Dhoom dhamaal!I Updated-part 21 Pg21 - Page 7

HEEEEEEEYYYYYYYYYY BHHHHHHAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGUUUUU!!!!!!!!
Surbhi I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay it's official! I'm starting Remix season 2. and Surbhi YOU are going to be my writer!!!!! You rock man!!!!!! Tum itna achha kyun likhti ho yaar!!!!!!!!! Awsome rocking part!!!!! Kya insults thi!!!! Aisa lag raha tha jaise Ashi aur Yuvi mere saamne screen pe hi ladh rahe the!!!! I was completely mesmerized!!!!!! Cow dung, ulta latka doongi, the works man! Amazing!!!! too good! Continue soon!!!!

Komz

Originally posted by: AshiYuvi4life

HEEEEEEEYYYYYYYYYY BHHHHHHAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGUUUUU!!!!!!!!
Surbhi I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!! Okay it's official! I'm starting Remix season 2. and Surbhi YOU are going to be my writer!!!!! You rock man!!!!!! Tum itna achha kyun likhti ho yaar!!!!!!!!! Awsome rocking part!!!!! Kya insults thi!!!! Aisa lag raha tha jaise Ashi aur Yuvi mere saamne screen pe hi ladh rahe the!!!! I was completely mesmerized!!!!!! Cow dung, ulta latka doongi, the works man! Amazing!!!! too good! Continue soon!!!!

Komz

Hey thanx a lot!!Luv u too!!!😛Id luv u even more 4 startin remix season 2!!!!!!😃main itna accha kyun likhti hoon???Coz im a remix fan!!!!n remix alwayz rocks!!Rite??i was seriously wishin as i was writing ki kaash yeh sab sach ho jata!!!Thanx a lot again n will definetly cont sooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnn!!!!!!!!!

Hey ppl!!The next chapters here!!!!!Its a longggg one coz i wont b able to post 4 a longgggggggg time...xams na..eatin my brain...so 4 d time being ull have to make do with this one!!!!

Chapter 7
Ashis in her room talking to vrinda...and uv in his room talking to sid...
Ashi:Hey BHaggu!!This is so not fair!!
Uv:Us whacko ko mere saath hi partner banna tha...wat rotten luck!!!
Ashi:(Looks up)BHaggu...we need to have a serious talk..aap is tarah se meri life danger mein daalte rahenge toh kaise chalega?? 😃
Uv:Aur woh whacko humesha mere saamne apne silly jokes and wierd faces ke saath rahegi toh how will i control my anger!!!!!!????
Ashi:Pehle hi cyco ka dimag kharaab hai....agar usne mere upar boss karne ki koshish ki na......
Uv:....then ill tear those red hair out of her head!!!!
Sid:Relax dude!!Just chill....im sure sab theek se ho jaayega...
Vrinda:...aur jab sam ko lagta hai ki tum dono acche partners banoge toh maybe unhein kuch aisa dikha hoga tum dono mein which matches you two as partners..
Sid:Ek baar try karke toh dekho dude..agar kaam bangaya toh project ka project ho jaayega and tumhari jaan bhi bach jaayegi!! 😉
Ashi:But maatey.......Us loser ke baare mein sochke hi mujhe hyper panic attacks aa jaate hain....Uske saath roz bethke project karna!!Yuck!!!!!
Uv:Woh toh mooh kolti hai and mera anger control nahin hota...
Vrinda:But ashi..tum dono remix mein kaam karte hi ho na ek saath...phir y such a big deal bout this??
Sid:Jab tum log remix ke liye saath ho sakte ho then y not for this??
Ashi:Maatey remix is a different thing.....Woh ek group hai....
Uv:Ranveer and tia ke hone se hum dono ko zyaada interact nahin karna padta...
Ashi:.....but when ever we talk even regarding remix tab bhi inevitably jhagda ho hi jata hai!!! n woh bhi who fake he man hi start karta hai..
Uv:...its alwayz her starting the fight...Meri kisi bhi baat pe agree nahin karti hai..stubborn donkey!!
Sid:Ok..ok...jab tum log remix ke liye ek doosre ko kuch had tak tolerate kar sakte ho....
Vrinda:......then think of this as a part of remix!!Socho ki tum yeh remix ke liye kar rahe ho....
Sid:...and im sure you wont want to spoil it..especially remix ke liye toh nahin...
Uv:Ya dude...u got a point...but...
Vrinda:No ifs n buts ashi..im sure you can do it!!Bas thodi koshish karna...think bout it..k??
Ashi:Ya ya matey vrndeshwari devi!!!

Vrinda and sid leave their respective rooms and bump into each other just outside the door...
Sid:Oops..sorry..
vrinda:Me too...mera dhyaan kahin aur tha...
Both say together..
Sid:Woh uv....
Virnda:Woh ashi...
They both laugh.. 😃
Sid:Dono hi totally worked up hain..
Virnda:Ya..they r both taking a lot of unnecessary stress...
Sid:Taking bhi n giving bhi!!
they laugh again n leave together... 😆


later in the day everyones assembled in the canteen...
They r all chatting and having a gud time..suddenly...
Sid:Guyz!!This is so boring..kal national holiday hai{Sum random festival..}
and hum din bhar maurya mein hi honge...lets plan sumthing!!!!
Meher:Good idea sid!!umm...let go shopping!!!
varun:Naah....
Pri:Lets go out for lunch!!!
Tia:Pri!!!Puh-lees!!!
Vrinda:hmmm.....toh fir kya karein??
Ashi:PARTY!!!!! 🥳
all:Party??kisliye???
Ashi:Du-uh guyz!!Humein party karne ke liye reason chahiye kya??NO!!!we can party anytime we like!!!kal waise bhi holiday hai so we can party thru the nite!!!
Ranveer:Ashi bilkul theek keh rahin hain...Humein toh idea bahut accha laga...aur fir we can have music n eats too...
Uv:Haan dude..u r rite..party mein variety bhi ho jaayegi....i think its a good idea...
Sid:Ya!!Its a gr888 idea!!!Par hum party karenge kahaan??? ❓
Pri:hmm..woh toh sochna padega....
vrinda:Koi aisi jagah jo maurya ke nazdeek ho...agar hum raat mein ja rahe hain then no point in wasting time travelling....
Varun:ya..shes rite...any suggestions??
Tia:Maurya ke andar??
Ashi:Timblet..tum apna pea sized brain use karogi toh jaldi khatam ho jayega..future ke liye kuch nahin bachega...Maurya mein jumbo ke saath party karna hai kya??!! 😆
Tia:Oh shut up u punk!!Tia sirf suggestin de rahi thi!!!!
Ranny:Kyun na hum kisi hotel chalein??
Sid:No dude!!Disco!!!ya...ya club!!!!
Uv:Guyz...recently maurya ke paas ke night club khula hai...and wahaan ka owner mere dad ka dost hai...dad mujhe keh rahe the ki i shud go and check the place out...kytun na isi bahaane hum party karlein??Wat say??
Sid and varun:Hey thats a gr88 idea uv....we r on..
The others also agree...
Ashi:OK guyz..hum sab humare room mein milenge...an hour after lights out..ok????
Uv:Tumhare room mein kyon???Hum sab mere room mein milenge...
Ashi:Cyco man tumhari problem kya hai???Tumne place decide karli na??Now keep the trap shut and let me do the rest..ok??Wow rhyme bhi ho gaya!!!chalo poetry and shakespear class ka kuch toh faydaa hua....
Ranny:Ufff...aap dono fight mat kijiye...Sab girls ashi ke room mein assemble hongi and sab boys humare room mein...k??
All:Ok!!!!!!!!!! 👍🏼



Finally the times cum!!Raat ho gayi hai and sab party ke liye ready ho rahe hain!!!! 🥳
Tia:Oh tias god!!Raat ho gayi and tia abhi tak ready bhi nahin hui!!!!
Angels!!Tia ki help karo na plzz!!!
At the other corner of the room ashis pretending to doze off listening to the angel chatter...vrinda goes forward to help tia but ashi snaps awake and pulls her back..Maatey!!Dont tell me tumne bhajan keertan chod ke make up and beauty pe pravachan dena shuru kar diya hai!!! 😊
Vrinda:Kya??!!!
Ashi:Du-uh!!Tum kabse us artificial angel ke saath hone lagi??
Vrinda:Uff oh!!Ashi!!Main toh sirf uski madat karne jaa rahi thi....
ashi:Oh meri mahaan mother teresa ka avtaar!!!PLzzz!! 😛 Doosron ki madat karke time waste mat karo...pehle khud ready ho jaao...fir jitni social service karni hai kar lena...ok???
Ashis fone rings...Hello??Thakur...haan hum sab ready hain...tumhari timblet bhi...ok...
She hangs up..cum one girls..lets go!!!!!
Everyone leaves the room...only tias left behind still doing her make up...
Tia:Arrey babes!!Tia ke liye toh ruko!!!!
she touches up her lipstick and rushes out...just outside the door she looses her balance and her leg twists bcoz of her heels...
Tia:Aaaahhh...shes falls.........

rite into rannys arms!!!![he he...sorry this got a lil filmy..but cant help it!!]☺️
They look deep into each others eyes...Dil ki yeh dhadkan flute in background... ❤️ ❤️
Ranny:Tia.....[Long pause}...aap...aap theek toh hain na???
Tia:Haan ranveer..main...
HEY BHAGGU!!!!Ashi barges in to this moment making ranny almost drop tia hes so startled!!!! 😛
Tum dono ko romance karne ke liye aur koi time n place nahin mili kya??!!!
Ranny n tia fumble n get away 4m each other...
Ranny:Woh...aa...ashi...woh...tia toh... 😳
Tia:Tia neeche gir rahi thi isliye....a...ranveer ne tia ko.........pakad liya......aur...
Ashio:Ok ok fine...mujhe xplanation baad mein dena abhi chalo!!!!

They rush to where d others r!!

Uv:Ok...ab dhere dheere sab line banake mere peeche aayenge....very slowly...dont make noise plzz..k??Lets go!!
They creep behind uv...slowly n steadily they move towards the stairs that lead to the corridor....
Just then the sounds of foot steps are heard....Thak![Thats d sound of the steps...}Thak .......................Thak.............. .......... thak..... 😲

Uv stops dead in his tracks......he signals for everyone to keep quite...and listens intently.....He hears sumone humming.....He risks a peek and sees......Its the watchman!!!!Hes on his daily rounds!!Oh shit!!!!!Now wat???!!!!!!!!!! 😲
He tells sid this n sid in turn passes on the msg to the others...they hide in the shadows......eveyones thinking...now wat to do.... ❓
wen suddenly tias heels give way n shes about to topple over!!! 😲 now u can just imagine everyones xpressions...lets freeze frame on everyone.....
Tias xpression is like:Oh tias god!!HELP!!!!!! 😲 😲
Rannys is stunned!!!Hes totally speechless....
Uv turns around just then n watches tia...he lets out a hand...which stays in mid air....Reference:To those who watch dil mill gaye...wen atuls maya gets left outside n keertis on her way...the xpressipons of the others...similar to that!!! 😉
Now u must b wondering ashi ka xpression kahaan hai??Well ashis not wasting anytime in xpressing....
as soon as she sees tia falling she reaches out n grabs her hand...pulls her towards herself....and somehow....she looses her balance...her leg gets twisted.....n very strangely she gets pushed out of the line herself!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Everyones relieved that tias safely back but horrified that ashis out now!!!n the watchmans foot steps r getting closer n closer!!!!Ashis panicky!!!Wat to do??!!! ❓ 😲 😭


Aage kya hoga for that ull have to read the next chapter!!!Hope u liked this one!!!!!!
Luv
Sur

oh maaaaaaaaaaan surrrrrrrrr u reached chapter seventhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh wen did i loose trach of this superkooooooooooooool ficcyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy 😭 now wait i wld hav to get bacl and read again but am sure it wld be a treattttttttttttttttttttttttt 😳 sooo moi wld say be right back let me update myself with the poorana ones firsht 😉

hiiiiiii suuuurrrrrrrr how r uuuu??????🤗🤗🤗 thnk god k finally u continued i thot u had 4gottn 😆😆ne ways dis part is 2 fuunnnyyy
hahaha da way ashi n yuvi r reactin 2 dis situation is jst 😆
i mean dey r literally fietin 😆 😆 😆 now dis story is becumin a thriller guess wat happens nxt i hope yuvi cums 4 ashis help n catches her 😳 dat wud b soooo rooooomaaaaaanticcc 😳 i can imagine hiom doin sooo 😳 😳 luuuuv u ssuuuurrrrr🤗🤗luuuv u a looot🤗uve done a gud job👏

hey sur wooow
dat was great
both the parts were awesum 😳 😃
sory coulnt comment earlier was buzy wid xamz
cant wait 2 read da nxt part
updte soon
newayz gud lck for ur xamz 👍🏼

Originally posted by: priyachaku_18

hiiiiiii suuuurrrrrrrr how r uuuu??????🤗🤗🤗 thnk god k finally u continued i thot u had 4gottn 😆😆ne ways dis part is 2 fuunnnyyy
hahaha da way ashi n yuvi r reactin 2 dis situation is jst 😆
i mean dey r literally fietin 😆 😆 😆 now dis story is becumin a thriller guess wat happens nxt i hope yuvi cums 4 ashis help n catches her 😳 dat wud b soooo rooooomaaaaaanticcc 😳 i can imagine hiom doin sooo 😳 😳 luuuuv u ssuuuurrrrr🤗🤗luuuv u a looot🤗uve done a gud job👏

Hey thanx a lot priya!!!Jahaan ashi n uv hain wahaan toh thriller horror comedy fighting n romance...sab hota hai rite???Thanx 4 likin it will definetly cont sooooonnnnnnnn!!!!!!!
Luv
Sur

Originally posted by: cool_snehal

hey sur wooow
dat was great
both the parts were awesum 😳 😃
sory coulnt comment earlier was buzy wid xamz
cant wait 2 read da nxt part
updte soon
newayz gud lck for ur xamz 👍🏼

Hey thanx a lot!!!Im glad u liked it!!!n dont worry...u read n appreciate my wrk..thats all i need....😛Thanx 4 d wishes n all d best 4 ur xams too!!
Luv
Sur

Originally posted by: evilseye

Hey thanx a lot!!!Im glad u liked it!!!n dont worry...u read n appreciate my wrk..thats all i need....😛Thanx 4 d wishes n all d best 4 ur xams too!!LuvSur

hey !! btw when r u continuing
dying to knw more !!!! 😳
newayz my xamz ovar free now !!
soo take wish for my results
thnz a lot 😉 😃
pls cont soooon

k ppl!!b4 i go off into hibernation bcoz of ma xams ive written u a new chapter!!!!Its a lil small but hope u like it!!!

Chapter 8
k lets rewind...so tias in d line now..n ashis out of it n the watchmans gonna b there any moment....
She stands there..looking at the others n then for the watchman total confusion on her pretty features!!!!!!!...suddenly..she stands straight...gets a glassy eyed look....with a straight face......totally xpressionless........and starts walking ahead[Dhin tadak dhin......ta ta taa!!!]{P.s.this parts a lil inspired from me....}
she passes everyone in the line and is walking straight...in the direction 4m where d watchmans cuming!!!!!Uv tries to stop her as she reaches the front........
Uv:ashi!!!Kya kar rahi ho whacko!!???Get back in the line....
ashi:Wid no change in xpression.....utna time nahin hai...n watchman yahaan aake hum sab ko dekh lega...then sab fasenge....Just keep ur eyes n ears wide open

she proceeds.......

the watch man on the other hand is leisurely strolling....humming a song to himself...wen suddenly he sees a figure looming in the distance...walking straight ahead.....he runs his eyes....then looks again...its cuming closer to him....he gulps....thinks..itni raat ko yeh kaun hai????
He goes a little ahead..as the light falls on ashis face he sees her....
She stops right in front of him.....eyes wide open.....xpressionless face....looking straight ahead.....
The watchmans getting a lil...wee bit scared now....he opens his mouth to say sumthing....
but ashis talks in a spooky voice....Maine tumse kahaa tha..yahaan mat aana....Lekin tumne meri baat nahin maani...ab tumhe iski keemat apni jaan se chukani hogi.....chalo mere saath....
she turns to the right...and the watchman...whos shit scared by now...quitely follows her...

the others are looking at all this happen thinking ashis gone mad....ashi takes the watchman to some distance and stops....
she turns towards him....
watchman:Beti...dekho....tum...tum yeh sab kya keh rahi ho....tumhari tabiyat toh theek hai na????.maine toh kuch nahin kiya.....
he taps her on the shoulder....tum toh acchi ladki ho na??

suddenly ashi blinks her eyes....she shakes her head slightly..n rubs her eyes.....
ashi:arrey...watchman uncle..aap???aap yahaan kya kar rahein hain??looks around.....main yahaan kya kar rhai hoon????actually hum dono yahaan kya kar rahe hain????
wm:arrey...beti...main toh yahaan rounds laga raha tha...tum achanak kahin se aagayi aur....
ashi:Oh!!Hey Bhaggu!!Lagta hai main firse sleep walk kar rahi thi!!![ditto my problem!!!]
so sorry uncle..maine aapko daraa diya kya???
wm:arrey nahin nahin...woh toh....
ashi:Pata hai uncle....she puts her hand around him and starts walking...taking him away from the others...
U see uncle...yeh bachpan ki problem hai....main jab choti thi na..tab mera accident hua tha....[all this is happening chalte chalte....]Tab mere sar pe chot lagi thi...tab se na main raat mein neend mein chalti hoon.....
wm:accha!!????
just imagine the shot ok....the cameras in front of ashi n watchman....n they r walking....peeche se uv n the whole line r inching forward...walking on tip toes....escaping very neatly!!!!
ashi meanwhile goes on....pata hai maine abhi kya sapna dekha tha??Maine sapna dekha tha ki main margayi aur bhoot ban gayi....aur main ek aadmi ka khoon karne wali thi!!!
Wm:aaa....*gulp*...accha......aa....umm...he he...[nervous laugh]
ashi turns her head n sees ki everyones gone.....
ashi:accha...k....aaa...bahut raat ho gayi hai...[Mock yawn]....main chalti hoon theek hai uncle??Bye!!!!
she turns round to go....
Ek minute!!!Ashi freezes there.....Oh shit is her xpression.......
wm:Lekin agar tum firse chalne lagi toh????Nahin nahin...tumhe khatra bhi toh ho sakta hai.....
ashi:aaa...nahin nahin....chill uncle...main ab nahin chaloongi....aa...i mean ek baar chal loon na...toh fir usually main nahin chalti hoon...k....
wm:Nahin nahin.....main tumhe aise kaise jaane de sakta hoon...chalo..main tumhe apne room tak le jataa hoon n bahar se bolt lagaa doonga...
ashi:KYA!!!!!!
wm:haan..isse agar tum firse chalne lagi toh tum kamre ke bahar nahin aa sakti....idea accha hai na???
ashi:hun??aaaa..haan...........haan.....idea toh.....ekdum....ek dum mind blowing hai!!!!!ummm...aaa......theek hai....theek hai....chaliye.....

the dear watchman takes ashi to her room ...very lovingly makes her get in...and bolts the door from out..leaving her with a very loving "Gud nite beti!!!"!!!!!!

Meanwhile the rest of the ppl have escaped and are out of the school grounds..they r having a hearty laugh!!!
Pri:Oh god!!Main toh dar gayi thi ki watchman humein pakad lega.....but thanx to ashi...hum sab bach gaye....
Sid:Ya!!Hatts off to ashis acting...aaj toh usne prove kar diya ki woh gr8 actress sonia ray ki beti hai!!!!
Varun:Haan!!Kya acting kari usne!!Main toh apni hasi control hi nahin kar paa raha tha!!!
Ranny:Haan...aaj ashi ki wajah se hum sab bach gaye.....par...par woh hain kahaan......kahin..kahin woh musibat mein toh nahin hain???
Uv:Woh khud itni badi musibat hai....woh musibat mein kaise pad sakti hai???
Anywayz guyz tum log niklo...maine sid ko dad ka visiting card de diya hai...tum sab wahaan pahuncho..main is red head ko leke aata hoon..ok???
All:OK!!!!Lets go!!!!

ab kuch ay romantic scenes........BUt but but!!In my next chapter!!!!Hope u liked this one!!!!
Luv
Sur