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Posted: 16 years ago
Thanx soooooooooooo much everyone for ur invaluable comments!!!!
I know its been ridiculously long..n i have no right to even ask u guyz to forgive me 4 d delay...but well...Ive worked on the next part and another fic...so im posting it..Hope u guyz like it!!!
P.S:I wrote after a really long time so am a bit rusty..hope its upto ur xpectations!!!
Chapter 18
Tia was in a good mood today...Ranveer was taking her out on a date that evening and she was totally excited...
She was thinking to heself as she walked towards the room..'Wow..aaj ranveer tia ko date pe le jaane wala hai!Tia is so excited!Ab tia ko bilkul time waste nahin karna chahiye..tia has to dress up..fir make up bhi karna hai..Tia chahti hai ki yeh date....date....AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA'She screaches as she enters the room....
Room mein scene yeh hai ki ashis converted the room into a garbage can!!!All of tias clothes are scattered on the floor...her make up things are on the bed...and the cupboard n dressing table are empty...
Tia rushes in and shouts"ANVESHA!!!!!!!Bahar niklo!!!!!"
Ashi meanwhile was in the shower and she rushed out in her tshirt and a towel.."Timbo!!!!Kya hua!!Aag lag gayi kya!!???Bachaao bachaao!!!"
She started jumping on the bed dropping a few of tias make up things..This infuriated tia even more n she screamed again...
"U punk!!!Yeh kya haal bana rakha hai room ka!!!!Wat do u think u r doing!!???"
Ashi stopped dead in her tracks..'Tumne mujhe Yeh question poochne ke liye shower se bahar nikala!!??Maine apni jeans bhi nahin pehni thanx to u miss drama queen!!Yeh kya hai?Yeh tumhara stupid samaan hai jo MAINE nikala hai...bcoz is full room mein all i can see is TIA AHUJAS THINGS!!!is liye is bechare kamre ko apni misery se bacha rahi hoon aur thoda sa ashi touch laa rahi hoon...Thats wat this is!!'
"Ashi touch?Ya rite u punk...Tia ahuja ke taste mein class hai after all tia ahuja..."
'Ya ya..koi aisi waisi baat nahin hai..'ashi cuts in'i noe i noe timba...i understand..ki without brains jina kitna mushkil kaam hai...'
'Ohhh...shut up u red head!!Tunme meri things nikali...main..main tumhe nahin chodungi!!!'Tia looks around in a rage and spots ashis guitar there..She picks it up.."Now u see u loser..main kya karti hoon..'
'Woah woah barbie doll careful..Yeh koi toy guitar nahin REAL guitar hai k?Ise carefully handle karte hain..tumhare in puny arms ke liye its too small so give it to me...'
Tia starts to move backwards..'not so fast ashi..pehle mujhe sorry bolo....'"Tumhari impossible ki hope karne ki aadat abhi tak nahin gayi?too bad..coz main tumhe sorry nahin bolungi.'ashi starts to chase tia around the room...As they are running around the room suddenly tias wind chime gets entangled in the guitar...she frantically tries to untangle it but in vain..she sees ashi gaining on her so she gives a hard tug to the guitar...
TWAANNGG
"TIMBOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!"A cry sounds reverberating in the whole of Maurya high...
Tia looks guiltily at the guitar in her hand with one string broken...
'ahh..ashi...yeh...yeh lo tumhara guitar....'she very timidly hands over the guitar to ashi.
Ashi meanwhile is black as thunder and filled with rage..She takes the guitar and gently places it on the bed..She folds her hands in front of tia n stands there in mock patience..
'Tia??'she asks"Ya ashi.." tia replies timidly'How fast can u run tia?' "Pretty f..fast..K..Kyun ashi?" 'Kyunki main tumhara har ek par separate karke use medical college mein donate karne waali hoon..and tumhara brqain??pain use apne paas hi rakhungi.....PAPER WEIGHT BANAKE!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
"YYYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH"Tia screams n runs out of the room!!!!
"TIMBOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"Ashis runs after her...

Next door Ranveer n Uv were sittin n talkin bout remix...
Ranny:Banna..humein lagta hai ki remix naye gaane ke liye humein kuch fast tune sochni chahiye..jaise....
BANG the door opes...'Ranveer!!!'Tia enters screaming and rushes to hide behind ranveer...
Uv n ranny hadnt gotten over the shock of tia cuming in like that wen suddenly a sound cums from the door...
"TIA!!!!!!!!!!!"
Ranveers mouth drops open and uv blinks his eyes a few times to confirm wat hes seein....
Ashi stands there at the door...in her tshirt n towel...a baseball bat in hand...and a menacing look on her face...She runs after tia who makes her chase her all round the room...and the boys are just standing...too much in shock n amusement....
"Ranveer!!Khade kya ho!!??Tia ko BACHHAAAAAAAAAOOOOOOOOOO!!!!"Ranveer Snaps out of his trance and exclaims.."Yeh..Yeh sab Kya ho raha hai!!!???Tia........Ashi......Rukiye...aap dono...suniye.......Uv banaa humari madat kijiye!!!!!!!!!"
Ranveer hides tia behind his abck and Uv just manages to grab hold of Ashi as she whizzed past him braindishing her bat in the air...
"Woah ashi!!Chill babes..Relax.."
"Nahin...aaj toh main is barbie doll ke head ka sara dung uske face pe laga ke rahoongi!!!!Chodo mujhe Uv!!!"
"Par ashi...Rukiya toh sahi...Shaant hoke baat kariya ashi..."
"Aaahh!!!That was from tia...
"Ashi...whacko...pehle batao toh hua kya hai!!??"Uv xclaimed while trying to hold an extremely lively and agitataed ashi who was tryin to aim for tia over ranveers head...
For a minute ashi relaxed...tired with all the running around..."Is timbo the dumbo ne..mere guitar ka string tod diya!!!"
"Tia ne jaan booch ke nahin kiya...'tia meekly put in a word...
'accha???Toh kya woh guitar magically tumhe follow kar raha tha??Usmein suddenly life aagayi thi kya??Maybe he came upto u and said "Dear tia..main ashi ka guitar hoon..plz mera ek string UKHAAD DO!!!"'She shouted as she tried to reach out to Tia again but was stopped by Uv...
"Ah..ashi..a..dekhiye..tia keh rahi hain na...galati se ho gaya...'
'but dude...guitar ka string tod diya??aissa toh galati se bhi nahin hona chahiye..i mean guitar ko itna carefully rakhte hain n uska string tod diya??Not cool Tia...'Uv said
'arre banaa...aap humari madat kar rahe hain ya ashi ki side le rahe hain??'
Uv:'Main ashi ki nahin Music ki side le raha hoon...agar mere guitar ke saath aisa hota toh even i wud have done the same thing...'
'Thakur..tum raste se hat jaao...aaj timbo ko mujhse koi nahin bacha sakta!!!!
Uv came n stood in front of ashi..'k..k...whacko..bas...tia ko hum baadmein dekh lenge...pehle guitar ke baar mein socho..use theek karna padega...'
'Par uv yeh timbo...'
'No buts ashi..mujhe apna guitar dikhao n vll try to fix it k?'He paused..'and by the way ur still in a towel so apne kamre mein jaao n put some thing on..k?'
Ashi suddenly realised this n looked down at her towel...she gave tia a menacing look and a parting dialouge"Aaj toh tum is towel ki wajah se bach gayi...but next time u wont be so lucky tim-baby..."
And she stormed out of the room...

In the girls room after ashi had put on her jeans n cooled down considerably uv had checked the guitar..
'Hmm.Its fine whacko.....next time market jaao toh naya string wahin se lagwa sakti ho....But be careful with it next time'
'Main apna guitar humesha carefully hi rakhti hoon..woh toh timbo ke haath aa gay isliye...I know ki musical instruments ko carefully rakha jaata hai...'
'Ya..u got to guard them with ur life!'uv exclaimed
Ashi:Chalo..kisi baat pe toh hum dono agree karte hain...'
Uv:Yeah...
Suddenly an idea struck him..'Agree??Of course!!Thats it!!'
Ashi:Ab tumhe kya ho gaya??'
Uv:Dont u c it ashi??Hum dono mein common kya hai??Music!!!Music ke liye humara passion!!And thats wat we will work on for our project!!!Hum dono ke liye Music means a lot...and humare prized posessions humare guitar hain!!Get it??
Ashis xpression changes as it dawns on her..:But of course!!!Yes!!Uv!!!Thats it!!Thats wat we need!!!Thats gr8...ab main us loser latty ko dikha doongi ki agar sam ke saath date pe koi jaayega toh woh main hoon!!
'Aur agar tumhe koi yeh realise karwayega ki Uvs the right guy for u..toh woh main hoon'Uv thought to himself.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
oh my god u updated thissssssssssssssssssssss oh my god oh my god oh my god am i dreamingggg or whaaaaaaaaaaaat??????????????????? oh my gooooooooooooooood
wana hugggy u hardddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddddd🤗thankooo thankooo thankooooooooooooooooo for updating itttttt🤗
i already read it and guess what i didnt even have to go to the back pages to refresh my memory wid wat had happend it somehow just floweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed
just loved loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooved it specialllllly the way uv realized the besht thing to work upon their projectttttt hes so right if there is anything for which dye can both die for besides each other's neck ie its musicccccccccccccccccc music is deir soullllllllllllllllllll a part and parcel of being themmmmmmm...and haye that last lline just sent me into a dream worllllllllllllllllllllld love the shear confidecne wid which yuvi make data remark he sure knows wat not just he wants but she tooo wants all he got to do is make her realize this is what her heart wants and then nothing and noone can stop her from followingggg her hearttttttttttttttttt
hayeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
u made my day Surrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr🤗love u love u loveeeeeeeeeee u🤗🤗...and plz is baar dnt take a century to update i cant wait for the real droooling stuffff to start bwt AY bluuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuush
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Posted: 16 years ago
HEEEEEEY BHAGGU!!!! Rockstar that was AMAZING! Did I seriously just read a part from you ya phir main koi achhi dream dekh rahi hoon? Whatever it is, it's rocking! THank god tumne finally continue toh kardiya!
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey thanx sooooooooooo much guyz!!!Trust me agar tum dono nahin hote toh main yeh kabhi nahin likh paati!!It feels so gr88 to be back here!!N this time im gonna stick to my word n update regularly...Ive got holidays now..toh ive got plantyyyyyyyyyyyy of time...n the best way to beat the heat is to write bout remix n surrender in its magic!!!
Luv
Sur
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Posted: 16 years ago
hey sur i just read ur whole fic........😃 its superb!..........⭐️...........plssssssssssssssssssssss continue asap.....dying to read nxt part😛
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Posted: 16 years ago
Hey thanx so much rihanaa89!!Im glad u liked it!!
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Sur
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Posted: 16 years ago
Chapter 19
She looked all around her to see if anyone was watching...she moved stealthily till she came to the door of the staff room...and as she prepared to know...
"Kahin jaa rahi ho latty??"
Lattika cursed under her breath and turned around....
Dhin tadak dhin dhin tadak dhin dhin tadak dhin ta ta ta!!!
There stood ashi in front of her...With her adorable wicked smile on her face....
'Hi anvesha...'latty said half heartedly...'Main andar jaa rahi thi...Sam se milne..'
'But thats not possible my not-so-dear lattika...'Ashi said.
Latty:Kyun!?
Before ashi cud answer her the door opened and sam walked out...
This time hes wearing a light green shirt..the soft color complementing his chocolate brown eyes...with the first few buttons open....with a pair of worn out jeans and cool casual sandals...sigh...
Sam:Hi ashi...Hello lattika...
He flashed them his trademark smile displaying his pearly whites making them almost drool adoringly...
Sam:Umm...girls??........Girls?
They both snapped out suddenly...
Sam:So...chalein ashi??
Ashi:Sure sam...lets go!
Latty:But..Wait!!Sam mujhe aapse kaam tha!!!
Sam:ummm...so sorry lattika..but..ashi asked me first...no problem..main pehle ashi ki problem suljha deta hoon...then..ill get back to u..k?
He smiled at her and walked away with ashi leaving a fuming latty behind....
In the music room...
"Oh sam..i was so worried..Us stupid timbo the bimbo ki wajah se is guitar ki yeh haalat ho gayi..."
"Dont worry ashi.."Sam said as he intently studied the guitar..."It can be fixed..main waise bhi kal market jaa raha hoon...wahaan se tumhare liye naya string dalwaa ke le aaonga..."
Ashi:"Oh wow!!Thats gr8!Can i cum too???"
Sam:Ya..sure...
Ashi:Waise....sam...ur lookin really hot today...
As hot as sam was..he was slightly slow in catching signals...He was darn hot..but he just dint seem to know it as yet...as ashi was trying her hardest to patao him..he was busy with the guitar...
Ashi:Do you have a girlfriend sam??Sam??Sam!!
Sam was meanwile busy strumming the guitar..watever strings remained of it!!!
Sam:Hun??Oh wat??Hey look ashi...i can still get a tune out of this!!!!
He grinned at her..and she looked back and managed half a smile..
Sam:U noe wat...mujhe ek tune yaad aa rahi hai...so i have to go..agar kuch chahiye toh il be in the staff room..k?
And he rushed out of the room...
Ashi was left all alone...
"Aaargh!!Hey Bhaggu!!Wat crime have i done!??Itna hot banda...girls are throwing themselves on him...aur yeh hai ki isko koi khabar hi nahin hai??!!!!Wat do i do Bhaggu!!!??"
"Umm..maybe u shud forget about him??"
Ashi turned around and before she had seen him she knew who it was...Yuvraj dev...
Ashi:Ha ha...very funny he-man...But agar tum is matter mein interfere na karo toh better hoga....
Uv:No seriously ashi..tumhe us sam me kya dikhta hai!!??
Ashi:[irritated]wahi jo mujhe tumme nahin dikhta...Hes so awesome uv!!I mean wat more can u ask for!!n waise bhi Im not like u ki har dumb chick ke peeche bhaagoon...
Uv:Oh..i get it..accha yeh batao..wat do u like the most bout him??
Ashi:umm...there are lots of things..jaise....umm...Hes...hes a..very...genuine guy...
Uv:Un-Hun?Itni si quality sochne ke liye itna time??
Ashi:Buzz off uv...this isint helping....
Uv:N it wont..bcoz u noe wat??Tum sam ko sirf isliye pasand karti ho bcoz its the cool thing to do..bcoz baaki saari ladkiyan bhi yahin kar rahi hain...
Ashi:Thats not true!!How Dare u....
Uv:Dont even try to lie ashi...kya yeh obvious nahin...tum sam ko genuinely like nahin karti..bas tumhe latty se uske liye compete karna accha lagta hai...Thats the only reason...n u noe wat??Its an absolutely lame one...
n uv stormed out of the room...glad in a way that he had gotten all his frustration out...n that he had told ashi all that he wanted to..not all actually..but atleast sum of it...but angry with himself also at his inability to pinpoint n say"Ya..this is exactly how i feel n this is wat i wanna tell her.."n his inability to make her like sam less...Aarghhh the mind plays such games with us!!!

Ashi meanwhile was a little taken aback at what uv said n was still sitting n thinking bout wat he had said...Hed always been the passionate kinda guy...if he dint like sumthing he dint bother hiding his dislike...hed been the only guy apart form ranny whod actually understood her and was able to relate to her in sum way...the fights that they had??A small smile formed on her lips as she remembered them all...the reasons had been trivial..but just the sense of challenge that he evoked in her was like no other...


She thought hard..was what uv saying right??Was she really after sam because...No ways..Sam was hot!!!But was that enough??Dint she want her guy to be a lot more than just hot??What was it that she actually wanted??Who??A name kept popping up in her mind but she kept brushing it aside..afraid that wat she had thought wud cum true..afraid to look for the answers to all her questions...unaware that she already knew the answers..she just dint wanna admit it.....

Sorry its a lil short but i hope u guyz liked it!!
Plz give me ur feedback
Luv
Sur
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Posted: 16 years ago
oh man Surrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr oh man oh man oh man for the very last tow paras u deserveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee theseeeeeeeee🤗
i mean id unno what to say maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan am so dumbstruck and totallly absolutely fulllly looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooost in that one momentttttttttttttt ITS BEYOND EXPRESSABLE WORDS SURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR every word of those last two paras had a meaningggggggggggggggggggggggg an impact am just bowllled overrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr let me g read it again i wld be back wid my thoughts on it but for now its jussssssssssssssssssst out of the worlddddddddddd
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Posted: 16 years ago
👏WOW evilseye!!!! That was sooo amazingg i relli dont no how to describee.... iv read ur fic aboutt 6 timeess n i lovee every single chapterr!!!!😃 please continueeee 😳😊😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
Phew!!I though nobody noticed!!!Thanx a ton guyz!!!Im glad u ppl like it!!!

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