OS: Asya First meet ...my way.

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Hi Guys ...my name is Barayah! I'm actually a silent reader but I was inspired by a lot and especially with the current track. I guess wanted to pen down my thoughts of the current situation in the show. I really hope *fingers crossed* 😃 you all like it. This lil OS is sorta out of character and the show...so please if you don't like it, then you may comment so too. Constructive criticism is welcome! Thank youu 😊


He is able to see only because of the barely there light from the street lamps. If someone were to witness him there, they would see fear etched on his face and eyes wide in suspicion. He is trying to find a way to light up his path towards the mansion. However, nothing comes to his barren mind. He can't seem to think of anything and then his sight is hit by the most beautiful sight. A sight to behold!
Through the window, Asad sees a beautiful girl sitting in front of an enormous piano.The window is dusty, and blurry but despite the dust, he sees this beautiful girl lost in the music of the piano.The creases of concentration in the middle of her forehead make her look innocent -- just a magnificent sight to see. Her long, luscious brown hair falls past her shoulders and the light from the street lamp shining on her brightens her slender white neck. Her eyes beautifully frames by her long, thick lashes and rosy pink lips pursed together in concentration. He was mesmerized, stunned beyond words by such a sight! As Asad got closer, he saw in the depths of her eyes, there was an inner turmoil bothering her and all he wanted to do was be her knight and run to her rescue. He wanted to protect her from all the dangers in this world, he wanted to hold her and hide from the world. Her cheeks looked like they had been caressed by water and he realized that she had been crying or still was crying. He yearned to know her, why she was crying, and everything related to her. He reached the door and was forced to remove his sight from the window. He turned the knob and there he saw the enormous piano but not a clue of the girl ever being there. The mysterious girl seemed to have vanished.

An old dusty letter falls from the table, and the light shines all around as if something awaits him. He opens the letter and reads aloud. It read,

May 18, 2013,

Why Allah Miyan? Why? Why am I so alone? I have no one. No one but my own sorrows and grief. Why did you have to take my Ammi away from me? Why did you make me an orphan??? Why??? I have been trying to find my Abbu...Please Allah Miyan help me, give me a sign as to where to look. Have I done something wrong to deserve such a punishment? Have I? Please help this child of yours, as she is lost and confused with this insensitive world. Please! Zoya
"Zoyaa," one word left his mouth, the first thing that came to his mind was where is she? Where is Zoya? In his heart, in his soul, he felt this restless and helpless feeling, he needed Zoya. He needed, no he wanted to find her, to help her! "I am here for you Zoya! I will be your family!" He didn't know anything about this mysterious Zoya, and yet he felt this uncertain need to protect her at all cost! He would do so even if it depended on his life. Here he didn't know that the day he finds Zoya, he will have a sense of accomplishment, one that he was never able to feel in his business career.


Ok thats it. I don't think I'll be continuing this...Once again, I hope you like this OS! I feel like it was complete shit but lol I'll let you guys decide that. I'm not a writer, and don't aspire to be one but just a penny for my own thoughts I guess? 😆 Thank youuu




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Posted: 12 years ago
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Firstly,Asad was not at all out of character. AAj kal Asad yahi to dekhta hai, sirf zoya.. yup, his falling in love at first sight was out of character... but loved it, please continue and let him reach to mysterious zoya...It was beautifully written...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: jeenia123

Firstly,Asad was not at all out of character. AAj kal Asad yahi to dekhta hai, sirf zoya.. yup, his falling in love at first sight was out of character... but loved it, please continue and let him reach to mysterious zoya...It was beautifully written...


Thank you so much! But yeah agree with you there, him falling in love at first sight was sorta cliche and out of character. And I guess you're right. About continuing it, I'm not so sure if I'll be able to continue it...like the how question pops up into mind and as well as I don't know if I want to continue it. But once again thanks for the comment 😊 I'm flattered 😳 lool xD
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank you 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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asad keeps seeing zoya everywer.. gud one..
u contd

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -ElmoFuj-

Awesommee! Nicely written


Thank you so much! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: meow23

asad keeps seeing zoya everywer.. gud one..
u contd


Thats right and Thank youu ...I'm not so sure if I'm going to continue with this or not...I most likely will not be. Sorry! 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank youu 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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written very nicely! Good work
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Posted: 12 years ago
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So Asad z in love 4m 1st sight.. Dats nyc...
Whn i started reading it jst remind me Haunted 3D. Cont soon... Plz plz plz PM me

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