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Hey shuruuu😊😊

*Updated for Chapter 17*

I read it before pm
I know since long m not commenting as my exams are very very near dear...so cudnt make it...hope u understand my problem
but HV read the story and must say this piece of work is jus outstanding
what a concept dear...jus superb
I was feeling really bad for swara.
continue soon asap
love
isha

Shruti...dear😊

RES

It was really scary but when swara got that knife n hit him I got happy and relieved actually I had guessed smthing like this is coming BT didn't expect so soon this leach evil n all other abuse deserving devendra is gonna be so dead 😡😡 he will have to bear so much torture that he himself is going to beg for death 😡😛

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Shru,
What a chapter.! Devendra is truly a bas***d. I was hoping for some divine intervention the whole time I read this chapter. Damn, it wasn't Pawan! It was Bagri. Another a**hole! Your villains are amazing! What hell have SwaSan found themselves in.! Shruti, brilliantly written. Writing such scenes takes tremendous effort. You have truly outdone yourself here (again). The emotions you have brought in me as a reader of disgust, dread, hate, helplessness and hope as the chapter end should be a tell of how brilliant this chapter is written and how well your plot/storyline is moving forward.

SwaSan trying to distract Devendra from the other towards themselves. Devendra didn't buy Swara's act but took great pleasure in it anyways. *shudder* You know I absolutely love that this world has alcohol just for the fact that villains in stories end up just like Devendra did when they imbibe it. He didn't have his wits about. And Swara was able to give him what he deserves. I hope desperately that Sanskaar kills Devendra even though he is surrounded by soldiers.
Thank you so much for not ending this one as a cliffhanger before releasing Sanskaar. It was a balm over the turmulous chapter you have provided. Fabulous work Shruti.

Awaiting next chapters!

-V :)

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Shru, Shru my dear sis 🤗 🤗 🤗

What a heart pounding, hair raising, electrifying chapter that was---I wanted to shut my eyes at the sheer pain, rage and fear dripping off each powerful para, but I was powerless to tear my eyes away either. I wanted to yell out at that vile Devendra, curse out even worse expletives that you could print Prince Sanskaar using...but I had to hold myself back. Give me chance, Oh give me a chance, to knee that low life in the groin, I would make sure he was incapable of ever messing with a lady ever again in his life! I am talking like complete dismemberment of his well...you get the picture. 🤢 😡 Man, I hate him with such a primal, atavistic rage, you have no idea Shru. If I made Lakshya get pepper sprayed, stabbed in the hand and face scalded with boiling milk, you can imagine what I want Sanskaar and Swara to do to Devendra.

Two parallels which leaped to mind with your marvelous portrayal of this despicable, reptilian creature. Of course, no connection or linkage to this fabulous plot, what I meant is the sheer vile nature of the villain. One: Assef from the Kite Runner (Khaled Hosseini)---psychotic and sadistic like Devendra is. I still get shudders down my spine when I recall how he holds Amir captive and literally starts molesting his nephew (Sohrab) in front of his eyes.

Second: the suave, honey toned drawl of the utterly villainous Colonel Hans Landa (Christoph Waltz) in Inglorious Basterds.

Hats off to you for creating such a riveting, deeply uncomfortable and hackle raising portrayal.

If this was a movie, Shru, I would have howling out along with Prince Sanskaar, raging at that sadist's attempts to inflict pain on both Swara and Sanskaar through his evil, lust tainted actions. He is really a piece of work, isn't he---delighting in inflicting pain, even more than satiating his crass and base lust. We get a horrifying snapshot into his past, his delight in torturing small animals and inflicting pain on people weaker than himself.

And the person he referred to---as I expected in Chap #16 😉-- was Bagri. A Rathore double agent all along, who was trying to break Prince Sanskaar to get the secret of the key.

What stood out for me in the chapter, was the sheer valor, the bravery, the sterling sense of honor shown by both Sanskaar and Swara. True Rajput valor on display! And each was willing to take on almost unendurable pain, in an attempt to stave off pain to the other, buy some more time for the other half of themselves!

Swara, despite knowing full well what dishonorable and craven things Devendra was hinting at, with his coarse talk of "getting acquainted" and "becoming friends", went along with this heinous game of predator and prey, in a courageous, spirited attempt to buy Sanskaar time, to have some hope of freeing him from his bonds.

And Sanskaar, impervious and stoic to the worst beatings to his face and gut, recoiled in fiery rage at Devendra's torment of Swara. What a powerful wave of fury must have emanated from him, that dandy of a man recoiled in fear even though Sanskaar was securely bound! That one gesture brought out the contrast between the two men so wonderfully---one, a true hero, a valiant warrior who would do anything to succor the love of his life, the one who has seeped into his very soul.

The other--a low life, a bully and a coward, who only dares strike rivals when they are bound and held immobile, and attempts to force himself on a lady. 🤢

That whole stretch of Devendra mauling Swara, raking nails down her neck and arm, and even biting her near her shoulder, was so very painful Shru. Must have been a consuming, exhausting scene to write, and well done for conveying the sheer terror, the sheer loathsomeness of that situation. What Swara must have gone through, what Sanskaar must have gone through, My God, I literally tremble when I picture that scene. Swara, guileless and innocent, though spirited and brave, having to endure this unbearable assault. And Sanskaar, who would have been willing to endure any torture stoically to his own person, finding his very soul being wrenched apart seeing his other half, his only love, being manhandled in such a vile manner.

I shed quite a few tears for both of them at that point, and I decided that if ever I get my knees and nails on Devendra---well, Sanskaar wouldn't need that sword, I would do the killing---with my bare hands, to boot...

It was tribute to not only the valor of our Golden couple, but their soul connect too, in a sense, that Swara keeps her eyes on Sanskaar, trying to draw some strength from him, some endurance to bear this unbearable anguish and fear---both for what is happening to her, and what she fears awaits him. And that wordless gesture from Sanskaar, gesturing frantically with his eyes and face---which Swara, as we would expect, immediately cottons on to.

I was about to scream out in joy and excitement when she grabs a dagger and slashes that foul carrion eater's face! Why did you make her miss his eye, Shru? Why? Out of all the sterling, wonderfully written stretches in this chapter, I have this one minor quibble, which you will excuse me for, being my pal. 🤗 You should have made that slash of the dagger blind him, Shru... 😉

And then she snatched up that sword from that table and frees Sanskaar's bonds! Yippeee!! That was another scene which had me almost whistling and clapping aloud.

Those last sentences---about Sanskaar stalking towards Devendra menacingly, with a panther's gait, lips curled in a hawkish grin (almost wolfish, perhaps, in his steely resolve to punish him as his vile acts deserve?), but forestalled by the door being pushed open and an overwhelming force of Devendra's soldiers pouring in.

And then comes that Rajput valor again---knowing full well that they are hopelessly outnumbered, Sanskaar defends his spirited Princess, feeling a purifying, energizing course of anger, defiance and vendetta coursing through him. He would rather die a hero's death, a martyr's death, holding his love in his arms, protecting her with his last breath, till they go down gloriously taking down as much of the enemy as possible with them.

I can't wait for #18 to see what happens next. Will Adarsh and Lakshya arrive on the scene in the nick of time? They still think Sanskaar and Swara are traitors...but now that missing 4th part of the map is there in Devendra's room, surely they should have some doubts? Even if they still feel Sanskaar is a traitor, the question begging to be asked is: what is Devendra doing with that part of the map? And that sword too? Though Sanskaar grasps it now, it was clearly not in his possession when he fled the palace. Would they now assume that Devendra and Sanskaar were in cahoots? But then Lakshya knows that there was no love lost between them right from the old days...

I STILL feel Adarsh is in league with Devendra! 😆 😉

I think I have gone on and on and on. 😊 Just to say, I loved this saga, this epic. You have created a superb world, borrowing character essences from the serial, but pulling them into a superbly constructed AU. Love it, Just Love it. And I Live it, gloriously, delightedly, every time I read your chapters.

Loads and Loads of Love and Jhappis

----Viji