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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#61

Originally posted by: Lily30
Loved the part which is actually a prequel👏

My oh my, the intensity

You are one amazing writer🤗

Eager to read more, uff😳😃

Thank you Lily. 😃 Am all aglow now with your praise, 😳 particularly as I was a little unsure about how this section would be received. And so glad that you found it intense - there was some amount of reflection and not much PaRud action in it, and I really did want to reward readers for sticking with it.

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Mysticaldivine

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Stunner

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Posted: 10 years ago

#62

Sabs👏

congratulations for coming to the world of FF and I can see you enjoying it with lots of fun.

I must admit, RR and its intensity in the beginning was so high that I wanted to ride this journey but it made my heart broke with constant change of storyline.

Come 2 ur Update

That was awesome.👏

Very narrative style as you always have, the scene where Paro being caught in the desert by Rudra after her running away from the Haveli can be visualized ⭐️ a vivid description all over of whats going on in her mind. Paro's defiance to his proximity with deep desire for more, ...😳her helplessness against her new emerged feelings, 👏

her concern for her jija and all 😊

just wonderful.👏

Rudra's POV will explore this story more.

Thnx for the scrap😊

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: aaliah3108
OMG !!!!! I love u so much !
What did u just write dear Sabs !!!

You re-created Parud's passion and I can almost visualise this playing out. How well you grasped their psyche and the way they would move/ behave around each other sensing each other 's presence even in such circumstances.

We all witnessed how attuned they were to each other despite being on the opposite sides , despite trying to hate each other, it could take just one small sentence or a small situation to make Paro call out for Rudra and for Rudra to jump in before she would call out!

You built it on this and wrote out this piece so effortlessly. I swear I could see this playing out ! truly remarkable.

I want more ...

I am so glad I bumped into you...late though but nevertheless ! hehe !
thanks again !

Thank you Ruchi for your fulsome praise. 😳😃 And love ya too!! 🤗

So glad you think I've stayed true to Paro and Rudra's characters. That is always the big challenge for any author. Am totally delighted that you saw enough passion in this piece - I was concerned it might be a little thanda after the first part, but am reassured now. Thanks again for your tremendous encouragement and It's my pleasure to have met you - no matter how late. 😊

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: Maya468
Awesome Lovely work

Thank you Maya. 😃 Delighted that you liked it.

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: JJKKL
Hi Bug,

Well I know you get irritated if somebody calls you bug. Hence the name 😃

I am bugged with you. Reason being am forced to type with lot of pain in my hand. Thought I will stay away from IF and twitter today but your Part2 forced me to come here. So am bugged with you.😕

Has your writing become better from Part1 to Part2 ?😆 Or is it just me ? I could see every line play out in my imagination. The one I liked most was imagining Sanaya in these two lines

"The first inkling he had was when the gentle line of her back, uncovered by any shawl in the cold desert night, straightened. Then she canted her head at an angle and froze like a doe scenting danger."

This was like an aged wine for the sophisticated palates here.😉

How do you write like this ? I feel jealous.😳

Hey JK,🤗😃

What've you been wrestling with? Can we expect another instalment of your engaging creations?

You know absolutely the right thing to say to me, don't ya?!! 😃 So now I feel all warm and happy that my hard work with this second part has been appreciated by a writer and reader of your calibre and experience.

JK, wanted to ask you how I could send PMs to a group of people without doing that one by one? Do I have to get readers to buddy me, or do I buddy them - what's the etiquette here? Share some of your experience, love, 😉😃 but only when your hand is quite recovered.

Take care and see ya here soon.

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pree_28

@pree_28

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Posted: 10 years ago

#66

Woww.. amazing writing 👏
Your each line description is so vivid. Rudra comparing small desert animal to paro
unaware of the danger. His BSD mind working hard and it make sense that he used
Nandani's card & paro to not sit and worry but do what she can even if it dangerous
for her. Your description was so good that felt like watching the episode 😃

How much he was reasoning for his actions..for Rudra it has always been actions
speak louder then words. 😳

This story reminded me of rangrasiya promo in which paro is running away in deseart and is
being chased by Rudra. Their was some kind of this line " jaha jaha jaegi, mujhe sarhad ki
tarah vaha paegi"! I got that feel from your story. Seriously in serial they could have used
this senario.

I have a request if you send pm then can you send me too..I would be delighted 😛
as i dont want to miss new parts of your story.. thank you buddy for giving us pleasure
of reading about our loved couple 😳

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varshu27

@varshu27

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#67

What a master stroke this chapter is...Bravo👏. Loved the intensity, the passion and the emotions playing out. Absolutely brilliant.

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-Disenchanted-

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Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: tvbug2011
Thank you Suganthi. 😃 Delighted that it managed to capture your interest. Now of course i have the challenge of living up to the buildup.😉😃

And so glad that you think that Paro would have done this. This was one gap that the audience wanted filled, and which the CVs/crew didn't bother to. It would have made for a richer story, and more in keeping with the overall theme. WHat made it worse in some ways was the audition tape that a lot of us had seen on the Forum of the actress who was playing Nandini.

I have a feeling after Tejawat was exposed, the CVs had two options - either make Parud fall in love or have one of the leads go after Nandini. The budget for the love story would have been more feasible. How I wish they had combined both and the leads had developed feelings while on an adventure.
Pls send a PM when you post the next part

Edited by -Suganthi- - 10 years ago

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Rummykub

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Posted: 10 years ago

#69

Hi bugsa!!!

I am so shocked to see you here after a long time.welcome back.

I have been a huge fan of your RReviews. So you can imagine how ecstatic I am to see a work from you.

You have taken me and the others here back to our original RR...the one we were all promised.

I can vividly imagine every single scene you have captured here between Parud and also the gamut of emotions paro and rudra are going through...such is the magic of your words, truly.

You have shown us a glimpse of the RR we were all hoping for and had expected to see. The passion. The intensity. And both paro and rudra true to their original nature.

Please do continue writing more and we ardent fans of RR and Parud will cherish them.

Can't help but wonder if the makers had stuck to their original version of RR without the TRP pressure etc...would it still be running now? And where would it be poised right now..I mean storywise?!! Sigh!!!

All that is left for us is to relive and imagine itt thanks to awesome writers like you.

One request. Could you please pm me when next time you update? I would be forever great full.

Thanks,

Prati.

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aaliah3108

@aaliah3108

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#70

Originally posted by: -Suganthi-

I have a feeling after Tejawat was exposed, the CVs had two options - either make Parud fall in love or have one of the leads go after Nandini. The budget for the love story would have been more feasible. How I wish they had combined both and the leads had developed feelings while on an adventure.
Pls send a PM when you post the next part

Sorry to barge in between ... I hope you guys will exscuse me but there was an audition for Nandini ???😲really ??? 😭 Who had auditioned for it? I missed it ! I forever waited to see the Nandini track and wanted to ship Aman + Nandini !! But sigh ...it never happened !

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