OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Forgiveness (completed) - Page 18

Lovely Part 3, Napster. Loved it all but especially the PaRud scene in the cell where she snuggles into him, then Paro's words with Jasheem Khan, and Rudra's strange disquiet. Those were the heart-warming bits. The ones that fed the mind and made me stand up and applaud were the Kesari Ram reveal and the Rudra's flesh tearing as he breaks the one-way mirror to enter the cell. And the audience standing along with Rudra gave a whole new meaning to 'Chekhov's Gun'. So, lovely, lovely story fully engaging the heart and mind!! Thanks.

The yesterday portion of this was BRUTAL. My heart broke for Paro. While Rudra eventually went to her; I'm not convinced, what a horrible ordeal, and boy was he luck that she eventually forgave him. Perhaps to your credit we see just how forgiving Paro is, 1st with Rudra in the past and then with Laila. Beautiful parallel, difficult to fathom.

Xams over...Yipppeee!!!!! Now I can finally devote myself to lots n lots of OS reading 😃
Started YESTERDAY with the 1st part...Hopefully all the parts would be over by TOMORROW 😳
Till then...RES

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I came back as I promised 😃
The effect your writing had on my mind, body and soul is maddening. You made me forget to eat and sleep and study as I read voraciously every waking moment of my Sunday.
That's what I call really powerful writing, Napster baisa!
For the tomorrow part: That was one beautiful scene! Paro asking for forgiveness from Laila, I always though she deserved atleast that and you gave it to me exactly how I wanted it.
Rudra's twin boys - how cute! Loved that little part about Laila cuddling the infants. Laila can't hate anything that is Rudra's, not the babies, not even Paro. It gave me a lot of peace reading that update, before I went for the absolutely contrasting latter parts.
For the yesterday parts: Sadistic as I am, even I found it a lil disturbing to read it this time. Paro's pain made my heart ache in a way it had done never before and in between I had to close my eyes and exhale a few times before I could continue reading again. The part about JK being the traitor in BSD was a well maneuvered revelation, I felt my heart speeding up as the time for the interrogation neared. The updates filled my heart with varied emotions-anger, sadness, pain, compassion- it didn't help much that I had read the tomorrow part just an hour earlier where things appeared so much better and Rudra wasn't the beast and Paro wasn't suffering in an inhumane way.
The part where Rudra cuddles Paro did strange things to my heart. Even in the backdrop of all the violence, even though I was hating him at that point I felt butterflies in my stomach reading his desperation and the way he touched her. And when he broke In that glass along with the other BSDs helping him - I almost screamed with joy! That said, the hero today was Ram Mohan though- if it wasnt 2am ryt now I would have clapped my hands and danced around as that bullet hit JK. Whatta climax!
One thing is sure - I'm gonna be the 'Rudra of IF' for ur future updates now. M gonna stalk them, read them and savour them like a maniac-u hav affected me THAT much! 😆
Will wait more than eagerly for the next update :)

Brilliant.Just reading on saturday night and what a thriller!Reads like a movie script.Fast paced and exciting action scenes.Especially liked the scene where Rudra was charging through the mirror,felt his urgency and desperation.Really very well done.This piece of writing had a best seller feel(Tom Clancy,Wilbur Smith type).

Superb!

Oh that was too nerve racking...I wonder how he would repent to what he did to paro

Originally posted by: napstermonster

Baisa--Thank you! Check your PM, I got your email, and I've been all shy and dithering and happy and touched--but I will be responding with a mile long review of one of MY favorite writers' works ( and by that I mean you!) soon!

Very touching, i almost cried when Paro said good bye to Aman. When Paro could see her death in the traitor's eyes, why other BSD personnel and Rudra in pariicular couldn't see it? Unforgivalble.
Waitiing for next one, about Rudra's repentance.

Napster,

This was so scary that it was brilliant!!!! I hope you write a looong take your time love story for Rudra and Paro to make up just for this part. You are awesome!!👏👏👏