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Posted: 9 years ago

#431

Amazing beautiful funny heartwarming lovely Chapter 21 Shruti!!

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Originally posted by: maaneetfan
Amazing beautiful funny heartwarming lovely Chapter 21 Shruti!!

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Thank you so much Tas 😃. It's 22 that will generate different views I suppose! 😉

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Shruti,🤗

I owe you a big huge apology. You were giving me an epic love story and I was treating it as a perfect or rather normal love story. You know where the hero heroine meets, falls in love and unite all happy around.It really dawned on me now that I misunderstood the whole thing. I mean Why set the whole story centuries behind? Why go through this extensive sketching? My final conclusion is that I'm an idiot. What people knew from chapter 1 I realised after reading chapter 22.

And about the PM I send, it was my initial reaction. I now get why there is a need for this new misunderstanding. You are cutting and polishing the rock to turn it into a diamond. Its not going to be one of those happily ever after so soon. They have to go through hell and forth to prove their love story worthy of being called an epic or at least close to an epic.

About Chapter 22. I love both the parts. First for obvious reasons. And second as this starts their test for their love for each other.

Waking up was just sweet. This time Swara woke up first and she was also hugging him. I really love their sleeping arrangement. Since the were in Ehsaas Nagar they had spent every waking and sleeping hour with each other. And I really wanted it to continue, but now its of no use usless they clear the issues.

The kiss ☺️- Thanks you for that one🤗. I did want it in this chapter because unlike Sanskar Swara might not hold her emotions well. I expected her to give a small peck on his cheeks in the morning while he pretends to sleep. But this was way better. They kissed in full consciousness and with their whole heart and soul.

I so wished he had told her what is in his heart after the kiss. That way the confusion will not have arised. But that was not the intend here. He didn't say because its not the right time yet. There are mile to go before they reach that stage for you, am I right? I just hope those miles get covered in the next chapter.

Adarsh and his pathetic army had to march in and spoil their happy day to the worst day in their life. I'm really sad at this.

You know they both have not told each other how much they love the other person and what he/she means to him/her. Just a kiss will not be enough they have to use words here He has shown in his action and so has she but they can easily be misunderstood just like here. He is still not sure whether/if she loves him like he does. She feels he still loves kavita.

I'm a bit sad for the sindoor marriage not happening. A little bit force from him and it would have happened. But its okay, we will get a big fat Indian wedding now. So I'm happy with that thought. Also I don't want crying marriage from them. I want happy marriage with celebrations all around for them.

And sindoor falling down is an apshagun. Sanskar's life in danger? Who knows what is happening in your brain and what you have planned( makes me wish again if I could by some miracle see the rest of the story). But one thing is sure - the events that will follow will be heart-wrenching yet it will bring them closer than before. I'm positive about it.

As for Swara's reputation being ruined, it still happens in India. So can imagine what it must have been back in those days.

I really don't want genie to help them any more now. They both know their own feelings and somewhat of what other person feels like, let them find out the rest of the story themselves. Swara thinks he is showing sympathy in her defense he didn't confess, all his actions throughout he has made sure to tell her how much bad he feels for ruining her life and never even what he feels for her. Then again neither did she. For him he is unsure about her feelings, when she refused to accept the proposal. He should know better than after hearing all that she would react this way. He should have given her some space and then told what he feels for her and then propose marriage. Saying I'll restore you by marrying you will sound like sympathy and for her she can bare anything but not pity or sympathy from him. Both are fools.

"You dare cheapen it by talking like this? I wanted to kiss you Swara! And I refuse to be sorry about it! I want to marry you, I am not being forced by anything! We need to discuss this Swara, there is much I have to say but I need you to listen calmly and give us a chance and..."

@ underlined :This should have been his first words to her. Not the last.

@red I love this outburst.

I'm waiting for 23 to unfold more drama here.

Love

Sree

P.S. You took your day off and used it to write chapter 22 didn't you? Falling sick had this added merit I didn't not know that.😉 How is your health? Are you better or is it getting worst. I'm not sure how I'm. Just that I can sit up is a great relief now. I'm forgetting something that I wanted to let you know. Can't remember now.

Love your description of that beautiful kiss. It was like rain meeting the desert sands.👏

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Posted: 9 years ago

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'Love' Such a wonderful feeling!!! It fills you with so much of strength but it also makes you weak. It makes you feel as if you are at the top of the world but it also makes you insecure and think illogical. So Swara and Sanskar both misunderstood each other. She thought he is pitying her and he thought she is rejecting him. They still have a long way to go.

The day started so blissfully but ended with such despair.

"Ever has it been that love knows not its own depth until the hour of separation" (by Kahil Gibran) Some how I felt that this line fits here. I had a feeling that we are slowly and steadily heading towards separation. In a way I was relieved that Sanskar did not or I should rather say could not fill Swara's maang with sindoor. I did not want such a marriage for them ( though it is very dramatic ). In fact I want, no not want but wish a clear understanding between these two, that how much they love each other without an iota of doubt in anyone's mind or heart when they get married. They should be so in sink with each other's psych that they could read each other's thought without uttering a word; and also with the blessing of the entire family. A joyous event not a compromising one.

Overhearing those soldiers and Adarsh was a reality check for Swara, wasn't it? Poor Swara !!! And poor Sanskar!!!

Aur waise bhi, hume agar koi cheez aasaani se mill jaaye to hume uski kadar nahi hoti,lekin agar hume use kismat se, samaaj se aur pariwar se lad jhagad kar hasil ho to hum use zindagi bhar sambhaal kar rakhten hain, yaa shayad zindagi ke baad bhi...

So yes!!!! Let them fight for each other. Bring it on Shruti . I am absolutely loving this!!!!!!!!!!

Would like to end with this -

Yeh Ishq Nahi Aasan

Poet:

By: Fazee, Karachi

Masoom Mohabbat Ka Bus Itna Fasana Hai
Kaghaz Ki Haveli Hai Barish Ka Zamana Hai

Kya Shart-E-Mohabbat Hai Kya Shart-E-Zamana Hai
Awaaz Bhi Zakhmi Hai Aur Geet Bhi Gaana Hai

Us Per Utarnay Ki Umeed Bohat Kum Hai
Kashti Bhi Puraani Hai Aur Toofan Ko Bhi Aana Hai

Samjhay Ya Na Samjhay Wo Andaaz Mohabbat Ka
Aik Shakhs Ko Aankho Se Aik Shair Sunana Hai

Yeh Ishq Nahi Aasan Bus Itna Samajh Lijiye
Aik Aag Ka Darya Hai Aur Doob Kar Jana Hai

(*Note- Shruti, nothing is more important than your health. So please take rest and get well. We all will understand if you do not reply to each and every comment. We all love you no matter what. And we all can wait for the next update however long it takes. So no need to compromise your health. Take your time)

Love ❤️

Geet

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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
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Hey Shru...🤗 🤗

First off, trust that your health is better, and that you are on the mend from the bout of flu and sore throat that have been so plaguing you.

I was so touched by the dedication, and your lovely weaving of my specially requested "chudi scene" into the narrative. 🤗 🤗 And, not being a particularly keen fan of either SRK or Kajol, dare I say that I found the scene in DK far, far more evocative than the one in K3G (I didn't much care for that movie, either---I know that might sound sacrilegious to some, but it was all gloss, no substance, no soul. IMHO, at least. The very opposite of our SwaSan---who are all soul, all substance, with a crackling, spellbinding chemistry to match!) 😉

More on that chudi scene later. 😊 Before that, I wanted to say how apt the title was---"The Road to Renascence". And tied in with the location, too--"Punarjatpur". 👏 You know that these little nuggets, the attention to detail is something I so like, tucked into the overall story arc. I was grinning to myself at the very start, even before I had greedily devoured the chapter itself. 😆

I loved the gentle, semi light hearted, yet romantically intense interlude this chapter afforded. After the gut wrenching intensity of some of the preceding chapters, this served as a soothing lull---though somehow, reading your foreword, I do suspect this might be the lull before a poetic storm hits them, and us!? (Note the accent on poetic, I know you'll understand what I mean). 😉

So like Swara to not take Sanskaar for granted, to not have the "entitlement complex" which so many young ladies of her status of the time might have been expected to have. It is a combination, I guess, of her and Sharmishta's circumstances when she was younger, as well as the intrinsically empathetic and generous soul that she is; that she does not want to take any advantage of Sanskaar's very apparent desire to buy her whatever she wants, at the fair.

And so it was, that though her eyes were caught momentarily by some of the fine fabrics on display, with intricate, delicate patterns; she steeled herself to move on after just a cursory glance. She was quite determined to settle on just the simple fabrics, wasn't she---she was so particular that she not make Sanskaar encounter any "outrageous" expense on her behalf. 😊 I liked the humorous retort Sanskaar made, that he might be a Prince on the run, but he had enough means to buy her some clothes and baubles. 😉 Its another matter, of course, that Sanskaar would take so much joy in buying Swara stuff that would make her smile, it is as much for him, as for her, no? 😳 When will Swara realize that her valiant chevalier would do anything for her---he would give his all, his whole self for her, so what does the money for a few items matter? ☺️

I liked the description of the turquoise colored dress which he picked for her (and though he let her apparently discard it along with the other rich clothes, wrapping instead the rather simple and basic stuff she'd insisted on picking out, I SO knew that he was having the other set packed as well 😉). Blue is my favorite color, and was just thrilled when Swara, in her turn, picked out a dark blue tunic for Sanskaar. 😳 He would have looked just dashing in that, for sure. 😉 And was there a hidden desire in her heart to ensure some symmetry there, I wonder---he had selected a turquoise dress for her, and here she was, choosing a dark blue tunic for him. 😳

Those little snippets of how much difficulty Sanskaar was having in controlling his potent love and desire for Swara, was romantic and sensuous of course, and in an odd way, very touching, too. How tempting he found her guileless gesture of nibbling on her lips when she was trying to decide something, her becoming pout when he was attempting to protest that the tunic she selected for him was too rich 😳 If only he realized that she would be very far from being disgusted, if he let his self control slip for the duration of a warm, soulful kiss.

I think on some level, they have both already started recognizing the undercurrents flowing between them. When Swara places her hand on Sanskaar's mouth, almost without conscious thought, to stop him from blaming himself again for the pain and sorrow she underwent, for example. Sanskaar was nearly overwhelmed by his very understandable desire to gently grasp her hand, to kiss her fingers almost reverently. And Swara was as keen to prolong that intimate contact. 😳 Something of what he feels for her has started making itself felt to Swara, though she is yet to fully understand it, naive and innocent as she is.

That set the stage beautifully for the lovely chudi scene. That whole sequence just oozed a feeling of romance, sure; but also the pure love and concern these two have for each other. That image certainly is an evocative one---a valiant, battle hardened, powerful knight so delicately and lovingly sliding bangles along his beloved's wrist and forearms. Checking all the while to ensure he isn't hurting her in the slightest. It was a wonderful template to fit in Swara's epiphany---and the best part was, that this was kind of like the crest of a wave, in a sense. It wasn't as if this came out of the blue, with no hints or signs in sight before. It was a gradual crescendo, at some level she had probably already become aware of how much she adored this man, and how much the fact that he cared for her so much, meant to her. The recent cataclysmic events they faced together, had only served to heighten her awareness of how complete she felt with him. And this was the perfect time for her to have those last shreds of doubt, of denial perhaps, get dispelled.

And the way she reacted instinctively to that epiphany---almost blindingly brilliant in its clarity---was well delineated. I could actually see Swara reacting in precisely this manner. After all, while some part of her heart and mind does know that Sanskaar cares for her a lot, is concerned for her, feels something for her; she is not yet completely certain of exactly what that something is.

That whole sequence of her trying tremulously to conceal her emotions from his searching, concerned gaze, was wonderful. She does realize, I think, that Sanskaar is attuned to her every expression, her every mood---and nothing of what she feels, could stay hidden from his searching gaze for very long. His eyes peer into the very depths of her soul, don't they? 😳 I felt like hugging Swara and telling her to join the dots from there---if the Prince cared so much for her as to read her every expression, surely that ought to mean a lot more than mere concern. 😊 But she would certainly need time to process what she feels, analyze her emotions (and what she thinks of his), in greater detail. And perhaps they do not have too much time before some new storm hits them...😕

I found the fact that her gold bangle with the Gadodia crest is now with Sanskaar, very symbolic. Shru, he is going to hold on to that like a talisman, isn't he, during the time of their (hopefully brief) separation? They are both going to yearn for each other with such palpable intensity---Swara would have the bangles and clothes he bought her to hold on to; and I guess Sanskaar is going to cherish that bangle as if it was worth more than his own life!

I feel quite selfish requesting another chudi/ kangan sequence after the one you've already so generously given. 😊 But I would SO love to read a scene (later, once all the clouds have been dispelled and their mutual love confession has happened), where Sanskaar adoringly places the Gadodia khada back on Swara's wrist; along with another one--bearing the Maheshwari crest. 😉

Sanskaar's almost primal, instinctive jealousy of his best friend, though he knew perfectly well there was no need in the world for him to feel that way---was absolutely hilarious! 😆 Looking murderous and almost as if he would want to strangle Pawan---🤣. All because poor Swara, in a desperate attempt to keep up some idle chatter, asked where Lord Pawan was! 😉 Of course, poor man, he and the other men were busy doing Sanskaar's bidding---buying all the clothes and bangles Sanskaar had selected for his inamorata!

Pawan and Veer are now the cupids for SwaSan. 😆 I just adore the pretty direct, almost brazen way Pawan sets about this task, with great gusto, too! The way he told Sanskaar so clearly that he, and all the men, could so clearly see Sanskaar was head over heels in love with Swara---priceless!! I think it might be perhaps left to him, to knock some sense into Sanskaar later---that Swara loves him every bit as much as he loves her! 😊

And again, that small scene where Swara feeds that sweet to Sanskaar, and despite himself, he really isn't able to resist touching his lips gently to Swara's fingers---was sensuous, romantic, tender. All rolled into one. 😳 And Sanskaar does realize that he affects her on some level---he felt quite pleased (understandable masculine ego 😉) at the way her breath caught at his gesture. In his case, he probably realizes Swara feels for him; but is not sure whether it is just an untutored, guileless response of an innocent girl, responding to the man who has been her protector in a sense. He still probably thinks she deserves a man better than him--at least, less complicated than him, with a future less in jeopardy and doubt.

That scene back at the camp, with Sanskaar surprising Swara with all the clothes and bangles she'd liked but rejected; was so touching. She was just so overwhelmed by the tenderness he'd displayed, the attention to her every glance, her every slightly felt, unspoken wish. And as before, she sought comfort and solace in his arms, and neither felt in the least bit awkward by their embrace, the way Sanskaar gently wiped the tears from her face. A testament to how much they belong with each other now, despite all their internal confusion about this.

The puppet show which the Valiant General/ Prince Sanskaar and his right hand, Pawan, put up for Swara's entertainment was so much fun to read about. Sanskaar would in reality, do anything just to keep that smile on Swara's face, hear her tinkling laugh ring out. Pawan laying down the terms and conditions of his cooperation---that he would play Mohini only if he got to bully Mohan---was too good! 😆 I think he only desisted from insisting that Sanskaar play Mohini's role, since he knew his friend would want to maintain his valorous image in front of the Princess! 😉 But they needn't have bothered, right? Sanskaar could play any role, Swara would never think of him as anything but the most valiant and powerful of knights.

And the ending---you ensured that they continue the trend of "sleeping together" that started from the time they reached the haveli. 😳 So understandable that Swara was still terrified by the foreboding that her nightmares could return. With the ordeal she underwent, healing would take some time. And who better to ensure those nightmares do not return, that she feels comforted and warm and secure---than the person she has now realized she loves with every fiber of her being? She implicitly trusts in his honor, and despite her recent trauma, she wants him right by her side. Her falling asleep, her being at her most vulnerable with him right next to her, is testament to the adoration and faith she places in him---I SO wish Sanskaar, in his turn, would join the dots there and realize what he means to her.

The way he earlier resolved to go back to his tent as soon as she was sound asleep, but then just wasn't able to help himself, was very moving. He feels they are going to be parted soon, and he wants as many memories of this heavenly time spent with the love of his life, to stockpile and cherish later. The way their bodies mimicked their already entwined souls---and drifted together, with Swara safely ensconced in her Sanskaar's protective arms---was a lovely image.

All in all, it was a lovely read, and I'm looking forward to chapter 22. After you have completely recovered, of course.

Loads of Love

---Viji

My dearest Viji 🤗

And you do it again! With your comments- you make me rather overcome so any response by me is definitely going to pale in comparison! Please ignore that but know that yours' and some others' comments are "soul food" for DK and me 😳. The love that you express for this story seriously stuns me and each time I read and re-read the comments often wondering if your really talking about what I wrote 😳. Can't say how much it means to me when you like it so much, given you know how highly I think of yours 😃. Re health- hmmm, still not great and am having to do some work from home today too as have stuff I cannot ignore

The dedication was much deserved- you did ask for that scene after all and from everyone's reaction to it, it seems it's been rather well received! I am so happy you said what you did about it in relation to K3G- as I said in one of my replies, I am not a SRK fan and whilst the time those movies were out they held their charm in terms of context, what you relate them to, memories of times with people you spent watching etc, I would like to think I didn't let the overdose of KJo "cheese" into my scene 😃

Yes!! I knew you would get the reference to Punarjatpur and the title! Yayyy! I just felt that this was sort of a re-birth for them, especially Swara after her horrific experiences and also for Sanskaar in a way as he too is being re-defined and without him knowing it as Swara realises her love, they are almost re-born in a symbolic sense?

This was a lull and I know you have read 22 so this def applies although I think the storm you expected was rather different and I haven't delved into poetry yet 😉. Very much liked the word play of course 😃

I just love women who are proud in that sense and don't want to just "take". I have always had the same- I never liked others paying for me and whilst I totally (contradictorily)dig men who would shower gifts, it is nice if the woman didn't expect them! Sanskaar indeed would do whatever it took and he did by the end of the chapter but as you say, for him, buying something that made her feel happy was so little but to her, it rightly meant a lot 😳

Blue is my favourite too- always has been forever:) Also as a Virgo my stone is sapphire so I have a particular fondness for the colour and its varied shades. The theme for my beach wedding was teal and white 😃. I recall we had this conversation once before about blue being our fave? And yes, I think sub consciously she too was attracted by the same colour range he saw her in, as you say seeking that symmetry there too.

I am glad you liked the references to Sanskaar battling his ever growing desire for her and his attempts to literally fight for self control and not give in. Oh of course if he were to make an advance in that way the reaction would very presently surprise him- and hope you will have seen the truth of this in the next chapter! I also think your wish in that para got granted now? 😉 I'll discuss more re your observations on their respective reactions/ realisations below.

Yayyy!!! That was my reaction to yours at the chudi scene. After all, it was written at your request and dedicated to you so your opinion meant a huge deal and if you felt all that come across, my work is done! I think exactly the same! It is the image of a really strong man who is so tender and takes such care over something that could be dismissed as feminine because it relates to his love. Also, there is an innate sensuality in hands as Lanny and I discussed and a simple touch can say and do a lot so here, they had an entire conversation like that no? 😳 I very much wanted the chudi scene to be more than just a nice romantic touch to their day, hence I moved the epiphany moment which was planned for the next day actually here 😃 I myself think it works better this way now! Yes, Swara is really at sea about the way love has hit her and she cannot analyse too logically- mostly when we are so so involved having objectivity is almost impossible, especially for her in her position.

This is slightly out of sync now but dealing with their respective feelings- you are totally spot on as ever. Swara does know he feels for her but she sees that as concern, duty, his friendship and whilst she would not acknowledge that even to herself, some physical desire. As a woman she could sense that but she doesn't see that it isn't just that- there is so much more than that! But how could she know? She really is unaware of her own power and she would never think she has him in her thrall so deeply. As for Sanskaar- of course he is far more worldly and experienced. But he has never felt this way before either and as she herself just realised she loves him, how can he know? Also he will never presume that- he thinks he is unworthy. The whole idea of him being anything but perfect for her is ludicrous to us all but to him, he would not be able to know this at all and as you perfectly put- he thinks she should be with someone less complicated and with less danger in their life I have discussed this in far greater detail in 22 but you will see exactly the thinking you reflected here on that- another example of the soul connect eh?! 😉😃

Oh fear not! I have plans for that bangle- why else would I make the play I did for it? 😉 And yes gosh- you are all a demanding lot! Ek scene khatam nahi ke another one is wanted 😆😆 Joking aside I love that you want to read more of it and asked 😳😳

I absolutely love strong rational men getting jealous, especially when the jealousy is utterly pointless as it is here! And I love how Pawan so knows and found it hilariously entertaining and rightly called his friend out on it all! 😆😆 Yes Sanskaar had help from the animal world and now a human has joined in too- mind you if they don't get help we will be here far longer 😆😆

Am seriously thrilled you liked both the surprise gifting scene and the puppet show. I was explaining that I personally saw one of these shows in Rajasthan when I was a very young girl - on a trip with my beloved Mamas and my cousin actually bought a set of the things with which he used to annoy us later 😆I thought that would break through to Swara- nice clean fun but effective hopefully. And yes, Sanskaar needlessly fretted about his "image". Swara thinks him in such high terms that nothing could topple him off that pedestal 😳, even playing a henpecked lover 😆

The "sleeping together" - ah yes it sort of became my need too to have that and I couldn't bear for them not to. I know they cannot continue that indefinitely but wanted them to have these to hoard the memories. Hopefully again some of what you think could happen with that in terms of Sanskaar seeing a bit more- happens in 22 😉

Am so so pleased that you loved 21 and will await your comments on 22, no rush whatsoever as usual.

Love you loads xoxo

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To all those sending me such wonderfully warm wishes for my recovery and showing such understanding for my delayed replies to individual comments- am so touched guys! You are all amazing! I will definitely reply but this means a lot!

Loads of love xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

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wat a gripping update it was first of all I would like to say to you first u tk care of ur health n then update we will surely wait for next updates but you have to take care of your health and now coming to update or was so wonderful n I truly cherished the kiss moment of swasan n I felt relieved after Adarsh knowing of Sanskar truth now but I am worried about swasan because of Swara feelings now
thanku for p.m. but plz get well soon

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Nalini Ansh

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Unresed on 58 shruthi🤗

Get well soon😊

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Originally posted by: bones123
Finallly here updating for 21...i hope the infection has abated slightly, and you are making use of the much needed sick leave !!
21 : Loveee the title of the chapter and the name of the place...very interesting twang(?is this a word) it has !! this chapter in its entirety was bubbles hi bubbles !!

How cute is Swara to worry about the expenses, but really liked that she's not in this full on entitlement mode (that would be more DDD wouldn't it :P)...and his response about having money even on the ru is equally adorable...hahaha...it brought an instant smile to my face..love this sense of normalcy he's trying to establish to take her mind off events from the past days. When her face falls as he picks the simple ones is such a great touch as well..hehehehe...bechari !! When she returns the favour by picking his clothes, it's just such a natural thing to do. Them settling into this nature of doing routine mundane things that couples would normally do...❤️.❤️.❤️.❤️.❤️.❤️.

Can I just say how I LOVE the way Sanskaar reacts to her in this chapter...☺️☺️☺️ ...JUST kiss her already !!! haaahaha..the effect she has on him...whether its her pout or her nibbling her lips...or her hands on his mouth...beta is gone totally !! he really needs to use all his self control !!!

That bangle/chudi section...☺️...there is somethign so alluring about how it plays out...can't really describe it (but when has that stopped me from gah gah gushing :P)..first off i really loved how you started with this scene..viewing the couple from the bangle seller's eyes and him giving us a view of the dynamic and undercurrent running between these two was fabulous...Sanskaar's protectiveness, Swara's intial jhijhak *the english word escapes my brain currently*, their taste for the much finer bangles and ofcourse the act of giving into Sanskaar's unspoken order that he would do the job of making her wear the bangles and it would be best for the seller's health that he stayed away. 👏

That brief nod to the scene from Moud with the bracelet and the crafty way that he takes off that one to make way for the new bangles made me smirk *I'm sure at a more poignant moment the gadodia crest and maybe the maheswari crest will make an appearance to adorn her wrists again and until then serve as her token for him ☺️*

HALLLELUJAH she's in LOVE !!!!! wheee...i think I've bugged you since chapter 8 about when she's going to recognize it herself...what an amazingly brilliant place to have her epiphany...the banal activity that had that charged undercurrent coupled with memories from her childhood bring her to realise exactly how much he means to her and that it would be the most natural thing for her to be married to him...to be that one lucky one...and make him lucky as well...seeeti bajao for Swara's realisation !!!

Her flustered reaction and then subsequent talking to herself about her situation is precious !! 😆😆😆...on one hand giving random lame responses to her prince who btw knows every emotion that flits across her face *but still refusing to connect the dots there*...and on the other hand trying to analyse her own emotions, his reactions and trying to hope against hope *Swara you totally needn't worry...the Prince is also Hook Line and Sinker...your initial gut instinct is true*

Sanskaar being jealous of Pawan is outright hilarious (jaisa veer...waise sanskaar :P) and her getting flustered that her one safe topic was causing him to be all cactii is even better !!! 🤣
So Pawan had to swoop in to make peace between the hotheads even though Sanskaar warns him to continue blending iwthin the crowd !! Prince S, you sorely do need your best friend to play cupid, because left to your own devices both of you would get nowhere :P Jai PKJ ki...Like the loyal friend he quickly gets to work and actually gets them talking...tho I think Sanskaar is going to pop a vein with all the random lines of conversation Swara is going on...!

Bromance thumbsuppp...brobubbles (???) PKJ had to finally knock sense into his best friend that everyone knows what's going on except the ones in question...love the banter between these two !!

Taaliyaaan for Sanskaar's chance pe dance...this reminded me of the Haveli scene, where he teases her about when she cared for him. Him being pleased at teh effect he's having on her is so impish..loved it !!!

Swara hugging Sanskaar was probably the best reponse she could give for his thoughtfulness at getting her those gifts and defi something that Sanskaar values way more than the gold that he spent on those items !

THAT Puppet show...omgaaad !!! 🤣🤣 ...Mohan and Mohini...dosti mein kya kya karna padta hai...poor PKJ...i remember this scene from Jhankaar Beats where when trying to play cupid for Shayan Munshi, Sanjay Suri reminds Rahul Bose of all that he's done...Duniya gol hai...aur har paap ka double role hai...I'm sure at a later point PKJ will extract commiseration for this mohini act.and he starts out with the script of the act first...🤣🤣

I think it was amazingly brave of Swara to ask him to stay. Such a touching reminder of how much she touches him and at the same time saying it in not so many words that if he's around everything will be fine ! And loved that he threw caution to the wind and gave into spending that time with her...next to her...being her guard...at the same time drawing strength from her presence. That these two gravitated to each other's arms was a wonderful image to end the chapter with. Sweetdreams they come...to those who sleep !!

Shruuu...loved the chapter...it was all Swara...all Sanskaar...with lovely sprinklings of PKJ...given the heavy duty preceeding chapters this was a very sunny read !! I know you hint at the impending storm and the talk of revenge missions and separation is threatening to cloud that sunny feel...but like Sanskaar says...Let's not do it today...until the next chapter...I'm going to bask in the romance that is these twooo...i'm sure whatever the circumstances...the relationship between thee two will only grow stronger and better...so not really worried about anything. SwaraSanskaar foreverrr...

jhapppies and papppies ^ double infinity as usual...mwaaah...

Hello angel 🤗

You do it every time- made me smile, feel happy, be touched and then laugh so much at some parts! This was the perfect pick me up whilst feeling the crappiest!! Thank you!!!! Infection seems to love me- not leaving :( Am working from home today and have to go in tomorrow as have meetings that cannot be shifted

I like women who don't think a man should buy them things and men who think they should 😆. Seriously though- I always see my Swara as really really full of self respect on so many levels so this was part of it. Haha- yes Sanskaar was diplomatically trying to say he's still rich 😆 Yes, totally it was meant to add that very "couple-ish" touch with choosing things you want to see the other person in 😳

I knew you would like Sanskaar's struggles to stop himself and hopefully 22 will help with some of your requests 😉

I am so pleased you loved the bangle sequence and yes! I very deliberately wanted to show them through the seller's eyes. As well as Sanskaar's stare to him to make sure he didn't touch his princess even to make her wear bangles as part of his job 😉 Ah yes, I do have plans for the Gadodia bangle of course hence it had to leave Swara 😉

YESSS- she's in LOVEEE!!! Ahhh yes of course you have been asking for an age! I had actually forgotten but now recall the various always fantastically phrased queries about the tube light coming on 😆 I did think that she should be thrown for a loop big time when she does realise and so she was. That is the irony of being in love I think. They are so attuned to each other's feelings and moods but on this one thing, they each will have a blind spot as after all how can they see the sheer effect the other has on them. They are there so mired in their own chaotic emotions that they cannot dare believe that the sheer overwhelming love they feel is mutual.

I just love the idea of men like Sanskaar- Mr I am so cool and all- getting insane with totally pointless jealousy and totally being blind to her random chattering being cover for something else 😆 Even funnier I found Pawan's total understanding of what was going on and not even trying to explain- just enjoying himself at their expense 😆😆😆 but still helping of course. These two idiots needed their genie 😆 The thought of Sanskaar popping a vein is classic! I so love that and totally see much more eye rolling annoyance coming on there!

Sanskaar taking his chances- 😆 yes the boy isn't that sanskaari as people think! He does manage a fair bit! I said to someone the other day that come on- he's managed to get her riding with him, hugging, kissing forehead, holding, and even sleeping in his arms- give the boy some credit! 😆

So loved reading your reaction to the puppet show! I haven't watched JB but I love that allegory! Oh and very random and totally off topic but I went to uni with Sanjay Suri's cousin! She was my flat mate- drama student! We were such friends and as different as my course was to hers, we had great fun with me being made to do a radio IV for her, her talking about the awesome classes they would have, watching films as part of her course- it was super fan for this lawyer who comes from a family of drama artists!! Sorry- digressed so much! 😲

That was exactly my aim with the scene where Swara asks him to stay. Sanskaar needs these signs from her or otherwise his code is too strong but if she makes him see she reciprocates in that way he will then not be able to stop himself. He has to know he's not taking advantage. And for her, yes, she had blind trust in him, she sort of had from very early on and why not- when your soul recognises its mate you just know.

Thank you loving this- it was a lull and as you'll have read the storm is hitting in the next but ah well- we cannot have endless sunshine- that does not make epic love stories no? 😉

Love you hon, mmmwmah xoxoxo

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Hi Shruti!! Finally unresing!! I'll unres both 21 and 22 today itself as I won't get time till 3 days then and I can't keep you waiting till then as I already have! So coming to chapter 21-
I just loved this once Shruti!! I loved it like anything, I tell ya. This whole chapter was dedicated to the fair and then SwaSan moments. Like the calm before a storm!

Of course, Swara would cling as close to Sanskaar as would be possible. After all the torment that she had to go through, well surely she would feel that fear around her. The older Swara would have surely done that. She would have excitedly run over all the stalls and I'm sure would have dragged Sanskaar as much as she could in her excitement. Aww!! So Sanskaar notices her looking an expensive dress and he wants to buy that for her. When I was small, I had a lehenga choli just like you described, deep turquoise with lots of embroidery and work on it. I'm heads over heels for blue (All the more after Sanky's blue t-shirt) since childhood so I used to insist on buying everything blue! It just reminded me of that.

'We don't need to hide anymore' well yeah!! As soon as I'd read this line, I knew she'll be reminded of how she'd been abused by that brute! And it came out to be as I'd thought. She flinched, but Sanskaar wouldn't like her spoiling this outing with him right? So Swara nibbling her lip has a dangerous effect on Sanskaar, uh? Poor guy! He's having a hard time controlling his raging emotions! Such a self-control!! I applaud you Prince Sanskaar.

These two are such selfless people ain't they? I mean honestly, however hurt they are, the concern is always for the other one, Or maybe as Sanskaar said in the show, Pyaar ka jaado aisa hi hota hai. Sanskaar so sweetly says, 'It makes me happy' Oh boy!! If such a guy asks you in such a cute innocent way, nobody can say a no man, and then the touch of her hand to his lips adds to it.! Cute para. Actually the whole update was too cute<3 'His delight infectious' I just loved this phrase, I don't know why!! Maybe I'm too insane, but still I loved it.

Swara hates parting for him and yet isn't able to name her feelings as 'Love' but I guess I shouldn't say this as she just did it in the next paragraph. You're so insistent on blue na? Do you also love blue? Swara in turquoise and Sanskaar in deep blue (Deep blue on Sanskaar is so lucky) Her pout<3 I can imagine how cute and dangerous it would be!! Poor Sanskaar.. But I'm sure Swara's choice would be just perfect because blue looks very sexy on our Sanskaar, in the show yeah but still!!

The bangle part was veryyy beautiful!! Shruti, of course Swara realises her feelings for Sanskaar but apart from that also the whole scene had been written so well. I read it and reread it<3 Such an amazing one. Swara has reluctance in wearing the bangles by the shopkeeper and her Knight comes and then, takes the bangles and puts them on her hand and I tell ya, this whole one paragraph when hamari Swaraji realises that her Prince Charming/ Grumpy is making her wear the bangles.

That gold bracelet with Gadodia written on it. Of course, how can we forget that incident and now even Swara is smiling remembering that. That was a time when she wanted to dash and run as fast and far away as she could and now she's trying her level best to convince Sanskaar to let her stay with him. Time!!*sighs* How slowly and carefully he makes her wear those bangles, with intense love and care for her, bursting from his lovelorn heart. Honestly, how can a man be so perfect? A perfect knight, the best saviour, an unconditional lover and the most amazing friend you can ever have. Now I wanna cry, I want someone like Sanskaar that is it!! There is only being single written in my lines...lol. Obviously dude, any girl would be overwhelmed with emotions and tears when a guy cares so much for her, as if worshipping her. The way she imagines, that Sanskaar's wife would be the luckiest girl in this whole world and then place herself there, finally realising that YES!!! SHE LOVES HIM!! NYMPH PRINCESS LOVES HER PRINCE GRUMPY! Whoopeee

Offo!! I now get what you meant when I reread the whole chapter again (I always do so before writing boring sagas) Swara feels that Sanskaar cannot love her and would send her away and therefore doesn't confess her feelings for him. There Sanskaar thinks that of course, why would Swara love him, when he is the one who almost destroyed her life (he didn't do so, credit goes to Ragini) So yeah!! Both are babies are in love and believe the fact that there is no chance of the other one reciprocating the same.

Puppet shows!! I tell you I love puppet shows, my first puppet show had been when I'd gone to Udaipur as a school trip and I was 11 and I'd shot that thing completely and just loved it to the core. This reminded me of that. The entire show that Pawan and Sanskaar had put up was too amazing!!! Swara would have laughed her heart out with Mohini bullying Mohan...LMAO!! Such a cute scene!! Loved it<3

Sanskaar is jealous of Pawan ROFLMAO!! Like seriously?? He knows how baseless that is yet he is jealous that Swara took Pawan's name!! Aoww Gawwd!! And Pawan says, thats why he looks so mruderous? Jeez, it was too hilarious!! Pawan directly says you being in love!! Guts eh? Man, otherwise the murderous glare that Sanskaar was shooting at him, I'm sure I would have kept quite mum. The ghevar part was again cute!! I'm gonna say cute for almost everything and you'll have to bear it, kay? No nakhre like Sanskaar!!

Aww...he buys so many things for Swara. Such a caring Knight!! Jeez, the hug was so beautiful, the way she threw her arms over him when her love for him was at it's peak!! Loved it and then she asked him to stay beside her again! She's scared again!! Poor gal. Anyways the udpate was amazing and CUTE!!
Will unres 22 soon, I mean as soon as possible!!
Love ya bearing me
Sakshi

Sakshi dearest 🤗

I still can't get over you making time for such wonderful and long comments when you have exams- hats off! Thank you hugely and truly for this! Please please don't stress about unres on 22 after this! I will totally understand if you can't unres till after exams- I love reading the take but don't want it to be at the expense of your studies:)

Sanskaar has ever been her anchor no on this journey so yes, she literally has to cling on to him to keep her moored and she did:). And he too needs that from her- it is solace to his heart too which hurts as he thinks he cannot have her and doesn't realise she is his already. You are a blue fan too? Blue is and has always been my fave colour:) I just said to Viji too that my stone is sapphire being a Virgo (like VK 😳) and I literally love every shade of blue. Turquoise in particular with its slight undertone of the mermaid green I love. My theme for my wedding day (had an English wedding ofc due to hubby) was white and teal:). I have loads of blue stuff and on the show too we always discuss the power of blue so it had to come in here!

Aha- yes, that line I wanted that and then you will see in 22 why I mentioned it here and showed what Swara felt to that. Sanskaar- bechara- his hormones are literally raging and the man seriously deserves a medal for his iron will save for his much needed "lapses" like when he sneaks some gentle caresses in.

Yes indeed- the beauty of their love is always that it is entirely all about the purity of their feelings and the absolute need to make each other happy, not thinking of themselves there. I love that you love the infectious delight reference 😃- as you say who can resist Sanskaar Maheshwari?!

I am so thrilled you loved that bangle scene so much. When Viji had origanally asked for it, I had a lot of misgivings. I seriously hate doing very cheesy and usually seen stuff and was worried that if I wasn't careful this could look like a rip off of one of our overdone Bollywood films whereas I wanted tenderness mixed with chemistry. I am so relieved at everyone's reactions. The nod to the scene from Moud was just to do that- show the literal progression in their journey so far:)

😆😆- I am sure you will get your Sanskaar! See you wish something hard enough and you get it- the law of the Universe! I have had this discussion before with some friends like Leki and Kavya amongst others that especially if you have suffered Lakshya type "first" loves Sanskaar is guaranteed 😆😆 But hopefully you can skip straight to Sanskaar and cut out the rest!!! 😉 Tathastu says me!!! 😆

Haan- exactly!! That is what I meant about their crossed wires- it cannot be any other way. I mean how can either of them know the real truth behind the effective facades they have built, combined with the misplaced but (I think) realistic insecurities they each have about themselves and their relation and the baggage they both carry So this sort of confusion had to happen.

OMG your puppet show story is freaky!! If you read some replies I was explaining that the whole idea had come to me from a memory of my trip years ago to Rajasthan with my beloved Mamus and one of them took us out where we saw one! And even more freaky- it was Udaipur!! We used to go there a fair bit- until a recent trip to Himachal, Rajasthan was my favourite state- something about Rajasthan calls to me at a primal level- I used to joke that for sure I lived there in a past birth! Back on track- and I was probably not far off the age you say!!! I must have been around 11 or so too!! Wow!! Oh and my annoying cousin actually made Mama (he always spoilt us rotten- still does actually!) the bloody puppets and then it was super irritating at home when he wanted to do those shows and us "cooler" older ones wanted to not watch 😆

I too found max humour and fun in Sanskaar's random and totally useless jealousy of Pawan. Its like- now she cannot even say anyone else's name without you freaking? She should do Sanskaar jaap only?! 😆 And Pawan loved this madness- it made his day to see his calm and collected friend so irrational! I am super glad you loved this part so much. I know from our TW exchange that 22 was a wrench but hopefully all in combination will make sense for the journey they have to go through 😃

Loads of love and luck!!

Shru xoxo

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