SwaSan OS-- 'Fire' - Page 2

Originally posted by: SONAL30

woww...this is called a perfect morning...with viji's beautiful swasanlicious OS😉

okk this time m not gonna say ki beautifully written awesome yaar loved it nice one...naah😊kyunki yeh words bhi kam hai yaar😊I cant even express how much I liked it😃

Now coming to the OS

personally...I really like AP's characterisation she is not evil but a little control freak...she always wanted n even still want everything to be perfect...for her she is the right one

she is a princess by heart so for her this is her territory

she loved adarsh n sanskaar but laksh is her jaan

i guess giving him the best n gloring him infront of everyone had always been her dream but lux babu is not that good instead of him sanskaar got everything...thats why the envy yep envy n not jealousy because for her he is not her son

N now Swasan

swara is in love with ber hubby n for her this relationship means a lot so she was just trying to protect her relationship

she know what her badi maa is upto n for her sanskaar is her life

for her she is laksh's bhabhi n saali thats it but for badi maa she is a way to her son's happiness

n thats shy swara is scared but our rebellious shona wont give up this time she will fight😉

n m eagerly waiting for that scene

so continue sooonnn plzzz😃

Originally posted by: --Anna--

Hi Viji! 😊

Thank you so much for the PM. Luckily, I am at work and could steal some time away to read this One Shot. 😊

May I say, how wonderfully you write. Every time I read your work I really do feel that I am watching the scenes unfold from a distance. That is the beauty of your writing for me. It all seems so real. 👏

Coming to the one shot, I do agree with you, Annapurna does seem to be the last and final roadblock in Ragini's truth coming out and in SwaSan's future. I love how you have characterised her. She is definitely selfish when it comes to her own sons - any mother would be, but she goes that extra length. Also, I really love how you have described Sanskaar. My favourite lines, 'Calm. Capable. A boy who never wasted his time bragging about his capabilities. He just showed his mettle and grit in setting about things that needed to be done. He had a rapier sharp, wry wit that could be a gentle caress one second, for those he loved, and like a wasp's sting the next, for those who crossed him.' Beautiful! 👏 👏

Also, loved how Swara's character shines through in the Part2 of the OS. I like a strong Swara - who does what is right and is not afraid to do that. 😊

Cannot wait for the next one. Will be looking forward to your PM. :)

Originally posted by: Shanaia

You see I'm currently sitting outside the lodge with calm bue waves splashing on the shore in the distance.Sea gulls taking a flight now and then and the cool yet warm mediterranean air brushing my stray hair strands back.


In such peaceful atmosphere I yearned to read a book that would literally consume me and then my sister came running to me ,asking me to read this.

And can I say it was the most serene yet all-consuming piece of work that I have read this whole week.

The way you created a whole new world for the 'Malkin' just by understanding her true nature, capturing the essence of the decisions made in Maheshwari Mansion in the form of the true nature of the one Annupurna urga Prasad Maheshwari,bringing about her obvious envy for the brilliant son of her common bhai saab and her overdramatic bhabi,
is too amazing to even praise it with some meaningless words.

And of course, the way you described Sanskaar as the anomaly that graced MM, the brilliance of a mind and the keen tacts of a spirit which was and still is too much for the Unspoken Queen to bear.


And then comes her second cause of distress...oh yes our very own Swara Bose who in months shook the very beliefs of the Lord of the mansion and persuaded him to accept people with different backgrounds.The girl who respected others but always said what she thought was right, what her mother and granny has taught her.


And what unholy shadowes came upon MM when Swara Bose became Swara Sanskaar Maheshwari.Or was it a miracle by God to unite such dynamic people together who would surely change the literal base of the household which the Queen has constructed.

For these two together were the only ones who had the power to break the house brick by brick if they wanted to, and then build an empire of their own beliefs and ideas if they so wish.

Surely, the Unspoken Queen could not let such powerful combination to stay together and thus she would go to any lengths to break the alliance but she does not know that the vow Swara and Sanskar had made is an Unbreakavle Vow.

Originally posted by: suhasini2727

Excellent. ... how beautifully u wrote... it's always suprises me... great work... 👏👏👏

Originally posted by: medhasarkar

Four things Viji...

a) Dan Brown

b) The wooing of rebecca and the last matriarch, Noor Jahan and Shah jahan and of course a reigning monarch of a certain country( cannot take names, or my comment will be deleted i'm afraid; guess!)

c) Kaikeyi of Ramayana

d) the snow white and the seven dwarfs

I loved how your OS made me remember the references to all of these.

and annapurna was saying just that,

" mirror mirror on the wall,

who is the fairest of them all"

and the answer until the baby grew up,

" you my queen are fairest in the land"

and then one day,

" you my queen are fair its true,

but snow white is fairer far than you"

and instead of sending the witch to kill her brilliant nephew, she has started allotting him the extreme corners of her empire. or maybe its cinderella's stepmother, who disappointed that her daughters were uglier than her stepdaughter...made her scrub and clean the whole day...and when she met the prince she ensured that the prince would be meant for her ugly daughters and not who the prince had fallen in love with...and she with him.

You brought out the whole characterisation brilliantly...

and then when the prince actually comes...he knows exactly who is who..because after all talent is talent...and only one person will be in possession of the other glass slipper. Lionesses after all will never pair with bulls.

I am in love with your perfect way of writing, suspense and drama.

love---

medha.