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Posted: 10 years ago
#61
It always amazes me J'...that you always keeps a check on your track and previous scenes that you always tries to indulge them here and their..
Like in this Kid's Journal...you made such a wonderful & thoughtful scene about Zeenath & Anwar's addition to the Family Tree for the Baby..' perfect.
Brilliant writing..and thinking.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#62
Like again in this part...
How very sensitively and excellentely you gave a brillant thought to think about to Asad'...
I agree completely agree with whatever you told and potrayed through shireen..and thumps up to choose shireen for such a thought...
Loved that scene to bits..
And it also shown the formal yet natural relation that Asad and Shireen shares..
He even got a POV of Razia also..
Many dots were connected here..
Awesome.
And My answer for Shireen's deeds by leaving Ayaan at that time were also answered ..
Thank You
Edited by MayurChan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#63
I also like that little convo of Nuzzhat and Faiz...
" Kuch toh hua hai...kuch hoo raha hai..."
It was refreshing to see another new pair and new dynamics around here.. 👏
Humeira Blushing over as a newly weded wife...about her life and mornings... 😆
And that seven thing about Zoya as a part of Rasm also was funny and a lighter part in the update...
The NeMo' thing between Zoya and siddiqui was touchy...I liked that getsure of that old man.
He is also in his own way like Razia repenting his deeds and mistakes.
Edited by MayurChan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#64
The Last part..
Asad announcing Bond's on all the girls in the house...as a protection financially and in a way an immediate support to them in tough times..
Shireen also I guess is repenting for her step which forced Dilshaad to live a life as she did...so she was the only one who took the responsibility to make this happen for her and other Daughter's of this house...and I like her gesture for that..
Again an Hormonally started and romantically and emotionally moment of AsYa at the end..
Loved this chapt...
Continue soonish..
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Posted: 10 years ago
#65
I m back
How have u been J ??
So sorry 4 disappearing J
I was not active here was busy in my Bro's wedding
widout saying much lets come 2 d comnts I had so much 2 read
4 part 104
so Mangalpur revisited
Zoya decided 2 help d 2 lovers
& than how Asad remembered his last visit there
but this time he trusted Zoya wid everything unlike last time
plans were made wid d whole family & makeover of d lovers can actually b funny any other time but it was still funny 4 us readers😆
FAiz again become husband of pregnant wife(bunty) thanx 2 Nuzat
than d bus stopped & they had 2 stay in Manglpur
Asya's cute banter on Apna Dhaba was totally mast I expected & wanted that scene
On their way 2 giving food 2 BB they were nearly caought but Asad faught d goons
Asya halped d lovers 2 run away but Zoya got angry wid Asad 4 last time
but it ended later wid them making up again
but stupid driver ne pee ke is family ka bhanda phod diya 😲
part 105
nxt day
Asya were happy in their love nest
but Mr Sarpacnh came 2 attaak wid his goons
d whole scene was picture perfect felt like watching a movie
d whole family came 2gather & worked 2 handle d situation & were relieved a bit cuz they had been trained after Tanveer's fiasco
I can't belive Zoya was making those bottle bombs it was so funny man
& d whole family joined hands 2 make some but widout any lighter & Asad was happy he could counter her in future
but chotu ki toh solid pitayi hone wali thi lolz
Nuzzat's chilli podwer idea impressed FAiz so much that he wanted 2 visit India again just 2 learn those tricks
than came d action part wid some real fight sequence
that scene when Asad asked Dillu & than Raziya 2 protect Zoya was MA lovely
d fight scene of d boys was class A girls also gave tough competition but Zoya's comnt after shooting Sarpunch was hilarious
D handcuffs wala charm was MA
& d updt ended wid Zoya feeling babies 1st kick awe
part 106
it started wid Asya's another banter & their Jerry tom pic was super cute I love both Jodi's
Asad was disappointed cuz he couldn't feel babies kick awe poor he & Zoya's comnt was funny
so d siblings were updating Omi & NAj & she got senti
Girls celebrated girl power & Zoya again felt d kick which Asad shared this time it was rally a heart warming scene. 1 which we always wished 2 see in QH bt never got
Badi bi wants more babies can't blame her
than Shireen was worried of Ayaan's buises & Asad told about Zoya's magical desi nuskhas
their another romantic scene in their room was hot
Zoya's baby journal was a treasure not only 4 baby but 4 her 2 as she started getting pics & info about her mother wid Zeenat & some other realtives
Asad correcting 1 msg & how Zoya got emotinal over that & later thought how silly she was
& Asya's 1st meeting wala part that u incorporated was haseen yaad 4 all of us
Zoya teased him 1 day 2 go 2 NY 4 her delivery d answer 2 which is firm No from Asad
part 107
Asad told about him leaving 2 Hydrabad & Zoya got angry & even Dobby was giving him attitude...& now Zoya is ready wid some plan 2 stop him
Nikah's preprations were in full swing, Guffi was scared that Zoya will feel low seeing Humi's dahej but RAziya had faith in her
Girls chattr & than modling wid d sarees that RAiya asked them 2 chose
d scene of RAziya visiting Zainub's grave & making plans 4 future was nicely penned
Zoya stayed in SM & Asad came jumping through window 2 meet her she apologiesd & they made up after a little fight & teasing
Raziya called Asad & than her & Humi serving Asad haha sight 2 behold & Asya nearly getting caught 4 their late night romance
Ayra's wedding ceremony was delight 2 read
so d men finally left 4 their respective places & girls missed them
Dillu wanted 2 shift their focus so they went 2 SM where they decided 2 donate Humi's extra dahej & ladies danced on Shammi's songs
later night Asya's covno on facetime was 2 much 2 handle very sweet
she wrote him notes already & Asad redo it by sending some from Hyderabad romantic
part 108,
Asad was enjoying d game of hidden tresures but Zoya was playing dirty here
Her getting fussy of pinut allergy & theory 2 not eat it 2 save Asad while he kisses her was funny
Later Zoya was missing Asad terribly when Dobby came 2 relax her I loved her dialogue I miss my TOMCAT
She saw her mrg videos & albums which made her miss ASad more & refresh her mrg ceremonies. I loved d pics. D 2 edited one's of KAbhi Where did u get them from ?? FB? yahan post karo plz😳 I want 2 save
than Guffi & Rashid came 2 KV 2 cheer up Zoya who got emotional over d news
Girls wrote msgs 4 their mans while parents sang songs
but girls teasing Nuzzat wa hilarious poor girl
d later followed scene was super sweet Zoe texting him & his monologue he knew what will cheer her mood & his flowers later wish every1 have such nice hubby
On facetime she told her fear it was really touching bu Asad managed 2 change her mood & sang 4 her
Asad complaining 4 no night flight was cute
Zoya got nightmares but Asad called at d exact moment 2 calm her down
Asad came back early & both Zoya & dobby were happy😛
Asad kissing Zoya's tummy was MA wala scene
Romance filled rest of d updt & d ending was funny wid Zoya shouting about her postcards
BTW if she didn't wanted 2 show them than why she shouted 2 Dillu 2 show them😕
part 109,
Zoya had changed her dressing style since she's growing but that scratching thing is funny😆
Shireen told Raziya wants them 2 go & stay wid them again
Zoya's flashback memory of her entry in kV was nostalgic I agree only KV is their home 🤗
Dillu proposed elders 2 move 2 SM & Zoe hugged her like a puppy Asad toh lion mood pe aa jata
Shireen again started getting tensed 4 her daughters its understandable but still too much
Asya's heart 2 heart was wonderful 2 read
Asd banned Zoya from watching crime shows
what a drama Zoya created in night man she's really drama queen
Zoya got sad that they were not having twins & her teasing pasting Nangu Asad's pic in their baby book🤣
Niks & Nuzz were worried 4 their Ammi what's wid her now
Humi Rashid convo was well written d burden had 2 b taken out
Asad visited d factory so they planned 2 turn it in doll house again, lovely idea
part 110
it started wid d beautiful family scene on dinning table how cool
nxt Raziya complaining 2 Zainub grave was wonderful scene how much she has changed completely opposite 2 Raziya in show
than Zoya thinking why there is no place 4 Anzee in baby book true in my opinion even if Guffi is her Abbu Anzee deserved much much higher place in her life.
nxt Shireen came 2 meet DC cuz she want 2 secure her daughters future. When she talked about RaDil & her past it was sensitive topic I know but don't know why a part of me couldn't forgive & accept her so easily mayb cuz she was always selfish in d show & here 2 always cares 4 her children 1st than others. Her fears were genuine but I can say she was good mother or selfish mother will suit more. 1 noticeable thing is she thought 4 her daughters but why she didn't thought 4 her DlL's(Zoya & Humi). Her selfishness proved when Asad said about HUMI & ZOE
On d other hand Asad has been great in all his roles as Son, Bro, Lover(I know not in d start), Hubby, SIL. Every1 improved in this FF specially Raziya but Shireen failed 2 get my forgivness.
btw I also not liked Asad calling her Choti ammi cuz of what Dillu faced all those yrs
ASad's monologue later when She left was brilliant👏
So Nuz & FAiz ki flirting is chalu😆
Asya's romance was super duper hot😳
In SM prepration 4 goad bhrai were in full swing Humi is happy 2 see her new Ammi
Girls prepared a dance 4 Zoya but she was not meant 2 see it till d D-Day
Guffi took her 2 watch movies 2 divert her mind. NEmo wali movie I guess I also had saw that
In d evening Asad gave bonds 2 all d girls which were accepted after a little pestering done 2 Zoya
I again say I didn't like Shireen she hadn't said she was d 1 who came wid this thing
Secondly I didn't liked Zoya not letting Asad 2 say d actual reason at that time didn't they decided they won't keep any secrets from now on
Thirldy why Asya calls Shireen Choti Ammi but RAziya anuty when in my opoion she has come a long way from d lady she once used 2 b. While Shireen is still selfish & self-centered. I still remember when Asya were in SM & there was terror of Billi & Asad shouted & Ayaan on coming late Shireen's reactions were uncalled 4 she didn't said much but in her monologue she was very angry on Asad & I still hate her 4 that.
& that's why I m sorry J but 4 me its unacceptable 4 Asya 2 call her Ammi but d woman who saved Zoya & her baby & came a long way after she realised her mistake .
& yes I have 1 more complain I remember when I left I asked u 2 add lots of dobby scens but they r just few why plz is time goad bhrai main add more of him😳
finally done
Edited by jas91 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#66

Originally posted by: MayurChan

It always amazes me J'...that you always keeps a check on your track and previous scenes that you always tries to indulge them here and their..
Like in this Kid's Journal...you made such a wonderful & thoughtful scene about Zeenath & Anwar's addition to the Family Tree for the Baby..' perfect.
Brilliant writing..and thinking.





Thanks MayurChan! Yes, that's the other thing the show messed up completely. Aapi and Jeeju were such a fine part of Zoya's upbringing. They used to show her chatting with her Jeeju and they enjoyed such a special bond. I always want to keep them a part of the action. And given the kind of person Zoya is I can't imagine her not doing this.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#67

Originally posted by: MayurChan

Like again in this part...
How very sensitively and excellentely you gave a brillant thought to think about to Asad'...
I agree completely agree with whatever you told and potrayed through shireen..and thumps up to choose shireen for such a thought...
Loved that scene to bits..
And it also shown the formal yet natural relation that Asad and Shireen shares..
He even got a POV of Razia also..
Many dots were connected here..
Awesome.
And My answer for Shireen's deeds by leaving Ayaan at that time were also answered ..
Thank You





I'd seen a Pak. serial recently, Vasl, and that's the one Shireen is talking about in her scene with Asad. It's a sad show and this happens to the heroine. Her husband sends her back in the guise of meeting her family and then sends divorce papers because he's having an affair. He'd told her that he was processing her immigration papers but when her family checks with the immigration people there is no paperwork, she's left with no legal status in the US and can't go back.

I can imagine Shireen freaking out about this as a mother whose second daughter may also end up going so far away.

And then even in India there are a lot of horror stories of women going to US and being abused or mistreated.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#68

Originally posted by: MayurChan

I also like that little convo of Nuzzhat and Faiz...
" Kuch toh hua hai...kuch hoo raha hai..."
It was refreshing to see another new pair and new dynamics around here.. 👏
Humeira Blushing over as a newly weded wife...about her life and mornings... 😆
And that seven thing about Zoya as a part of Rasm also was funny and a lighter part in the update...
The NeMo' thing between Zoya and siddiqui was touchy...I liked that getsure of that old man.
He is also in his own way like Razia repenting his deeds and mistakes.




The Nemo film was actually released by Disney on Fathers day weekend. We had gone with my daughter and her friends' families. I could imagine Zoya who would be around 10 that time feeling the loss. Yes, Faiz and Nuzz ... have something cooking. Let's see where this goes.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#69

Originally posted by: MayurChan

The Last part..
Asad announcing Bond's on all the girls in the house...as a protection financially and in a way an immediate support to them in tough times..
Shireen also I guess is repenting for her step which forced Dilshaad to live a life as she did...so she was the only one who took the responsibility to make this happen for her and other Daughter's of this house...and I like her gesture for that..
Again an Hormonally started and romantically and emotionally moment of AsYa at the end..
Loved this chapt...
Continue soonish..






Yes, Asad as protective big brother-he'll never stop being that. I think QH fans loved this about him the most. These characters feel too real to me. The show ruined Shireen and Raziya's characters. I don't see them as negative, but may be flawed. I hope I'm able to show that in my rendering.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#70

Originally posted by: jas91

I m back

How have u been J ??
So sorry 4 disappearing J
I was not active here was busy in my Bro's wedding
widout saying much lets come 2 d comnts I had so much 2 read
4 part 104
so Mangalpur revisited
Zoya decided 2 help d 2 lovers
& than how Asad remembered his last visit there
but this time he trusted Zoya wid everything unlike last time
plans were made wid d whole family & makeover of d lovers can actually b funny any other time but it was still funny 4 us readers😆
FAiz again become husband of pregnant wife(bunty) thanx 2 Nuzat
than d bus stopped & they had 2 stay in Manglpur
Asya's cute banter on Apna Dhaba was totally mast I expected & wanted that scene
On their way 2 giving food 2 BB they were nearly caought but Asad faught d goons
Asya halped d lovers 2 run away but Zoya got angry wid Asad 4 last time
but it ended later wid them making up again
but stupid driver ne pee ke is family ka bhanda phod diya 😲
part 105
nxt day
Asya were happy in their love nest
but Mr Sarpacnh came 2 attaak wid his goons
d whole scene was picture perfect felt like watching a movie
d whole family came 2gather & worked 2 handle d situation & were relieved a bit cuz they had been trained after Tanveer's fiasco
I can't belive Zoya was making those bottle bombs it was so funny man
& d whole family joined hands 2 make some but widout any lighter & Asad was happy he could counter her in future
but chotu ki toh solid pitayi hone wali thi lolz
Nuzzat's chilli podwer idea impressed FAiz so much that he wanted 2 visit India again just 2 learn those tricks
than came d action part wid some real fight sequence
that scene when Asad asked Dillu & than Raziya 2 protect Zoya was MA lovely
d fight scene of d boys was class A girls also gave tough competition but Zoya's comnt after shooting Sarpunch was hilarious
D handcuffs wala charm was MA
& d updt ended wid Zoya feeling babies 1st kick awe
part 106
it started wid Asya's another banter & their Jerry tom pic was super cute I love both Jodi's
Asad was disappointed cuz he couldn't feel babies kick awe poor he & Zoya's comnt was funny
so d siblings were updating Omi & NAj & she got senti
Girls celebrated girl power & Zoya again felt d kick which Asad shared this time it was rally a heart warming scene. 1 which we always wished 2 see in QH bt never got
Badi bi wants more babies can't blame her
than Shireen was worried of Ayaan's buises & Asad told about Zoya's magical desi nuskhas
their another romantic scene in their room was hot
Zoya's baby journal was a treasure not only 4 baby but 4 her 2 as she started getting pics & info about her mother wid Zeenat & some other realtives
Asad correcting 1 msg & how Zoya got emotinal over that & later thought how silly she was
& Asya's 1st meeting wala part that u incorporated was haseen yaad 4 all of us
Zoya teased him 1 day 2 go 2 NY 4 her delivery d answer 2 which is firm No from Asad
part 107
Asad told about him leaving 2 Hydrabad & Zoya got angry & even Dobby was giving him attitude...& now Zoya is ready wid some plan 2 stop him
Nikah's preprations were in full swing, Guffi was scared that Zoya will feel low seeing Humi's dahej but RAziya had faith in her
Girls chattr & than modling wid d sarees that RAiya asked them 2 chose
d scene of RAziya visiting Zainub's grave & making plans 4 future was nicely penned
Zoya stayed in SM & Asad came jumping through window 2 meet her she apologiesd & they made up after a little fight & teasing
Raziya called Asad & than her & Humi serving Asad haha sight 2 behold & Asya nearly getting caught 4 their late night romance
Ayra's wedding ceremony was delight 2 read
so d men finally left 4 their respective places & girls missed them
Dillu wanted 2 shift their focus so they went 2 SM where they decided 2 donate Humi's extra dahej & ladies danced on Shammi's songs
later night Asya's covno on facetime was 2 much 2 handle very sweet
she wrote him notes already & Asad redo it by sending some from Hyderabad romantic
part 108, part 109, part 110
keeping on hold now will read rest 2morrowI need rest & don't reply yet my huge comnt isn't complete yet




OMG what an absolute pleasure to hear from you! Amulya told me about the wedding. Hope you had a lot of fun. Welcome back to my Asya world. And thanks sooo much for the looong comment. Waiting to hear more from you! Missed you both so much.

So you liked my Mangalpur redux! Great. It was fin writing those maha-episodes!

You can write another comment-I couldn't wait to reply to this one.

Reading your comments on the previous chapters makes me want to go back and read more. I'm working on chapter 111 now though this weekend I'll be too busy to do much on it. MayurChan reminded me that my Zoya had been pregnant for 15 months!!!! I didn't even realize it.

So happy that my story still has ability to please and make us all remember Asya fondly. Take care and get all the rest you need.




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