SS~~Maaf kardo khanak- Update FINAL part pg10 - Page 7

Haiii

Originally posted by: -SYS-

Haiii

Such a budthal I am

TOTALLY forgot to read the update.

Forgive!

Anyway what was that crap about this part being boring or whatever?

Its my most favourite part!

Love the introspection, the realization, the apology.

Anand's dialogue about Khanak always turning Shaan into a better person and Shaan's insecurities.

Sigh.

THIS is wonderful and yummy!

🤗

aww yumna your sooooo sweet thanks hun, hope your not dissapointed with the next part xx

hey rainy somehow missed reading ur update.. ol nahi thi 12th-14th...
very very sry dear......i promise next time i will not do late....
ur very very awsome writer all the lines very beautifully written loved it.... loved shanak talk khaas kuch aisa dikhate in rbo....
its fantastic keep up the gud work.....👏👏👏
love u dear....🤗

O na na what's my name o na na what's my name what's my name what's my name!

thanks sneha lol doesnt matter that you were late the fact you read and bore my bakwaas is what matters,thank youuuuuuu

when r u updating next... rainy

Originally posted by: .-BalleBalle-.

O na na what's my name o na na what's my name what's my name what's my name!

Hinnnnnnnnnnnaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!! 🤣 Yep im finally here to give you some comments on your wonderful OS Rafster!! 😃

So sorry for not commenting earlier

Ok 1st part:

Loved it! I was so disappointed with the actual scene in the epi i was really expecting more but this part made up for it :)

Shaan: if you like it that much why are you looking from so far away come closer ill even let you touch it ' and winks at her

^^lmao i loved this! So Shaan 😆

I love how you described the Shaan coming close to Khanak to kiss her and then the water droplet! Hayye! 😍

The ShaNak convo was really good! Well written! 👏 Shaan's intensity was really evident! i really want to see that side of him!

LOL i like the pushpa part! i was wondering why it didnt click to shaan when he came dhulwadi

Shaan is such a burthal itna sab kuch hone ke baad he's asking Anand what's his mistake yeh ladka hai Allah! 😆

Part 2:

Fabulous part! 👏

Aw i love Anand! :) Good way of telling Shaan by narrating his 'friend's' story! 👍🏼

Lol it was funny how he was trying to get it out of Shaan what his mistake was lekin Shaan babu toh burthal ke burthal maha burthal! 😆

LMAOO the baby part was hilarious! 🤣🤣🤣 I can imagine Shaan being all disgusted and irritated 😆

And then Shaan being naughty with 'woh' and khanak teasing him 🤣 Loved it all! Fantastic lines! 👏

OMG the romantic scene was sooo hot and beautiful at the same time!!!! 😍 My favourite part :P 😆 I so loved reading it!!! raftser you seriously are amazing at this do you know! ⭐️

Part 3: Ah Anand is such a smarty! Lovely convo between him and Shaan :)

Haha Anand saying he's scared of the dark was funny 😆

OMGGGG the mandir scene has gotta be the most beautiful thing i have ever read!!!!!

No words Rafia just simply amazing!!! 👏👏👏 I love the whole red roses and red bangles thing! 😍

And then what Shaan says to her! OMGG that would make any girl fall in love with him! 😳

Absolutely beautifully written!

So ye lo rafster here's your long ass comment! hope you're happy! You better be! 😡 🤣

But seriously yeah i enjoyed reading every bit of it!!! You're an amazing writer and your OS was just too good for words! 👏⭐️

lmao hinna this more then compensates for not commenting earlier blad even my amaiiiiii doesnt give me soo much praise lmao

Ok here is the final part of this ss I hope you like it sorry if it's a dissapointment

Pls ignore mistakes etc

And thank you EVERY1 who pressed like or commented really appreciate it

So enjoy and leave comments J

Part 4: Date in Dhulwadi (final part)

After their reconciliation at the mandhir shaan and khanak were walking back in the village and without realising they had reached khanaks house.

Khanak: ghar achuke hain

Shaan: nahin tho humare ghar Mumbai main hai, aur aaj ki raat kyun na hum dono meri RV I mean van main raat betiayen? (shaan smirks)

Khanak: nahin nahin main us va' dabba main nahin rokonngi

Shaan: kyun nahin, bahut comfortable hain, hum dono bahut aram se (smiles) so jaayenge

Khanak didn't get what shaan was referring to, aapko aapne takleef he dikh rahi hai, main aapne maike main sone ja rahe hoon

Shaan: khanakkkkkkk

Khanak enters her house and shaan runs in behind. She goes to switch on the light but the fuse must've gone

Khanak: tsk tsk yeh ab jaana ta, ab kya Karen? Ha main candle jalati hoon

With that khanak goes to the cupboard and takes out a bunch of candles, lights them and spreads them around the room. The room was dimly lit by the candles and all shaan was looking out was how beautiful his wife was glowing in the soft candle light. The light of the flame was being reflected in her big almond eyes and her pouty lips were looking so plump and luscious. Shaan was thinking actually this is better we could not of had a more romantic setting and gets up and hugs khanak from behind.

His hands slipped in beneath her sari and spread across her stomach, sending shivers down khanaks spine and sending her heart into a frenzy. He missed her, he missed how her skin felt like silk, he missed the scent of her hair; like jasmine, he missed the way khanaks body would immediately stiffen at his touch. His hands started to make its way up khanaks body and just as they reached her breast she ran to the other side of the room, leaving a very aroused shaan

Khanak was leaning on a chair breathing deeply in and out, but with each breath all shaan could see was the rising and lowering of khanaks chest, shaan walks towards her and walks his fingers up khanaks back. Khanak clenched onto the side of her saree

Khanak: shaantanu pa-lease mujhe jaane dijiye

Shaan: khanak mujhe aaj maat ruko, kitne dino se mein tumse kitna door raha hoon, sirf main jaanta hoon mujhe kitni takleef hui hai (khanak tries to move but shaan holds on to her shoulders in a firm grip) khanak (he first kisses then bites her on her neck,- to which khanak moves her head to allow him more access and lets out a small moan) ab mein sirf tumhare paas, tumhare bahoon main har pal rehna chahata hoon, (he turns her around to face him and unclips the safety pin holding up her pallu- it slips and khanak immediately covers her chest with her hands and spins outwards away from shaan.

Shaan then tugs onto the saree stoping khanak: kya tumhe bhi yeh dooriyan nahi mehsoos hui?

Khanak could no longer take it, and ran into his arms. They both embraced each other with everything they had, like they were scared that someone was trying to pull them apart. He then lifts her face up but khanak cannot bring herself to open her eyes, so shaan runs his fingers along her cheeks waiting for her to open her sparkling eyes because he wants to look into her eyes as he kisses her. He wants to see her love for him reflected in them. However she just pierces her fingernails deeper into his back making him arch his back outwards. He then pulls at her hair pulling her head back forcing her to opens her eyes.

He then without giving her time to even breathe, looks into her eyes and dives in and kisses khanak, biting slightly on her lower lip allowing khanak to open up and equally respond to the kiss. This kiss was slow, to begin with but as the kiss deepened it became more passionate with both of their hands either behind each others neck or in each others hair. They broke apart to regain their breath, both breathing in and out heavily, shaan goes in for another taste but khanak moves her head to the side and blushes. He then in one clean sweep lifts her off her feet and carries her to the bed. He gently lowers her down as says: khanak are you ready, if you need more time I fully understand, after all I know I really hurt you. Khanak responds by grabbing hold of shaans t-shirt and starts to lift it up and kisses his bare torso. Shaan didn't need any other invitation and leaned in closer'''..and two bodies merged together and moved as one. In the background the song Bahoon ki darmiyan is playing and the candles slowly die out leaving the room in complete darkness.

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The next day anand comes to the house and is thrilled to see the happy couple in the middle of feeding each other lunch

Anand: arey shaan maine sunna hai ke shaher mein tum toh bahut bare kaalikar ho. Toh is khushi ke mokey par ek gaana ho jaaye

Shaan (looking a lil confused) kis khushi main????

Anand: humare pushpa ne aapko maaf kia us mauke ki khuski main, aur ab tho woh mere dimaag nahin khaenge

Shaan and anand both laugh whilst khanak throws them both a stern look and tries to get up when shaan grabs her wrist and pulls her back down

Khanak (blushing): aap kya kare ho, anand dikenge

Shaan: toh kya hua, aur mera khanna ab tak khatum nahin hui, khilao na? (shaan stresses the na and winks at khanak)

Khanak; aap khud khaheye then smiles and leaves the room

Shaan : haiii, uske yeh muskurahat se main fida hoon (then gets lost in his thoughts)

Anand: shaan kidar chale, tho ab kya plan hai, wapas mumbai?

Shaan: nahin aaj ka din main khanak ki saath bitana chahta hoon dhulwadi main, abhi tak main dhulwadi teek se ghuma nahin, aur raat dupahair (sunset) maine uske liye ek bareya surprise arrange kiya hai

Anand: kaisa surprise?

Shaan: Bata dunga, par use pehle tumhe mere liye ek khaam karna hoga

Anand: ha ha banda hazir hain, main sirf apne dosto ko khush dikhna chahati hoon, khaas kar pushpa ko

Anand and shaan get together and start discussing shaans plan

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That day khanak had taken shaan to all her favourite spots in dhulwadi from the fields, to her old school, to the bazaar where shaan had brought her some bangles, traditional jewellery.

Later in the afternoon they return to khanaks home to get fresh and change as shaan said he wanted to return to Mumbai that night, at first khanak was against the idea as she wanted to stay in dhulwadi until her bai and adaa had returned but shaan had convinced her by promising to return together and stay a whole week when her parents return from their pilgrimage.

Shaan was the first to get ready wearing a deep red sharwani and waited for khanak to come out. Khanak got changed into a beautiful red sari with an emerald green border adorned with simple jewellery which shaan had brought with him from Mumbai with the help of his khushboo bhabhi, she looked like a newly wedded bride. She stepped out from behind the curtains and shaan was mesmerised by his wife's beauty, she was glowing and looked soo pure and innocent. She felt his gaze upon her and blushed; this made shaan smile and get up. With each step shaan took towards her she took a step back, she didn't know why but she was feeling really scared in a good way and knew that if he came any closer she would lose herself to him.

Shaan: khanak tum aaj bahot khubsurat aur sexy lag rahe ho, bilkul ek nayee dhulhan ki tarah

Khanak went completely red and hit the wall, this was it she thought, there's no escaping- her heart rate accelerated and she started to feel really hot. Shaan continued walking towards her

Shaan: honestly khanak, I am so fortunate to have such a wife who is not only incredibly beautiful but who is also simple, innocent with a heart of gold, who always thinks of others before herself. Your selflessness and love makes me want to aspire to be a better human being.

Khanak looks down and shaan notices the full moon through the window

Shaan: In films you always hear them comparing their loved ones beauty to the moon, and I always used to laugh thinking what rubbish, no one's beauty can exceed that of the moons but khanak you have proved me wrong. Seriously you are more luminous then that full moon (he points to the full moon and khanak looks out and blushes)

Khanak: ab main janti hoon ke aap choot bol rehe ho

Shaan uses his index finger to move khanaks face back towards him. They both look into each others eyes

Shaan: if only I was I don't want to give you a big head, but this is the truth, your purity and innocence makes you glow and the moon has blemishes but your beauty is flawless. No matter how hard I try one look into your alluring big brown eyes and I forget where I am, your one smile makes her heart stop and beat faster at the same time, and when you blush (he takes a deep breath in and out- and smirks) then I think of only one thing

Khanak: Dhatt and lightly slaps his face to the side, but shaan just gets more aroused by this and places one hand on the wall blocking khanak in so she can't escape and places the other hand on khanaks waist. Khanak closes her eyes as she knew there was no point in trying to fight it, and she too wanted him to kiss her- shaan leans in closer (she could feel his breath on her face), he moves a strand from her face and dives in.

Cough, ahem (shaan and khanak's lips were just milimeters away, shaan makes a fist and pulls it up towards his face, they both turn around to find anand standing in the doorway)

Anand: sorry tum dono busy ho (smiles), main baad main aata hoon ' and is about to leave

Shaan: no no it's nothing like that I was just fixing one of her earings (khanak smiled at shaan impressed by his response)

Khanak: 'main abhi aati hoon, main apni purse lati hoon' and leaves

Shaan turns to anand: everything ready

Anand: yes just the way you wanted

Shaan: thanks yaar, I hope she likes it

Anand: she will love it

Khanak comes back out- toh hum chale?

Shaan puts his arm out as an indication and says chalo

Khanak steps out to see the whole village lit up with fairy lights with everybody standing in the square with a little stage set up on the side. She turns to shaan with a puzzled whats going on type of a look and shaan smiles, she then turns to anand with the same look and shrugs in response.

Mummy the little girl runs up and gives shaan a microphone

Shaan: main aaj dhulwadi ki sab logo ko aaj mere dil ki baat kehna chahata hoon, dekhana hai ke khanak meri zindagi main kitne khaas hain, who hai toh main hoon, usne meri zindagi main humesha roshni layi hai aur maine sirf usko takleef ki alawva kuch nahin diya par I promise khanak ke aaj ki baad mein sirf tumhekhushi ki dhayan dongi.

Khanak is embarrassed at shaans love declaration in front of the whole village but at the same time so happy and touched by his words that it took all of her might not to run and hug him

Shaan starts singing

Tum se seekhe koyi pyaar hota hai kya, rasme hoti hai kya, rishte hote hai kya

Hum ko bhi aye sanam hai tumhare kasam, chaahe jo ho saja hum nibhaayenge wafa

Ehsaas yun dilake,

Ehsaas yun dilake zindagi ho, zindagi badal di

Tune zindagi mein aake, zindagi ho, Zindagi badal di (x2)

Tune pyaar yun nibhaake zindagi ho, Zindagi badal di (chorus)

Tumsa koi dusra is zameen pe hua, to rab se sikhaayat hogi

Tumhaari taraf rukh kisi gair ke hua, to qayamaat se pehle qayamaat hogi

Chorus

Ab gawaara nahin, koi aur bhi ho, jo meri tarha yun tum pe mare

Chhoona to door hai, ab na manzoor hai,

Tune faasle mitaake,

Tune faasle mitake zindagi ho, zindagi badal di

Chorus

Tere tareef gar aaina bhi kaare, tod doon main use dil mera kahe,

Tu hai mera janoon, mere dil ka sukoon, main deewana hoon tera koi kuch bhi kahe

Yeh deewangi badhaake

Yeh deewangi badhaake zindagi ho, zindagi badal di

Chorus

There's a loud round of applauds and causes khanak to break he eye contact with shaan

All the girls when running towards shaan and he laughed but his eyes never left khanak.

Khanak didn't know what to do, at that moment she had fallen in love with her shaantanu all over again, she started to walk towards him, and upon seeing this shaan made his way towards her and just as they were about to come face to face to village women suddenly came in front of khanak and stopped.

Vaillage lady 1: arey khanakri tu bahot kismet waali hai ke tujhe itna acha dulha mil gaaya

Village lady 2: ha jamai babu tujhse kitna pyar kartein hain, aur iske upar bahut ache gaana gaate hain, khash humari kismat main aisa ladka bhi mile (they both giggle)

Khanak: main sach main bahot bagyasharee hoon

Khanak blushes and excuses herself and walks towards anand, in all this time shaan was pretending to be occupied with the kids but was actually eavesdropping into the ladies conversation and smiled thinking no khanak im the lucky one. Shaan then says bye to the kids and walks over to anand and khanak who were both arguing over who talks more nonsence

Shaan: if tum dono ki baatein khatam hogaaye hai, mein apni biwi le chelon

Anand laughs and says kyun nahin

Khanak says bye to anand and walks behind shaan, after walking for about 5mins and escaping the eyes of all the villagers khanak runs up behind shaan and hugs him from behind to which he is pleasantly surprised and stands still soaking in the moment

Khanak: thanku, par is saab ki kya zaroori thi?

Shaan: zaroori thi khanak, I wanted to show you how much you have enriched my life, and I could shout this from the roof tops. I wanted to show how thankful I am that you forgave me (He then takes her hands into his and turns around to face her) I promise khanak to never let you down again (Khanak raises their joint hands and kisses it)

Khanak: yeh saab bhool jaaye ab hum sirf humare aage ki zindagi ki bare mein sochongi. Waise bhi hum kaha ja raha hoon? Aap ne kaha hum aaj raat ko Mumbai ki liye nikhal na hai

Shaan: iske chinta maat karo, aur chup chap mere saath chalo tumhare liye ek aur surprise hai

They walked for another 15mins or so and khanak was starting to tire

Khanak: ab kitne door baki hain?

Shan: kyun tum tak gaaye?

Khanak: nahin tho sirf pooch rehe thi

Shaan: nahin khanak, tumhare dheere se chalna mujhe pata hai ke tum thak chuke ho. Humesha mujh ko nazuk bolti ho aur aaj dekhon khud itni se chalte tak gaaye ho (and laughs)

Khanak: mein nazuk nahin hoon (and stomps her feet)

Shaan just laughs more and then slowly walks up to her, khanak heart starts racing

Shaan: mein apne takat dikhaon?

khanak raises her eyebrows , and the next thing she notices is that she has been swept off her feet, and shaan was now carrying her in his arms. Khanak smiled and wrapped her arms around his neck and they both got lost in each other's eyes again. Shaan continued walking without breaking eye contact, until he finally stoped, and khanak came back to reality. He gently placed her down and by spinning his finger indicated to her to turn around. Khanak was apprehensive but excited at the same time, when she turned around she saw a giant colourful hot air balloon waiting on the ground. Her heart stopped beating, and her eyes welled up.

Shaan came in front of her and said: kaise laga surprise, anand told me that you have never been in an aeroplane and how you wished to travel in the air. So I couldn't get a plane but this is the next best thing (he then goes in to hug her; wrapping his arms tightly around her, then in his husky voice said) and this is more romantic''. But I promise we will go on a holiday very soon somewhere far on an aeroplane (he detaches himself from her to see her reaction- khanak was still rooted to the spot, still in disbelief and overwhelmed with the tears now free flowing down her cheeks. He wipes away her tears with his thumb and kisses her on each cheek and then finally kisses her on her forehead. He then leans his head against hers) Khanak kuch bolo, are you not happy

Khanak looks into his eyes and says: shaantanu yeh meri zindagi ka besht sur- prise hain

shaan : (laughs )besht nahin best

Khanak: wahi wahi

Shaan: hum chale? (khanak nods enthusiastically)

They both enter the hot air balloon and after 10minutes or so they were finally off the ground. As the balloon was rising khanak got scared and tightly gripped onto shaan

Shaan: daro maat, main hoon na

Khanak loosened her grip and they both stayed in a peaceful embrace enjoying the picturesque view and sunset.

Awesome!!! Rafia...it was sexy, smart and a very fitting ending to the whole affair!! Make up yr mind to write more in the future!!🤗👏

Aww cute update.