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Posted: 12 years ago
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I know, you all are probably thinking that this girl has gone crazy. Well, all I can say is - happy realisation ! 🤣 I know I'm crazy 😆 But this is purely the AsYa magic on me 😳

AND, a VERY important thing - this OS is dedicated to our most AMAZING havokhotline. Love you for always commenting on my OSs even before I can PM you ! You're a sweet-heart 🤗 ❤️


AsYa OS : Deceit

"To ye tha gudiya factory ka raaz. Aapne satra (17) saal pehle ek aurat ka katl (murder) kiya aur use yahaan dafna diya. Phir iss baat ko chhupane ke liye factory mein aag laga di !" she heard his voice, filled with pain skillfully disguised as disgust.


Zoya couldn't believe what was happening. She was trying to understand the implications of the situation. Her dost, the nice, kind-hearted man she'd met at the dargah. Who was he ? Because the guy that she now saw was someone she did not know. She couldn't recognise this person bent over the grave of a woman murdered 17 years ago. She looked at the man beside her, throwing accusations at that guy. His father, his Abbu. She couldn't hear his words, she was oblivious to the sounds around her, but she could very well see the pain in his eyes, feel his hurt in his stance. Hurt by his Abb's deceit.

He wasn't looking at her. She doubted that in that moment, he even remembered she was there, right beside him. But she was. And she did not know how, but for once, she could see right through him. Maybe because she had turned a deaf ear to his disgust and hate-filled confident voice. Yes, that was what made everyone believe him. His confidence. His voice. His voice never betrayed him...but his eyes did. And right now, all she could see in there was hurt and pain. No disgust, no hate.

He had definitely accused his father of murder, but his brain hadn't processed it yet. Up till now, all it had processed that the one last chance of having a plausible explanation to his father leaving them, a reason, a misunderstanding or a conspiracy, had burnt to ashes just like that factory had 17 years ago. She din't know how would he handle the truth once he was alone and had processed it all, with the consequences. And this was the man who was trying to hate this guy from the last 17 years. She couldn't even begin to imagine how her phoopi - the lady who had LOVED this man for more than 20 years - would react after knowing the truth.

She then looked at the guy in front of her. Eyes filled with fear, also evident on his face and in his voice. He couldn't even defend himsself, prove it all wrong. Rashid Ahmed Khan. Her dost ? No, no way. Her dost was dead for her. This was a heartless guy who had committed a cold-blooded murder and covered it up with arson. Moreover, he had left his family - his wife and two children - and settled with another woman. As if that was not enough, now, after 17 years, he was trying to get back into the lives of his former family by acting as if he still loved his ex-wife ! His guy was a coward. Not worthy of being called a man. At all. He was good in only one thing - deceit.

While looking at him, she caught the sight of a building behind. It looked strangely familiar. Something in her mind said it was important. Just as she heard a faint sound - something like a "Lets go, Ms.Farooqi", she realised was it was. The Masjid.

She suddenly grabbed onto the nearest thing and let out the breath she was unconciiously holding. She was unaware of the fact that she was digging her nals into Asad's arm, and that she had released the breath through her mouth loudly enough for him to notice. Also, she failed to realise that the expression on her face was of pure horror, something that started to get Asad really worried. He was calling to her, asking her something - maybe "what's wrong?" but she could not hear it. She din't want to.

Still holding onto his hand for support, she took a step forward, to look into the grave. But Rashid Ahmed Khan blocked her view. Seeing a burnt dress in there, she doubted she could see more. So she turned with a jerk and banged right into Asad's chest. For once, she did not move back. She needed all the support she could get. Surprisingly, he didn't move back either. He just put a hand on her cheek and asked her what's wrong. She looked up into his eyes and whispered in a cracked and barely audible voice, "She's my mother !" And her vision blurred as tears filled her eyes.

The building behind - it was the Masjid. The Masjid beside the khandar. THIS was the khandar. The burned down place in the photo that she carried around hoping someday she'd solve the mystery of finding her Abbu. Never in her scariest nightmares had she imagined she'd stumble upon the body of her mother, much less that she'd find her Ammi was murdered and her murdered could be the guy standing right behind her. Such a deceit had fate played on her ! She hugged her Jahapana with all her might. And this time, he hugged her back, both trying to comfort each other, share & reduce each-other's pain.



BUDDY me for PMs.BUT if you want PMs, read the P.S. 😛

P.S. 😆 To all my regular readers, PMing is a tedious job. Takes up a LOT of time AND effort. So, I'll be PMing only those who've comment on at-least one of my last 3 works. Hope you'll all understand 😳
Love,
Me
😳😛😆
Edited by Monu_Deewani - 12 years ago


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tishma thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow yar realy loved it...plz continue this writting plz
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: tishma

wow yar realy loved it...plz continue this writting plz


Please please please don't ask me to continue !
I ALWAYS forget mentioning this.
As much as I love it, cuz it means you loved the OS,
I feel so bad when even ONE of you says so !
Because I'm very,mind it, VERY irregular.
I can not maintain SSs/FFs.
I may take a day once and a month the next.
You yourself will start hating me then 😆
So I never continue..so that there's no pressure on me of writing
Pressure might make my work worse than it already is ! 😆

Anyway, Thank you for the lovey comment ! 🤗
And sorry for the lecture that followed 😆
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Posted: 12 years ago
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First thing came into my mind was. CONTINUE!
Next thing was, Yea writing a SS isnt a matter of Joke, especially for Fantics like us! 😆

Very nice, very good. as always expected it was awesome! Very good. 👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awsome..zoya's every feeling was explained so clearly.loved it.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow! That was awesome! Wish I could ask you to continue but I know what ur feelinG!
me myself have left all the Ffs and SSs pending and find solace in OSs coz there is no pressure of writinG!

But ya.. Do PM me for all ur OSs :)

And Oye! By the way.. Do u remember me? :P
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Okay, first off. I'm feeling horrible about not being the first person to comment on this OS.
I really am sorry, i mean that..

Meanwhile.

THIS WAS BLOODY EPIC!

I was grinning at the beginning because it was Zoya's POV. Then as i read it i got all emo and stuff.
You've portrayed Zoya's feelins effortlessly. And beautifully, i must add. :)
And the ending, oh lord.
The subtleness of this fic just made my heart ache.

Just wonderful.

And thank you, thanks a ton for dedicating this to me. I'm honoured.
:)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: supriya.ipkknd

Wow! That was awesome! Wish I could ask you to continue but I know what ur feelinG!

me myself have left all the Ffs and SSs pending and find solace in OSs coz there is no pressure of writinG!

But ya.. Do PM me for all ur OSs :)

And Oye! By the way.. Do u remember me? :P


OMFG (F for freaking 😆)
*rubbing eyes properly*
Am I seeing this right ? 😕
Are you really supriya.ipkknd ? 😲
The great head that has bowled me over with innumerable FFs ? ⭐️
And did you just say my work was 'wow' / 'awesome' ? 😲

*fainted* 🥱

P.S. People, please don't wait for my replies. Traumatized patients do take a while to recover...😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow this is indeed amazing
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: havokhotline

Okay, first off. I'm feeling horrible about not being the first person to comment on this OS.

I really am sorry, i mean that..

Meanwhile.

THIS WAS BLOODY EPIC!

I was grinning at the beginning because it was Zoya's POV. Then as i read it i got all emo and stuff.
You've portrayed Zoya's feelins effortlessly. And beautifully, i must add. :)
And the ending, oh lord.
The subtleness of this fic just made my heart ache.

Just wonderful.

And thank you, thanks a ton for dedicating this to me. I'm honoured.
:)


Don't ! As long as you've read it, I don't care about the rest 😳
And as long as you comment on it, be it first or last, its sone pe suhaaga 😆
Seriously ? I've like drafted it in half an hour 😕...since my brain wouldn't stop working after y'day's precap. Stupid brain. Aaj subah test mein saala chup chap baitha tha ! 😡
You know, this is the first ever time I wrote it from the girl's POV...I've always understood the male leads better..So the one dedicated to you is indeed first of its kind from my side !
You have no idea how happy I am that you liked it ! 😳

Ohh puhleez ! Its always the writer who's honored to have such an amazing & awesome reader. Not everyone takes time to comment. Much less such long and descriptive comments. And never on ALL the works. So, its I who's honored to have YOU 🤗

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