OBLIVION: asya TS *note on pg 9:) - Page 5

Originally posted by: Missvishtoofani

good strt

thank you 😃

Originally posted by: sarbrathan

You had to wirte a story about the current track? Like reading the written updates occasionally wasn't torture enough? Zoya better die in this, thus the reason for their separation. I detest zoyaan

well the current track has changed already 😉

I detest zoyaan as much as you but I wont kill Zoya.the reason for their separation can also be Asad's fault 😃

Originally posted by: shreya11mehra

Very nice update..

Plz pm me wn ul update

thank you Shreya 😃 I will pm you 😳

Originally posted by: --Mahima--

You are really a brilliant writer

you can write damn well

it was short though

but a fabulous start

to be honest.. I didn't expect flawlessness from you and you gave me that too

it was perfect

everything was set up beautifully

Mahi! do u hav any idea how much I love you ❤️

thank you sooo muchhh for tat honest opinion...you know wat I had also not expected this from myself 😆

thank you thhank you...I know this part was ahort...next wala wud be long 😃

Originally posted by: awesome

amazing..luved it..

thank you 😃

Originally posted by: Applef

<font color="#CC00FF">I hope zoya bump into asad..</font>

<font color="#CC00FF">short but awesome..👏</font>

<font color="#CC00FF">update soon..</font>

thank you...will continue soon 😳

Originally posted by: starslinedup

Loved it...ur writing was so crisp..and rightly detailed...n even though it was a short update u managed to make it an interesting one...n gave a good feel of the story to be...I liked it a lot...keep writing...as ur doing amazing..!!!😃

Aashna di! I love you! thank you so much for d lovely comment ❤️

I know it was short next part will be longy 😉

lots of hugs 😉 🤗 🤗

Originally posted by: loveuarmaanu

nice part cont soon

thank you...I will 😃

OH MY GAWWWD Elenaa Di!!!!!! You write?! God the moment I saw this I got so excited!!!!! Man You are awesome!😃

Also I am so sad that I am so Bloody late to comment😭...I just logged in after ages...sorry! I so so wanted to be first!!!!😔 You didn't even tell me!😔

The introduction itself is very very impactful👏...Beautifully written...⭐️

.He was staring into nothingness.He was devoid of all sorts of emotions.He was numb...he coudnt feel anything not even the thorn that had pricked his right hand an hour back and his hand was now bleeding.

These lines explain a lot about his character...I guess Asad is one poor soul!

How come the most happiest day of his life had turned into a NIGHTMARE.

Lovely line...Puts it all together in a wonderful way...

Very interesting and an intriguing start...You know How I love angsty stories...So so looking forward to this!

How come THE Asad Ahmed Khan was now just a living corpse??

Oh man! This was like the best line! Makes me wanna know the answer...👏

Ooh The First chapter!

.He had that one of his rare smiles on his face.

Rare and breathtaking!(Sorry for the fangirling!😛😆)

But TODAY he had woken up with a new resolve to get back what rightfully belonged to him

What a line! Aaap tho cha gaye!👏

Zoya's red and puffy eyes reflected her pain and that she had cried herself to sleep.She had dark circles under her eyes

Aww my poor Baby!😭

As soon as she looked up and locked her gaze with that person, she FROZE.

Arrey! Why did you stop?????? Now this is wrong! Too short!

Aap tho bade chupe rustam nikle! OMG Di why didn't you ever tell me that you are such a great writer?

Really di even if you say that its your first attempt...it doesn't feel like one! You are such a pro at this! Please please keep writing...and I am gussa that u never mentioned this!😡😆

Anyways update this SUPER SOON! Really and please please please PM me! I am in love with this...always wanted to read a detailed encounter of A-Z in siddiqui mansion...and what happened after that...why is Asad all sad and broken? A GREAT story You have woven here👏

Please keep writing and now that u have started...I will be waiting to read many many Fanfics from you!

Stay Awesome dearie!<3

Love and hugs!

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