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foresight

@foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#451

Originally posted by: JazzyM
The twist and turns...this is like reading a thriller. So, it was Adrash all the time. Beautifully written...
Loved how you made Sanskar all calm and steady even under threat! Cool!

😳 😳 😳

thanks so much for your wonderful words...🤗

sanskar is strong enough to take the risk when it is just him...he just gets worried when swara comes into picture, because he cannot ever take a risk with her 😳

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naina

@hp_2006

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Posted: 9 years ago

#452

Oh wow..!!!👏sapnaa what a climax to this wonderful story yaar😃

so it was adarsh all along..😆 never ever suspected him😛

but this update was brilliant yaar..i have no words..😲😊

lakshya..what was the need to come with a gun..

now swara and ragini have been shot i guess..??😲😭

what will happen now..i am really afraid..

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maaneetfan

@maaneetfan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#453

Laksh!! The red herring!!!

So it was adarsh all along!! Hell, i did think of him at one point but then wondered why would he be instrumental in saving sanskaar but u covered tht part too...

I did wonder how laksh would be helping ragini coz tht would mean he didnt really love swara And he would hv to hv known tht sanskaar was coming bck but no1 knew abt it so...

So how had adarsh planned to react in the board meeting...he couldnt hv known laksh would get a gun ...so he just took a chance when he got it??

Who got shot?? Sanskaar and ragini??? Or did someone come btwn sanskaar too????

Ooh u need to update asap now...too many questions! !!

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Anglaise

@Anglaise

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Posted: 9 years ago

#454

Sapna 🤗
Oh god! Finally!! It was Adarsh!
Really unexpected.!
Superb upxate dude.
Durgaprasad leaded him to think and act in such a way! 😡 Why this guy want to create hatred and enimity within siblings?!
Oh god What will happen to Swaragini?hpe they sound safe. Will Ramprasad save them and end up?!plz update soon re!
! Hop d gun hav no bullets! 🤣
BTW apt title name girlie 😳
Awesome Update dear. TC 🤗

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foresight

@foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#455

Originally posted by: hp_2006
Oh wow..!!!👏sapnaa what a climax to this wonderful story yaar😃
so it was adarsh all along..😆 never ever suspected him😛
but this update was brilliant yaar..i have no words..😲😊
lakshya..what was the need to come with a gun..
now swara and ragini have been shot i guess..??😲😭
what will happen now..i am really afraid..

thanks so much Naina 🤗...glad it was a surprise for you

what to say about laksh 😆 😆

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foresight

@foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#456

Originally posted by: maaneetfan
Laksh!! The red herring!!!
So it was adarsh all along!! Hell, i did think of him at one point but then wondered why would he be instrumental in saving sanskaar but u covered tht part too...

I did wonder how laksh would be helping ragini coz tht would mean he didnt really love swara And he would hv to hv known tht sanskaar was coming bck but no1 knew abt it so...

So how had adarsh planned to react in the board meeting...he couldnt hv known laksh would get a gun ...so he just took a chance when he got it??

Who got shot?? Sanskaar and ragini??? Or did someone come btwn sanskaar too????

Ooh u need to update asap now...too many questions! !!

yup!! it was adarsh all along...you did get a inking about him before then 😃..you were right, laksh would have never helped ragini with the drugs to hurt swara. adarsh had some plans of his own going on in terms of getting the property, but remember DP sprung the surprise on him just that morning and then laksh got the gun to help him fast track his plans...

who got show...you will know soon 😃 😳

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foresight

@foresight

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Posted: 9 years ago

#457

Originally posted by: Anglaise
Sapna 🤗
Oh god! Finally!! It was Adarsh!
Really unexpected.!
Superb upxate dude.
Durgaprasad leaded him to think and act in such a way! 😡 Why this guy want to create hatred and enimity within siblings?!
Oh god What will happen to Swaragini?hpe they sound safe. Will Ramprasad save them and end up?!plz update soon re!
! Hop d gun hav no bullets! 🤣
BTW apt title name girlie 😳
Awesome Update dear. TC 🤗

thank you thank you thank you amie 🤗

durga prasad and his impact...what can i say, some of it will be revealed in the next one. but yes, he pushed adarsh by sidelining him and declaring sanskar as the heir

haha...the guns do have bullets...who gets hurt...hmm you will know soon.

thanks amie 🤗

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#458

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I loved this chapter, Sapna. A lot of ground covered, and you've done full justice to the various bits.

The Swara--Sanskaar scene at the hospital, where he told her he knew exactly how worried and bereft she felt at the thought of losing him---since that was what flashed through his mind, when Adarsh was trying to shoot her---man, that was awesome. 😳 It was a very poignant moment, when he said he was finally free of the ghosts of his past, and could freely move forward with Swara.

The Durga Prasad--Sanskaar interaction, a cautious, probing rapprochement was very deftly handled. It felt so realistic: having fought no holds barred for so long, its not possible to go back to how things were, just because one realizes many of one's assumptions were mistaken. You've made your Sanskaar sound so very sensible, mature and grounded. I think I've told you this before: The Sanskaar on the show is awesome (VK absolutely nails the role), but I dare say, he would love to play your Sanskaar, a tad bit more than the one he's playing now. Both are amazingly good, but yours has a little more more pizzazz and dry wit, as well as a tad bit more maturity. 😊

So finally the "mini villains"" Lakshya and Ragini (n the sense that they were more deluded and deceived than the outright movers of the plot), redeem themselves a bit. With a baby on the way, they better clean up their act! Parenting is a huge responsibility, as any parent of a 5 year old (self included) would tell them! 😆

Loved the way Swara persuades Sanskaar to stay on at home, and he gives in since that is what she really wants. I just love their cute moments you portray, and even more, the conversations they have. Very "real couple" like. It was wonderful, the way you made her say that Sanskaar is different from his bade papa, that he would never let strategy and tactics intrude on his important personal relationships. That he would give up all his wealth and power for the person he loves.

I also found the little nugget of Ram and Sujata both keeping tabs on Sanskaar through anonymous blank calls, during the period of his estrangement from the family, very moving indeed. Parental love is so deep, so basic to the very fabric of the human self. It was touching how these two had not wanted to tell even each other what they were doing, but had wanted to have that contact, that reassurance about their son.

Kudos for this chapter, am eagerly looking forward to the next one, though I do feel a bit sad its going to be the last. But I'm sure you'll be back soon with another Fic for us, in hopefully the very near future.

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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SIMI

@simsen23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#459

sapna...nice one...all happy happy...waitng fr a awesome ending.update soon dear

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Sakura24

@Sakura24

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Posted: 9 years ago

#460

Hey Sapna...

If there is something, that could be valued more than the storm itself, it would be the silent sunny day afterwards, how every drop of harsh rain falls back to the sea and how every whip of wind tails back to the soft breeze, it is enjoyable to read how everything falls back to place, the puzzle refitting in to the perfect colorful family picture.

After the action packed initial chapters, these subtle ones that follow till the epilogue are mesmerizing and I adore them.

Wonderful update, thoroughly enjoyed the conversation between Durga Prasad and Sanskar, the two battling kings...at the table of peace.

Touched by the concern of Lakshya and happy at the seemingly smooth life he now shares with Ragini.

Ram and Sujata's bond with Swara, finally the sweet moments of SwaSan. Nice eve of ending.

I'm looking forward to the end now, a little bit sad, that it is coming to an end, but awed at the perfect way it has.

Continue soon!