Abhiya SS - The Forbidden--New Chap updtd-PG 74-AUG-26

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Indu

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Posted: 13 years ago

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tamoha(tora)

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Posted: 13 years ago

awesome fairy...u deserve a standing ovation👏 👏...u keep getting better and better..this os has everything..love, passion...darkness..the temptation of the forbidden fruit...and u've depicted all this so beautifully...so much in so less words..yet so deep and beautiful⭐️

i just loveddd abhay here😳...he has every trace of that dark beast he is, the vampire that is his nature...yet somewhere deep deep down, he has a conscience, and an inner goodness...which ultimately stops him from harming piya...😊

and piya..the innocent firefly lured by the flame...yet she can't help fall in love with abhay...the blue-eyed mysterious boy she had met only twice...already her heart is his to keep..😳

their meetings were so well-written and so impactful.👏loved the encounters...and the last part...where piya is already turning to abhay for comfort..even in those two short meetings, he has become her world...and his decision...to leave her..knowing they can never be...knowing that for her sake he will have to stay away from her..that shows already the depth of love that is alraedy forming between them...⭐️

awesome job..would love a second part to this😃

Edited by ..tora.tangled. - 13 years ago

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Mandy

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Posted: 13 years ago

Tora man, how do u manage to outdo me everytime to res the first spot in Indu's works? 😲 😛 Coming to the update, I applaud u for trying to do something outside the norm dear 👏 Thats a feat in itself ⭐️ And no, I doubt if anyone can say this is ur first attempt to write something dark. It was written beautifully as usual 👏 I loved the way u depicted Abhay's dark nature. He is a beast n this is something he can never run away from. U have depicted Abhiya encounters wonderfully here 👏 The fatal, forbidden attraction, ah Its enticing, captivating in itself 😳 Because the heart be it dead or human, always craves whats forbidden to it. In case of humans, tats the case most of the times n for monsters the pull is even more 😳 Can I really blame Pia for losing herself to Abhay? 😆 n the fact that Abhay was attracted to Pia, her blood sang to him, alluring him to have a taste of the heavenly nector. So Abhay here was a monster in the true sense? No wonder Chand was livid at him. Sometimes too much of attempts at trying to restrain the monster will only unleash the beast wrecking havoc n Chand let Abhay have his way so that he could go about on a murdering rampage coz once his thirst was satiated he could keep the beast at bay But when Abhay finally went in for the kill, he realised that there could be something more important to him than draining the girl dry n tat was her life 👏 Brilliant job here Indu 👏 Loved the last part where Abhay pulled back, healed Pia n left her. True he can never be the one for her, for they were worlds apart. How this beast who revelled in death n despair envied the humans who were his prey just bcoz one among them could be fortunate enough to be her soulmate was portrayed beautifully 😳 n dear its anything but faltu n I suppose u shd write more on this genre, for this wat a true dark love story should be like 👏

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Romita

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Indu fantastic OS i would say!!! I just loved the way u arranged and described each and everything of this OS. Just outstanding. U know u deserve several applauses for writing such a dark concept so beautifully. U did justice to each and every character here, marvellous job dear!!!
I loved the way u showed and depicted abhay's dark character, nature everything here, his state of mind in every scene was explained beautifully!!!
I just loved piya and arnab convo at first it wae funny and hsd a light moment. Abhiya's first meeting was ufff just brilliant. The feelings, the attraction everything was written wonderfullu yaar.
Abhay and chandeena convo was awesome. Chand let the beast set free and have it's way to fulfill it's thirst but the beast at last couldn't kill it's prey at last.
I just loved the last part, ufff the way first abhay pinned piya then bit her, but atlast couldn't drain her dry. He saved her with his own blood and was about to leave but the prey has now already lost herself to the beast. I loved the little bit convo u showed between abhiya atlast my god just fab that was.
I loved the concept u know. Abhay a born prediator wow sounds just amazing and u had done full justice to his character.
Writing this kind of dark genre is really complicated and hard but hats off to u for writing it so beautifully, I am looking forward for future works of urs like this.

Once more just superb work, u are just a terrific writer, gr8 job!!
And yea forgot to mention I am really sorry for commenting so late Indu hope u won't mind. Thanks for the pm and this outstanding OS.

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kirti

@sukusonu525

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Posted: 13 years ago

amazing n touchy update indu..

u write awesome on abhiya really a kind of DARK LOVE STORY...loved it lott.

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..juhi..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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indu that was fabulous brilliant i should say😳

very well described😊

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kirti

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Posted: 13 years ago

OMG it was SIMPLY SUUPPEERRBB!
Man, how do u manage 2 come out wid such soul touching ideas everytime? I am already not over ur previous work;everytime i think abt dat OS i find myself in tears!!

This was amaazing! I m speechless!
Perfect Forbidden love story,fatal attraction n finally "tere hi liye tujhse hu juda" ending.Every emotion touched deepest strings of my heart n i felt it alive!

So Abhay was never a human here ,a born predator,so no ques of feelings bt love of an innocent fragile human ignited or rather gave birth 2 new emotions unfelt,unheard by him.Predator felt...n these feelings overpowered all his basic instincts n he finally submitted bt sadly"jab bana uska hi bana" thoughts of Abhay when he wished 2 be an ordinary boy were d essence of this forbidden love story! I loved d convo of Abhiya n their all encounters were simply intoxicating!

Thnx a ton 4 sharing ur spectacular piece of writing wid us!

Edited by cutesukirti1987 - 13 years ago

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Polly.P

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Posted: 13 years ago

Amazing OS !👏
You know , ur writing is just fab ... which can't be explained by any words .
Sorry as I didn't comment on ur earlier posts but I do admit that I love them all .
Thanks for the pm !