Four Shot: SAY GOOD-BYE--Part 3, Pg 26 (updated--June 17th)

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Maya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#141

Navin-sa, I can't get this story out of my head...

I keep coming back to this thread, hoping that you would have updated...

Please update soon...can't wait to read what happens next!

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what_the (Maya)

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ICanDoThis

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Posted: 11 years ago

#142

It would be Madness not to be Totally Blown Away by Napstermonster's Incredible talent.

What a True Labour Of Love from you to us,
your devoted readers ( i am utterly devoted to u, i hope u dont mind)

What a True Labour Of Love from paro the pari towards her beloved majorsaab. Her heart and soul.
Her deepest emotions so beautifully portrayed by u. The bittersweetness of the immense love poised to embrace the grief of leaving her majorsaab. To bravely face alone the loss and separation.

What an entrance he made into part 2, his electrifying presence demanding complete and riveted attention,
Increasing excitement with each sentence.
Building up his passion and intensity of emotions for paro.

I cant even imagine where ur enticing us to next, napsterji!
but we gonna follow With huge anticipation...

... It would be Madness Not to

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Samina

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DDC1

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Posted: 11 years ago

#143

Navin Baisa,

Waiting for the update .. please ?

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Chamkeeli22

@Chamkeeli22

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Posted: 11 years ago

#144

Your writing is sheer magic!! Loved it! I keep checking back in for updates... so, i join your other fans in requesting for the next part soon 👏👏👏

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1sarun

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Posted: 11 years ago

#145

Beautiful write up, loved reading it. You've captured all the emotions nicely, but to think of the final goodbye, its heartwrenching. You're truely have a way with words, i'm loving this PaRud more and more, hope the cv's are reading your stories and incorporate some of the scenes in the show, it would be worth watching.

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surenkal

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Posted: 11 years ago

#146

Oooh lucky. I got to see this

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seeta naipaul

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Posted: 11 years ago

#147

wow this is great

so emotional

please PM me when you update

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-NatureLover-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#148

uff...from so many days I was trying to comment on this piece...you know why??? Because once I read your work, I don't know what to write and how to convey what I want to...and just a mere "brilliant update" or "wonderful update" don't do justice to your work😆

So coming back to this piece, I just LOVE this...

Paro..Paro...I just want to give her a big hug...

Telling good bye to your loved ones is never easy and Paro is fighting to do the same...I just loved how you described her helplessness with Maithili, Aman, her Bapu-sa...I loved that part...

And Rudra😆...I will not be surprised if I get to know that he knew what his beautiful and innocent wife is up to...no wonder he was clinging to her like a child who is afraid that he will get lost in the crowd..

This two are perfect balance of innocence and evilness...well, you know who the innocent is and who the evil is😆

That's what I like about this couple...one is selfless to the core and the other is selfish to the core...one wants to just give love and the other, like a thirsty man, wants to suck every drop of love ...one can even leave eveything for her lover and one can destroy everything for his lover...

I know this is not related to the story but can't stop writing this...this is the differnce between Laila and Paro...long time back someone was having a discussion about how Paro's love is different as compared to Laila's when what both are doing is same, forcing him into a relationship which he is not ready for..

Well, they should read this shot and they will know the difference...

Paro's love wants to give whereas Laila's love is demanding..

Paro's love is pure whereas Laila's love is all about her physical need...

Paro's love is belief that they are meant to be together whereas Laila's love is a forceful...she is forcing her as well as him...

Laila wants him to burn in his past..so that he can come to her to find comfort in the "thing" she provides him...and Paro wants to make him a better man, a man free from his ugly past...

You know, I use to have some sympathy for Laila, just because of her "8 year equation" but now seeing her extent of selfishness to get Rudra all the sympathy has evaporated in the thin air..😆

You know I wanted to write a scene of Laila in my recent TS but after her come back in the story, I just can't put the writer and the person who I am, to write anything related to her other than being a vamp...and initially I had thought something good for her, which I wasn't able to execute...

So Navin-sa, Now best of Luck for today ...hope today it's your turn...it's not like I am not waiting for the other writer😆 Just being impatient to read your take on disgust...will be waiting..

Love..

Sambhavi...

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Navin

@napstermonster

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Posted: 11 years ago

#149

MY WONDERFUL readers:

This weekend, I promise to finish up on the Third (and final) part of Say GOODBYE: Three Shot--I'll be up by Monday evening, I promise! But in the meantime, I would be doing you all a HUGE dissservice if you didnt read the new series that I, and NINE other writers are putting together for your reading pleasure! Here is what I've been upto, please read, comment and bookmark for future. Here is what kept me busy this weekend!:

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Okay.

Well, here it is. Arent you bored on weekends? We all are, right? So I thought, why dont we come up with a way to make sure that the writers who write on Rangrasiya--all your favorite fan fiction writers---actually guarantee that every weekend you wont be bored, there will be something new based on Parud to read?

So, the people who you readers like to read were chosen, and then we bullied/forced them into agreeing to write EVERY SATURDAY AND SUNDAY FOR THE NEXT NINE WEEKS! The writers will be writing using one common idea--Emotions.

So what does it mean for you, the reader? Well for god's sake, comment, Like and TELL YOUR FRIENDS! Weekends without Paro and Rudra just got fun again--because we'll WRITE about them!

THE STORIES ARE RIGHT HERE: (FIRST ONE UP IS MY OWN)

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/106220300

All we writers ask is--if we work for you, you comment for us! If you are a silent reader, baisa--say something! And spread the love! Tell your friends!

17 more stories coming up, from 9 different writers! Comments to banta hai!

-Navin

Edited by napstermonster - 11 years ago