-SS- O Saathi Re INTERVAL part-pg 36 - Page 14

Saaz...you have jadoo in your hath...I am convinced that RBO should have been written by you and no one else...I wish and wish and wish.

I really enjoy your Shanak. It is taking it back to a whole new level, You recognized how the show should have progressed, you know how to connect with the audience, you write it for the love of the characters and it shows in your updates. Just perfect. The last 2 updates, Shaan shines in the story, I know it must sound strange, specially when khanak is finally doing we all wished for, but I realized by doing so, Shaan's character just glows into the story. We see his part coming out such a beautiful way, the petulance, the jealousy, the attention lost...and on the other hand, the grudging respect for his wife, his attraction to her balancing the conflicting emotions, and finally coming out clean...cannot hold a grudge forever, true to his heart and Khanak. Really enjoyed the way they talk about Sooraj, simple, straight and clean. I really like the way you portray simplicity, innocence, ease and the effortless relationship they share with each other and rest of the folks in the house, brings a smile to face and warmth to my heart.

I read your other FF.

For ik hi khwaab: It is one the best SS I have read on IF. 👏👏👏

You had all elements of a story, the suspense, the love, the longing, the teasing, the humor, the happy ending 😊. I enjoyed it a lot. The way it plays out, awesome. It is my fav, right there with Katra. You are killing me with your writing, by not writing enough. I totally identified with the characters, they are so real, you based it in Bombay, loved to know that part, I am from dilli and I can tell you, it could have been happening in dilli too, basically, anyone reading would have identified with it easily. It has a universal appeal, it could be happening anywhere. You connect so beautifully with the audience. I am in awe, it will be hard to get off it.

I read tum pukar lo also, my all time fav song. I really liked it. Somehow I am not into that whole MMS track at all...I wish there were better and more sensible ways the dhulwadi track could come into being. It was a complete hash. Just awful. So your take on it is soothing to my nerves. I have yet to read other 2. Saiving them for next weekend.

Btw I did like to all your updates 😃. Thanks for sharing the links Saaz, I really enjoyed reading them. Saaz I have so many questions...I wish I could talk to you 😊

Maybe one day I will get lucky. I hope so.

Hey Saaz,

Wonderful update……….loved it……….it was awesome.👏 👏 👏 👏

Hey just catch up with the last two update sorry couldn't comment earlier as I was little busy. Loved the updates it was feb Loved their morning romance loved his character its very real sometime matured to phir sometime little badmaash baccha.😉 So she is getting expert & now also getting herself involve in the important business decitions…….wow that's amazing & our poor shaan is facing tuff time of his life. Failures are actually difficult to diegest. Awww. Poor guy sunil is too rude with him. Special Wow abt describing Dining table sence when her mangalsutra peeps out while serving him & immediate change of emotions in him. U are amazing in describing Emmotions & atmosphere.👏 👏 👏 👏

Loved their bedroom convo. loved Khanaks answer when Shaan hesitates to talk abt Suraj. The Kiss Shastra was fantastic. Filhaal to dono confuse hain ki kiski mastery hain is Kiss Shastra mein. Well confirm ho jaye to hame bhi bata dena.😆 (kidding) loved their cute nok jhok haaye it was camplite shanak.

I must say beautiful potraiyal of emotions as the update was filled up with love, care, longing, anger, teasing, frustration, romance, *sigh* & what can say abt ur writing it feels as if I am watching them in real. I can so fell whole the update frame to frame. Thank u so very much for writing this beautiful SS.👏 👏 👏 👏

Waiting for the next one.😃

Love

Pranjal.

Wow ...

Ego issues that wifie is better than him. Thats bad, but they managed to control it i guess... The fact that they can go back to feeling their love for each other remains and strongly comes out at the end...

Love your writing Saaz...

wanna know how it goes ahead ... next update kab?

~Cheers,
Dish

Originally posted by: SachDJ

Saaz, next update please.

THANKS TO EVERYONE ESPECIALLY

PART VII

A couple of months ..Khanak's marketing idea proves to be a hit with the investors..the project takes off ..and investors money seems to be showing some fruit..during one of the meetings..

Investor: Sunil saab, yahan pe tho bahut se ideas aapki bahu ka hai..ek meeting pe usse bhi bula lena chahiye..

Sunil: Jee zaroor..Akshay..bahoo ko phone lagao..tumhara bhai kahan hai?

Akshay: he is on his way..(on his phone): Jee phone nahin lag raha hai..

Sunil: Mehta Saab..next meeting zaroor..

Investor2: Hamein meeting shuru karni chahiye..

Sunil: (grits his teeth..looks at Akshay): where is he?

Just then, he enters..

He: sorry ..doosre meeting se aate waqt traffic mein phass gaya..

Akshay can smell alcohol on his breath..

Akshay: Are you okay?

He: Yes..of course..

They start the meeting..his mind travels to the previous one..which was a repeat performance of every meeting he has attended so far..investors asking to meet his wife..the real brains behind the project..the last meeting rankled him to no end..the words from the investor's stooge.."Bhabhee jee ko app salary tho dete honge for this idea..i mean yeh naya walla aap hi ka hai..ya yeh bhi.."and the two stooges laughing away..he stumbled with his answer..he had to stop thinking in order to get to the next meeting..the scotch he consumed shall go a long way he hopes..

The current meeting is almost over..everyone shakes hands and leaves the meeting room..

Sunil: Where were you? (looking at him)

He: got stuck in traffic..

Sunil: Traffic? Iske pehla walla meeting do ganthe pehle khatam ho chukaa tha..

He: Agar aapko mere saath koyee problem hai..tho fire kar deejeye..

Sunil: WHAT??

Akshay: Dad!!..Chotey..whats wrong?

He: I need some time off..Main iss project ke liye pichle chaar mahine se non stop kaam kar raha hoon..

Sunil: Chaar mahine??..Tum bache nahin ho..Main iss karobar ko pichle pandhra salon se chala raha hoon..aur Akshay pichle panch saalon se.. aur mahashay ko char mahino mein hi..vacation..yeh koyee khel nahin hai..

He: You know something..

Akshay: Dad..aap chaliye..main baat karta hoon..

He: No..kissiko mujhse baat karne ki zaroorat nahin hai..I am fine!!

He walks out..

Akshay stares at his brother..and is worried..he had noticed that his brother has been extremely aloof and indifferent for the past month or so..in the beginning, he thought it was him stumbling..getting the ropes..now he is not sure..its something else..he suspects something..but the favorite bahu of the house seems herself..Akshay tells himself he is reading too much into nothing!

He is late again..She has some wonderful news to share..but he is late again..the past few months have been the busiest..she is finally done with her course this week..and hopefully he has had a break at work..Aada has been saying that the mill project is going very well..but his attitude in front of the family towards her has remained aloof..only to make up when they are in the bedroom..it is like he is angry about something..or something is worrying him..but when they are together, he forgets about it..or at least wants to..she therefore does not push it..if she is his solace..she wants it to be so..but she can bet the news she has is going to drive him crazy..maybe they shall have more time together..

He has driven into the parking garage..but waits in the car for some time..he shall see her..and be reminded of all the meetings..he does not want to see her..but then again..he cannot be angry with her for long..he maintains his pride in front of everyone..he is aloof..he keeps to himself..and then in the bedroom..he tells himself..no one is there to check on him..on his pride..the sane part of him tells him..she has nothing to do with it..nothing..but the insane..irrational..illogical side takes over..it is she..she has everything to do with it..because she is everything..and he is..nothing!!!!

His phone rings..he gets out of his thoughts..

He: hello, Natasha..??..

She is fast asleep when he gets into the room..he gets into the bathroom..has a shower..brushes his teeth..comes out and walks to the bed..lies down..she stirs..

She: Aap aa gaye?..itni dair kyun laga dee??..ek phone tho kiya hotaa..

He: Battery khatam ho gayee thee..

She: (small face): Main soch rahee thee..ke aap mujhe lene aayenge..aaj course ka last day tha..

He: (shuts his eyes in pain): Oh..sorry..main bhul gaya..

She: Koyee baat nahin..woh main aapse kuch poochna chahtee thee..

He: (in deep thought): Hmm..

She: (puts her hand on his back): So gaye kya?

He: (turns): Nahin..batao..

She: Aaj meri saheli JJ mein apni bete ko saath leke aayee..itna chotha sa bachaa tha..

He: Hmm..aur?

She: Kitna chotha..kitna rolu polu..main tho dekhte hi..(hugs herself): pagal ho gayee..Kya aapko bhi bache ache lagte hain?

He: (stares at her innocent face, smiles): Hmm..ache lagte hain..lekin (pulls her nose): tumse zyaada nahin..

She: (moves towards him): Batayiye na..

He: Agar hamare bache honge..tho tumhara course vaghera ka kya hoga..

She: Course tho khatam ho gaya..aur main ghar pe bache ko dekhoongee aur aap office mein..

He: (holds her close runs the tips of his fingers under her blouse): Oh..really!

She: (wriggles..since his fingers tickles..they grin at each other): Boliye na..

He: tumhare language mein bol doon?!..(his lips on her neck): Shubh kaam mein dairee kyun??

She laughs as he unhooks her..and moans as he is hooked to her..

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hmm.. tere kohre badan mein sil jaaungi re
jab karwat lega tu chhill jaaungi re
sang le jaaunga..o piyu re..

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oh where do i start...

i am not all to fond of this guy at the moment. yet at the same time i find myself thinking if only things could've led to this for the show or something along the lines. but. i am not going to compare or go down the if onlys between the show and this. because this is this. the show is almost nothing compared.

she was the go getter. the strong. larger than life. yet at the same time. docile.and far too understanding than needed. so keeping in that. and who he was. the stage that they're at now is not all to surprising nor uncharacteristic.

i still find myself feeling bad for her. almost feeling that she deserves better. not that he is not that better. but at the moment. he is faltering from it. but with that same emotion. i feel bad for him. for his need to be something. and be something independent. not in the shadow of. his need to be seen and recognized and valued. his inability to realize that at the end of the day its not about ego and pride. its about companionship and understanding. its about being selfless.

you do it so well. you bring it out so well.

he forgets it all when in the confines of their room. but he fails to realize why.

i like it!...i really do!