SwaSan Drabble: 'Mangalam Bhagwan Vishnu' - Page 7

Originally posted by: virman_superhit

Hey... Sorry for not commenting on your works ya... was busy... And did not sign in much.. But I am si glad to have signed in today and read your works... 👏👏👏

There are always a delight... loved your take on the current scenario more than what they are gonna show in the actual show.. 😆😆... i so wanted Swara to go back for only Sanskaar this time like in your story.. But it seems that the CVs want her to go back coz of the torture the family will face.. 😭😭..

Anyways... Coming back to your story... loveddd it... 👏👏.. Loved Swara, Sanskaar and Shomi in it... They were perfect and the actual way a normal person would react to such a situation.. lol.. Y will a wife leave her husband for something that her brother-in-law has done.. 👏👏.. as usual the story was perfect on emotions.. Hats off to you for that.. 😃... I wish you were the story writer of the show.. Lol.. We would have actually seen all your stories in reality.. 😆😆.. But they are a treat to read always...

Hate Shekhar.. 😡😡😡... He is stupid in the show just like in this story.. 😆😆.. Stupid and dumb.. and i wonder how that Dadi changes her sides so often.. 😆😆😆...

All in all it was a power packed One shot.. Loved their hug... In dreams still.. 😳😳... Love Swasan in all ur stories... they are my favourites.. 😳😉.. Keep updating.. please...

Thanks for the pm.. Biggg Huggg... 😃😃.. Sorry for the late reply.. 😭😭

Originally posted by: bones123

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Vijiii...

First of what a lovely piece...like I said yest, cathartic to read but highly utopian as far as execution on screen goes :P

I cringed through yesterday where Shekhar extolled his laado's virtues !! I was wondering if he confused Ragini with Swara in terms of who works for the sukh of whose house ! I was actually happy he got slapped *well maybe Lux doing it was overkill, but still he deserved a slap*

I <3 Swara, Shomi and Sanskaar in this !! They show Shekhar the mirror and so well !! Starting off with Swara's thoughts about how she deserved none of these and basically Ragini probably had some of it coming to Sanskaar asserting his right and finally Shomi's showdown !! brilliant fireworks...and sadly only in your story !! Shomi's conversation is amazing !! In few sentences she shows him exactly how poor a father he is and how he's conveniently gone back on all his words and time and again puts them on the chopping block...kudos !!

I have full faith that Shomi and Swara will shed tears...listen to Shekhar...shed some more tears...listen to Shekhar...shed some more...on and on until Ragini in her cuckoo post suicide life says jaa Swara go to that house...and finally Shekhar will be like agar Laado chahti hai toh !! This time and again sacrificing of the Bose family's happiness when opportunity presents itself is so convenient for the Gs...Ragini was happily maang teeekafying when Swara was sobbing on the old pillow covers ;)

Really a more brainless...spinless...everything less character I haven't seen...but hopefully like your Sanskaar and Shomi...they do have some terse words with him...and say dude...bus..kehdiyana...and make him stop holding their happiness hostage for the alabaster laado *zero hope from Swara*

Thankyou for making my day by writing this... :) 🤗

P.S : Technically lux and Ragini should be cell mates or asylum mates for all that they've done till date...i wonder when someone will make that decision ! 😆

Originally posted by: hasinig89

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Viji... 🤗 Thanks for writing this ...especially in this crap segments..

You very well described all the emotions of swara & her pain crushing between her husband & father...the newly wedded couple going through this phase is unbearable...

Shekar...brainless & Spineless creature...always thinks about his laado ki kushi , never thought of swara...never done any fatherly duty towards swara...i'm very that shomi spoke up for her shona...i wish this to see in show too..

Sanskaar...well now he has every right to meet his legally wed wife... I adore them both very much

My fav part...swara convincing her father but not hurting him..

Very well written...thanks a lot for giving us this & saving us from torturous feelings we were getting since yesterdays segments...

Keep writing..

Suhasini

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Shruti my dear...🤗 🤗

Hahaha you got me. Of course this is fairly wishful thinking darling. I don't expect this would happen in the serial, not so soon anyway. They will show Swara weeping buckets of tears, Sanskaar being all depressed and angst ridden, Shomi wringing her hands in distress but not opposing her husband firmly...and the list goes on.

What bugs me is, Shomi opposed Shekar's wrong decision in the past, so why not now?

Hahaha I don't not trust Swara as such yaar. 😆 I just felt even if she opposed her Dad, she will be circumspect about it, as any daughter would be. I would love to see her telling Shekar respectfully but very firmly, that she and her husband love each other, and haven't done anything wrong. They deserve to be together, so why part them?

I wanted to give Shomi the starring role in a sense 😆 As I really want her to show the mirror to her husband. That man is so spineless and gutless even when he is trying/ pretending to be determined and resolute. Arre yaar, he should learn something from his damaad! !!

Lots of Love

Viji

Originally posted by: sujoyricky

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Viji you just made my day with this drabble seriously i loved it from the core of my heart 🤗. I loved every bit of this drabble.

I just hate shekhar how can he decide anything actually i think he is selfish he was only thinking about ragini and not about swara.
I really felt bad for swasan

Viji you have written there painful journey very well when they were not together. Sharmista promising to her daughter that everything will be fine was very well written.

Swasan meeting 😳 i just loved that seriously viji you nailed it and their hug was awesome 👏

I like sharmishta when she payback to shekhar because he was needed to listen all this thing. By his wife.

Last part when swasan was going to their home was superb


Viji you just nailed it with this drabble 👏

Originally posted by: geetkumar

This is so beautiful. After seeing the olvs ., I was constantly thinking how long do Swara and Sanskaar have to pay for others misdeeds. Is it ever going to end. I don't know what will happen in the show. But reading this OS it gave a sense of peace. Kaash... kaash aisa sach me ho jaye. You have just penned down the heart felt wishes and hopes of Swasan's fans.

Thank you.👏🤗

Originally posted by: muktai

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Hi Viji..
How relieving this drabble is.
The way you penned down Swara's thoughts, emotions at her maternal place was so moving that I had tears in my eyes imagining that..

That was so unfair to Her...but given the way how biased Shekher had been from very start when it comes to chose between Swaragini, this was expected...But someone really need to put some sense in his brain...

And I am proud the way Sharmishta did that...She realised that it is high time she have to stand for her daughter and son in law...

They should not suffer anymore for others misdeeds...


I am in love with her portrayal in every story of yours...

Finally coming to our swasan, I have no words to express how beautifully you have penned down their dreams, longing, bond, trust and their eternal love!

Just loved this whole drabble!

Superb job dear!
Thank you for this and pm!

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Hey Priya...🤗 🤗 🤗

Thanks a ton for this lovely comment. I really wanted to write this drabble---I typed it out in less than 2 hours flat on Monday, despite having a presentation for Tuesday that I had to prepare. 😆 Just couldn't resist the cathartic experience! But yes, I agree with you---its completely utopian to expect anything like this being portrayed in the show itself. 😕

Its really high time Sanskaar and Swara took a firm stand with Shekar. I know they wouldn't ever cross certain lines with elders, they aren't made that way. But they can be respectful and polite, while at the same time being very firm, that they did nothing wrong; they are deeply in love with each other, and are lawfully married. Twice over, in fact---as the previous mariage was never legally dissolved. Legally ans socially, they are married twice over at least---and by certain ancient rites, even that first sindhoor marriage might be considered a wedding, though perhaps it might not have a cast iron legal sanction. But married 2.5 or 3 times 😉, irrevocably and utterly in love with each other, and still having to stay apart? Nonsense!!

I would SO want to see Shomi taking a firm stand to protect Swara's happiness, too. She has opposed Shekar's wrong, misguided decisions in the past, so why not now?

Let's hope! But I fear you are very right, the serial is going to show episode after episode of tears, agony and separation, till the point where either Ragini discovers she's pregnant with Lakshya's baby; or Ragini finally redeems herself, by insisting Swara return to Maheshwari House. Shekar will, as always, only listen to his precious, innocent as a wee lamb Laado!

Originally posted by: lucky.m

viji ...🤗

Loved it😳 👏.👏.kaash kaash aisa kuch hota SR main ..I am sure nothing of this sort is gonna happen but reading this made me utterly happy..you voiced out what most of forum members are feeling towards shekar ..😡😡.Good you gave it back to him properly through shomi ..khaleja thand hogaya😆

And the title ..Whenever I listen this Mangalam bhgawan vishnu ..in any of the daily soaps.. swasan spring in my mind juts like that ..the mang filling scene in temple

Can I say I love u for this unintended drabble ..much needed one ..🤗🤗🤗

Love

Lucky

Originally posted by: Nupur_5

I'm too much frustrated with the situation our SwaSan will go through!!!

Hadd hoti hain yaar! Raita dusre failate hain aur suffer SwaSan ko karni padti hain! Why? Every single time they had to suffer & bear unbearable pains bcoz of others mistakes, actions specially Sanskaar!! And this is happening again now!

Upar se ye Shekhar! Unbelievable creature! Why the hell he stopped Sanskaar from consoling his lawfully wedded wife? What the hell is he thinking? What is Sanskaar's fault? Why he is punishing Sanskaar & in a way Swara for the crimes Laksh & in a way Ragini committed? He should be grateful that he got a Damaad like Sanskaar who always not just supported Swara but her family also in every situation! Bt no he is separating these two souls who are very much in love & went through hell to be with each other & got married few hours ago after bearing so many pains!!!

I loved the way you potray Swara. She loves & respects her father & concerned for her sister Bt she took stand for Sanskaar & their relationship, sacred bond as well <3

Bt I doubt the Swara in the show! I know she will want Sanskaar by her side but would she protest against her father for insulting Sanskaar & forbidding him to come to meet Swara! After today's sgs, we know that Swara was crying & missing Sanskaar & he will come to meet her secretly and they will hug & console each other ( Thank GOD for small mercies) Bt I want Swara to take a stand & try to do something for her & Sanskaar!

Bt trust Swara, her most priorities will be her family (Which is justified) & her EHMPB!

I have no problem with her going Baadi after the wedding & staying there bcoz no person can't enjoy & spend happy moments when their family is going through hell & father got insulted, slapped in front of everyone! Bt I will appreciate if she think about Sanskaar as well.

I love your Shomi as well Bt I afraid she will also do nothing & will concentrate only in Ragini.

It's good that Shekhar is concentrating on Ragini & thinking about her when she is in mortal, life threatening danger - though she invited everything herself - Bt he should not neglect his other daughter and her happiness which he did before already!!!

Viji dear, love you for this (As per Sanskaar's rule: No sorry, no thank you...So love you) Bcoz I also needed to vent out!

PS: When it comes to SwaSan & that too written by you, can't wait for PM ;)