AsYa OS : Deceit - Page 4

Originally posted by: Monu_Deewani

If you are, no one's gonna be as happy as me ! 😆
Hehehe I know that feeling. I've got to do like 200 pages of EEE within 24 hours and I too am roaming around on IF AND thinking of writing another OS 😲

Arre Hindi's easy yaar ! TV serials saare kab kaam aayenge ? 🤣

Arre na re ! Baksho mujhe ! Gave the boards last year ! Thankfully, I'm in college now..

200 pgs! OMG! Baghwan bachaye tuje arry apni sereil wla hin thodi use kar sakte hai! Dey bloody hell wnt us to knw'shudh hin' jab koi usse use bhi nai karta 😆 waise tu OS likhe toh mereko pm karna! Kinni besharam hoon nah 🤣 mai bhi colg mai hi hoon! Hamere yahhaan 11 n 12th junior colg mein hota hai! Baas ye boards khatam ho den degree colg! Yipppiieee 🥳

Edited my comment on page 4! :D

Originally posted by: PhoenixRadar

That was... good!! Half intense, half breath-hitching! The way you described her emotions was well done! 👍🏼 You wrote it out in her POV but in the third person's view manner. Hope you get what I mean!😳

I loved the way you brought out that last part. But it was a bit off-putting for me when I first read that that skeleton was of a woman. Nobody knows who it is. Neither do the three here, standing and glaring at each other with various emotions. 😲

When the part of her seeing something like a dress on that skeleton did make some sense, the logical part of the clothing being totally ruined came to my mind.

This was the logical part speaking here.🤓

But I loved this OS, 'cause I felt like I was standing there and viewing the whole scene.

Annie😳

Originally posted by: Monu_Deewani

Glad you liked it !

Yeah, I understood 😆

Arre that day, in the precap, I think I heard him say aurat..that's why

And the clothing came in my head because Rashid had buried her.

If she was under cement, surely the clothing wouldn't catch fire ! 😆

Originally posted by: PhoenixRadar

🤣 And was it mentioned anywhere in the visuals that she was buried in cement?😲 Meaning during the fire?

Originally posted by: Monu_Deewani

Oye ! Wasn't that Ramu or whoever (the shooter) digging through cement / POP ?

I thought that was cement, the way it looked 😆

Originally posted by: PhoenixRadar

Heehee... Raghu Singh!!😆That was Raghu Singh!POP??😲Ahahahahaha...🤣Oh gosh! You make my stomach ache with so much laughing yaar!!!

Hahahahaha... I thought he was burying the bones!!😕Or was he? What on Earth was he doing, eh? Clarify, pileej!🤔

Hey bhaggu ! Soo much kaanphoojan ! 😆
I thought he was told to dispose off the bones :P
So he was digging (?) To get the body

But I do think its a blooper.
If the factory was on fire, all that would have remained of the woman would be ashes..

Originally posted by: Monu_Deewani

Hey bhaggu ! Soo much kaanphoojan ! 😆
I thought he was told to dispose off the bones :P
So he was digging (?) To get the body

But I do think its a blooper.
If the factory was on fire, all that would have remained of the woman would be ashes..

awww poor zoya loved it

Originally posted by: asyaforlife

I have read all your works but still don't know your name I know I would be killed for this🤔 but still daring to ask BTW I'm Diya😳