SaHil TS Searching for Answers Last Part pg 5 - Page 4

Great update Esha 👍🏼.

Originally posted by: mahwash22

Esha!!! You Chupi Rustam!😆

You had me reading this with so much amazement. You had all the right emotions portrayed - it was damn beautiful. 👏

I will start out with giving a review of the first and second part of the story. So here goes:

"He would lose himself in her eyes which led straight to her soul!"

"She had turned his biggest dream into a terrifying nightmare!"

I really enjoyed how you decided to give a picture of how conflicted they both are in the relationship. It was so well written. I could really easily feel their pain and loneliness. God! It always gets to me.

I fell in love with this line.

"He looked innocent yet dangerous! He had the power yet never created fear! He was strong yet vulnerable! He was close yet so far!"

I LOVED how you showed how dangerous The Nawab can be yet he never used it against anyone. You have no idea how much I loved reading that!!!! 😉

Oh, a light smirk came across my face when I read the last part. Yes! Show your Jallad Jin how powerful and strong you really are, Sanam.

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So here goes for part 2 - because you're such a beautiful writer, darling.

Damn, woman! You've got every aspect of how I wanted the story to go.

"He wanted to lose himself in her arms! Feel her close and hold her for good! Forever! But he couldn't. He couldn't."

Oh that angst! That bitterness! That burning emptiness! <3

"Aahil got up and met her eyes. "Agar tumne jawab nahin diya toh mein har roz sharab piyunga! Woh bhi tumhare samne aur tum mujhe rokh bhi nahi sakhti!"

I had tears down my eyes by how ppwerful dialouges you had written for them both. Wow! 👏

"Tum mujhe kya bulati thi... Ja... Jallad Jin! Kya sachme main jallad hoon?! Kya main itna bura hoon! Kya tum mujhse py-- nahi karti?!!" he choked out the last few words. "

I was doing a small victory dance on how Sanam was convinced to save their marriage and show the trie face of Tanveer to Aahil. 😆

- Sweetie, I'm totally in love with this!

Originally posted by: mahwash22

Right! I'm back! 😆 I'm not done yet.

You did a fantastic job, Esha! 👏⭐️ You should definitely write more. You're so talented and I have to admit how much I enjoyed reading this. You're so good at explaining the emotional dilemma Aahil was facing.

I liked how he thought back on the incdent when she had brought a tux for him. How he prestended to be asleep - only to see how she would react! Aww. I totally loved how you used it - in that order where she left him a note.

I had the cutest smile on my face.😳

Esha!!! I loooved the part where Aahil stood in front of the mirror. Of course his thoughts are going toward his Begum.

"He had been with so many women but just her gaze was enough to turn him on! Miss Dhabevaali did have a wild side to her that did crazy things to him. At that moment when she stared, he was gone!"

Thank you so much for this beautiful piece of writing. It was so delightful to read it - especially finding out how good you are. God, I feel nothing compared to this - to your writing skills.

You're the real writer here, my sweet darling.❤️ And I mean it! You're so damn good.!

And I have a slight question or more like a demand. 😆 You cannot end it there! I've got like 1000 of thoughts running wild by what might happen. You've got to update this soon, sweetie. 👍🏼

I cannot wait to read this. Please do PM whenever you update. I wouldn't want to miss this. ❤️