'Mom with U' ' Maa Oo Maa'page 80 - Page 4

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

di..........

i guess...........i am very lucky.........

dekha? i said na that god always listen to me?

now i am the first one again.........

yipee!

lagta hai bhagwaan mujhpar meherbaan hain.........

now lagataar itni baar!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

this is another marvelous poem written by u.........

Tum jab jaatey yaad bahut atey the,
Apney sath ghar ki ronak le jatey the.

Tumhari chitthi sau bar padh leti thi,
Use haath mey thamker phir soo leti thi.

these lines made me understand the pain a wife has to suffer when her husband goes somewhere......and then all she can do is to miss him......

Desh ki Raksha mey tumney lahoo bahaya hai,
Aaj Mujhey yeh bhi samajh aya hai,

Hamney Apney Sapno Ka Ghar nahi banaya hai,
Magar Desh ke Saponn ko Bachaya hai.

Har Rang ke Phool Maa ke charanoo mey Arpit hai,
Matrabhoomi ke liye Sab kuch Samarpit hai.

and di!!!!!!!!!!!!

how can u be so emotional?

i mean how can u write such pain in words???????

i am touched!!!!!!!!!!!

the pain of a wife when her husband is a soldier.........she waits for him.........she prays for him.......but one day when he doesn't comes back.......she is shattered........she is devastated.......but she knows that they did this for saving our country.........and she knows that right......

i salute those women and those mothers who has their husbands, brothers, child in army.......i have respect for them........i think they r bigger than anyone......

thanks di.......

i have no words to tell u how speechless i am right now..........



i felt that this was the best poem i have ever read............

truly awesome!



truly stupendous...........

hats off to u..............

love u a lot.

Mahak

Originally posted by: sri_4

hye bhoomi

great poem..again,,loved these lines a lot..

the theme u choose again is great - a girl who is married to a soldier waiting for him to come back from the war but he never comes back !!!!

i really feel that only a lady can understand another lady n i am really proud to read such poems..

do keep writing more..👏👏

Ammaji, babuji ki Ankh se Asoo nahi baha,
'Garv hai mujhe apney bete par'unhoney bas yehi kaha.

Desh ki Raksha mey tumney lahoo bahaya hai,
Aaj Mujhey yeh bhi samajh aya hai,

Hamney Apney Sapno Ka Ghar nahi banaya hai,
Magar Desh ke Saponn ko Bachaya hai.

Har Rang ke Phool Maa ke charanoo mey Arpit hai,
Matrabhoomi ke liye Sab kuch Samarpit hai.

good wishes..

sri:-)

Originally posted by: sanju_veni

hey bhoomi again awesome work of urs
plz add my name to ur fan list if u have one
common how do u manage to do it
seriously i cannot

anyways enjoyed the poem
plz do pm me wheneve u write again
thanks for sharing it

Originally posted by: KehanT

Bhoomi ur writing style reminds me of Gulzar ji's famous ghazal

" mera kuch samaan "

zindagi ki har choti baat ,tum bas yoon hi keh gaye
dastan-e-zindagi parhi toh bahut thi
kuch bayan uljhane thi , kuch mein hum uljhe reh gaye


ek wajah ki aapki kavitayein dil ko choo jaati hai , aap hindi mein likhte hai varna aj kal toh english ki race mein poetry bhi ek fashion ho gya hai ..... people think of it as a style statement.

love
kanu

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Wow another beautiful one Bhoomi. Mujhe soch kar hi rona aa gaya.....specially the line:

Hamney Apney Sapno Ka Ghar nahi banaya hai,
Magar Desh ke Saponn ko Bachaya hai.

Its just marvelous Bhoomi. Waise to main aur bhi likhna chahti hu....but mere xams hai to main anhi kar sakti....will just say....it touched the heart. And its so amazing of u to thinki so deeply and bring out the deep thoughts in such wonderful ways thru ur writings. Loved it!!!

Wah thi aur Hum

Dekha Humney unhey to waha sharmagaye,
Unhonney hamey Dekha to hum ghabragaye,

Humney kaha Aap bahut sunder hain,
Unhoney kaha dheerey se bolo bhaiya ander hain,

Humney unhey soney ka haar diya,
Unhoney kaha ,"bada mehanga taufa diya",

Kai din mulakaton ka mausam yunhi chala,
Unki sharmae niganhein dekh dil machala,

Ek din humney kaha," Pitaji se tumhara haath poochainge hum,"
Unhoney kaha, " Pitaji to gujar gaye, jab hua tha hamara janam"

Hum chaunke kaha,"ghar mey tumhare Pita aur Bhai ko dekha hai",
Unhoney kaha,"ghar mey mera Pati aur devar rahata hai",

Wah Dheere se boli, "Tumhara soney ka haar tumhari yaad dilata hai ",
Hum boley,"tumhara pyaar haar hai, mera pyaar haar gaya lagata hai."

Humey apni haalat pe rona aya,
Apni bekoofi pe Dil pachtaaya,

Uski nazar chaalak lagati aur humney Maathe ka paseena ponch to liya,
Chalo Pyaar ki patti ko khool Ankhon se sachh ko dekh to liya,

Kai saal baad Dekha Humney unhey to waha Sharmagaye,
unhoney hamey dekha to hum sach... bahut ghabragaye.


.............Bhoomikauttam

guess what???????

ek aise insaan se pyaar kar baitha jo ki already shaadi shuda tha!