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Nynaeve

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Mallika-E-Zain

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Posted: 10 years ago

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It was outstandingly beautiful and amazing! Loved it immensely I tell you. The tale of Fire and Ice/ River was such a beautiful parallelism created for Sanskaar and Swara respectively. Sanskaa 's revenge being the fire and Swara's piousness and generosity being as calm as river and ice. Beautiful! The whole story was put into a ballad in an elegant way from each one's perspective.

Lakshya being the wind, that is how he takes decisions in haste and flows away and Ragini being the Earth, the one who bore a lot but isn't fire. She takes her revenge concealing each and every idea and very meticulously. Here again the parallelism was awesome!

I loved it the end as well both for SwaSan and RagLak! Beautiful👏👏

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Krishnabhisarik

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

The Ballad of the Elements

Fabulous!!! Dude, you are amazingly talented!!! I cant think of any word that can perfectly portray how good this is, so I'll just let it be.. Its just super-awesome!! Love love loved it!!

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 10 years ago

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It was outstandingly beautiful and amazing! Loved it immensely I tell you. The tale of Fire and Ice/ River was such a beautiful parallelism created for Sanskaar and Swara respectively. Sanskaar'revenge being teh fire and Swara's piousness and generosity being as clam as river and ice. Beautiful! The whole stoy was put into a ballad in an elegant way from each one's perspective.

Lakshya being the wind, that is how he takes decisions in haste and flows away and Ragini being the Earth, the one who bore a lot but isn't fire. Shetakes her revenge concealing each and every idea and very meticulously. Here again the parallelism was awesome!

I loved it the end as well both for SwaSan and RagLak! Beautiful👏👏

Dear Sakshi, (right?)

Thank you so much - I was so hesitant posting this - but then took a chance. Your words have made me happy beyond measure.

I was not sure about the parallels I drew - but most of the studies indicated that air and fire are masculine whereas earth and water are feminine - it was a little easier after that.😊

Nyna

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Mallika-E-Zain

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Sakshi, (right?)

Thank you so much - I was so hesitant posting this - but then took a chance. Your words have made me happy beyond measure.
I was not sure about the parallels I drew - but most of the studies indicated that air and fire are masculine whereas earth and water are feminine - it was a little easier after that.😊

Nyna

Yeah, It's Sakshi! Definitely your points are also correct and even the parallelism is also something perfect for all 4. That was what caught my attention, But it was brilliant. Loved it<3 And ur welcome but u deserved it😊

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: zoyazrehan
Brilliant!

Thanks - I am Nyna and do I address you as Zoya?

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Nynaeve

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Krishnabhisarik

Fabulous!!! Dude, you are amazingly talented!!! I cant think of any word that can perfectly portray how good this is, so I'll just let it be.. Its just super-awesome!! Love love loved it!!

Thank you so much - for some one who says they do not have much words - you have packed in quite a number of superlatives. I am thrilled to bits.

BTW - I am Nyna and how do I address you?

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 10 years ago

Nyna my dear Pal...🤗 🤗

This was so fabulous, so goose bump inducing, so magnificent in conception and presentation.

I know the theme is nothing similar, but the feel of the lines, the scale, the stylized narration, kind of reminded me of Rime of the Ancient Mariner, by Samuel Taylor Coleridge.

Loved your characterization of Ragini as the Earth, Swara as the River, Lakshya as the Wind, and Sanskaar as Fire. And what titles you chose---so very apt yaar. "The Lament of the Earth"; "The Song of the River"; "The Wail of the Wind"; "The Refrain of the Fire". 👏 👏

When I wrote the Elements series of OS's I conceived of Sanskaar more as an Earth persona, but I can definitely see how he has several characteristics of Fire as well. Water for me was Swara, and I was very happy to see that you conceived her nature as a River, too.

I had initially thought of writing an OS on Air / Wind theme, centered on Lakshya back then, but simply could not do so, as I had become too irritated by his character. I had concluded my OS series therefore with 4 elements: Water (Swara), Earth (Sanskaar), Fire (Annapurna), and Space( Durga Prasad).

I was just blown away (pun intended) 😛 by the beautiful way you wrote Lakshya into your "Wail of the Wind".

Of course, I loved the entire ballad, and I found your last lines (as pertaining to Earth and the Wind---Ragini and Lakshya), very moving, very profound indeed.

""Until the earth, makes true amends

Broken she will be, never to bloom;

The wind, as long as he still pretends

Only despair find in such dreary gloom.

But if they do persevere on redemption's trail,

Their dance, perhaps, time will tell, in another tale.""

Loved this piece so very much, Nyna. Looking forward to more.

Cheers

---Viji

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 10 years ago