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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: simsen23
Mistry queen...a lot of things r to be opened...one part m cler about swra's father...n mom...father is so cruel n poor mom..hmm...waiting fr ur next update..

Thanks a lot dear😊 Yes, cruel father, poor mother,

I'll update soon!😃

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#102

Originally posted by: manishasatpathy
lovely update!! and i loved the urgency with which sk wanted to meet that girl :)

Thanks dear😊

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jisa

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Posted: 9 years ago

#103

the story is building.. :3
interesting..!!

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Swathy

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Posted: 9 years ago

#104

Ok so am confused and why sharmista appears to be living a normal life if her daughter is facing a murder trail..

i get her good for nothing husband belives her daughter to be culprit ..

but if she dont belive it she shouldnt be like this

and if she belives her daughter have done the deed and she dont care about her daughter why ask if sanskar can save her...

Keep writing dear

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Res 😊 you know I never like commenting on your works from my phone...will do so properly from lappie tomorrow.
But in meantime, wanna say I'm just loving the first person narrative flow. 👏

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Very nice chapter, Saku. I find that in mystery novels, chapters like this one set the pace for what comes later, the intrigue, the clues, the enumeration and examination of suspects and witnesses, the unraveling of the plot. The beginning chapters set the tone, the frame really, within which the portrait then emerges.

And I liked this chapter a lot from that standpoint--all the more so, since being written in the first person, the reader kind of got a glimpse into the way SK's mind ticks.

The way you have described Swara not wanting her mother to talk to the lawyer, almost resigned to accepting her fate, coolly accepting the blame for a crime she didn't commit; reminded me of a fantastic side plot in the Agatha Christie Novel "Towards Zero".

There's a side plot there which has a very profound study of why people sometimes confess to crimes they haven't committed. If you haven't read this book yet, I heartily recommend you do so.

And I can imagine SK meditatively saying one of my favorite quotes from that book (which I referred in my Old Sins Cast Long Shadows TS as well):

""When you read the account of a murder - or, say, a fiction story based on murder - you usually begin with the murder itself. That's all wrong. The murder begins a long time beforehand. A murder is the culmination of a lot of different circumstances, all converging at a given moment at a given point. [...] The murder itself is the end of the story. It's Zero Hour.""

I am gleefully rubbing my hands now, imagining SK applying his formidable mind to cracking the circumstances that resulted in the crime itself! 😛

Liked the deft asides you have given us about the characters of Shekar and Shomi. Shekar is a spineless, brain dead waste of space as usual, a poor excuse for a father. He doesn't seem to care that his daughter could be facing the death penalty or life in prison.

And Shomi, well, she does love her daughter, and wants what is best for her. But she has buried that hope deep since it appears she doesn't want to rock the boat with her husband. She's not as strong as the Shomi in the serial? Or is that a fake thread in the initial chapters which you are going to change with a sleight of hand later? 😉

BTW, I am a huge fan of the Erle Stanley Gardener novels, so I am imagining SK as having the smarts and the daring of Perry Mason; Vic being the efficient investigator & sidekick like Paul Drake. Swara has to fill the slot of Della Street, though she's the defendant here and not SK's girl friday/ secretary. 😊 Maybe she will become that after he exonerates her, for future adventures!!

Looking forward to the next chapter, Saku!

Waiting for Chap 3...

Thanks Viji...your long comments never fail to thrill me. Coming to the Zero hour idea that is something I absolutely agree with. Thanks for the recommendation, I will read it ASAP!

You have recognized Shekar and shomi to the last grain they have to offer. Yes, Shekar is kind of a spineless, stubborn and rude man and Shomi, simply don't want her marriage spoiled.

Thank you so much for imagining such great things...I'm a fan too. Looks like we have many things we agree on.

I will post chapter three shortly. Thanks again!😊

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#106

Originally posted by: jisa
the story is building.. :3
interesting..!!

Thanks dear😊

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#107

Originally posted by: swa291
Ok so am confused and why sharmista appears to be living a normal life if her daughter is facing a murder trail..
i get her good for nothing husband belives her daughter to be culprit ..

but if she dont belive it she shouldnt be like this

and if she belives her daughter have done the deed and she dont care about her daughter why ask if sanskar can save her...
Keep writing dear

Shermishta is pressurized in to it by her husband and family, she's not a strong woman here.

But she does want Sanskar to save her, that is her personal wish at the moment.

Thanks dear!😊

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Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#108

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#109

Res 😊 SK has oodles of the Perry Mason flair & smarts 😊 Loving it!

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Two paras stood out for me from this subtly dramatic chapter. The first was this:

""People who don't love themselves can't love anyone else,' I say bitterly. I don't know what your problem is, who you're saving, or what you're trying to escape from... But this isn't brave Miss Gadodia, this is foolish and weak.'""

Wow---this is so, so true. I don't get how serials always portray the admirable heroine as an ever suffering, doormat type character afflicted with a martyr complex. There is nothing wrong with having a spine, taking care of one's own interests too, along with being concerned about other people. Selflessness and empathy need not come at the cost of taking the basic needed care of oneself!

Speaking of SK here, who was he thinking of, I wonder, when he said those words? His mother, about whom he had such fond memories of his childhood, her gentle lullabies soothing him to sleep? Was she unable to have that needed level of self respect, and did that drive her into seclusion, away from her son?

And the other sentence which struck me was the one towards the end, where Sanskaar can't help but feel concerned for Swara, and starts stroking her hair when she's weeping. She looks at him, trying to gauge the meaning of his actions, and he thinks, good luck with deciphering that, because he himself is not sure what he is feeling! 😊 Loved that imagery about the wall between them cracking a wee bit, so he can see the darkness on her side, and she can see the light on his; and they could communicate across that gap, if only she could trust him. Very powerful, very evocative imagery there.

Going back a bit, my heart ached for Swara when she asks Sanskaar to tell Shomi that she misses her; but then tells him not to tell her anything after all, since she probably does not want Shomi to worry further about her.

Durga Prasad coaching the already conniving Ragini on what to say in the witness stand. 😡 Man, some people...and Lakshya is as reptilian as ever, prosecuting a case in which his ex fiance stands accused of a crime possibly entailing the death penalty. Does this man have a heart? Or a brain? Or a liver? My answer would be none of the above! 😆

Looking forward to the next chapter, Saku dear!

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago