women visiting temple n praying for their husband safe return..even kept fast for them..n m n G males also busy with their battle planning n strategizing...😃

As usual our lovely n innocent swara..denied tobreak her fast n waited for sansku to come then she will eat...she even lied to avoid any forcefeed from her mothers...good going...she is behaving like his wife...nthen my prince charming came...n pacify n cajole his princess n stated the reason for his delay in arrival...cherished this scene...there feeding each other..talking n laying together in each other embrace.😳..it was soo painful for both..this seperation...but sansku tried to be strong not to be weaken or else swara will not be able to handle herself...it was touching..emotional n soothing as well...loved it..👏😉

I am so glad you like those little interludes and the underlying tenderness in those scenes which are to keep them and us going whilst Sanskaar is gone . I know this was a tricky chapter so it's nice that this all made it still enjoyable! 😃

N the worst news😡 has to come after above beautiful n light moments ..that vamp kavita is back..😡.not sure...but who else will know soo much detail regarging sansku n kavita convo..n she wrote that letter...why it didnot burn on its way to sansku...😡.scared now for swasan...😭but ill trust u shruu.😉.u will not dissappoint us...pawan n sansku will handle everthing...swasan love each other now more then ever..no mu can come between them..even if that MU start with letter k...😊what will happen next???

Vamp Kavita 😆 Wait till you see more of her or the person who says its her. I've of course posted 29 so that mystery in large part is over- you will tell me what you think! Thanks for you trust in me, will do my best not to let you down but of course the story demands some harsh parts that cannot be avoided without me feeling I compromised my authenticity to the script but I am hopeful you'll all still like it! As for SwaSan and any MU there- you will see what happens very soon 😉

Desperate for next...excited n worried😕😃

Update soon..

I know you super quick Res'd on 29- mmmwah for that, will await your views!

Lots of kisses n hugs

Talia😊