FS: A traitorous taste (for Smitar) Part 5 page 27 completed - Page 7

Originally posted by: Lily30

Loved the part which is actually a prequel👏

My oh my, the intensity

You are one amazing writer🤗

Eager to read more, uff😳😃

Sabs👏

Originally posted by: aaliah3108

OMG !!!!! I love u so much !

What did u just write dear Sabs !!!

You re-created Parud's passion and I can almost visualise this playing out. How well you grasped their psyche and the way they would move/ behave around each other sensing each other 's presence even in such circumstances.

We all witnessed how attuned they were to each other despite being on the opposite sides , despite trying to hate each other, it could take just one small sentence or a small situation to make Paro call out for Rudra and for Rudra to jump in before she would call out!

You built it on this and wrote out this piece so effortlessly. I swear I could see this playing out ! truly remarkable.

I want more ...

I am so glad I bumped into you...late though but nevertheless ! hehe !

thanks again !

Originally posted by: Maya468

Awesome Lovely work

Originally posted by: JJKKL

Hi Bug,

Well I know you get irritated if somebody calls you bug. Hence the name 😃

I am bugged with you. Reason being am forced to type with lot of pain in my hand. Thought I will stay away from IF and twitter today but your Part2 forced me to come here. So am bugged with you.😕

Has your writing become better from Part1 to Part2 ?😆 Or is it just me ? I could see every line play out in my imagination. The one I liked most was imagining Sanaya in these two lines

"The first inkling he had was when the gentle line of her back, uncovered by any shawl in the cold desert night, straightened. Then she canted her head at an angle and froze like a doe scenting danger."

This was like an aged wine for the sophisticated palates here.😉

How do you write like this ? I feel jealous.😳

Woww.. amazing writing 👏
Your each line description is so vivid. Rudra comparing small desert animal to paro
unaware of the danger. His BSD mind working hard and it make sense that he used
Nandani's card & paro to not sit and worry but do what she can even if it dangerous
for her. Your description was so good that felt like watching the episode 😃

How much he was reasoning for his actions..for Rudra it has always been actions
speak louder then words. 😳

This story reminded me of rangrasiya promo in which paro is running away in deseart and is
being chased by Rudra. Their was some kind of this line " jaha jaha jaegi, mujhe sarhad ki
tarah vaha paegi"! I got that feel from your story. Seriously in serial they could have used
this senario.

I have a request if you send pm then can you send me too..I would be delighted 😛
as i dont want to miss new parts of your story.. thank you buddy for giving us pleasure
of reading about our loved couple 😳

What a master stroke this chapter is...Bravo👏. Loved the intensity, the passion and the emotions playing out. Absolutely brilliant.

Originally posted by: tvbug2011

Thank you Suganthi. 😃 Delighted that it managed to capture your interest. Now of course i have the challenge of living up to the buildup.😉😃

And so glad that you think that Paro would have done this. This was one gap that the audience wanted filled, and which the CVs/crew didn't bother to. It would have made for a richer story, and more in keeping with the overall theme. WHat made it worse in some ways was the audition tape that a lot of us had seen on the Forum of the actress who was playing Nandini.

I have a feeling after Tejawat was exposed, the CVs had two options - either make Parud fall in love or have one of the leads go after Nandini. The budget for the love story would have been more feasible. How I wish they had combined both and the leads had developed feelings while on an adventure.
Pls send a PM when you post the next part

Hi bugsa!!!

Originally posted by: -Suganthi-

I have a feeling after Tejawat was exposed, the CVs had two options - either make Parud fall in love or have one of the leads go after Nandini. The budget for the love story would have been more feasible. How I wish they had combined both and the leads had developed feelings while on an adventure.
Pls send a PM when you post the next part