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Another beautiful treasure of 375 words...

Just Wow!

Originally posted by: Arshi67

I really liked how you built up to his acceptance that he needed her.

Starting with an outsider's view of him and culminating with his own self reflection.

Clever.

Originally posted by: yoga123

Awesome...thanks for the PM

Originally posted by: anisa79

loved the way he melted down and realise he needs her!

Originally posted by: What_the

This was lovely...

Your writing is so poignant...their emotions come across so well, I feel my throat constrict as I mentally will Parvati to be there for Rudra...to be there with her dreams, to make up for his nightmares..

Loved the way you wrote that being with Rudra gave Parvati the desire to leave her fears behind and dream again, of a life with him...its a beautiful thought..

You are executing this series perfectly - their contrasting perspectives have been very well-written and are an absolute pleasure to read..

Love

what_the (Maya)

PS: Have res-ed Intertwined for now...will read later...

Originally posted by: aruni50218

I read it again and still havent cottoned on. Let me read leisurely and comment. I am sure i'm missing something 😕

Originally posted by: mistyrains

I was left a little weepy eyed after this piece. Its so well written, although no surprises there. But there are so many lines that have left me speechless here. Lines which I'm not likely to forget any time soon. In fact I think I'm going to take out a notebook and jot them down for future reference! For instance, he needed her insanity to make him sane and he need her dreams to make up for his nightmares. Such poetical, lyrical lines. Then another part that stood out for me was the analogy you may have drawn consciously or subconsciously between his physical demeanour and the thoughts rioting within him. I mean we see his rigid stance, but his mind is mellow acknowledging these new sensations. And even before we have seen this umpteen number of times, when he thinks something, does something absolutely different. Amazing, amazing drabble, my favourite till now.

It also reminded me of this quote I read just yesterday night. Reminded me of RR then, and now this piece.

"I loved her not for the way she danced with my angels, but for the way the sound of her name could silence my demons."

Originally posted by: liya96

continue as soon as you can.. All have been amazing!

Rae - do you need a virtual hug? Sending you a huge hug your way🤗.

I don't remember if i commented on this thread earlier - but i did read the drabbles. And loved everyone of them. Frankly i like your writing so well that if i see you as the TM i almost always peek in. You capture emotions so darned well. And you did so here too. Very well done.

And since i am years older than you and advice is free: Write for yourself. Its wonderful to get feedback. Especially if the feedback is what you are looking for (be it constructive criticism, validation of your skill, whatever). However, at the end of the day, your real target audience, the one person you really need to satisfy, is you. I know what i am talking about 'coz i have been through the whole gamut. But like i said, this is free advice. Lena ho to lo.

All the best,
Kat

Originally posted by: lourel24

superb