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Posted: 9 years ago
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[=The.Lannister]Shru 🤣 Kaveri Roy to Kaveri Bai 🤣 That description of Kaveri's childhood...all the while I read it as Kavi's childhood Why must this woman be made Kavi's mom in the show😭 Why couldnt Kaveri have just been DP's dirty past & nothing more🤢
"Tears hardened around the heart help to form a shell that can defend and allow one to defend with ferocity from behind the walls." 👏 👏 👏 Amazing line!

OK I liked his way of working. SSM & RGM was all very Jeffrey Archer😳 Especially loved the coup with the MM thing. But just one question: if the audit trail is so clear wont her lawyers argue that she has been setup since a fraud would never leave such a clear trail right?

How good it would have been to see daadi, poti, kaveri rotting in adjacent cells Buddha taklu bich mein aa gaya🤢 tab AP ko yaad aaya ke ghar ki baat hai, swara ko jail bheja tha tab kya tha🤢


The Clifton Chronicles is an amazing book isnt it?


That part about life flashing before ones eyes when he is dying & then Sanskaar felt as if he was the one dying though the bullet had hit Swara...that thing brought tears to my eyes😭 This man is going through this trauma a second time 😭 Why are the fates (or in this case you!) so cruel to him😭


But even in all this I cannot help but applaud Ragini. Her target was always Swara I guess & she knew the way to get her out in the open was to aim at Sanskaar👏

Hey Shruti 🤗

Ah we have enough comedy on the show so I kept mine to Kaveri only and not to Kavita 😆. I am so annoyed that they weren't content with bringing in Kaveri, they had to drag Kavita into it too, gross!! Thanks for liking that line! I wanted to show why she was so full of revenge and hate.

Glad you liked the way the "coup" was constructed. I grew up reading a lot of Jeffrey Archer so I take that as a big compliment 😳. Hmm, I meant the reference to clear audit trail to mean it would be linked to her, not that it would be so conveniently obvious that it was planted that the lawyers would succeed in arguing against it. Also, it would be difficult to prove that the Maheshwaris could actually want to destroy their own company and so on especially as the house too would have to initially go. Plus in terms of lawyers, someone like Sanskaar would ensure the legal melee could be played in their favour too no?

It would indeed be nice to see those 3 get their true come uppance but see what you think in part 4 😉. The Clifton Chronicles is especially special to me and coincidentally I am a University of Bristol graduate and lived in the beautiful area of Bristol called Clifton (right near the famous Suspension Bridge) for the last 2 years of my degree:).

Sanskaar's pain is part of the spellbinding beauty of his love. What can I say, there is no epic love without angst and no one can truly plumb that sort of love that I want to portray between than Sanskaar. The trauma he suffers now will make the reward he has after perhaps all the more special?!

This is the Ragini that lives in my mind. The one on the show is ridiculous like almost all others but I see her as capable of so much destruction through her madness and delusion.

Thanks so much for the considered reply and for liking this xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Princess_Mansi

Hey Shruti

Happy new year to you
The update was just mind blowing
I loved Kaveri's monologue
Sanskar is a genius for solving the business problems
The whole update kept on on the edge
Ragini's game over
Thanks for the pm
Continue soon


Hey Mansi! I hope you will have a wonderful 2016. Thank you so much for reading and for these very kind comments, glad you enjoyed this part. I am happy people seem to have taken to the delving into Kaveri's psyche. Sanskaar is a genius in my eyes and it annoys me that they don't show this enough in the show. Yes Ragini got bested finally. Pleased that you found this gripping. I'm already well into chapter 4 so hope I can post soon:). Lots of love x
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Unreserved on page 2. Took a little longer than I anticipated.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: MusicAddict

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Shruti🤗. U din't know how much I'd been waiting for this one. Sorry, had been so busy yesterday so cudn't read and just reserved it. But it was awesome. Man!!

Kaveri and DP's past connection was well displayed I must say! That torment that she might have gone through, when se had been ditched was very well displayed through the best choice of words.👏
Lakshya and Sanskaar were in full on mode, must say. Of course what else do you expect from Sanskaar Maheshwari!😳
But still, the two brothers rocked<3. They were totally ready for anything Ragini says and they had all information regarding the secrets of DP and Kaveri. Cool huh!😎
The revelation of Adarsh's origin was shocking! I was actually expecting it to be Lakshya, No offence!😃 But Adarsh, as he's older, it definitely makes sense.

Oh my! U made Ragini, PURE EVIL (not that she isn't) but still man. 😃 That gun shooting thing was so terrific and a thrill. I knew Swara would come in between the gun and Sanskaar. Mera dil bol raha tha!
This part was very beautifully written.👏How Sanskaar was totally lost in Swara's anguish, pain and her eyes. The only thing that mattered to him was his love who had been shot and now was bearing excruciating pain and how badly he wanted her alive. So tragic and lovely and tearful yet beautiful. Oxymorons I know, but they perfectly suit here.

Waiting for the next!😊 Do update soon.


Hey Sakshi sweetheart 🤗

Thank you so much for your lovely comments, touched as ever by what you said! So very glad you liked it!

I just wanted to make it realistic enough that Kaveri would want to wreak such havoc on the Maheshwaris so that was my way. Sanskaar is definitely the key player but he could have done with some help with negativity literally gushing out from everywhere else so Lakshya had to finally do somehting good 😆. The show turning him positive really helped me and I might explore this type of Lakshya in future work too! I love bromances! I so wish Lakshya could be Stefan to Sanskaar's Damon?! No offence taken hon! Lots expected it to be Lakshya and that would have been quite obvious but I wanted to make it Adarsh deliberately. He also never gets anything to do on the show so why not eh?!

Ragini is so fascinating to me! I feel all the wasted potential for her in the show. I do think she descended too far into evil and I have often explored her being psychologically seriously damaged, which I think she is. Ah you guessed Swara taking the hit?

I am so thrilled you and many others have really liked that last scene. It was quite gruelling to make it all fit in realistically and then get the emotions across too without compromising drama or logic so am relieved it seems to have come across well. I loved the oxymorons!!

Three quarters through part 4, need to get sleep now as it's almost half one here but I so hope I can complete and post in the next day or so!

Lots of love to you xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sarra0

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Happy New Year

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Hope ur still having a great time, how was new years in america??

I wasnt sure in regards to reading about kaveri, however once i started i got into her story and u made it compelling...ur writing makes so much more sense then the show ever would with this and delves into wat wud drive her to b wat she became and she becomes relatable...it is always more satisfying when u can connect with a character good or evil, preferrably both because it gives u that very interestibg dilemma of shades of grey...sometimes life really does leave u no choice but to turn into the very thing u wanted to escape or not to become...

This wont b a surprise for u but i loved, loved, loved, loved, loved sanskaars machiavellian, devious set up for ragani...sometimes two wrongs do make a right...the one thing, not the only thing, but one thing i am pessimistic about in the show or am dreading is if ragani turns positive in the show is that sanskaar will take a back seat and all plotting and planning will then b done by swara and ragani or swaragani as they will b again and that does not sit well with me at all...already seing sanskaar taking a back seat and to get this plot point of kavita set up they already messed with him by letting swara being humiliated...

i liked here that kavita stayed dead in ur version, no time wrap needed 😆😆 and v can leave her to not only b at peace but to also b the pure soul that she waa in sanskaars memories, she does not need to b twisted into something else inc her so call death to create more melodrama...

Ragani i liked wud get a punishment in this, she was going to b turned over to the police, it bugs me no end when villians do anything they want and get away with everything...like in fridays epi of the show...just reading about it i wanted to shoot DP...they r all delusional...i liked her break with reality here..she has seemed so often to have a mental disrder or to b but a breathe away from a complete break in her psyche and become psychotic it was great to c that here, her wanting to shoot sanskaar to torture swara as all imagined slights r due to swaras existence made perfect sense in her world...aw swara pushed sanskaar out of the way and got hit...ooops poor sanskaar will have a lot of choice words to say to swara when she regains consciousness...ah mr perfect

I think i have gone on way to long...🤗 thats for fetting here and still being sane 😆

Looking forward to the next part...soon please...😳


Hey Sarra! How are you? I'm having a great time still, thank you and New Years was lovely- we went for dinner with family and then to a house party at my sister's neighbours which was great fun. Hope your 2016 started amazingly too.

Thanks so much for such a detailed and nice response! I am less than thrilled about the Kaveri track in the show and even less so about Kavita. I have managed to avoid Kavita for now but couldn't do the same with Kaveri so tried to recast the story as I like to do. Am pleased you find it readable and even engaging in that sense. Absolutely my point, if a character is well fleshed out, the negative positive debate is academic. In fact as a writer I have great attraction towards negative and grey characters.

Haha- we all love Sanskaar and a Sanskaar who masterminds things is so natural but compelling right? I am already disappointed in the wasted potential with Sanskaar in the show. They always veer off on stupid tracks and never fully exploit the characters they have. Even Ragini is the same. I see so many ways in which someone like Sanskaar should be taking charge and foiling plots etc which is what we did have a taste of, but now it's rather absent. I am so bored of swaragini sisters drama, yaaawwwn, I find SanLak way more engaging, hence the angle here.

I didn't want to deal with Kavita, I'll have to at some point I am sure but the track is already irritating me. I too never wanted Kavita to be other than a good memory for Sanskaar but of course I always knew too that they'd never leave it at that. They have to ruin everything.

Your totally right about Ragini getting her due. I too hate it that in the show they never show her really "lose"! Even now she'll get turned positive but she committed truly despicable crimes time and time again! What about that? What's the message?! Part 4 will tell you all about how and what happens to SwaSan in the end of my story and I hope you will like it!

Please always go on as you call it, it keeps me going to read everyone's comments! Part 4 will hopefully follow soon, already on the case.

Lots of love as ever xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sree...

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Happy New year Shru Di🤗 I'll be back as soon as finish commenting on Viji's fic.

Unreserved. Took me a lot longer than I anticipated. 😕
But i'm finally here😃

I really enjoyed how you created Kaveri's character, as though we are seeing her from her eyes itself. It was beautifully crafted with immense thought. I did have an inclination that perhaps Kaveri would be Dp's ex but she being Kavita's foster mother, no way. Wow. You did put in a lot of twists and turns there.

I loved the lighthearted SwaSan scene in Swara's room at the Baadi. While the complete fic is kind of dark, deep and fully loaded with drama, this was a refresher.

I remember you telling how you were writing a script for a telly show. I'm sure it is going to be a brilliant success. This piece was full of drama but sensible as well. so if your script is anywhere close to something like this, you definitely have one promised viewer and fan.

I loved the tennis match😆😆 How the ball kept on landing in the opposite court every now and then. The Adarsh's parentage drama was shocking to some extent as well. You kept me hooked till the very end.

I knew Swara was going to be shot as soon as Ragini got the gun out. And I can't wait to kill you after you upload the next part for leaving at this nasty cliffhanger. Just because you are writing a SwaSan fic, with its next part titled 'Rewarded' I am hoping all is well.

Happy New Year once again. Hope you are having an amazing time with your family.
Lots of love

Sree
P.S. Be ready to die 😆😆


Happy new year to you too little sis 🤗

I was so happy to see the quick res and thank you so much for coming back with such lovely feedback! I am so glad people are relating to the Kaveri monologue. Yes it's totally from her perspective and as the later sections indicate, a lot of it is as delusional as Ragini but hopefully shows why she would do what she did. Ah, see I didn't want Kavita to be alive in this but as the track is now already about her, I decided to perfunctorily include her and dispense with her that way. Plus didn't want her to be Kavita's birth mom either so slight twist there.

I felt we would need some lightness bedore what was to come so glad you savoured that little respite.

Awww thank you so much for the encouragement about the script. It's a joint effort with someone else whose input I hugely value and I like to think it contains enough drama but also focuses hugely on characters and makes the drama believable and logical. It's some way off getting copyrighted but fingers crossed and nice to know we have a viewer already lined up 😳

Haha, it was like a ping pong tournament I guess! Yes Adarsh was my way to do something slightly unexpected and made sense to me as I didn't want to show that DP had an affair post marriage for this one.

Ah you too knew the Swara angle?! Aha! I'm going to have to get cover 😆. I'm hoping I'll run off whilst your distracted with part 4. Am now getting nervous about part 4! Expectations can be worrying! I hope I meet the expectations! Will pm you on part 4 of course!

Much love xoxoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank you to all those who have been kind enough to comment so far! I believe I have now replied to each current comment but if I missed any please do shout! I'm working on part 4 so hope it won't be too much longer.
Lots of love to you all, so appreciate the support!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11


Hey Sakshi sweetheart 🤗

Thank you so much for your lovely comments, touched as ever by what you said! So very glad you liked it!

I just wanted to make it realistic enough that Kaveri would want to wreak such havoc on the Maheshwaris so that was my way. Sanskaar is definitely the key player but he could have done with some help with negativity literally gushing out from everywhere else so Lakshya had to finally do somehting good 😆. The show turning him positive really helped me and I might explore this type of Lakshya in future work too! I love bromances! I so wish Lakshya could be Stefan to Sanskaar's Damon?! No offence taken hon! Lots expected it to be Lakshya and that would have been quite obvious but I wanted to make it Adarsh deliberately. He also never gets anything to do on the show so why not eh?!

Ragini is so fascinating to me! I feel all the wasted potential for her in the show. I do think she descended too far into evil and I have often explored her being psychologically seriously damaged, which I think she is. Ah you guessed Swara taking the hit?

I am so thrilled you and many others have really liked that last scene. It was quite gruelling to make it all fit in realistically and then get the emotions across too without compromising drama or logic so am relieved it seems to have come across well. I loved the oxymorons!!

Three quarters through part 4, need to get sleep now as it's almost half one here but I so hope I can complete and post in the next day or so!

Lots of love to you xoxo


Vampire Diaries??😃 Man, we have so much in common Shru! I feel so great😊. Defintiely. Love SanLak. I hope they are well shown in the show as well. Yeah Adarsh deserves a role too. He's the second Ram Prasad in the show.
Oxymorons fascinate me. I love using them and this one was perfect. 😉
Do have a good sleep and belated Happy New Year 2016🤗



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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11


Happy new year to you too little sis 🤗

I was so happy to see the quick res and thank you so much for coming back with such lovely feedback! I am so glad people are relating to the Kaveri monologue. Yes it's totally from her perspective and as the later sections indicate, a lot of it is as delusional as Ragini but hopefully shows why she would do what she did. Ah, see I didn't want Kavita to be alive in this but as the track is now already about her, I decided to perfunctorily include her and dispense with her that way. Plus didn't want her to be Kavita's birth mom either so slight twist there.

I felt we would need some lightness bedore what was to come so glad you savoured that little respite.

Awww thank you so much for the encouragement about the script. It's a joint effort with someone else whose input I hugely value and I like to think it contains enough drama but also focuses hugely on characters and makes the drama believable and logical. It's some way off getting copyrighted but fingers crossed and nice to know we have a viewer already lined up 😳

Haha, it was like a ping pong tournament I guess! Yes Adarsh was my way to do something slightly unexpected and made sense to me as I didn't want to show that DP had an affair post marriage for this one.

Ah you too knew the Swara angle?! Aha! I'm going to have to get cover 😆. I'm hoping I'll run off whilst your distracted with part 4. Am now getting nervous about part 4! Expectations can be worrying! I hope I meet the expectations! Will pm you on part 4 of course!

Much love xoxoxo



Thank you for not resurrecting/ rebirth/ hamshakal Kavita. I'm so glad you didn't go in for that angle, yet there was a Kavita connection. So tired of unbelievable/ unrealistic twists.

Sometimes I forget Adarsh is DP's son😆

Waiting for your PM!!!

XOXO
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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing amazing amazing...amazing Shruti its sooo amazing really hats off to u. How u write so beautifully i was impressed already now... really u mk me speechless n i m not able to tell how it feels to read ur work. U write as if u r going through those emotions urself. Such a work really u r my ideal my fav writer. lots of luv n plz continue

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