AsYa FF-Please Forgive Me-Note PG 82 UPDT 8/18/14

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iykyk

@iykyk_3

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+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#81

That was really nice and please do continue. Please PM me when you update.

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suchitra

@AmaZaynGirl

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Posted: 12 years ago

#82

"MY ZOYA" wow...does he even realise dat he has usd the word "MY"..?!?! Luvd the updte...it was so so gud...i wish asad finds out the abt the person i.e. Abt tanveer...and strangles her 2 death...updte asap

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irene

@rennie

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#83

awesome update...it was sweet of rashid to check up on zoya...at least asad has a clue to what might have caused the fire in zoya's room and he doesn't think that it was some random accident or something of that sort...

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can call me Mrs Enrique Iglesias

@enrique

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Hey dear this was just wonderfull

I could feel that every 1 was quite hurt to see her in dat state

I loved this update

It's to emotional really

Plzzz continue soon and pm me dear

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rads73937

@rads73937

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#85

Lovely update.
Love the way asad said "MY ZOYA"
Awww.
Thanx for the pm. Take care.

PS: While you pm just add the link of the updated part.
No need of hyperlink but at least an address of the of the updated
part.

Edited by rads73937 - 12 years ago

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Waqt Zaya

@WaqtZaya

Elite

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#86

Freeaking AWESOME. waiting for the update. If you pm do pm me please :D Lovin' it

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princess84

@princess84

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#87

awesome chapter continue soon can't wait to read more...plz add me to ur pm list

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Alveena12

@Alveena12

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#88

Loving the FF so far, i think that the idea you have of making Asad work really hard for Zoya's forgiveness is really good. 😉

I am just gonna come in and throw some suggestions your way.

While Zoya is recovering (after regaining consciousness) you should add in a scene where Asad, Zoya, Najma and Dilshad are in the living room and Dilshad and Najma get Asad to play the guitar and sing and he sings a song for Zoya.

I also think that Asad should enlist Ayaan's help in trying to get Zoya to admit her feelings (that would be good to read...the two brothers working together to get Zoya to admit she loves Asad) - also a bit of comedy on scenes like this would be good to read. 😆

An emotional scene between Zoya, Humeira and Ayaan would also be good, in which Zoya apologises, and Ayaan and Humeira tell her that she isn't at fault and tell her not to blame herself. 😭

You could also do a scene where they all go out for the day (e.g. farmhouse) to lighten Zoya's mood and make her feel better and during this outing her and Asad come very close...

i know you requested some suggestions so i'm trying to give you as much as i can because i'd love for you to do 2 updates per day. you're FF is super and i can't wait for the next update, please pm me when you update, i have already sent you a buddy request 😊

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divikash

@divikash

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#89

u know chap 3 was good👏, finally family recognized their spark, eagerly waiting 4 next chap. 😉

i really appreciate the way u kept to their original charac without deviating away, do keep the same.

but s i want asad 2 be impatient, jealous,...like any other men trying hard 2 win zoya's luv, but please dnt makr him despo, his is ASAD after all. this s jst my opinion

but wat evr u write i will read it...nd also lik it 😉