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Posted: 11 years ago

Thank You! :)
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Thank You! Glad you liked it! :)
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: sairam03

Never read anything like this about the room and Rudra. It's wonderful.


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Posted: 11 years ago
I never knew reading about a room could be so interesting
i love ur analysation
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: What_the

I think you left out a "not" in your note to Sona...

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Going to un-res my previous comment now..

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Unres...for Cures...

The title was apt!!
Indeed, he has been cured by her warm, comforting presence in his life..

Again brilliant use of anaphora...another common factor linking these two pieces!!

The room which oscillates from representing secure warmth of mother's love, to nightmarish fear of abandonment...
If it once comforted him as the one place where her presence lingered, it now haunts him to think of returning...
That this room has witnessed to so much of Rudra's anguish is something we all know...but you brought it out beautifully...

And i loved how her arrival changed the meaning this room holds for him...

And i love these sentences:

His prisoner first, his responsibility later.

His wife first, his confidante later.

His friend first, his desire later.


Especially the last one,... No matter how many gutter posts we love making...the pull between Paro and Rudra never started off with the physical aspect...that came much later..

fear of being abandoned is deep rooted in Rudra,, something that choti has also touched on today, in her Navarasa OS on fear...

And for a moment, as I was reading, i gasped, thinking that his nightmare had come true...
But her hand darts out to hold him...to assure him (and also me) that she is right there... 😊 I am a total sucker for happy endings...

Her very breath comforts him like nothing else can...me loves!!

So have you planned a specific number of drabbles for this series...?
Do you have an end in mind for this story..
Or it would be an ongoing one?

Please God, please let it be the latter...

Cheers
Maya




Thank You so so much! :)

@Bold underlined parts - Allow me to whoop in the air as this was what I was unintentionally and intentionally aiming at! I am so glad that these emotions were able to come across to you! :)

And about the number of drabbles and all - you will know soon enough :)
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: chotidesi

For me, the best part of your writing happens to be the parallelism you use- I really like how you carry themes throughout your piece, because it flows SO well then. I'm personally partial to this as well, but I don't think I'm nearly as skilled as you are- well done, AT!


You are too kind with your words of appreciation and I am much grateful for that but really you are extremely skilled and I really like reading your work so your words mean even more to me, thank you so much! :)
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: What_the

I like to read the piece along with the companion..sorry, I am obnoxious like that..😃

So res-ing till the next part is up...

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Ok...to be honest, at first i was wondering how these two pieces are linked...and then my irritatingly slow mind realised...the reassurance...that they wordlessly give each other...
I am here for you, I belong to you and I will never leave you..

Contemplation was just lovely AT...
Her longing subdued by her hesitation to be openly affectionate...
And his silent message, which she can hear loud and clear
Sometimes gestures do convey so much more than words ever could...

I esp loved when you said "disgruntled" hand...what an apt word to describe her emotions..

Haaye...the bike ride...It had me going back to fond memories of curving roads, rushing wind, setting sun...
But ummm...personal musings aside..☺️

I loved all the little references - his and now theirs, helmet that he had fastened...
All of it clearly showing how the equation has changed between them..

I have loved all your drabbles in this series so much, I never imagined I would be able to choose a favorite...

But I think, gun to head, Contemplation would come to mind...
for the sheer feel-good factor..

I loved the anaphoric technique you employed so well...it just enhanced the overall reading experience!!!

Thank you for brightening up my weekend with this lovely drabble...

Love
Maya


Thank You so much! Glad you liked the drabble! :)

And yes, the reassurance part was the link between the two. Also glad you noticed the 'disgruntled hand' part! :)
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: lourel24

"His prisoner first, his responsibility later. His wife first, his confidante later. His friend first, his desire later." . this line was beautiful expressing their developed relationship n feeling at once.loved it


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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: dumas

loved the update Rae amazing as ever only you can always out do your self even when you brilliant you still find a way loved the emotions the way you describe the scene you that you create in our mind amazing loved that even in her sleep she can still comfort him bring him out of his past loved it thanks for the pm.


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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: aruni50218

Whoa again. I really like how you explained the reason for Rudra's sleeping pose... 😳


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