AsYa FF - Devotion [Updated Chapter 4B/p24](24/08) - Page 5

Originally posted by: sweetypie_16

It was beautiful, love! So flawless :):)

You have to continue it ASAP...or else I'll keep poking you until you don't! :P

Originally posted by: sumatra1234

aww? its soo cutee

waiting for the next part...

Originally posted by: QH1fan

Love it! Love it! Love it!
I cant find the right words to describe how much I loved this chapter...the entire story so far. Its just amazing!! 👏

Originally posted by: AliciaZA

Thank u for posting so soon!! I luvd, luvd, luvd this chapter:). How could anybody NOT love Zoya?? She is too cute, crazy and adorable.

I adored the scenes with her Jeeju and Aapi!! it was hilarious as I thought about what crazy scheme Zoya has come up with now.

Yay, yay, yay!!! Asad agreed to get married:):):). and his thoughts about seeing her in the dargah, how beautiful she is, just stole my heart!!

But my absolute favourite scene was when she broke the vase and Asad wonders what he's getting himself into lol.

You write so phenomenally well that a reader can't help but fall in love with your story:). Thank u for sharing and I cannot wait for your next update:)

Originally posted by: antara2309

Amazingly written! I can imagine AsYa's faces after Dilashad's suggestion!🤣

Originally posted by: niyoti

Hey! 😃

I absolutely loved it from start to finish. I think this is my favourite so far on this site. I'm surprised that this doesn't have as many reviews as it deserves.

All the while when i was reading this little fic, i couldn't help but think, ok i'm going to quote such and such a part, since it's my favourite and now when i've come to the end of the 2nd chap, I find that I cannot decide. I absolutely loved every bit of it. Especially all of Zoyas insights into Asads character. Her understanding of his need to be the best. How his losses shaped him to be who he is now. Your depiction of him being emotionally complex is spot on!

You fleshed out the characters so well. Sometimes the written word has a distinct advantage over something visual and this is a lovely example. We don't get to see what is going on inside a characters head when it's visually portrayed, apart form those little monologues they have for the audience sake and that is where a writer has an advantage. You've done a terrific job!!😊

Keep writing and drop me a line for any future work. G'luck with uni.

Niti

PS: 2 days back (I think) Laila2009 posted a thread which turned out to be a little interaction between fanfic authors: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/qubool-hai/3452277/to-the-fan-fiction-writers-new-names-added. Authors who have written on this site were making a list of the works they've loved so far. I think it's really helpful for others to discover previously published work. You're going on my list😊