The Inheritance of Loss (a series) - 04. The Muse/Paro - Page 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Umm..intense.did u mean to say mala is not as clueless as she is portrayed?? If she left her nest with a helpless chick only for her own skin,i can never forgiv her..
but y wud she feel jealous of rudra now? Didnt get it..




Ps: anky,lovely take on d lovely piece 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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UPDATE!

UPDATE!

HUMKO CHAAHIYE UPDATE!

THAKUR WALA POST KARO!

HUM KO KOTA JAANE SE PEHLE PADHNA HAI!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Oldestfan

I love stories told through characterizations of fauna. I am a HUGE fan of Call of the Wild and White Fang, which are stories about animals humanized. And i have been waiting for a take on Mala for a long time.

I liked this story a lot. I love your writing style, and I imagined lonely beaches, towering cliffs and a sort of arrested momentum of a free fall!

Are you going to hate me if I say something though? In the show, the Thakurayain is supposed to be very spiritual, a great bhakt of Bholenaath... She named her son after him fir Gods sake! And she raised Parvati with the same sensibilities... Fate, the path of God, giving up your life to His vision for you... A strong sense of duty... What caused her to change? And she went back twice for her son.. But he was gone! And she married the Thakur and she is obviously fond of him too! Somehow those secrets are not quite revealed with the arc of this story.

Having said that, I am quite happy to take the literary liberty of choosing to ignore this aspect ( we will let the cvs deal with that, shall we) and focus on something that always has ifascinated me... The female wandering spirit. Yearning for freedom. Crushed by it. Yearning then for ... A golden cage, big enough to pretend that she is free!

Thanks for this lovely story!


Thank you soo much. The Thakurain has always given me those vibes of a being trapped and when I started to write she just somehow took on this form and yeah. Basically thank you. I'm glad this worked for you. Also, those scenarios you mentioned have acted as such triggers for me. Now I want to write more on her along those lines. That might be such a good thing though.


Also why would I hate you? In fact I wanna thank you! Honestly I have missed a few epis in the middle and this served as a quick recap. I did take a few intentional creative liberties but I know for a fact that I will now be thinking about what you mentioned. I love the writers of this show, each character has soo many dimensions that can be explored and I'm really enjoying playing with them all. I would definitely want to figure this riddle out. Why did she change? What happened to her faith and where did she get the strength?


Also these lines - The female wandering spirit. Yearning for freedom. Crushed by it. Yearning then for ... A golden cage, big enough to pretend that she is free! - I loved the way you described it soo well.


Thank you soo much for reading and commenting. I hope you enjoy the other parts too.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ipkknd-fan

That was great!
Loved it :)


Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: SherryGS

Holy cow! That was an amazing piece of writing. I loved the description of Mala. I think many of us RR fans are waiting to see what her true explanation is and are trying to figure her out. I wrote on her myself but I cannot come close to your poetic words. 👏


Thank you soo much for your kind words! You know Mala is just such a fascinating characters and she's wrapped up in questions and a nature that is quite contradictory to her past which makes her one of the easiest yet difficult characters to write on if that makes any sense. Anyhow please do share the link to your piece with me. I'd love to read your take on her. All and any takes on Mala are always welcome. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Jaz1990

Welcome welcome welcome!

That was brilliant !! Love the way u write


Thank you sooo much! I'm soo happy to know you enjoyed it. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: mrsp

What a wonderful piece of writing!We can feel the magpies sense of claustrophobia not being able to unfurl her wings to feel the wind beneath them and not feel that exhilaration of soaring flight.Yes there are many women for whom marriage becomes oppresive and a burden.They want a chance to spread their wings and just experience that freedom of non dependance and self worth.Was this Malas story?Only time and the cvs will tell.

There is ofcourse the consequences of fleeing to find your freedom and these must be unbearable for a mother.The guilt will always haunt you and the ache for your child will never cease but surprisingly being a woman and a mother I understand why some women take this step.They are not monsters,they are people whose astitva has been crushed who are drowning in their own mire.To escape is often their only way to survive.Mothers who abandon their children often have the saddest tales to tell and my feeling is that this will also be the case for Mala.Thank you for writing in an innovative and poetic way about such a sensitive subject.I eagerly await your take on the other characters.


Thank you for such a heartfelt comment. There is nothing I can add to what you have already said but just that I completely agree with you and wish that the codes for what is considered socially moral and immoral and right and wrong were not so one-dimensional. Nobody is born evil or heartless and even the worst of mankind has a story to tell. I'm really pleased to know this worked for you. Coming up next is Thakur.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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The Monarch

Raja Thakur they call him out of respect and it sounds like a taunt, a weight he crumbles under, a curse he can't outrun.


The shadows of his past (not his, never his) overshadow the dawns of his morrow, engulf his life. He's a ghost of his ancestors. Some nights he's a keeper of glories past, others the manifestation of their vice. They swirl in his veins and haunt his mind.


The ancestral haveli, a national heritage site, houses more than just their artifacts, is more than just a testimony of their lavish lives. It's a prison he's been assigned for a crime committed before his time.


On those rare occasions when he goes into the city sometimes, he can feel their eyes taunting, full of spite. There are legends and folklore of an era gone by and he tries to recreate it, be a worthy heir.


He prefers to mistakes the fear for respect in their cowering eyes, sometimes illusions are better than lies. He's not delusional, just caught up in pride.


When he saw her, his little magpie. She was the perfect answer, the suitable ally. Nave and innocent; regal and giving without even having to try.


After a long day's struggle, twisted out of shape caught up in a war where there are no good guys. When he heads back to the palace (prison) he calls his home, her blind devotion (it's love, it has to be love) soothes his bleating soul, rests his questioning mind.


He could have been a different man, he sometimes thinks, lived a different life. But his crown weighs heavier than his heart and his heart (much like his royal lineage), is never satisfied.

Edited by Couch_Potato - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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MINE.

This. This ghost of a man. This.

What am I supposed to say about this piece?

Yes, he is a deluded man... But he wasn't the one created the delusions. Its all of his ancestor's blame.

And that is what I love about the character. So drowning in pride.. Pride, that isn't even his to own... Yet, that is the only thing he thrives on.

And such brilliantly portrayed how hollow and meaningless it all is actually.

And the what ifs and could haves... Those are the ones I always love. Aren't those a writer's bread and butter? A dreamer's reason to exist? The what-ifs and could-haves... Haaaye.

KD! Bahot accha likha hai! Sacchi!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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This is beautiful!
Absolutely glorious piece of writing!

Every word ( Not a single one of them wasted might i add) has found it's mark.

Insightful. Evocative. Thought Provoking.

Mala and Tejawat are intriguing characters and you've done a fabulous job of delving into their psyche. They are not truly evil/black, nor golden.

Grey.

They stand in that shadowed valley of unflinching rightness and immoral wrongness, crossing over every once in while.

This week has been a spectacular treat. I had a glimpse into the inner workings Mohini and Laila, earlier in the week by ChotiDesi and today i get this delectable piece of writing on Mala and the Thakur.

Truly in awe of how you've fleshed them out, made them three dimensional.

I've always been intrigued as to why Mala ran off. I do not want her to be coloured as the oft shown sacrificial mother of daily soaps. I want the writers to experiment with her character, to delve into her psyche as you have and show us the inner machinations of her thought process, show us that perhaps she really might have been that magpie, seized with wanderlust and a thirst for freedom.

It is undoubtedly heart breaking that she left. I want to hear her story regardless of whatever it may be. I quote mrsp "Thank you for writing in an innovative and poetic way about such a sensitive subject.Mothers who abandon their children often have the saddest tales to tell"

The Thakur had me intrigued since the day his eyes softened as Mala spoke of her son. When he spoke of parampara he had me wondering, did he ever really have a choice?I've been waiting for a take on him for a while now and I am very delighted to have found The Monarch.

Thank you for both the pieces.

Cheers!
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Edited by niyoti - 11 years ago

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