The Inheritance of Loss (a series) - 04. The Muse/Paro

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shilpa

@mrsp

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

This is just a quick post to say loved the piece on thakur.will come back to this later when i have more time.The magpie and the Monarch seeking acceptance from each other for their misgivings?

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payal

@ps_rocks

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

beautifully written👏.

loved it

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Kashish

@Couch_Potato

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: _SenbonZakura_
MINE.

This. This ghost of a man. This.

What am I supposed to say about this piece?

Yes, he is a deluded man... But he wasn't the one created the delusions. Its all of his ancestor's blame.

And that is what I love about the character. So drowning in pride.. Pride, that isn't even his to own... Yet, that is the only thing he thrives on.

And such brilliantly portrayed how hollow and meaningless it all is actually.

And the what ifs and could haves... Those are the ones I always love. Aren't those a writer's bread and butter? A dreamer's reason to exist? The what-ifs and could-haves... Haaaye.

KD! Bahot accha likha hai! Sacchi!

You know I got the inspiration for this piece from your OS? You mentioned Thakur in his haveli in your fic na and bas waheen se this happened. And you see what I meant about the whole rhyming thing? Annoying isn't it?

And how do you always manage to leave a comment where I wanna highlight some parts and just sigh? Anyways, I'm solo glad you liked this and yes, I adore Thakur's character just cuz he isn't inherently evil. A victim in his way and wrong in most places but a victim no less.

Thank you soo much Anks! Next up is Rudra! :D

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Kashish

@Couch_Potato

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Posted: 11 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: niyoti
This is beautiful!
Absolutely glorious piece of writing!

Every word ( Not a single one of them wasted might i add) has found it's mark.

Insightful. Evocative. Thought Provoking.

Mala and Tejawat are intriguing characters and you've done a fabulous job of delving into their psyche. They are not truly evil, nor golden. Grey. They stand in that shadowed valley of unflinching rightness and immoral wrongness, crossing over every once in while.

This week has been a spectacular treat. I had a glimpse into the inner workings Mohini and Laila, earlier in the week by ChotiDesi and today i get this delectable piece of writing on Mala and the Thakur.

Truly in awe of how you've fleshed them out, made them three dimensional.

I've always been intrigued as to why Mala ran off. I do not want her to be coloured as the oft shown sacrificial mother of daily soaps. I want the writers to experiment with her character, to delve into her psyche as you have and show us the inner machinations of her thought process, show us that perhaps she really might have been that magpie, seized with wanderlust and a thirst for freedom.

It is undoubtedly heart breaking that she left. I want to here her story regardless of whatever it may be. I quote mrsp "Thank you for writing in an innovative and poetic way about such a sensitive subject.Mothers who abandon their children often have the saddest tales to tell"

The Thakur had me intrigued since the day his eyes softened as Mala spoke of her son. When he spoke of parampara he had me wondering, did he ever really have a choice?I've been waiting for a take on him for a while now and I am very delighted to have found The Monarch.

Thank you for both the pieces.

Cheers!
N

Thank you. Thank you, thank you, thank you. That is all I can come up with in reply. Your comment left me with a warm glow.

I think that is one of the biggest strength of this show. The characters and how they all are various shades of grey. No one is absolutely anything and that is what makes it soo much fun to play with them and figure out how they got there and why they made the choices they did and how do they justify it to themselves. You can't say he/she is a bad person and just leave it at that.

I'm eagerly waiting for Mala's backstory as well. And Thakur's love for her has always intrigued me. And I too, like you hope they don't go down the sacrificial route. That has been done to death and if anything this show has managed to take the clichs and up them a notch so far. Here's hoping the same happens with Mala.

Thank you once again for reading and dropping me such a lovely comment. Really keen to know what you think of the upcoming pieces now.

- K

Edited by Couch_Potato - 11 years ago

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Kashish

@Couch_Potato

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Posted: 11 years ago

#25

Originally posted by: mrsp
This is just a quick post to say loved the piece on thakur.will come back to this later when i have more time.The magpie and the Monarch seeking acceptance from each other for their misgivings?

Thank you so much. I'm looking forward to your take on it. Personally I think it's more like solace from their deeds and shadows. I think they serve as each other's refuge from their choices and past. Both of them have things they are running from and I get a feeling neither of them has shared it with the others.

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Kashish

@Couch_Potato

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Posted: 11 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: ps_rocks
beautifully written👏.
loved it

Thank you. 😳

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Ankita

@_SenbonZakura_

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+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#27

Aap post karo. Hum stalk karenge!

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Kashish

@Couch_Potato

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#28

a/n: Trying a new style for the first time. Would love to know what you think on this piece.

iii

The Maniac

Peace:

All his life he has been chasing an illusion like a man possessed. He refuses to admit it's a mirage of a woman.

Nature:

Anger, they say, is another facade of madness. If he didn't lose his temper, he'd have lost his mind.

Sorrow:

People think of him as a spewing volcano, thundering and loud. But underneath all the fire, under layers of molten lava, there is a barren land of ash. Vacant and vast. So quiet, a single breeze could wreck havoc. Leave echoes that could raise tornados and crumble him to the ground. Turn him to dust.

Nomad:

The world is broken into absolutes. Good, bad, right, wrong, love, hate, fight, fate and everyone's divided by the choices they make. There are consequences to choices one makes. He knows the consequence bad choices can have, understands their impact on those left behind. That's why he prefers to tread on the thin line between - the no-man's land.

Love:

He believes there is only one force more fatal than death, more suffocating than hope, more unfathomable than evil and, only one that can outlast time. And he's sworn never to have anything to do with it.

Family:

Blood may run thicker than water but land is where it all starts from, land is where it all ends. And his brothers in arms have raised him better (held him better) than familial bonds ever could.

Dreams:

Everything he touches turns to ash. One day though, he'd like to see something turn to gold.

Beauty:

Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder so he drinks to forget his eyes.

Envy:

The only thing he envies them is their blissful ignorance - their unshaken blind absolute faith. In gods, in humans, in life.

Fear:

He's been denying himself for so long that he's afraid he's going to swallow the world whole if he gives into his heart. Then he meets her. Now he's afraid she's going to break him open and steal his soul.

Edited by Couch_Potato - 11 years ago