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monika

@monikaseth

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Posted: 15 years ago

#301

Nice poem Bhoomi , Situation make people helpless and broke them ...Great Poem bhoomi thank you for poem .I hope people who lost their beloved with horrible earthquake God Give them strength to become strong and move ahead with life .

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Kanu K

@artizia

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+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#302

im speechless bhoomi .... this one is just just .. i dont have words to explain .
the first half takes u to feelings of heaven and then second half makes u realize we are in this world , called kalyug

love
Kanu

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Mahak

@FragranceOfLove

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 15 years ago

#303

di!

how sweet of him to become a son rather than a son-in-law for them.........

di this line cracked me up!

Meri Ardhangini Kahti mujhey,Suniye Ji,
Main Kahta aap to Sirf hukum kariye Ji.

how sweet of him......

he is soooooooooooooooo sweet.............

i mean he is simply best!

he loved his family too much......

di!

aisa kyun kiya aapne?????????

jab dharti cheer gayi to Gharonde tuut gaye,
Apne Ashiyane ki sarr-jameen mey log dafann hogaye,
Dhas gayi Imarat,Mandir,masjid, Mehal, ghar jhopadi,
Dhas gaye Sapne, yaadein ,zindagi aur ujad gayi basti.
Mitti, salakhon key dheir se nikalta ek ek shav tha.
Dardnaak Nazara dekh Aatma mey laga ghehra ghav tha,
Bhukamp ke prakop ne meri duniya ko bhi bekhair diya,
Mujhe Shamshaan mey chod unhe jannat mey bhej diya.

these lines made a silent tear to go free from my eyes and fell on my cheeks.......

yeh sach hai!

main hamesha hi sochti hoon ki jo apne apno ko kho dete hain.........

woh kaise duniya mein jee paate hain?

i mean i am feeling terrible now..........

hats off to the poem......

i needed an emotional poem............

i just wanted an emotional poem to read so that i could feel better........

actually i love emotional poems more.........

and i wanted to read a good one........

and this is it!

u wrote an excellent one!

i felt his pain when his entire world was shattered.........

he loved them so much........

and a natural calamity snatched them from him..........

awesome poem!

loved it to bits!

seriously mind blowing........

love,
Mahak

haan di aapne kaha ki aapne mjht dekha........woh scene dekhkar main toh roti hi reh gayi.......kitna dardnak scene tha woh! i felt pain and only pain.......aur mayank to best hai.....mayur ke alawa koi bhi is scene ko itne perfection ke saath nahi kar sakta tha.........haina? they r the best........

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ssh57

@ssh57

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#304

Hi Bhoomi ,
Both the english poem 'My Love' and the 'Bhikri meri Duniya were very nice. I personally feel you are more expressive in Hindi. And my conclusion is tragedy is your forte. Good going. Keep it up!!! Love ssh57

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#305

Originally posted by: pinky901

nice poem

Hi pinky,

feels good to know that u liked the poem..tc

Bhoomi

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool
really nice poem bhoomi

hi jyothi,

Am happy dear that u liked the poem.. hope u continue ot like my remaing work .. luv u for commenting..tc

bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#306

Originally posted by: sri_4
hey bhoomi
great one dear

i remembered the recent earthquakes ...hmm..its really sad n whats more sad is we cant guess the natural calamities timings.....

all i just wish is we get more n more advanced technologies to knw these...though we have some....

Dardnaak Nazara dekh Aatma mey laga ghehra ghav tha,
Bhukamp ke prakop ne meri duniya ko bhi bekhair diya,
Mujhe Shamshaan mey chod unhe jannat mey bhej diya.

u expressed emotions of a person who lost his family ...its really great...

sri:-)

Hi Sri,

Yes dear.. the technology is increasing and so are natural calamities diturbign the us and makgin us feel helpless...dont know why it happens and how he can be prevented... we can only randomly predict and that too isnt always right... sad but people in few sec loose the whole family city..

nice to knw that u liked the poem and felt the feelgin emotions it tried to project ... feels good dear that u felt the emotiosn of lost family ..

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#307

Originally posted by: monikaseth
Nice poem Bhoomi , Situation make people helpless and broke them ...Great Poem bhoomi thank you for poem .I hope people who lost their beloved with horrible earthquake God Give them strength to become strong and move ahead with life .

Hi Monika dear,

yes dear situation makes us and break us.. some make us so helpless and we counter God nature why it played such havoc and answers r nil.... yes dear for me the recent Haiti earthquake and the gujrat earthquake left me feel broken looking at the satte od family asearchign for their love ones in the debris for days.. how they go throguh such siutation God..

luv u ..nice to know u liked reading this one too

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#308

Originally posted by: KehanT
im speechless bhoomi .... this one is just just .. i dont have words to explain .
the first half takes u to feelings of heaven and then second half makes u realize we are in this world , called kalyug

love
Kanu

HI Kanu,

Awww looks liek this poem touched u deeply and that makes me to knwo and undertnad that u coudl feel the emotions i was trygin to bring out..thanks for lettign me know how much u appreciate my work.. yes the first half explain the heaven he had and the secodn hald explained the heaven it wasnt... as the love ones went aay and hell is what is left behind.. for him..while they r in the actual heaven...

good to get ur comments on this..

bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#309

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur
di!

how sweet of him to become a son rather than a son-in-law for them.........

di this line cracked me up!

Meri Ardhangini Kahti mujhey,Suniye Ji,
Main Kahta aap to Sirf hukum kariye Ji.

how sweet of him......

he is soooooooooooooooo sweet.............

i mean he is simply best!

he loved his family too much......

di!

aisa kyun kiya aapne?????????

jab dharti cheer gayi to Gharonde tuut gaye,
Apne Ashiyane ki sarr-jameen mey log dafann hogaye,
Dhas gayi Imarat,Mandir,masjid, Mehal, ghar jhopadi,
Dhas gaye Sapne, yaadein ,zindagi aur ujad gayi basti.
Mitti, salakhon key dheir se nikalta ek ek shav tha.
Dardnaak Nazara dekh Aatma mey laga ghehra ghav tha,
Bhukamp ke prakop ne meri duniya ko bhi bekhair diya,
Mujhe Shamshaan mey chod unhe jannat mey bhej diya.

these lines made a silent tear to go free from my eyes and fell on my cheeks.......

yeh sach hai!

main hamesha hi sochti hoon ki jo apne apno ko kho dete hain.........

woh kaise duniya mein jee paate hain?

i mean i am feeling terrible now..........

hats off to the poem......

i needed an emotional poem............

i just wanted an emotional poem to read so that i could feel better........

actually i love emotional poems more.........

and i wanted to read a good one........

and this is it!

u wrote an excellent one!

i felt his pain when his entire world was shattered.........

he loved them so much........

and a natural calamity snatched them from him..........

awesome poem!

loved it to bits!

seriously mind blowing........

love,
Mahak

haan di aapne kaha ki aapne mjht dekha........woh scene dekhkar main toh roti hi reh gayi.......kitna dardnak scene tha woh! i felt pain and only pain.......aur mayank to best hai.....mayur ke alawa koi bhi is scene ko itne perfection ke saath nahi kar sakta tha.........haina? they r the best........

Hi Mahak sweety...

how r u doing dear...? rona band karoo hasna shuru karoo.. i need to tickle u kya....hehe waise ur coments made me feel emotional actually somewhere i felt what u were bringign toowards me.. the feelgin of a happpy family .. koi kisi ko itna sunder rishtoo mey dekhta hai..and later the situation how it turns out.. ya those cute moments were of showcasign his family and his connectivity and how evryone he lost..adn alone he is felt. u felt those emotions dear..i am very glad.. yes i had ot show how earthquakes disturbs the humanity..why nature plays havoc i dotn haev asnwer and thats why i wrote this one...

u needed an emotional poem..adn u go tone.. seeign the serial dont cry dear and rona ataa ahai Mayur r such great actors.. and i loved to see them togethr for such a long scene.. warna taras gaye they to see them sayign to each other so many things after a looong time.. and they were broken so emtoional to feel hi hota hai..

mindblowign awww u r rockign u seee.. to tumhari friend hun to kuch kuch better likhney ka try karna hi hoga ...😃..

luv u dear and loads of hugs to u .. get a dairy milk and eat half adha mere liye willhave it.. later..u see..ehehhe tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#310

Originally posted by: ssh57
Hi Bhoomi ,
Both the english poem 'My Love' and the 'Bhikri meri Duniya were very nice. I personally feel you are more expressive in Hindi. And my conclusion is tragedy is your forte. Good going. Keep it up!!! Love ssh57

Hi Sharadha,

I know i am very poor in expressing my emotions in english .. but i wanted to try and i tried my hand at this one and few more whcih i will be posting as well..and u have no option but to read that torture u see😆..

Yes dear hindi is easy to me..i think and have written a lot in hindi. be it songs n all that lyrics also i hear more of hindi songs very few english... so conslusion i feel emotiosn better to decribe in hindi comfortabley .. tragedy baapre.. may be... mood make me ..and yes social issue get my mood to srung up sooner than any light ones... maybe..tc

thanks dear for commenting and encouraging my work..

Bhoomi

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