Okay. That was TERRIBLE. So bad that I think you should write us another, and then another, to make up for the bad taste that perfect little One Shot supposedly left in our mouths!
God, Anky, that was so damn good! I loved that for both you and Zara, the concept of Raudra had a third party to it. Both of you used the two antagonists to Parud, and while Zara blew us apart with a torrent of emotion, yours was emotional, but lightly treading on our heartstrings. Wonder if that was deliberate on your parts? Did you two map out the elements of using two outsiders, and decide you'll do dark vs light?
I didn't expect to have Laila visit us in this one, but I am glad you took us away from the coyness of Paro being "mad" and reminded us of real rage, real emptiness. Laila's Raudra in the past is implied, not spelled out, and I appreciate that you incorporated another character here, like Zara did with Shantanu--only here, Laila's anger is impotent, while Zara chose to make her character--shockingly---win.
I loved that you brought in Laila because her genuine reason for feeling rage is contrasted with Rudra's brutal indifference to her. And then, just juxtaposed with that we have Rudra's adoring reaction to his wife's anger, and Paro has no real reason to feel anger at all!
And the two women, doing the same thing, the same action--feeding him--- have brought out wildly different reactions to their existence in the man they love. They are both making Rudra react ---and because HE has changed, Rudra overwhelms one with his emotions, while he destroys the other by feeling nothing at all.
Well played, woman. well played.
Edited by napstermonster - 11 years ago
