Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Jazz 🤗
Firstly thank you so much for mentioning my OS and even more so for the dedication. I was so pleased you did post your take after I read your comment on Resolved. I know you say you don't do intricate plots but this was actually very nicely done. It had the right twist in it and was very well etched out to be convincing enough to be either real or a very tantalising dream, which is of course what it turned out to be. I did a dream kiss in my Comprehensions Series and I think when emotions are so powerfully involved as they are with SwaSan, a dream like this is so gripping! Also kudos for writing this with such finesse, it was erotic but not vulgar in the slightest. I know how incredibly hard it is to do that as when I wrote Zenith (don't know if you read it?) I was prettified once I posted it so I really related to your description of how confused you felt after posting!
But you don't have anything to fear. This is very well done IMO. As with your other work I've read, you have a real descriptive flair and there were some real gems here. I especially liked the description of Sanskaar as a fallen angel and also liked that whilst a dream, it was so vivid to Swara that she even felt some of Sanskaar's feelings, but still enough of course stayed hidden to make this her dream and not an actual encounter. I like the idea too that with this, in her mind, Swara has truly decided to become Sanskaar's wife in every sense and even more importantly, to actually long for him in this way too, which of course is so important too for them.
I would write longer but have been travelling literally for 11.5 hours so need to desperately crash but wanted to pen these thoughts as I just read! Thank you again for acknowledging me, really touched by that and great job!
Lots of love always, Shru X
Ma'am...you made my day brighter earlier today...It's past 10 pm... back home at last, whole morning was spent at a office 'without color' that's how I felt but late evening, I had good time, 1st party of the holiday season...hallelujah!
Reading your feedback, I felt good, moreover on your holidays too...Sanksar is such a strong character (I have not watched the last 3 episodes, just read the reviews, but now I'm wondering if the CVs are trying to butcher his character...that's another discussion) that anyone who has any relationship with him, will most certainly miss him...for me, if we are close to a person, the person's character will rub on to us, we can actually read them, preempt their moves...that's how I felt for the SwaSan characters...even if Swara was blabbing it as 'friendship' but both could read each other well...
Hence, my attempt to make swara sense some of Sanskar's feelings. I wrote and re-wrote many times to get it the way I wanted. I'm relieved that I was able to project it out, as you called out that particular emotions in the dream... I have done such work in college but let it go these past years, concentrating more on business writing. Just wanted to try it out again...language grows when we experiment...
You are absolutely right; for Swara to even think about Sankar in such a manner, she is ready to exercise her rights as his wife...that's my take...
You my lady... did a super job with that Resolved OS...a continuation would be super good...
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