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Posted: 9 years ago

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Aww they are sooo cute n adorable their nokjhok was so cute 😊 i lvd it wonderfully written I enjoyed it a lot they r really behaving like lovers fighting n talking through window that was so cute lvd all the names they used fr eachother impatiently 😉 waiting for the next prt just joking tk ur time we will wait

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Shruuu

As you know I finished reading chapter 11 last night and went to bed with a smile :) I sat to write my comment on my way home on the train and happened to read today's WU and basically the plot and the precap just made me 🤢🤢🤢 and I had to read your chapter 11 again to put me in a better mood. *exactly how many times in one show can one person get married under duress, koi please batao*

Anyway back to the safe world of DK where Sanskaar is actually master strategist...

Blooms Amidst the Desert (this is seriously reflective of the DK vs. the show)

So much louveee for Swara's reaction...I was super happy when you said that your thought process aligned with mine in terms of how she reacts, but when I read it ...it was all together another experience only. I heart how she brushes away the improprietary nature of their sleeping arrangements and basically it feels like home to her. Her panic at not finding him and subsequent actions are superbly etched out. She's got to be kidding herself post this chapter if she pretends its anything but love...despite whatever excuse Sanskaar gives her to rationalize her dilemmas. (btw..curious to know what a closer inspection of Sanskaar's room would have revealed to her...me loves mysteryy)

The way her mind swings and plays devil's advocate to her situation is something so relatable. But woot woot for heart over brain and the fact that she remembered the right facets of his personality to aid in her decision to stay and wait for him. Through all the pain and the fear, the fact that his reappearance makes her heart beat so wildly and fills her with hope and relief is seriously like blooms amidst a desert...sookhi hui dharti pe baarish ki bauchar...superbly written. I love how you've evolved her character...from the first few parts where we barely got first person narratives but still could understand her base emotions to this part where every emotion is silently screaming and pointing towards where her heart truly lies. Kudos !!

Sanskaar...sanskaar...sanskaar...tch tch tch...*btw i totally expected a hug here 😆*...what else says relief than a run that culminates in a hug *holding on to that for the next action based chapter*...So the prince was quite foot in mouth and his actions quite threatned to undo all the progress they had made since their escape. In trying to protect himself from his reactions, he managed to hurt her...and when he realises that...his reaction to it is splendid. Anger can make you harsh, but I think the endearing part about him is he immediately understands the magnitude of his folly. But he's got a long way to go, because this princess ain't easy :)

She's hurt...he's feeling stupid...he tries reverse psychology...she further shuts herself in. Loved it...Afterall all, what fun if she agreed all too easily. Plus we got to see Sanskaar trying to make the most of all his faculties to get her to relent. His mistake caused him that easy companionship that they built...and I can feel him miss it sorely !!

Swara's heart is equally sly...she's pissed but still wants to see how he tries to pacify her...rejecting each attempt but judging him when he abruptly stops only for him to then pelt her with stones 🤣 Poor thing !!

LOL@ his attempts about labour and hunger and actually thinking she'll forgive him for one pail of water. Her reaction to it is priceless and his scheme is as hare brained as her previous attempts to escape !!

That story about Samkalgoonj...totally goonjofied to his experiences...what a master stroke...baiting her with a story that is so topical...and I guess in essence giving her a glimpse of his sufferings (unknowingly?)...but after such a heart felt rendering of such a magnificent tale, Swara had to agree. Afterall its not everyday where your heart melts and you get to visit such a beautiful place with a dashing prince...❤️

*Btw in my head i'm totally singing Do Dil Mil Rahe Hain...Magar Chupke Chupke*...once PKJ and Sushena and the other merry men are on board, it will be sabko ho rahi hai...khabar chupke chupke...

That last dialogue was so apt...and so glad he voiced what his real fear was...he cares for her...she cares for him...they've more or less said it in words. Now onto the next level...ahoy mateyyy !!

Absolutely wonderful update Shruu...i still ahve a smile plastered on my face. Cannot wait for the next part with the action, the dhamka, their deepening relationship and maybe PKJ... I think Swara fits right in with Sanskaar, and while they probably know it...it might need that external nudge to act on it. Totally counting on the dosts to do that !!

Thanks again for this update *especially Swara's reactions*...muaaah...

🤗

P.S : The nicknames...ROFL !! Prince Churlish and Grumpy...he deserved it for now...waiting for when it becomes somethign more intimate :)

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#303

Originally posted by: maaneetfan
All the updates are just so superb and amazing ...particularly loved chapter 11!!! The growing feelings of Swara and Sanskaar for each other are described all too beautifully but poor innocent souls ... They don't recognize it or rather swara doesn't but Sanskaar is fighting it tooth and nail knowing he doesn't deserve her after causing her so much pain ... Tho he doesn't realize tht right now he is the balm too of all her pain and she is slowly but surely falling head over heels for him too...

Can't wait for chapter 12 where u will take us with Swara and Sanskaar to Samkalgoonj...by the way tht love story was so beautifully heartbreaking...I don't wonder and dear innocent Swara being so affected by it!

Lotsa love
Tas

Thank you Tas dearie 🤗

So pleased you loved 11 in particular, was nervous about it! Totally right- Swara is more unknowing than Sanskaar but Sanskaar is very resistant to the idea for obvious reasons but neither is able to help their heart's call after all 😳. And perfectly put about each being each other's salvation without knowing it yet! Yes, I need to make a start on Sankalgoonj- a lot needs to unfold there and it will take a long time to write!

Much love xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: MysticRiver
interesting..well written..

Thank you Mystic 😃

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: Vini224
Hey Shruti
After reading chapter 10 ,thought would have to wait till weekend for the next update.
But you updated so quickly.

Thank you so much for that.Its becoming harder and harder to wait for the next chapters.
I guess I'm becoming very greedy.

This chapter was full of Swasan and just loved it.
Even if you write 10 chapters with nothing but Swasan ,would still love it.

Greedily waiting😆

Hi there dear Vini xoxo

Haha- I am an obsessed sort as you may have noticed! My work and other commitments get in the way, or I would write a chapter daily 😆. Thank you for looking forward to the next chapters so much! I try to do 2 at the weekends as at the moment, I am not able to manage in the week due to very long working hours. Ahhh- loved it that you said you would love 10 chapters on SwaSan if I delivered them 😳

Lots of love to you x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: Sanya17
Aww they are sooo cute n adorable their nokjhok was so cute 😊 i lvd it wonderfully written I enjoyed it a lot they r really behaving like lovers fighting n talking through window that was so cute lvd all the names they used fr eachother impatiently 😉 waiting for the next prt just joking tk ur time we will wait

Thank you so much Sanya, the encouragement really does keep me going! So pleased you loved it and they are both behaving like a couple already no? 😳 I have a pretty good idea what to cover in 12, but it's a hard chapter to write and will take me some time but hope to deliver it for the weekend 😃

Lots of love xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Dear Saku and Priya,

Your lovely replies genuinely bettered my Monday and will help in the week too! I am in my usual weekly hotel where the wi-fi is notorious and often cuts out mid replies, making the whole process of writing long replies very tedious! I will respond to you as soon as I am able, and am now thinking on some plot points for 12 so that it can be drafted this weekend. I hope you will forgive me a delay in responding as I want to make a detailed response? Thank you in the meantime for the comments- mmmwaah for them!

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Dear Saku and Priya,
Your lovely replies genuinely bettered my Monday and will help in the week too! I am in my usual weekly hotel where the wi-fi is notorious and often cuts out mid replies, making the whole process of writing long replies very tedious! I will respond to you as soon as I am able, and am now thinking on some plot points for 12 so that it can be drafted this weekend. I hope you will forgive me a delay in responding as I want to make a detailed response? Thank you in the meantime for the comments- mmmwaah for them!

Please don't apologise re :) No worries at all...do relax after your long day...and added bonus is chapter 12 plot points...why would I detract you from that 😉

Cyu soon :-*

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: bones123

Please don't apologise re :) No worries at all...do relax after your long day...and added bonus is chapter 12 plot points...why would I detract you from that 😉

Cyu soon :-*

Love you hon x