IF SRGMP Feedback - Round 1 - Page 8

Originally posted by: rock&roll

Rock&roll:..U need to improve on a looot of things..they are too many to be listed here...I'll open a separate thread to point out ur mistakes....😡😡 😆😆.......but for starters work on the aakaar of the song....keep working on that...and i'll come up with the list 😡.

I completely agree.... this Rock&Roll needs to work on a looot of things....including opening mouth......uska jabda tabhi khulta hai jab 2smart4u aas paas hoti hai... my suggestion.... get a cut-out of gaenda from circus...put it in front....and start singing... jabda apne aap khul jayega...kyoni 2smart4u saamne dikhegi...😆😆😆

Originally posted by: rock&roll

Kiti g:excellent.👏👏👏.esp for such a difficult song .....loved ur songs,both this one and ehsaan tera hoga.....U have a lovely voice and sing very well.Ur harkats were good overall,but some harkats could have been better ....u sound classically trained which is gr8.... u have a slight tremor in ur voice,esp in higher notes(maybe bcoz of the sore throat)...If this tremor could be avoided it would sound a lot wonderful.u have also altered the pace of the song a li'l.the original is sung at a faster pace....

Great feedback Anita! Thanks a bunch for this! 😊 Will keep ur comments in mind!😊 OK am offended and a PM is on its way to u 😆

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

kiti_g

I like your voice and feel that you are very talented. However, I felt that your audition song sounded better than this. Did you have a bad throat during this round? If so, I suppose this problem should go away in the next round. Voice was a bit shaky, but sounded good technically. I believe there is a problem with the pronunciation of the word "barkha." It was overly Urdu-fied. You pronounced the "kh" sound as it is in the word "khushbu," but it should have been like "khoya." Hope you understand what I mean. Looking forward to hearing more from you!

Thank you Rabia for the great feedback! Yup did hv a bad throat and am hoping too that it goes away b4 the next rnd 😭😳 and yes do get what u mean abt the 'kh'! Thnx once again!

Originally posted by: MiniRulz

kiti_g-Great song-only thing you made barkha's (kha) sound with urdu kh., though its just hindi kh if you know what i mean.you sang very well.its a difficult song to sing.

Thanks a ton for your feedback Mini! And yes got what u mean abt the 'kh' sound! 😊

@ Rabia : Thanks so much! I'll definitely keep an eye out for the sur, energy too. Thanks!!

@MiniRulz : LOL, thank you soo much 😆 😆 😆

I have been following this thread with interest. Good to see so many interesting perspectives. It is also very heartening to note that for the most part, the comments are very constructive in nature and the camaraderie is great! I am sure I can speak on behalf of all the participants here that it is very helpful to get your songs critiqued this way. So kudos to all the people who took the time to comment 👏. My responses below to all the people who commented on my singing.

Originally posted by: Bhaskar.T

1. Arun

Your rendition I would one of the best. Give bit more attention to the diction. Listen to the word Main when you saying Main Hakikat hu. Its Main but yu are saying Meinn. All the lines when you are ending its getting really nasal. Technically you are maybe the best but please get the feel into the song. The romantic feel was absent somehow.

Thanks for the compliment and very insightful feedback! I was worried that I will mispronounce haqeeqat as hakeekat and didn't pay attention to the preceding main! I have had problems with urdu diction which is an area I need to improve on. About going nasal, it is a valid comment for sure but I honestly don't know what to do about it. Any tips here are appreciated. That said, I am also not sure if it is necessarily a bad thing. The comment on lack of feel is also valid. I tried to do that in some places like ishq masoom hai but this song doesn't provide you any breaks especially without the music 😭 I will try better next time.

Originally posted by: rock&roll

Arun: Easily one of the best performances👏👏👏.Get better control on ur breath and try to avoid the slight nasal touch.Otherwise u sounded gr8

Thank you! I did have problems with breath control. I realized that I was holding the microphone too close to my mouth. Hopefully that problem will go away in subsequent rounds.

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

Arun Sampath

I really like your voice and the song choice. I didn't sense any technical problems at all, but the pronunciation of a few words could be improved. As Bhaskar bhai mentioned, at times when you say "main" it sounds like "mein." In addition, in the line "waqt insaan pe aisa bhi kabhi aata hai," the word "kabhi" sounds like "kabi" instead. Besides these minor details and maybe a slight lack of feeling, everything else is wonderful. Beautifully sung. I really enjoyed listening to it.

I hadn't noticed the Kabhi/Kabi part until you pointed out. Thanks for the great review!

Originally posted by: Rasny

1. Arun:
* Gud Voice.
* Have 2 control ur breeth 😛
* small mistake on 'ishque masoom hain....' ending note 😛
* Feeling is missing.
* Over all gud 👏

hmmm.......I am not sure about the mistake in the ending note above. It is different from the original but I don't think my notes are off there. That said, there a couple of other places where I do have tentative notes.

Originally posted by: kabhi_21

Arun sampath: Your voice quality is really strong. You were really good with the surs. I felt you sung the song well but could not sing the lyrics. Your voice remained strong through out the song, whereas a soft touch was required for few words like na jaa. That touch would have made the song a playback material. Overall very good.

Interesting analysis. Very helpful indeed! Thanks for the compliments too.

Originally posted by: Morgoth

Here's my feedback. I apologise if anyone finds it offensive

Arunsampath - Loved it. You need to work on your diction though. Some words were mispronounced in the antara.

Noted. No need to apologize. Comments like yours help us to improve our renditions. Constructive feedback is always welcome. So keep them coming!

Originally posted by: advil

Arun:

You have a great voice. Get a better grip on your breath control. You are breathing too heavily into the mike.You tend to go a bit nasal at the ending notes…try avoiding that. Overall, it was one of the good performances of this round.

Yup. Noted yet again 😉 ....And thanks for the compliments!

Originally posted by: 2smart4u

i'm gonna be giving stars too.

Arunji - ⭐️ u were just simply TOO GOOD!

Wow, so many stars! Thank you so much. Love the idea of the star rating.

Originally posted by: MiniRulz

arun
overall it was good.you were pronouncing Main as Mein.
the beat of the song was wrong,try to breath away from mike.otheriwse it was great.you have a powerful voice and would sound like a professional singer with music etc.

The song does start to a slower beat and ramps up later and finishes slightly faster in the end. I tried to maintain the same tempo throughout the song. I don't think my taal was off though.

Once again thanks everyone for the feedback. Though it is very tempting, I will refrain from providing detailed comments on all my fellow participants. But I will pick one of the renditions and will try to critique it in detail the best I can. Now whom should I pick ? 😉

Originally posted by: ChameliKaYaar

I completely agree.... this Rock&Roll needs to work on a looot of things....including opening mouth......uska jabda tabhi khulta hai jab 2smart4u aas paas hoti hai... my suggestion.... get a cut-out of gaenda from circus...put it in front....and start singing... jabda apne aap khul jayega...kyoni 2smart4u saamne dikhegi...😆😆😆

🤣🤣🤣....kya zabardast analysis hai........guys next time,u ppl are going to comment that i opened my mouth toooo much........perfect solution jo mil gaya hai.....😆

Originally posted by: rock&roll

🤣🤣🤣....kya zabardast analysis hai........guys next time,u ppl are going to comment that i opened my mouth toooo much........perfect solution jo mil gaya hai.....😆

🤣kya idea yar? 😆😆

hey guys thanx a lot for all ur good and ot so good comments
both help me a lot
someoe said abt me i need to improve my diction or clarity at some words , could u help me by telling which words, cz i heard that from many people but i dont know how to improve

thanx