NAVARASA:The Series-- # 2 UP on Pg 13! Vibhatsa (Disgust)

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samba12

@samba12

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Thank you. That was poignant. And so apt for Nandini.

Is there hope for her? It's hard not to wonder ...

Looking forward to the other rasas.

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MeenuCrazyPanda

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

wow...

Nice one for Vibhasta and nice selection of character👏👏👏

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kaykay

@kaykay

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

oh god...you wrote about nandhini...who is yet to come on the show itself...if ever she makes an appearance i seriously doubt she'll be given such a introduction...would really love to see that...you brought out her present life so gruesomely beautiful...the need to wash of the filth ...her homelands water ...to feel that she would be cleansed ...but cant return to be the girl she was once before...you beautifully pictured her inner turmoil..gosh had she reunited with paro...desperately want to see how their reactions would be...

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antiquegold

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

Napster, this is awesome! What a moment to describe... When she did not want yo answer to her own name! Oh my god!

And .i was wondering what happened to the third shot of the three shot! Silly me! Starkly beautiful,and your description of that Jallad guy turns more and more seductive in every story. The man has become james bond himself!

People, this is what happens in the real world... This fate of Nandini. Perhaps not her rescue. So when we cat fight about paro falling in lve too soon, remember what she realized that Rudra saved her from. Hey id love a man like that in a tic. Id treat him like a God!

Edited..".

All morning this has been haunting me. You know what? You make your readers clam up. After reading, there are so many feelings so many thoughts that crowd my mind, but no words. Jusy mo words. I scrabble at the story, trying to articulate my impressions of it.

You raise the bar even on the comments Navin. It would be really a crying shame if you do not publish. This one storu stands out by itself. I plan to repost this series on my blog if I get permission, with due credit of course, and .i will revert with the links fir all to see! Http://Oldestfan.tumblr.com

Edited by Oldestfan - 11 years ago

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CheshireBilli

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

You don't need me to tell you how powerfully you write. You nailed 'vibhatsa' without a doubt. If there was one feeling that I DEFINITELY had, it was of my skin crawling.

Having said that, you know, Napster, after I finished reading the piece, the overwhelming response was anger. I was mad. REALLY mad.

I was unreasonably mad at you because in my head, I kept going 'How could Navin? How dare she say something like this? I expected better of her. With all her sensitivity, why would she hold Nandini culpable for something she had no control over? Why would, NAPSTER of all people place this premium on Nandini's body as a sexual object?'

And then, I realized what uncommon skill it takes to do just this. To BECOME the person you are writing about even when she is miles away from who you are. I made the mistake of confusing the writer, napstermonster with the character Nandini because of how REAL she felt. It is presumptuous and unfair of me to impose my values and views on a girl who comes from such a different background. Nandini, born and brought up in Birpur, who has only known life in her village and the word of Raja Thakur, for whom traditional Indian constraints of sexuality, propriety, purity, and lack of agency have all been drilled within an inch of her life-- how and WHY would she think like me or even like you?

And to bring Nandini's voice out, instead of yours (and a lot of writers struggle with this), shows not only skill, but also the maturity and honesty to not flinch away from uncomfortable truths.

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Ankita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

have unresd. No idea how I even managed to form coherent words.

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sslmay11

@sslmay11

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Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Brilliant writing NM. Heart wrenching. No words can justify the way you write and make us feel the raw emotions of the characters. Hats off:)

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binimoti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#28

I got a feeling of fresh reading, this was an artistic piece lovely work, update soon.

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ArshiAnalyst

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Posted: 11 years ago

#29

What didI ju read!!!
That wa brllliant.

U write a book. U've got urself a buyer 4 sure..

Bas!!!

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Tia

@White-Lies

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Posted: 11 years ago

#30

I'm late. Sorry! I waited for this with such eagerness, and now this has set the bar SO high, I'm worried for myself next week. On the story...

Nandini. Currently an absence in the show. Being well read in the Napster School of Cosmic Literary Brilliance (I have stalked all your works of the past too), I can guess that absences, you paint the best. This OS was very REAL to me. Border conflicts and prostitution work in the precise manner you have elucidated. The facts were there, and the emotions you wove into this fabric of a story made my experience of this narrative personal.

My *gasp* moment was Rudra's appearance. It was delightfully paradoxical. She hates those eyes, but loves the respect they convey. Strange, isn't it? The only set of eyes that do not rake her figure lustfully, are the ones she finds attractive.

Attraction, safety, and time turn into warped winds in this tornado of a story.

Disgust operates on several different levels- towards those men, the Didi-Ma, and the sour vessel of a body that doesn't hold a soul. Above all, the most damaging, is the self-disgust, which you have captured beautifully.

The most intricate link between this story and me, has been the feminine subjectivity crafted to perfection. The "underground" room, and that house is a female dominated space, that fails to provide comfort, protection and assurance. Yet, when the soul is tarnished, the very same disgusting familiarity beckons. Morality and propriety aside, Nandini isn't worried over what the world will think of her. Society be damned. The hurt to the self is a crater of a wound. Who knows what and how much nursing it'll weep for?

In those 9 months, the Nandini was, indeed, reborn.

I just hope I can live up to the expectations that you have just raised by gracing this project with your presence. High pressure.