Abhiya SS - The Forbidden--New Chap updtd-PG 74-AUG-26

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Indu

@Paint.It.BlacK.

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Posted: 12 years ago

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tamoha(tora)

@..tora.tangled.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

induuu...what do u keep on saying? no good enough??? 😡r u kidding???it's fantastic!!!!!!!!!! loved loved loved it...👏 ⭐️

a true dark story and written so well that i can actually feel that darkness.😊.the forbidden atrraction...piya's longing for the beast..and the beast falling for the beauty..it is all so perfect...⭐️

ur writing is so...u know, powerful here👍🏼..the story just leaps out of the page.👏.u've brought out all the dark traits of abhay in a perfect way.👏.yet he wants to make piya his...and the play othello...it seems to provide a perfect backdrop.😳..poor rohan😆...he doesn't stands a chance against abhay's magnificence😃..

and the last part...was WOWWW.👏 👏 👏..the terror and the thrill..the meeting of the hunter and prey..the meeting of the beauty and the beast..the clash of the forbidden..u described it so so beautifully...and it was so realistic.⭐️ ⭐️..the sight of abhay's red eyes..full of passion and rage and blood dripping from his mouth.❤️..i don't have words to say anything..u took my breath away there fairy, and i had gooebumps..m nt kidding.⭐️..he's gonna take her away far away from everyone? what does he mean by that? i can feel pia's thrill and terror..can't wait to know what happens next😊

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Mandy

@BeyondHorizon

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

U n ur chants 😛 I wish I could chase u with a danda right now 😡 but lets make do with this for now:

This is what I call a true dark story in its gloriest form 👏 U have brought out the essence of the story really very well 👏 What can I say? This is ur best work till date 👏 Haseena is right - the beast has already fallen for the beauty n its only a matter of time before the beast will destroy himself in love 😳 but this is what I would say a beautiful destruction 😳 The part where Pia felt a chill that had nothing to do with Dehradun's cold weather was written marvelously 👏 I could almost feel what Pia was feeling. A girl who was once bubbly n cheerful is pondering over something that her mind cannot recollect but her heart feels 😳 The forbidden pleasure of a desstructive love 😳 So here also u have a lover boy who craves for something that is never meant to be his 😆 Of course nobody can ever stand a chance against Abhay 😉 Pia on the other hand cannot share wat she is feeling even with her own best friends n this is something new both for her n for her friends 😕 How can Pia evade those soulful icy blue eyes that had her captivated ever since it held her gaze 😳 Rohan did pour his heart out in the scene but how can Pia ever feel for anyone else other than Abhay? 😆 Abhay was meanwhile watching this from a distance n I am sure every nerve in his body must have been urging him to rip Rohan into pieces 😆

The last scene Ah, the pull of the forbidden 😳 But Pia also got to see Abhay's true face I so hope it wasn Rohan whom Abhay killed Please do continue soon 😃 It was amazing Indu 👏 I wish u would have made an SS or FF out of this 😳

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tamoha(tora)

@..tora.tangled.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: mandy1024

Tora 😡😆
me too res 😛

first plce me bas haq h ek mera😆

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.SmokeySilence.

@.SmokeySilence.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

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Wowww Indu... that was an outstanding piece of work 👏 👏 Im absolutely loving this OS or SS, whatever you plan to make it. The passion, darkness element is outstanding here. The beast is helplessly attracted towards Pia knowing it'a forbidden and the pull he has is so strong, passionate and raw. loved it. Pia's feeling of something missing and the presence of cold, dark something unknown she doesnt know what, explainable was mesmerizing. 😳 So rohan loves Pia i guess and the way he kissed Pia even between the act explains it and Pia feeling awkward means she doesnt.
last scene was too good. it was sizzlingly dark and intense, soo much passion Abhay has for Pia. and I assume the blood has a part to play here. too good. the way he said you are mine... i had goosebumps reading it and Pia is helpless attracted and besotted by the forbidden beast.she shouldn't and yet she does. I cant wait for next part. I feel like telling you please update tomorrow.. 😆

amazing ⭐️ and I love Othello 😳

Edited by Phoenix.Xeelan - 12 years ago

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Alicia thelwell

@alicia212

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

wow great os plz update soon
what is going to happend next in your story
thanks for the pm

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Monami Tasnim

@Monami_50

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Mindblowing update Indu.I'm super excited to see that u r continuing this OS.Pia's confused and vulnerable state of mind is perfectly described.She feels lost...craving for the forbidden.Abhay seems possessive about her...he hated that boy kissing Pia.Uff the last part...it was too gud..nd a ttl cliffhanger.Continue soon

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Rumki

@rumki34

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Posted: 12 years ago

#58

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hey Indy this part was awesome superb. You have described Pia's state of mind perfectly. Pia missing Aahay badly and Abhay's jealousy part was superb. At last he couldnt stay away and went to Pia to confront her. Ending was gr8

Edited by .rumki. - 12 years ago

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bookworm-ALS--

@bookworm-ALS--

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Posted: 12 years ago

#59

Oh oh my... Indu this has just become my most fav of your works... So please please try to finish this... This was awesome!
So abhay did not like Rohan kissing her... Guess he marked Piya as his own... Wonder what'll happen now...
This story is Passionate with a capital P... So kudos!!

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Kakoli

@MistiAbhiya

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#60

Wahooo Indu...supeb👏All I imagine but no words find I explain my feelings...just say its speechless,only feelings Abhay's love,his jealousy took pia with him😊,,,really love it..I thought its end in 1st part but u continue,love it dear...continue asap😊

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