'Mom with U' ' Maa Oo Maa'page 80 - Page 14

Originally posted by: smile.

diiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii aap kya likhte ho...

itz awesome yar👏 .. first time maine ye poem read ki n i m speechless...

very veryyyyy heart touching poems... aapne to shabdo mein jaan daal di..

keep it up.... 😊

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

wow di!

this poem was just outstanding......

and u used my name too 😃

wow!

this is the best thing i can have......

and this poem is simply so sweet..............

how she explains her happiness is simply amazing.........

u used ur name too.......

this poem showed confession...........

so beautifully........

wow!

this is simply mind blowing...........

aap har baar itni achi poem kaise likhti ho?

i am simply loss at words.......

har baar main sochti hoon ki kya naya kahoon?

aur har baar khud ko repeat karna padta hai............



wow di!

this poem shows what a girl feels when someone whom she loves also loves her.........

simply brilliant.........

loved it a lot.........

do write more.............

great!


love,
hugs and kisses,
and all the happiness ur way,
Mahak

Originally posted by: adi_gupta

hi bhoomi
i just read your first poem

just read and it touched my heart very truely you write the thoughts llike how life give us different shades
i love this poem even i write poem but not like that
i love it bhoomi

Originally posted by: adi_gupta

Piya Ab Maano Pyaar ki paribhasha Bhul gaye hain,
Kahtey hain Pyaar ke aajkal Daam ghatt gaye hain,

Piya Kahe pyaar Uncha nahi bowna hai,
Pyaar Saahasi nahi kamjor Banaataa hai,

Jaanu main pyaar Uncha Nichaa kaise ho sakta hai Pyaar ki koi seema nahi,
Jo swarth mein Vilieen ho wah pyaar ki taqat Jaanega hi nahi,

lakin aaj to syad log pyar ke bhi hitech deffination use ker rahey hein ..........kyo bus chera ke chamak damak ke aage gun bhi feele pad gaye hein
bhoomi diiiiii
you potriat very very well every word is so touching


Paaya Kaam to Khoye Rishte Tamaam,
Paya Naam to Khoya Armaan,

Paya Dollar to Khoya jeevan ki lehar hai,
Paya shourat to Khoya Ashishon ki barkat hai,

Paya jo wah haton ki reth ke samaan hai, Saath hamarey nahi rahega,
Khoya jo wah Amulya hai Jo hathon ko thaame Sath chalega,

Paya Woh dard bhari Haqequat hai,
Khoya jo woh Ek Sunder sapna hai,

Chutta Mera Ghar baar, Main Pardes ke Uss paar,
Na pyaar hai Na kar sakti Guhaar, hai kaisa mera Sansaar?


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lakin hum log in sab baationko nai samaj saktein na bus aaj kal money he sab kuch ho agyi hein or sab bakwaas hein
this was fabolus and sad too
why parent marry their girl to a boy who has no family and nor he care omg he treat her like servant .....
and she left her parents and everything for her ,........
disgusting boys i don't understand why they can't understand girls feling......


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Originally posted by: bhoomikauttam

U r right,
When i wrote this poem it was with the thought the reality i have also seen where just iif someone is an NRI he becomes the most wanted eligible guy .. people start behavign that he can give the best to his wife and parents when searchign for grooom just dont see the otherside.. they dotn check what he does, where he satys there, is anyone near to her.. when ur daughter will go there... ?
Also dollar pound their rates seem to affect such people more and soemhow such mentaliyt guys feel a woman not workgin and sittign at home u can get this kind from India and they want such woman who will be doign all the chores withotu sayign a word and they feel they earn so much the girl wont need to complain abt her social life at all akhir he is the paying his family back in India so much... so he is the most loved son and soninlaw too ..

this is there at all places and really its not easy surviving alone in a different country with none close to u and not even ur hubby to make u feel less lonely ..
u r right love defintiion has become so hytech. yup U certainly have hit the nail... LOVE itself has satrted to be misquoted and misused to define ur errors .. strange but reality is sad..

glad u liked readign it and happy u commented sharign ur feelgins and thoguths i enjoy discussing thoguth from such poems as my porpose is the same..
tc
Bhoomi

Originally posted by: adi_gupta

Shaadi ke din chounkey sabhi the,
Hamari Shaadi mey nache hum bhi the.
lovely even i too wish i will dance in my weddind my dream.......

Yup I really dont understnad why only barati shoudl enjoy dulha dulhan shodul also get the chance to rock the dance floor u see😉😆

Yaad hai kaise tum mujhe satatey the,
Manaa karoo to bhi choti meri banatey the.

Tum jab jaatey yaad bahut atey the,
Apney sath ghar ki ronak le jatey the.

Tumhari chitthi sau bar padh leti thi,
Use haath mey thamker phir soo leti thi.

so sweet and lovley tooo.
" tumahari chitthi ko mein apne seene se lagti or
phir tere saath hasain sapno mein kho jati
janti thi ke dorriya hein lakin kyo lagta tha ke in
dorriyo mein bhi nazdikya hein
bus yahi soch meri himmat ban jati or mein phir
jindgi ke is ladai mein jut jati "

Wow, Adi its very well written and it actually is brigning the feelgin eotion the woman in this poem can or must be gogin thorugh.. it is refelectign her will to lead life though her husband isnt there with her but at the bother... letters especially handwritten letters are really still now soemthign people can see the face of the person in those handwritign and those gaps in the words... 😳.. am sure ur poetry is also very good ..and in such a little time u have shared a cute perspective into the peom with fits in perfectly.. enjoyed readign this..and happy that the poem does have the spark to inspire ur talent 😃👏

bhoomi when i read your this poem some word came in my mind so iw rote here
hope you like it.........

Har Rang ke Phool Maa ke charanoo mey Arpit hai,
Matrabhoomi ke liye Sab kuch Samarpit hai.

very well said ke ma babjui ne kaha ke aansu mat bahan very touching ..this is for every person who scarifice life for our country lovley word and lovely poetry

thanks for appreciating is so much and ur comments surely have touched my heart.. glad that emotions in the poetry are refelcted the way I thoguht and yes my little to the soliders and hteir family u give their life actually the most preciosu thing but never complain and feel proud withotu a tear in their eye.. i salute them as well..

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

a beautiful poem as always bhoomi