*Rabir FF: True Love...Note, Chap 55 @ pg 143, 145 (2/1)

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: hailly
amazing update .continue soon .Thanks for pm

Thank you dear! 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1032

Originally posted by: RaBir
Okay Nivi I back. First I give you clap because this another update that I read more one time. Kabir dad surprise was good Rachna like also since Kabir happy with it. Nice to see good relation between FIL and DIL. Then pihu plan for cheer Rachna with Kabir great idea.

First he help her with hair pin. You describe so good I can see in front of eyes. She also cutely put gel on neck and he like it. Then romance was too good!

It good idea from Kabir to distract Rachna like that. She no see anything at first and surprise completely. When she think he going to kiss he say about door and I laugh. Then second scene in balcony too good. Lipstick part funny also and then he finally kiss her and she forget everything. Last part she figure out what go on and she try to go away but he pull out sari pin. He no do more because she know all his plan. But you show all three romance scene amazing Nivi dear. So good way you write I see like movie playing.

Last part leave me so worried. What happen to Rachna. Update soon end suspense please Nivi.

Thanks for coming back Poonam. I love reading your detailed comments. 😊

Pihu is a good older sister; she realized quickly after her convo with Rachna that her little sister needed cheering up. And who better to do the job than Kabir. 😛 Aur Kabir kuch kam nahi hai...usko achi tarah pata hai usko kya karna hai Rachna ko distract karne ke liye. 😳

Glad that you enjoyed the romance. I tried my best to write it in a way that was light and funny but still romantic and sexy. 😉

I personally enjoyed writing this part...it ended up being one of my personal faves, coming in close to the birthday suprise chapter. So I'm glad that you liked reading it too. 😃

I will try my best to update fast, but college start ho gaya yaar. Have to go back to the books, bohut ho gayi masti and fun. 😭

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1033

Originally posted by: Nuritzur
Wow Nivi I just love it.
Nice plan of Pihu haha very love this funny little romantic part.
Rachna acting weird I think she feel sad. I know why but I will not say because maybe I will Destroy the surprise to you

Thanks Nurit! Glad you liked the chapter.

You think you know why Rachna is acting like this? 😕

Please do tell...I'm curious to know your predictions. 😃

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1034

Originally posted by: nividances

Thanks Nurit! Glad you liked the chapter.
You think you know why Rachna is acting like this? 😕
Please do tell...I'm curious to know your predictions. 😃

ok. as you wish 😃

Rachna See KT So happy to play with that lifting shiv up and she wish she can give him a child of they own but she cant

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Posted: 10 years ago

#1035

Superb update

Loved Rabir in your ff

Thanks for PM

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: Nuritzur

ok. as you wish 😃
Rachna See KT So happy to play with that lifting shiv up and she wish she can give him a child of they own but she cant

Yeah, that's part of it for sure. 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: Chit15
Superb update
Loved Rabir in your ff
Thanks for PM

Thank you so much! Means a lot! 😊

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Posted: 10 years ago

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owww what a part,
how can kt be soo sweet,
soo i know it she would think about his words about adoption,

soo has kt sensed that she was in the balcon and have watched them, so he knows what she is thinking and why she is soo lost, and he is there tooo cheer her up..
but what is he feeling in this all,
im sure even he is heratbroken but his love for rachna wins..

cant believe it that you have stopped here, waiting now with more exitement for the next part...

great work as always...

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: hangok
owww what a part,
how can kt be soo sweet,
soo i know it she would think about his words about adoption,

soo has kt sensed that she was in the balcon and have watched them, so he knows what she is thinking and why she is soo lost, and he is there tooo cheer her up..
but what is he feeling in this all,
im sure even he is heratbroken but his love for rachna wins..

cant believe it that you have stopped here, waiting now with more exitement for the next part...

great work as always...

Thank you! Kabir is a gem, though I feel that I am sometimes being partial towards him and not giving Rachna her due. 😕

#writerproblems, when you love one of your characters more than the other 😆

I am so glad you brought up Kabir's feelings amidst all this. I am actually addressing that in the next update. I started it this morning and hopefully I'll be able to finish and post later tonight after I get through my reading for class first.

Thanks again for reading and commenting. It makes it all worthwhile to continue writing despite a busy schedule. 😊